Hi, thanks for looking at my bio. I'm just your typical senior in college just trying to survive writing all those pesky papers.
If you look at my fics you can tell that I've entered way too challenges, but I'm attempting to branch off with my first big chaptered fic Becoming My Father. You may have noticed that I'm a little obessed with Percy Weasley. That is true; I find Percy the most human of all the characters and the more I write him the more he becomes my favorite character.
In the forums I am a proud Hufflepuff and Quidditch Referee. I encourage you all to check out the Quidditch Pitch in the Three Broomsticks.
Summary: Based on the Lion King on Broadway's song 'the Madness of King Scar'.
"Peter," Voldemort moaned sadly, "Peter? Why am I not... loved?"
Genius sir, you are a genius. I haven't laughed that loud in a while. You made me put the Cd in and I'm listening to the song right now. I'm picturing Voldermort singing as I listen. You have offically corrupted me forever, now. Brillant, absolutely brillant.
Summary: It's one week till Christmas and times are rough in the wizarding world. Neville Longbottom is forced to stay behind at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry due to tragic events. Fortunately someone chooses to stay behind with him.
I really liked how you set the mood in this story. From the weather to Ginny reading but not really and Neville's staring it really captures the worry and fear of those left behind. The feeling of your safe and everyone else isn't, the underlying darkness that we forget about in war. I love how you brought that out in made it real for reader.
I really liked Ginny charactizaqtion, I think it was spot on. She misses Harry but understands why she isn't with him. Even in her own worries she reaches out to help a friend. The way you had Ginny wait until the right moment was perfect.
Your story seems to move a little fast. My suggestion would be instead of just skipping from one time to next put in transition paragraphs.
Overall I really enjoyed your story and I'm thrilled over my new banner!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for that lovely review and I\'m really glad you liked your banner.
The Tale of Amelia Weasley, Quidditch Extraodinaire by stareyed_in_LA
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]
Summary: I always wanted to play proffessional Quidditch, but with Decree #815 in the way, I cannot do so. What's a woman to do when her brother falls ill and cannot play at the Quidditch World Cup of 1868? *one-shot*
I really liked the imagery in the first paragragh, it really helps set the mood for your story.
One question I was left with from your story was, how did she get so good? You said her father let her play, but her brothers didn't. So did she do a Ginny Weasley and sneak into the broom shed, or what?
"Over the years, I tried and failed to play the sacred game." This sentence confused me, because when I read it I got the impression she has tried many times to play, but you list only one time she tried.
"He was Goliath, I was David, and the Snitch was going to be the stone that changed the course of history." Nice use of metaphor. I liked how you described the race for the snitch that way, you truly have a gift for description.
Overall, I'd say this is a really good story. It was a very creative idea that was well written.
Summary: Mrs. Weasley wakes up one morning, and mysteriously forgets everything! How did this happen? Why would someone do this to poor Mrs. Weasley? The possibilities are endless... but, maybe there's something dark and sinister in the plot, maybe it's not what you think. Wow, I really made this sound really deep with mystery! It's not really, but it does kind of have a twist in it.
Winner of the Molly Weasley One-Shot Challenge! Written by Bryant of Ravenclaw.
I really liked how you took a serious topic and funny and really a joy to read. The little things like the name tags made me smile. The only thing I wish was in there was the talk Molly said she was going to have with the twins. Sequal maybe? Oh and by the way congratulations on being named the winner, it was well deserved.
Author's Response: That's a good idea... a sequel. If I ever find the time to write it, I might. Thanks... the win was a really big and pleasant surprise for me!
Summary: Ginny Weasley is not getting along with her mother. She's tired of her mother interfering on everything she says. Meanwhile, Molly Weasley is fed up with her daughter's attitude. When Molly is accidentally hit by a spell that makes her forget who she is, everything changes. Instead of Molly being the mother, Ginny is forced to watch over and teach Molly. Can their relationship survive? Will this event make their relationship stronger, or will it just make things turn to bad or worse? Written in response to the Molly Weasley One-Shot Challenge by Lilypudding of Gryffindor.
I really enjoyed the creativity involved in this fic. My challenge entry along with the others are centered more on loss while you tried something different. Also from the point of a daughter living away from my mother for the first time, I liked how you developed the relationship between Molly and Ginny. Thanks for the reminder on why mothers are so great.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Gonz. I tried to make my story more fun and happy because I've noticed my funner fics do better than my serious ones, and also, I was in a very happy mood when I wrote this. I'm glad you enjoyed the development of Ginny and Molly- I never intended that to be the center of my fic, but it just happened that way. This fic ran away from me- I planned to briefly focus on Molly's relationship with all her children, not dive into her relationship with Ginny. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Summary: Tom Riddle has to deliver a package to the Malfoy Manor, but that isn’t the only thing he has in mind. One Shot.
I really enjoyed this fic and the insight given on Riddle's character. The way Isla worships Tom reminds me of Dumbledore's discription of how people reacted around Tom. The subtle manipultion by Tom seemed very true to his character, along with the plot twist at the end.
Secondly I loved your desciption. When Tom is noticing the room where Isla is, and Isla grimace when looking at Dobby show subtle hints of her character. You really feel like you understand Isla's character by the end of this.
One question, why do think the Malfoy'd would have relic a Ravenclaw's, considering their Slytherin background?
Author's Response: Thanks for your wonderful review, Gonz! :D As to why the Malfoys would have a relic of Ravenclaw\'s, the tiara came to their family through Isla\'s aunt who was a distant descendant of Ravenclaw. And she handed it over to Isla. Even though they were basically Slytherins, they wouldn\'t say no to a Ravenclaw artifact, considering the historic importance of it, would they?
Summary: Ellen Hammond was an outcast. Ellen Hammond was constantly harassed. But no one ever knew how much damage words can do. Told in Cedric Diggory's POV
A submission for the Monthy Poetry Challenge, Challenge 1 "Apathy is Lethal." Stareyed_in_LA for Gryffindor.
Thank you for this poem. I suffered under school bullying pretty much through my entire school years because I refused to do the stuff to become popular. There is a really good book called "Please Stop Laughing At Me" by Jodee Blanco. I suggest you, or anyone reading this poem, that is interested in this subject to read it.
Summary: While the Triwizard Tournament is underway at Hogwarts, Remus Lupin journeys to Sweden on a mission that concerns his past. In that country, winter hangs on even as the celebration for spring, Walpurgis Night, approaches. In the soul, winter can cling, too, as Remus knows. However, even the faintest rays of spring can thaw a deep frost. (Term Challenge: Hufflepuff: MorganRay)
First thing, I like how you took the time to have a chapter just where you slowly introduced us to your story. The work you put into describing the setting and with charactization will be reallly halpful to the reader, I think, later on.
I will admit I was confused by the flashback, but I throughly enjoyed it and can't wait to see the importance and what happens to Eddy. Another note, I really liked how you characterized young Remus. Most fics I've read have him as a quiet bookworm, even as a kid. You gave him some personality that I think shows his future Marauder side.
I reallly liked the description in the first three paragraphs. "These rays illuminated the purple bags under the eyes, along with every care-worn line on the face of the man who sat in the lone chair across from the desk." This sentence just jumps out at me, I really liked it.
While I think you've set up for future chapters well, my one critism would be this. In present day you didn't give the reader any reason to want to read to on. There was no hook that catches the reader and makes them want to know what happens next. The only things you allude to happening are the holiday and that house, but I didn't feel need to want to know what is going to happen at either. Now, with the past story I felt that. I want to know what happens to Eddy. I want to know if its because his son is a werewolf or is this is before that happens. See the differrence between the two.
Overall it is an interesting story and its very clear you did your research. Good luck on the challenge.
Author's Response: I usually include the \'hook,\' and I like to build the suspense, but for this first chapter in the present day, it didn\'t seem to fit the story. My \'hook\' is essentially the flashbacks and connecting the bridge between the past and present.
Summary: How Harry Potter got his invisibility cloak and who gave it to him
The whole time I was reading this I was trying to figure out why it was AU. I liked how you the words oafish and mudblood, it really made me think that Dumbledore wasn't sounding right. Then you dropped the bomb that it was Peter, nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you for saying that it was canonically compliant - that is probably one of the highest compliments you could pay me. \"Oaf\" is something that Voldemort, the Death Eaters and their children use to describe Hagrid - as near as I can tell, it\'s the only time the word appears in the series. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Summary: Pansy Parkinson is a witch used to her comforts. Never was she supposed to have to deal with domesticity. However, when her house elves leave, she is forced to. When things begin to bubble over, she decides to confront the problem herself. And that problem just happens to be Hermione Granger.
Written for August Challenge 2, House-Elves Unite, by Chaser74 of Ravenclaw house.
I enoyed your take on the challenge by making it more personal by focusing on the affect of the strike one person. Your characterization of Pansy was really good and I liked the introductory paragraph which really helped set up her character. That and the passivity of her father really convey the spoiled rich image. Also in the books Pansy comes off as the the standard depends on male girlfreind, but here she shows she is no pushover. Also the scenes were Pansy and her family struggled with the lack of House elves were very done.
Overall good job in working with a difficult challenge, it was an enjoyable read.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I really do appriciate it and I\'m glad that you enjoyed the story! :]
Summary: All his life, Percy has built and gathered, painted and carved, and now everything is falling down around him.
Standing in the shambles of the Ministry, Percy questions the life he has built for himself.
I submitted this review for a challenge in the boards so that's why its a little different. I wanted you to know I really enjoyed your story. I personally love Percy as a character and enjoyed reading someone else taking a serious look at him.
Where Light and Shadows Meet is wonderfully engrossing coming of age story that takes us through Percy’s struggles to understand what it means to be an adult and how one can define black and white.
This story takes through those two questions by sorting through feelings of insecurity, pain, forgiveness, and love through the eyes of character that is deeply flawed. But by choosing such a flawed character, whose mind and relationship has largely ignored by fandom, makes this story feel all the more real as Percy tries to sort through his emotions and his life.
The story begins with Percy standing in the middle of a ruined Ministry of Magic realising that his world has come tumbling down around him, including his views on black and white. It is there that he meets Penelope and gives her a kiss that is the frame for this story. For it seems that time stops during this kiss giving Percy opportunity to address the questions bothering his soul.
During the kiss, the reader is treated to a series of flashbacks which give us an insight into Percy’s life and his changing meanings of morality and what an adult is. Using beautiful imagery and a metaphor of light and shadow to tell of the story of Percy’s journey, it is clear that every word was chosen carefully and with great meaning. The end of the kiss brings the conclusion of Percy’s searching and a new meaning to the lights and shadows of life.
Don’t be fooled by this story’s length, only a little over 1,600 words, this story is not a reader’s choice for a quick and simple read. What this story lacks in length in makes up depth, requiring the reader to read closely to begin to get a grasp at its complex meanings.
For those interested in character exploration or philosophy Where Light and Shadows Meet is a must read tale for an exploration into the flawed human inside of us all.
Summary: Time is precious when fighting deadly curses. Missing moment from HBP with Snape and Katie Bell.
This is one of the most creative and orginal stories I've read. I love how you used the ticking of the clock to show the reader how many decisions Snape is making in a short amount of time.
This line confused me: Perhaps Dumbledore is right. Perhaps love is the strongest of all magic. You are talking about how the curse is attacking the heart and brain, then Snape thinks this. I lost the connection. It may just be me *shrugs* Also same line is Snape changing his way of thinking or is he being sacaristic?
Good job, it was an enjoyable read.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. With that line I was trying to explain what made the curse so powerful--that it was made from love. Not exactly healthy love (more like the love of a woman scorned, who while hating her cheating husband also loves him) but love none the less. I was trying to indicate that Snape was considering changing his mind about Dumbledore\'s view. In this story, Snape has never been completely convinced by Dumbledore, but this is one piece of evidence he is willing to consider. Again, thanks for your response!
Summary: While shopping for Christmas gifts during their final year, Fred and George decide to visit the Muggle shopping centre, and drag new prefects Ron and Hermione along for the ride. After experiencing the fascinating world of Muggle clothing, music, and magazines, they take the lift up to the top level, a ride that leaves the Weasley brothers pale and nervous. When they return to the lift for the journey back down, Fred and George Apparate back to Diagon Alley instead, leaving Ron and Hermione to face the consequences alone when they return to the Leaky Cauldron.
This story was written for the One-Shot Challenge: Muggle Artifacts by Gmariam of Ravenclaw and received Third Place.
Fred and George, what are we suppose to do with them? Very well written, I loved your descriptions of the boys encountering Muggle objects. The idea of talking to the shooping center was great, because you could have lots of reactions insrtead of one.
Your charactizations were spot on. Taking a the number of characters you did, placing them in a completely new enviroment, and keeping them in character was great! Plus who doesn't love Molly when she's mad?
Good job, and best of luck in the challenge.
Author's Response: Hi Gonz! Thanks so much for reading this story! Yes, Fred and George - what a pair. ;) They were in the last challenge as well, and they are just such fun to write. I\'m glad I was able to write everyone in character - challenging, when they are in a completely new and non-magical environment! And that\'s the second comment I\'ve gotten on Molly Weasley, how about that! Thanks so much for the review, I\'m glad you liked the story! And another round of good luck to you, I really did like the Etch-a-Sketch. What fun! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
Summary: Lesson one in Slian Martreb's class on the MNFF Beta Forums.
This was a very infomative and interesting reading. I really liked how linked the gods were to Egypt politictics. The sun god not important until he became assioated with the rulers, then all the other major gods hade be assiocated, too.
Out of the lists of gods Nun struck me as interesting, because of frog and water link. It made me think of the story of Moses and one of plagues was frogs/toads came out of the Nile and did something, I forget, but it almost like that plague is mocking one of the Egyptian gods.
Summary: Written for Professor Martreb's course 'World Wide Wizarding and the Mysteries of Mythology' on the Beta Forums. Lesson Two
Ironically, He is also known to punish those that lie or break oaths.
That line made me laugh out loud. I'm learning ancient greek and my professor draw a simple family tree of the greek gods, and that quickly got very complex. Half of the reason was because of Zeus. I remember Athena sprung from his head, and there was somehow a titan involved, too. But when I read the Illiad my professor said there are so many different stories about the gods, that its almost impossible to keep them all straight because the stories differ.
I liked that you listed the names of the muses. I heard of them, but never more detail then that.
Summary: Bill and his mentor Mustafa El-Orabi make a phenomenal discovery in an Ancient Egyptian tomb that has the potential to change the Wizarding World forever
Posted by LadyAlesha of Hufflepuff House for Professor Slian Martreb's WWW class.
Wow! I love what you did with the prompt. I was completely caught of guard with the pensive, but it really was a good way to incorporate a HP character we know and love with the mysteries of the past.
The sun was beating down ruthlessly as the small group of riders made their way across the desert. Already Bill was drenched in sweat, but his elation knew no bounds. He knew this day would reveal something monumental, he could feel it in his bones.
I like how you started the this story with this paragraph. You can feel Bill's ancipation, and you get excited and curious, too but. Nice why of hooking in your readers from the start.
I like how you portrayed Bill. He really is a smart man, but because of his nature it is easy for people to overlook and you showed that with Professor Anderson. Bill has that youthful, almost reckless energy that shown well, too. Good job with charactization.
My only complaint is that this has to be a one-shot, so Bill can't explore more of Ancient Egypt in the pensive.
Author's Response: Thank you. Bill was fun to write and I\'m glad you liked the way I wrote him, we really don\'t know much about him before he came back to Britain and I tried to give him a personality that fit in with the rest of the Weasleys while still making him his own character.
Summary: Theodore Nott has never had much respect for anyone but himself. But after being summoned by Lord Voldemort to join the Death Eaters, his world turns upside down, and he finds himself questioning everything, including his own values and beliefs. Darkish, but with surprisingly light and fluffy bits, kind of like my Dad's pancakes or a truly hideous dress that my Mum once bought for me.
Written by Schmerg_The_Impaler from Hufflepuff House for the Gauntlet's 3rd run. Whoot!
This is very interesting. I love how the whole story is serious, but Nott's added thoughts just make you laugh. The funny parts don't seem random, they flow well in with the story. I will have to admitt this isn't how I ever imagined Theo to be, but you made him an interesting read. It couldn't have been easy using a character we know almost nothing about.
Thanks for an enjoyable read and good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad that you thought my story was interesting and that it \"worked.\" I personally have more fun writing about more minor characters that I can flesh out and develop myself... it\'s much more fun that way! And I thought there had to be a good egg or two in the Slytherin batch to keep the books from getting too cliched.
Summary: A young woman feels as though she has lost it all, until she accidently runs into someone from her past.
For the December Challenge, The Winter Miracle Option. By Sly Severus of Slytherin House.
Good message, good story. Not your typical Bella, but that doesn't matter, its a miracle.
You know we write these stories and dream of being like Harry, being a hero. Sly just reminded us how we all can be a hero many times over. I have donated blood many times, it is really easy. If you qualify go do it.
Thanks for the reminder and good luck in the challenge.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! This actually isn\'t too off from my typical Bella. I tend to write her differently than most people. :D
And thank you for the reminder to everyone to donate blood. After all, it is the season for giving.
Again, thanks so much for the review!
Summary: For Lord Voldemort, life is going swell, and everything is juuust peachy... until a ghostly visitor arrives. EXTRAORDINARILY silly.
EDIT: For some bizarre reason that I can't fully comprehend, this story WON the "Things that Go Bump In The Night" challenge in the Winter's Tale Challenge.
This can't be completed can it? I mean I know it says it is, but that's open to negotation right? Seriously you had me in stiches through the whole story. Plus you had Voldemort in character and he was still funny, who ever knew? I loved Voldemort's thoughts, and the dialogue.
"It was odd, Voldemort had been killing salespeople for so long that it had become nothing more than a reflex, like breathing or blinking. None of his victims had ever complained about this idiosyncrasy of his before."
Loved that part, I think at one time or another everyone has dreamed of fulfilling that fanasty. Just one question, what does do with pesky telemarketers(especially polictical parties that call you twenty times a day right before elections just because you live in Ohio)?
Great story and good luck in the challenge. Go Badgers!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, GOnz! (This is a great review, by the way.) I\'m glad that you thought Voldemort is funny... he\'s my favourite character to write about. When telemarketers call me and say, \"Are you the lady of the house?\" I, (and by the way, I have a high-pitched voice) like to go, \"NO, I\'M THE MAN OF THE HOUSE!\" and slam down the phone. But then, I\'m fourteen!
Author's Response: (And female, of course)
Summary: Harry, Ron, and Hermione are enjoying Christmas at the Burrow when an unexpected ghost begins taunting them with strange voices, eerie laughter, and cruel tricks. Can they help the bitter spirit move on, or will the ghost of a former enemy continue to haunt them?
This story was written by Gmariam of Ravenclaw for the December Challenge, Things That Go Bump in the Night. It received second place!
Very interesting and orginal. I like how Malfoy got revenge on Harry for pelting him with snowballs while invisible, by doing the same. The ending had a good message, Harry seems to have learned a vaulable lesson about forgiveness. Good job and good luck!
Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you for the wonderful review! I really appreciate you reading this story. I hope you liked it, it is a bit different. ;) Yes, Harry did learn something at the end. I seem to have developed a fondness for sentimental endings lately. ;) Thanks again for the review!! ~Gina :)