I am no longer an active member/moderator of MNFF. I will pop up now and then since I do plan to finish DTB but as far as new stories go, this is it for me. Thank you.
Sorry for being so late - I read it last week and forgot to post/review *hangs head in shame*
I was never really interested in Egyptian mythology in school but I like how you keep mentioned that they were overly obsessed with death (or preoccupied)and I was also particularly interested in the fact that you mentioned there was no unified religion - it was very cult like and flowed according to the pharaoh of the times.
It made me think about what I know and don't know about Egyptian mythology.
I noticed that there was a lot of deities/gods that I've never heard of before and it made me wonder why...
I did recognize some of the most "major" ones.
I'm not keen on poems - mostly because of the rhyming - never got it.
But I like your poem about Harry. It's angsty and sad...it sounds like Harry, that's for sure.
The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Yep, thats the mood I was trying to create! Thank-you for the review! *Still doesn\'t know what \"The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves\" means...
I rather liked this story with Harry/Katie Bell. I haven't read that many fics in which Harry is paired with anyone other than Ginny, Hermione, or Luna that really get my attention. However, I like how you have Katie struggling with the decision to pursue Harry at all. It's a good inner struggle in which she keeps seeing him as a small child, and it's obvious that she's torn.
I particularly thought this line was great: He's Harry, little Harry the Seeker who was small and stubby and cute in the same way your stuffed animal is cute. Cuddle it, maybe, but certainly not something you ponder having long petting sessions with.
I also thought that the input of the Twins was great! Lol. How devious! They should really have been in Slytherin.
I really liked this poem. I'm not a big poetry buff - in fact, I stay away from it, if possible but your poem was rather creative. I would have never thought of using the alphabet as a poem. I like how it rhymes too. It's sort of hard to rhyme some of those parts together, no?
The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Yay, I was part of the project! *dances* Thanks for your review, and I\'m glad you liked it.
First, I love how you began the story almost as if one were reading a passage out of a text regarding the Black House. Neat!
I also like how you describe Isabelle and Orion. I never picture Orion Black as a kind man. I like the relationship you gave him with Isabelle.
You're a great writer! I particularly liked how I felt chills in certain parts of the story like the sentence:
Neither Orion nor Isabelle noticed the eerie flutter of the drapes as they passed Creepy!
You really had that whole 'house surrounded by dark magic' down.
The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
That definitely had me holding my breath the entire time. It was brilliant. I love the angst you wrote into Hermione. At first it's not obvious who is crying, and it's just like you're there feeling it yourself.
I love how you switched POV's. =]
~mugglemathdork/Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: I am glad because you picked up the two main factors of the story. 1) the fact that i did not use their names besides when each character addressed the other (to increase the readers awareness) and 2) the switching of point of views. I did this more to show that everyone is feeling seperate emotions, even thouhg the pain and shock is all the same. Thank you for your kind words!
She walked over to the oak cabinet and stared at the yellow flame of the dying candle on top of it. She inhaled with all her might and blew out the candle and the little love she had into the darkness.
Those last words were really good. I like how you make an analogy between her love and heart being the candle and the flame.
You make a good job of characterizing a young Bellatrix.
I like how you depict and pick apart her feelings...very rational, calculating, and cold.
~mgle_teacher/Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you liked it.
This is a nice piece Gina!
I'm honored you dedicated it to me and Julie. It's always a pleasure betaing work for you as you are such a magnificent writer. *grins*
I love the butterfly theme, and the way you have the butterly change colors throughout the story. I'm assuming that the colors represent several feelings, or the people (ie: Slytherin = green).
You really captured the entire feeling of what it is to you. I particularly loved the part with Snape telling Harry that hate and love are opposites.
I once heard a saying that the 'opposite of love isn't hate - it is indifference'
It might not necessarily apply to Harry or your story but still...lovely.
Author's Response: Ritta! Thank you for the wonderful review! Oh, I\'m so glad you read this story, and even happier that you liked it! To think it\'s all because of a silly video and an even sillier avatar. ;) I did want the colors to have a loose meaning, yes. As for love and hate - I\'d probably agree that the opposite of love is indifference, but in this story Harry doesn\'t feel indifference toward Snape, he feels a very concrete hatred that needed to be acknowledged and released. Does that make sense? Thanks again for reading this story, and for the lovely review, and for all your hard beta work! *huggles back* ~Gina :)
I liked your one-shot. I'm not much of a Harry/Hermione fan, but this story had me leaning towards them. My OTP is usually Draco/Hermione so I'm happy it was inclined in there.
Author's Response: The person I wrote this for is also a D/Hr shipper, but she gave me the leeway of doing H/Hr... so I did! I\'m so glad you enjoyed this!
Girls were quite pretty and made for nice dates,
But he’d always prefer time to spend with his mates.
I loved that last line, Gina!
It was hilarious.
And on another note - what a great poem! Parody poem! Whatever!
It was great! I had no idea it would come out this great when you shared the part with the hippogriffs with me.
And the names were wonderful! Especially the Turnip, Cabbage, Toasters, Philbert, and Tiramisu from the forums - nice way to incorporate it all - and nice inside joke.
Again, lovely work!
You're just too talented for your own good. lol.
Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you so much for the compliment! I don\'t know about all that, but I definitely had fun with this one, especially the hippogriffs! Thank you so much for reading it and leaving such a nice review!! ~Gina :)
You're story is so cute. I love the way you write V.V. It's just wonderful. You're so...eloquent.
Molly is a dear, and you characterize her so well. Lol. Who knew that Professor Snape had a sweet tooth there?
BTW: I loved this line:
In Molly’s experience, few men would drop food to duel. She thought each wizard’s wand hand was full at present, and hoped neither was left-handed.
Again, well written - *hugs*
Author's Response: I just had this notion that when Kingsley was invited for meatballs after work, and Tonks was helping in the kitchen, and so on, perhaps one Order member was never invited and had a sharp enough nose to notice. And doesn\'t he seem the ginger type? Glad you had a good read!
Another wonderful story Gina!
I like how you characterize Severus as a troubled man due to his past - but give him hope to look forward too...that's a nice gift!
Author's Response: Hi Ritta! Thanks so much for reading this story! I\'m glad you liked it. I appreciate the comment on Snape - this is my first time writing a story from his PoV and I hope I\'ve struck the right balance between dark and light, despair and hope. Thanks so much for the lovely review, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)
This is lovely!
I can't write my story now! It'll be dim next to yours. lol.
You have a great knack for writing stories that stay true to canon - I'm utterly amazed!
And you do such a great job at it too.
I love the fun parts at the beginning, and the serious parts with Sirius.
It was lovely.
Author's Response: Hi Ritta! Thanks for reading this story! I\'m so glad you liked it, both the fun bits and the sadder ones as well. Yes, I like to stay close to canon, perhaps sickeningly so. ;) Of course, we know very little about the Marauders, so that\'s a bit more open! Thank you so much for the lovely review. I hope you write your story, I\'ve really enjoyed reading other stories in this challenge and would love to read yours! Go Ravenclaw! Thanks again! *turnip hug* ~Gina :)
Awwww you got accepted!
I'm so happy that you kept some of my suggestions. Lol. *looks at flame reviews*
Author's Response: I did indeed get accepted! Of course I kept some of your suggestions. Thanks.
Awwww *tear, sniff, hugs*
I must admit that Ron is not one of my favorite characters - mostly due to the movies, and the temper he shows in the books. But you did a wonderful job here with Ron. Very insightful!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have not always liked Ron either-he often acts like the typical teenage boy. I do believe that Rowling has put enough evidence of his loyalty, generousity, and nobility of spirit to show the kind of extraordinary man he might become. Time will tell what war will do to him. Thanks again for reviewing! -Daisy
For a while there, I thought Snape was a waiter, and was utterly surprised you'd do that to our dear ol' Potions Master.
I particularly liked the last sentence. Rather neat!
Wow. You have a good start here with the action. It seems a bit disjointed at first, but I love the way you write. It's very descriptive, and detailed like when you describe Bellatrix's blackness.
I also think the last sentences is very good: And so, consumed completely by a kind of evil he had never known before, Harry Potter crossed the final threshold between innocence and darkness.
It's very poetic...Harry crossing a threshold between innocence and darkness. *sigh*
It's sad that you killed off Mr. and Mrs. Weasley though, but I guess it was necessary for the feeling of the story.
I love your Dramione stories, and since I've recently began reading slash, I can't wait to read the rest of the chapters.
Very good job, Annie.
~mugglemathdork/Knight of the Turnip Table
I must say that I really liked the description and image you've created with Peter's POV. It is hard to like Peter because he's a traitor, but I found this one appealing to say the least.
I particularly liked this sentence:
He knew that voice. He might not have heard it for twelve years but he would never forget it.
You definitely stayed in character with Peter, and explained why he decided to betray the Marauders.
I don't have any nit-picks except that at first when you "flashbacked" it didn't appear to have much of a point, but you connected it nicely back to reality at the end.
mugglemathdor ~ Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you liked it- I am about to reply to your PM now. I admit the flashback doesn\'t appear to have much relevence but it was designed to show the friendship the Marauders had and also how heavy footed Sirius is. I\'m glad you liked my portrayal of Peter :)
This ballad was written for the January Ballad Challenge and received first place!
I do not know much about poetry, ballads, or limericks. However, I must say that I really liked this poem you wrote about the beginnings of Harry's ancestry. The fact that it rhymes so smoothly doesn't escape me; it is no wonder you won first place.
I think you have a flair with words, dear. I particularly liked this part:
You Knights of the Turnip Table are absolutely commendable. I\'m so thankful for the review, and you should definitely take a crack at The Odyssey. :) Thanks again!