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(made by witchwannaB)
Why oh why are they French kissing? I mean, it's only their FIRST kiss.......and it's gross!!!!!! But other than that, I love it! :)
DUDE THIS STORY ROCKS!!!!!!!! ...........the best parts are when you point out problems in the movie.......that is sooooo me! LOL. Keep on writing!
This chapter took an odd turn that I wasn't expecting. Please try to keep the story on the same track in was going, as I feel you are changing that. However, that chapter was still nicely written!
*Cheers.* Draco is even hotter now!
*starts chanting loudly* DRACO! DRACO! DRACO! DRACO! It's great.
Hmmm..........I'm still wondering what Malfoy is doing..........good job, keeping your readers coming back for more. But why is Hermione using Muggle technology????? She's a witch, remember? KEEP WRITING MORE!!!!!!!
Author's Response: actually, i thought i'd just throw in a couple muggle items since she's muggle born, ya know? but yeah, realistically, she probably wouldn't. thanks for reviewing my story!
*sigh....* And Draco's so funny...first 'it must be my lucky day' and then 'it must be my lucky week'.....what's coming next? It must be my lucky month? It must be my lucky year? It must be my lucky decade? Is he ever going to realize that maybe HE'S the lucky thing?
yeah! Draco is getting hotter by the minute!
Oh, someone suggested this story to me and now I LOVE THEM! This has a sound and quite original plot, everyone seems to be in character, there are no grammar errors as far as I can see, and it has my favorite ship in it! It's a great story, keep writing!
I like it! The tension is quite obvious and you are doing a good job working in words and actions that show us how Ron and Hermione feel for each other. And being nice and gradual is always a good thing. :)
Three words.....I.........LOVE........IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And it's long, that's good, that's always good. :) The only thing is everything seemed to be happening so fast with Harry discovering his powers and everything......I guess your opinion is that he's going to need all the time he can get to prepare for the last battle in the seventh book??
No offense, but I could barely understand the prologue. The letter part is a bit confusing, and everthing seems to be happening to quickly. However, I like your story idea.
Again, am I completely blown away by the cuteness of your story. It was a bit confusing, and the sort-of-poem sort-of-story format didn't help. Rating this a 6.
Not bad.....not bad at all.......but why are Ron and Hermione using Muggle technology 24/7 ?
They're graduates of Hogwarts for goodness sake! And the conversation with Ella and that Jack (that is his name, right?) seems a little pressed to come to the ending line.....even though it is sweet. Other than that, it's good!
Author's Response: well, they are living in a muggle comunity. so if the muggles saw magic it would be a fiasco! i don't understand what you mean about "pressed" call me a ditz, but you totally got me there. like is this a good review, or a flame? i'm confused! thanks anyway! lol!
It's a good review! I'm just using "constructive criticism!" And by pressed I mean that it doesn't seem natural that Jack (I'm pretty sure I'm right with that name.....) just asks out of the blue 'Did your parents meet at the Ministry?' Maybe enter a question or too before that......maybe he recognizes Ron because he's the co-minister??
Author's Response: okay, i was just wondering! no, i won't change it. sorry, that's the way i pictured ending it when i started the story! and that's what i'm keeping, i'm the author, so it's my decision. no one else said anything about it, so one person can't change my opinion. sorry. thanks!
That was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo random!
Yes, as much as I wish Hermione hadn't broken up with Ron, it would have really, really, really, really, really irritated me if it wasn't the real chapter.....I've had enough of that! :) Write lots of chapters down on paper so you can post multiple ones at the same time when you start posting again!
Author's Response: Yeah, I think I'm done irritating people with my fake endings...though it was freaking funny! lol. And yes, they did break up...and don't worry. I have the next chapter written out already! And I'll think about doing the multiple chapters! lol. Well thanks for the review! I'll see ya on the 17th! Peace Out!!
One word, Hoku:wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you...One word. Mahalo! Which means the first two words in this review! lol. Peace Out!!
YEA YOU FINALLY GOT ANOTHER CHAPTER UP!!!!!!!! It's better every chapter, and I'm not kidding.
Author's Response: Hooray...I did!! But I'll probably update soon...hopefully! I told you it gets better in every chapter...I wonder what's going to happen next! And thanks for the review...I love your story...so hurry up and update also! Peace Out!!
You know, tricking us one time was bad enough, but TWICE??? Though frankly I like the new Letters from Lucy much better..........
Author's Response: LOL...okay, I'm sorry...I guess I was having too much fun! lol. Okay...I promise not to trick any more on this story! I promise, and if I do...I promise to give you a part in my story...got it! Okay...so no more tricking! And thank you...you are the third person that agreed to my second ending! I rather Ron feel guilty for his actions, then him having the satisfaction of watching Hermione and Lucy fight! lol...though I did have fun with that little chick fight! lol. Thanks for the review. Peace Out!