I am no longer an active member/moderator of MNFF. I will pop up now and then since I do plan to finish DTB but as far as new stories go, this is it for me. Thank you.
omg...the question is rhetorical right?!
Sirius hands down!
Author's Response: ANOTHER pro-Sirius fan! Dear lord, he is the popular one isn\'t he?! lol
i love your story!
you really know how to keep your reader well umm...reading!!
I love all the plot development and twists. It builds up a lot of suspense, drama, and excitement into the story.
I know you're going somehwere with Remus and Anne right?! They have to get together at some point...otherwise you'll have al ot of disappointed readers. lol. j/k.
And what's this Sirius and Alice thing that is evolving?!
Author's Response: he he he...Anne and Remus...hmmm... and Alice and Sirius. Well, after the next two chapters, Anne is going to have some more focus and that's all I can say for now. And Alice IS with Frank, as seen in chapter 2, but... well, keep reading to find out!
ohh...very good plot development/twist. i loved it!
sneaky sneaky sneaky...
Author's Response: heheheheh! I'm glad you liked it! Sneaky is good, very good!
hmm..by the looks of your story. it appears you are foreshadowing another happy couple? whichI want to take a guess at: Master Wu and Moony!
Tell me I'm wrong!
Author's Response: Hmmm... I don't know... hee hee
for a minute or two I thought that they voices belonged to Sirius and Alice...but now I'm in suspense...you've got my attention and aren't letting go any time soon.
As for the voices...I believe they must be nymphs/elves, some sort of magical creature that lives in the Forbidden Forest
Author's Response: I'm so glad that I tricked so many people into thinking the voices were the SMSOB! Well, read on to see if your hypothesis is correct!
I thought I'd let you know taht I've added your story to my favorites!
Good intense plot. I can see the foreshadowing you are doing. It's wonderful!!!
And as I read from the other reviews and comments you left...Anne apparenlty used dark magic right?! Was she forced to make one of those pacts in which if you don't complete your side of it you die?! I am assuming that her pact would consist of not saying that Bellatrix practiced dark magic. Hmm...
Well we'll see how you develop the story! Update soon. You're doing an awesome job!
Author's Response: Yay for foreshadowing! As for the whole Unbreakable Vow with Anne...well, all that I'm willing to say is that I try to be as original as possible! I've put A LOT of hints here and there in the chapters so that people can speculate, but...well, keep reading and find out!! he he he
again! wonderful! i love the fluff throughout your story. lol.
man i wish i could write like you do...but since I can't I rejoice in reading yours.
I hope the next chapter comes out soon. I can hardly wait!
Oh...and I see now that James and Lily didn't actually get together after the Forest incident...but they're hanging out and being friends now?! lol. Cool! Love it!
Oh and as a teacher...I love all the vocabulary you use...it really does enrich the story!
Author's Response: Yay for lexicon! All this vocab. is actually a result of my SAT-prep school. So anyone in the states that is going to take their SATs, reading my story will help a lot! Thank you for all of your wonderful reviews mgle_teacher! I luv them all! Next chapter is in the queue! It's been six days since it's been in there. It's probably rotting and growing mold by the time the mods actually get to it *sigh*
You're doing a really good job w/this. I love your story. =]
Thirty five chapters sounds exciting...can't wait to keepon reading...as you develop this fanfic relationship.
I like how you're building up the story here.
You're obviously making them dependent on each other for communication or to rant about their daily lives. I like it.
I don't remember if I've commented before but great job!
Wow! That was rather intriguing!
Awwww.how cute...a surprise party...which I'm assuming was the idea of Draco Malfoy. He's kind of ooc but it's all right! lol.
I love storie with twists like this...and so very well written!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
Love your story! Can't wait until you update again. I'm finding a lot of stories where Ginny and Harry have a "love" child and the child is kept a secret from Harry...but yours is by far one of the better ones.
One question...how come here in this chapter you write from Ron's POV regarding Ginny and Harry (right at the beginning) and mention a "Padma" as having pulled him away from his relationship with friends? But then Ron is later getting married to Hermione. What gives? Or were you talking about Harry and "Padma" or maybe I didn't read it right. lol.
=] maybe I'm a retard but...this is the second time I'm reading this story...and I'm confused by the timeline....is this supposed to take place the summer before Ginny's 7th year? So that means that Harry already defeated Voldemort and what not right? lol. It's sad really...I'm a math teacher but can't follow a story. lol.
Yo...me again! lol. Sorry...but may I suggest something? Maybe you already have it planned out so never mind me...or just ignore this completely....but I know I would love to hear Ron and Hermione's love story in regards to this one here... give us snippets of their romance or write a story about them? I don't know...either way. I love your story!!!
Wow. I almost cried at the end.
I really liked the originality put into this story, Jan.
For example: filipendula sponge cake, snapdragon scones, sugarsnap thins, golden goose eggs, and herb farms to name a few are creative names. I'm not even going to pretend to know anything about cooking but the cookies/cake sound believeable to me.
Your descriptions were great, I almost felt like I was there having tea, and watching Neville at his cot. It was so well put together. And it was great to address the feelings of Neville's grandma regarding Neville and his parents.
I think that you have her persona down. Like I said, I almost felt like an old grandmotherly type woman was telling me the story, and I was sitting there like a dork, wide eyed and staring.
I have to say it:
You have talent!
Courtesy of the Naughty Penguin Society
Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you. This was one of those stories that wrote itself. Augusta popped into my head and wouldn\'t leave until I wrote the story.
I read all three chapters and I must say that the beginning is quite disturbing what with Pansy trying to obliterate Draco from the face of the universe. And chapter 2 was quite interesting - I'll go ahead and say that I liked the ending, but it felt rushed at the same time.
The resolution could have been extended out and elaborated upon. I had no idea why a newspaper article would create such reactions from Draco or Pansy. Even though, you did a good job at humanizing them in the end. They're so wrapped in revenge, anger, and hate that they're like monsters - Death Eaters in their own accord.
However, like I stated before, I felt you could have elaborated upon this story and really delved into the psyche of each character more. Nonetheless, great job!
As for this chapter, I rather liked it the best. I was amused at the gory relationship you paint of this most infamous Slytherin couple since Rodolphus/Bellatrix and Lucius/Narcissa.
This paragraph in particular really caught my attention:
They lied when the other annoyed them. They lied to be cruel. They lied to inflict damage. They lied to save themselves. They lied to give way to their own pleasure. They lied to gain power. With each lie, they would silently tense and loosen their muscles to keep from attacking something, each sensing the other’s alleged ignorance. They were gifted liars, to the point where Pansy thought Draco was a blithering dolt and Draco assumed Pansy was a simpering twit.
You really capture the personalities that JKR seems to have written into them but also put in a flare of your own. I like how you have them banter back and forth so evilly.
This line is pure genius:
The banter continued because Draco and Pansy not only wanted to submit the other to physical pain, they also wanted to torture the spirit of the other.
I think you did a splendid job or not falling into a cliche romance of Draco/Pansy, not that you were going for one, and did them justice as individuals and as a couple. Kudos, my fellow author. XD
oh how sad...I almost cried.
Author's Response: I know, it is sad. I cried while writing it, but do not dismay! Check out the sequal. More angsty I\'d say than this one but centered around our wonderful pairing: Draco and Hermione!