Well, I've just started writing Harry Potter fan fiction, so I might not be very good with it yet. I've been writing short stories also, so email me if you'd like the read them.
I love writing about romance, and just emotions in general.
Please review my work! :]
I agree with Zultan a little bit. This chapter would have been hard to write, and I myself would have had a lot of trouble deciding what dircetion to take with Harry and Ginny.. Zultan said tthat they should have had a conflict at the end instead of them aking up, which would have been interesting.. But the thing is, climax's are supposed to tie up loose ends and resolve conflicts. If the story had ended in a conflict, the story in a sense wouldn't have really changed, or gone anywhere. I like this story, but i'm on the fence about the ending.
SLASH RW/HP (Rated R and AU just in case)
You are an amazing writer. I didn't expect to be able to relate to harry and ron with their new found relationship but i came to realize that i CAN relate to them.
This story sent a message that says You should not be afraid to love someone, no matter what the situation is.
Your writing is amazing and intense, I really get an accurate picture of what is taking place in the story in every scene.
I loved how Hermione and Ginny were okay with their relationship, and you stayed true to the characters and their personalities.
Loved it. Abosloutley adored it!
I'm SO looking forward to reading more from you!
I'm writing a few stories myself right now, not al about Harry potter...but i need a good writer's perspective.
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Author's Response: Thanks so much!
I feel really mean giving you a review like this... but it's just a different opinion! So don't get mad! :]
I agree with a review you recieved before this.
Hermione was way too bitchy for me. IT was like i was reading about a different character than hermione. It just didn't feel like her, it felt like i was reading about Lavender of something.
I had trouble sympathizing and relating to Hermione in this story, some of the events like stealing lip gloss were just too out of character. Instead of being mad at Parvati, i expected her to be mad at Ron.
I know that your story shouldn't be exactly what I think it should be, it's just the Character seemed out of place.
Everything felt rushed, and Hermione was just beinga Bitch the whole time. Is that really how you think of Hermione?
Also, the way she wrote in her journal seemed a bit unlike her. SHe seemed like an American..lol. Just cuz maybe you used certain british terms in the wrong places maybe..but how would i know? I'm amercian! lol.
The ending was rushed and it just didn't seem believable.
THe writing was good, i can't think of a specific example but somtimes things just didn't flow quite right.
I liked the overall idea and style of the story though!
I hope you take this advice from me, and i can't wait to read your next story.
Author's Response: Oh no, I'm not in the least bit mad! Thank you very much for your feedback, I really appreciate it. Don't feel mean, everybody is entitled to their own opinion! ;) Well, in my other stories, Hermione isn't bitchy, lol. Check them out: The Yule Ball Argument, and Hermione's House. Again, thanks for your advice! xoxoxo
Wow, very good! I loved how we saw a new side of Hermione, not exactly in her character, but it's Fan fiction, right? :] Depressing, but emotionally powerful. Your story is one of those that make us realise what life is all about. I liked seeing this new depressing side of Hermy, and i liked how you added in she didn't want to be always thought of as the 'smart girl'. I'm really glad you didn't make them kiss at the end, it would have tipped the story a dfferent way then it was supposed to go. I love this fic becuase it's not filled with just sex like a lot of the other ones. No contact like that, just pure emotion and realization. Me+This story=Lovee.
mmk...well. I liked the story, but it moved too fast for me. I thought the idea and the plot were interesting, but it wasn't quite long enough for the characters to sink in. A little too much drama all at once. Some parts were pretty confusing but i guess it worked out. I was surprised and kind of well, dissapointed when i found out draco hadn't died. I guess it was okay, i don't knwo what else you could have done to end it. Well, the ending was pretty good becuase it left me with an elated happy feeling, but it just didn't quite fit with the story, get what I'm saying? Lol, well all in all i think it was a great story!
That was great!
I loved how you set it during the triwizard tournament, it made the story have a good pace.
It was refreshing to read because it wasn't extremely sexual and over done.
Their relationship seemed believable, lol.
Overall great work!
Author's Response: :D thankyou! *hugs* glad you enjoyed it