hiyas i'm working on my first ever fan fic and i'm so excited!!!!!!!
ďAnd for your homework, I want a foot long essay on Ė Mr. Black and Miss Young! Thatís the 4th time in the last half hour that Iíve asked you to keep hands to yourself!!!Ē shouted an exasperated Professor Slughorn. Sirius grinned while Alexis turned a brilliant shade of pink and quietly returned her hands to her own desk.
i laughed so hard when i read that.... hahahahahahahahahaha......... mixing humor, romance, seriousness, siriusness.. (hahaha, o come on that was funny....maybe not.....), and your own creative spin to jkr's characters..... all of this writen by you equals..... brilliance!!!!!
Author's Response: lol. that was very fun to write. i'm so glad you liked it. i'll try to add more humor into future chapters. thanks for the review! Miss Radcliffe~
wow... good chapter, flawless grammatically, guess u dont need me for that any more..... i really liked the way you explained lily and petunia's relationship.... the end of this chapter was very good, well written and funny..... cant wait to read the next chapter
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad I finally got a chapter up with zero grammatical errors, haha. The next chapter will be up soon. Miss Radcliffe~
nothing wrong as far as i saw...... good chapter, congrats!
James was a seeker wasn't he? why are you saying in chapter 9 that he's passing the quaffle???
Author's Response: in the movie, James was a seeker but in the books he's a chaser. jkr says that he's really a chaser and jkr's words are law.
wonderful error-free chapter as far as i can tell! good job!
no errors! my pen was poised, yet myy eyes and attention were glued to the computer screen. i know i say this everytime but that was quite possibly my favorite chapter so far!!! can't wait for the next chapter, although i do wish u could wait a couple weeks until i get back from my vacation, however, i do not want to be cruel to the other readers by making you wait...... keep those wonderful chapters coming!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! This no=error chapter is all thanks to my wonderful beta songbook99. Have a great vacation! Miss Radcliffe~
OH MY GOSH!!!!!!!!! you need to write more!!!!!!!!!!!! you really have a great story line going.....
Author's Response: well i've written up to chapter 15 and am writing 16. chapter 12 has been submitted, rejected, and submitted again. it was rejected for "lack of plot line" but this chapter is actually essential to the plot! thank you so much! I hope as much as you do that the next chapter is up soon! Miss Radcliffe~
begining of the 6th paragraph: Truth be told, Lily wasnít quite sure i what /i she and James were......... i'm not sure the i's and the slash are supposed to be there......
Author's Response: Thanks. Yeah, it\'s an html error, I\'ll go fix it. Miss Radcliffe~
*all in one breath* omgomgomgomgomgomgomgomgOMG!!!!! good chapter!!!!! cant wait to read more!!! few spelling/grammar errors tho......
Author's Response: Haha thanks! Let me know what those errors are so I can fix them. The next chapter will be submitted ASAP. Miss Radcliffe~
OMG!!!!! they just keep getting better!!! one typing error (i think) but great anyway!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Let me know where that error is so I can fix it if need be. The next chapter will be submitted ASAP. Miss Radcliffe~
oooo the long awaited chapter! i absolutely loved it!!! 1 thing though... i found 1 spelling mistake ( u wrote age when i think you meant ago). can't wait for chapter 15!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the critique, I\'ll be sure to look at that. Chapter 15 is in queue! Miss Radcliffe~
positively perfect! i don't believe i spotted any spelling mistakes in this beautiful chapter! keep them coming!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 18 is in queue! Miss Radcliffe~
grrr i wanted to be first!!!! i'm your #1 fan!!!! as always, you're giving JKR a run for her money with your outstanding literal skills keep writing!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m afraid in order to get the next couple of chapters up, I\'m going to have to edit and change some things about the ball. The ball has to happen because it is important to the plot. I just have to make it work. A note to all readers/reviewers: I had surgery last week so that added to the delay and there might be more delay while I recover. Sorry for the delay and please be patient. Miss Radcliffe~
again.... I WANTED TO BE FIRST SINCE I'M YOUR #1 FAN BUT I HAVE HARDLY BEEN ABLE TO BE ON MY COMPUTER IN A LONG TIME!!!!!!!! *sobs* (not really) your writing what chapter 20 now? those ppl who choose what gets approved obviously don't realize what an amazing writer you are or there would be like 300 chapters up by now!!!!!
i'm sorry did that sound mean? i didn't mean for it to......
omgomgomg! an update! *fangirl.scream* i love joanne and remus back together!!!...... that being said, i regret mentioning 3 possible errors.... paragraph 12, the word "tightly" is used twice in the same paragraph. in paragraph 18 the same with "tentatively" in one sentence. "Stunned by this short, yet powerful testament, Joanne watched as Remus..." in paragraph 31, i think there is a problem with the placing of the commas, not sure but i think so. but very well written all the same! makes my writing look like c**p!
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you liked this chapter so much. Thank you for mentioning those errors, I\'ll go and fix them. Miss Radcliffe~
the 22nd, 37th, 43rd, and 50th paragraph included typing errorswith i's and /'s which i think was where you were trying to make words or phrases italicized.... wonderful chapter, probably my favorite so far, despite the fact that i say that like EVERY time......and could the end of this chapter be the beginning of the first OotP??? hmmmmmm.........
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'ll go fix those errors.
omg *hums La Vie Boheme* ABSOLUTELY AMAZING CHAPTER!!! 1 detected spelling mistake, but other than that, flawless and beautiful! sorry it took so long for me too read it, no computer for a while.....
waiter in rent/remus: meatless [meat]balls
collins/ lily: it tastes the same
mimi/ james: if you close your eyes...
Author's Response: This is so far the must accurate and in detail description I\'ve seen so far of the La Vie Boheme reference. But I already gave out the prizes to the first people who got it right. Next time maybe. What\'s the spelling mistake? Let me know so I can fix it! Thanks! Miss Radcliffe~
i love chapter 4!!!!! my favorite so far!!!!! so good!!!! i need 2 keep reading!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: thank you! i loved writing that chapter!