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I like the first chapter in general. It's well-written and emotional. It really draws the reader in and makes them feel Sirius's pain and James's anger. However, I'm not sure that the last "Okay. I'll stay" is necessary. It's somewhat redundant. Just something to think about. I look forward to future chapters!
Author's Response: thank you! you're probably right about that last bit :)
A little bit of fun for the Christmas season!
Severus Snape is a miserable, grumpy, nasty man, feared or loathed by all around him. But can the appearance of a succession of familiar ghosts one Christmas convince him to mend his ways?
Based on the classic story by Charles Dickens. Lightly comic with serious parts. AU warning as Snape has survived the Battle of Hogwarts
I knew it was Dumbledore! I knew it!
I love the way you have preserved the message of Charles Dickens through a beloved, if semi-evil, literary character from our own time. Keep writing (especially on your Neville Longbottom series.)
Author's Response: It had to be Dumbledore, didn't it? Actually that came about by accident. When I wrote chapter 1, I had Snape (being a logical sort) ask who sent Myrtle. At the time, I didn't know myself, but when the question came up I realised it had to be Dumbledore, and all of a sudden I had a great ending I couldn't resist using. I do hope to return to the Neville story, but I also have another fic in the works which I hope to have up some time in the New Year. We'll see.
You have a wonderful satirical style, and you have certainly pinned down the characters well. I look forward to reading the rest of the story in the hopes that future chapters live up to Dickens' classic work as much as this one does.
Author's Response: Thank you! When I came up with the idea, I was surprised how easy it was to fit characters to the roles in the story. Harry as Bob Crachit, with Tiny Albus, fit prefectly. Next chapter is on its way!
I LOVE IT! Luna's character is very well written, and I like the almost-soft side of Snape at the end.
Author's Response: Yes, but Luna being Luna had to bring him out of it before it got too out of control.
I smiled. Really, that was very good. It's just too bad that a teenage crush like that had to be cut short so soon.
Author's Response: Ah yes. However, I think he recovered. :P Thank you for the compliment, and for reviewing!
Interesting concept... it was a bit creepy, though, and I didn't quite understand the Malfoy-Hermione thing. Other than that, most excellent!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and taking the time out to review, and especially thank you for giving me an honest opinion. :)
Ok, I wasn't going to weigh in on the ship issue, since your writing is some of the best I've seen in fanfiction, but I just thought I'd say something. The thing many people don't remember is that animosity can often be used to hide romantic- or sexual- attraction between two characters. Look at Ron and Hermione at the beginning of Sorcerer's Stone! I do not personally support this ship, but I think it's about as plausible as any other silliness in fanfiction. After all, Snape and McGonagall had quite a fan base!
Author's Response: Your first line made my week, you know. :) Thank you so much!
Ahhh...I definitely agree with what you said about Ron and Hermione. Some people argue that since those two are constantly arguing, they aren't healthy for each other or they would never be attracted to each other. And, lol, I don't personally support this ship either...that might have been a bit obvious already. :D
Thanks again for the review!
Author's Response: MMmm...in an odd, twisted sort of way, yes. :D Thanks for the review. :D
The emotions are well-written, and you've actually managed to pull off second-person perspective, which is incredibly difficult to do. A good job all around.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review - I'm glad you enjoyed the fic! :)
Sorry, didn't see Blackadder. I thought this was a very funny story, and you stuck with Tom Riddle's character better than anyone else I've seen. Good job!
Author's Response: Why does everyone say cute? Sleep deprivation is not cute. (-; N
“…he fell through the ancient doorway and disappeared behind the veil, which fluttered for a moment as though in a high wind and then fell back into place… Sirius must be just behind the curtain…”
Sirius Black didn’t die when he fell through the veil in the Department of Mysteries. He was transported to another world: our world, where Hogwarts doesn’t exist and magic lives only in the fantasy books. As Sirius tries to understand this strange new world and find his way home, he runs into some unlikely old friends. Nothing is the same behind the curtain.
Well, maybe it won't be so bad now that he's found Remy... anyway, I hope Sirius will live happily ever after... or at least, not too badly.
Author's Response: "Not too badly" hehe. Well, I suppose you'll have to read the next chapter and find out! Thank you for reviewing :) Peace, Virgil
Wow... you're really making Sirius's afterlife a Hell, aren't you?
Author's Response: If that's what you would call the world we live in... yes :) Peace, Virgil
Interesting idea... I'll keep checking back!
Author's Response: I'm glad you found it interesting :) Thank you for reading! Peace, Virgil
Mm... kind of short, bit of an anticlimax, really. No offense, it's just that... I don't know, it doesn't quite feel right. It's a good ending, all in all, but not quite what I'd hoped for.
Author's Response: I had hoped for something different as well, to be honest - I wanted Sirius to get back to the "real world," but I couldn't figure out a way to make it happen, lol. Peace, Virgil
Author's Response: Thank you. ~Carole~
I like the idea, and the descriptions. I like the way you illustrate what qualities goblins find attractive in contrast to humans. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks a million! :) When deciding to write this piece, I wanted to write something out of the average scope and really take time to exercise some description. I hope to have it in the queue in less than two weeks, but I have exams this coming week and the following. Anyway, thank you again!
Interesting. Good portrayal of Remus's emotions and senses.
Author's Response: Thankyouu :)
Good use of second person. Emotions are very real. Good story all around.
Author's Response: Hooray, first review already!
Thanks so much for all of your lovely comments, and taking the time to read and review. It's much appreciated :)
Interesting analysis. You're good at details.
Author's Response: Thankyou :)