Harry Potter, The Boy Who Lived
With the help of an ancient spell, his friends, and love, Harry embarks on his mission to destroy Voldemort. What will happen on the way? With Ginny, Ron, and Hermione by his side, will Harry find the solution? And where do Neville and Luna fit in all this?
Her Other Half, An Evil Most Insidious
Sequel to Harry Potter, The Boy Who Lived
It's up!!! Finally, eh?
Follow our favorite heroes continue their lives after the defeat of Voldemort. Someone wants revenge and will stop at nothing to get it. Is this a battle they can win or will they lose what is most precious to them?
I did get a chance to finish chapter 6 this weekend, and a good portion of chapter seven, which should make everyone a teensy bit happy... I hope. Don't throw rotten fruit, okay. Please?!?
I am going to see how the moderating process is going here, since it's been a long time since I've been posting on this site. If things get hectic, you can always try the story at WattPad, which might be posted faster. :)
Please don't discontinue this story! I did see your Author's note. Again, I am hard pressed to find anything to constructively criticise in this chapter. I love the emotions and feelings that you bring out of Luna and Draco as they interact. I can feel Luna's pain as she slowly awakens. You have written the scene of dawning comprehension perfectly. I can imagine putting the pieces together myself, just as Luna did. Wonderful!
What a lovely story. The imagery is spectacular. I really like how you brought the gounds to life. Excellent job!
Wonderful imagery. I really enjoyed the description of both the castle and the observer. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you!! As I said in my summary, this was only suppose to be a description of the grounds of Hogwarts, but it took a completely different path. The Narrator decided they wanted to be featured so I listened. Thank you so much for reviewing, they make the Muse very happy.
Lil Red, you did such an amazing job with my prompt. You wrote Molly and her reaction to Charlie's departure wonderfully. I liked how you used Arthur as the buffer, that's how I see his role in the books. I really liked the part where he went to talk with Charlie in his room. Ginny clinging to Charlie and Ron's worry about Hogwarts were very real. All in all, it was fabulous. Thank you for taking the time to write this.
Author's Response: It was so fun to write! Thanks for posting the challenge!
Wow. I had to read through this twice. I was having a hard time reading the end because I was all teary. I'm such a sap. I love how you brought each of them in to tell Harry how they feel. I also like how you had the repetition of not saying goodbye. Very well done!
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you liked it!
The imagery in this story is amazing. The way you show her thoughts and feeling about her life on the streets, and her relationship with Tom are nothing short of incredibly realistic. I like how you worked in the death of Tom's family and the accusations of the gardener. What struck me the most was when she said "Everyone told me it was the dear gardener who did it, but I knew the old man and could tell he was as innocent as the rest of us." That line really made me think about how it would be to live life o nthe streets and whether or not I would be jaded against people I didn't know. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted the reader to sort of feel bad, but also think of how their life would be had it happened to them. I\'m glad you liked it!
First off, the ending to this story was really powerful for me. I can sympathize with the feeling of being trapped in a house where you are not free to speak your mind and be your own person. The way you portrayed the relationship between the two brothers is how I would picture it in "real life" in the books. I can't imagine the two of them getting along too well while one of them was constantly hiding his true feelings and thoughts. What a great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to pull the Sirius and Regulus from the books out in my fanfiction with a new twist. I\'m glad you liked it!
I saw your pleading in the tower an I thought I would stop by and see what I could do to help you out.
Let me start by saying... This is great! Update SOON!!!! (Just kidding!!) *runs away from computer, ducking to avoid any manner of things being thrown*
I think that you did a fantabulous job intermixing her memories with the present day commentary. I really like how you followed a, oh, uh, pattern? (That's not the word I'm looking for though...) by showing all of Lily's 'secret' study places. James always seemed to know where she was, I am going to assume that was because of hte Map, right? I can see how that would drive someone insane.
I really liked how you showed a side of Lily that isn't often seen, and a caring side (no matter how mischevious) of James. It is very intriguing that he would send his friends to check up on her when he was indisposed.
On top of a wonderful writing style and strong emotional pull, this story fits the banner so nicely. Excellent job!
Author's Response: Thank you, Khrys! *throws tomatoes for your \'Update SOON\'* No, just kidding. I\'m too happy to be mad at you. Yes, James always knew where Lily was because of the Map. I\'m glad you liked my interpretation of Lily and James. They are two characters that haven\'t really been developed, so it left me a lot of room to explore and turn them into who I wanted them to be. Thanks for the review!
A Gryffindor banner entry. Written in response to avenger_of_dumbldore's banner.
Bethany, you have outdone yourself. This is such a powerful piece. Now that I've read this, I can't imagine Hogwarts being created any other way. Your plot bunnies and ideas astound me!
As usual, your imagery is superb and I could feel myself in the tavern. I like how you foreshadowed Dubledore's feelings about Hogwarts. Also, his thoughts about speaking in a tavern where they wouldn't be overheard.
I am constantly amazed at how you can make the words leap off the page and draw me into your story.
My one grammar concrit... "The girl narrowed her eyes before heeding a call *form* a table across the room, glad to get away from the tense atmosphere in the corner." from?
Author's Response: Hehe you have very sharp eyes ;) I\'ll correct it. Thanks!
This is an incredible start. I love the idea of Draco's plot to finish his task that Voldemort set him about. (Wow, that preceding sentence didn't make any sense, did it?!?) What I meant was... I love how you changed the poisioning of Katie, using Blaise to further Draco's plan. The incident in the bathroom was hysterical. I can imagine two soaked people standing outside of a bathroom, drenched in toilet water and laughing hysterically. Great job!
Author's Response: Hey Khrys! Thank you so much for the review. And Moaning Myrtle does play a wonderful match maker, in her own backwards way.
I love the tension that both Blaise and Ginny are sharing. The stress over the emxams is so real. I remember feeling that way several times, and, had I thrown a book, I'm sure it would have hit the guy I had just snogged in the hallway too! Excellent!
Author's Response: I must shamefacedly confess that I have thrown books at people. Having never-been-kissed I wasn\'t exactly in Ginny\'s situation but... Anyway, I\'m eternally grateful for the feedback! :)
Making Harry a groomsman is an idea I haven't seen before. I wonder if Bill is doing it for a specific reason?!?
I have a hard time believing that Molly and/or Arthur would allow the twins and Ron to pick Harry up without any supervision in those dark times, but that thought was quickly banished by the humor of the situation.
I can't imagine sitting through the tortue that the twins wrecked on the Dursleys. All I have to say is that it is ABOUT TIME!! They deserve much more than a pig for a coffee table. I will be keeping an eye out for more in the future. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! It deffinatly is time the Dursely\'s get what they deserve. ;-)
I was drawn in by the title, and then by the summary. (which just goes to show I should work on my summary a bit)
I am usually a bit sketchy about reading one-shot humor pieces, as they are usually too short to delve into the characters, making them funny in a bland sort of way. You, however, have added just enough background and depth on Hermione to make the situation hilarious without losing what makes Hermione so special.
Dumbledore appearing out of thin air to talk to Hermione, while she worried about the bird doo was classic Hermione. I also really enjoyed her reaction to the owl itself. Electrocuting an owl, I have never thought about it, but they probably do encounter such probelms. :)
The scene between Hermione and her father was beautifully written and the ending was darn funny.
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you liked it. ^^
I was so glad to see that this got accepted. I have been waiting to see something of your posted since I see you in the Forums so much...
You did an excellent job with the description of "life" after the veil. I could almost feel my feet against the oddness of the 'floor'.
I really liked how you described Sirius' recollections and his panic at the thought of not knowing what was happening.
I'm a bit confused as to why there was only one other person behind the veil, but I never really thought about how many people had fallen through it. Of course Sirius couldn't be the only one...
My favorite part was the explanation of where the voice came from. The idea of part of a ghost being left behind is intriguing.
Author's Response: I\'m so excited I can\'t even think straight!!! I\'m so glad you liked it. It was actually pretty easy for me to imagine the nothing and all that, but the hard part was getting the descriptions on paper...er... computer. It\'s good to hear that my hard work wasn\'t put to waste. THANK YOU SOOOOO MUCH FOR THE REVIEW! -Gabby
Luna Lovegood, after her ordeal in Hidden, goes on to become an advice columnist of the Quibbler, using personal experience to teach desperate, helpless souls what she knows. Read problems submitted by members of MNFF and even suggest one yourself!
Chapter One - Destroyer of Pretty Girls
My problem is not for the faint of heart. That being said, I shall blunder ahead, hoping to to offend anyone.
There has always been a bit of experimentation in my family, one might even say that it would be considered normal to hear explosions coming from our house late at night. However, my last experiment went horribly awry and now I am suffering the dire consequences. This is nowhere near as bad as the time I got boils all over my backside.
What, you ask, could be worse than a backside full of boils? Let me tell you what.
How about large, perky breasts? What sort of a comlainer am I, you ask? What witch wouldn't give her wand for a nice rack? I can't think of a single witch that would complain.
The main problem is that I am not a witch. I'm a wizard.
I've tried every spell I can think of to remove them. Nothing has worked. I noticed my brother staring at me in a funny way as I jogged down the stairs yesterday morning and my best friend keeps rubbing his elbow against my arm. It seems that the spell not only gave me, well you know, but it also causes every male that sees them to fancy me. I've taken to taping them down so no one will notice them.
Please help, soon!
Yours in a panic,
Author's ResponseLuna's Response: Oh dear. I have put this in top-priority.
I came across this completely by accident, as I often do... All I can say is that I am so incredibly glad I did. :)
First off, the plot is excellent. I can't wait to see how Harry attempts to accomplish his 'task'. Assuming, of course, that he does. After all, he wouldn't want any harm to befall his two best mates, right?
I think you've got Harry, Ron, and Hermione spot on in characterization. Hermione let the letter go rather quickly, though, and I'm hoping that will be brought up again. The more Harry had to deal with Hermione adn Ron asking about his 'mission', the harder it will be for him to complete the 'task' successfully.
The letters are so mysterious and intriguing! I love the emotional torment they cause Harry. It's something I would do, when he skipped out of class early to go read the letter. It was spooky when there was a letter for him in the restroom. I wonder who could be watching him so closely?!?
I can't wait to see where you take this, as I'm sure it will be a fabulous read!
Author's Response: Thank, Khrys! Now that you pointed it out, Hemrione did kind of forget about the letter rather quickly. I\'ll see if she\'s going to bring it up again. I\'m glad you thought I characterized Harry, Ron, and Hermione well, because I\'m usually really bad at that stuff. Anyways, thank you very much for your nice review!
Oooh. You are leading me down the path to...
The tension between Harry and Hermione was much more apparent this time. I also like how you brought Ron into it too. I don't think he is nearly as think as some people portray him. I'm glad he caught on to Harry's advertisement at breakfast, even if it was hours later. (Did Hermione talk to him about it?)
The crumpled letter near Colin was very intriguing. Could Colin be watcing Harry?!? It would fit with his character, but then why did he seem so put off when Harry approached him?
I have to admit that the minute I read that Herione was going to the library, and then Harry remembered he had to go too, that it was a sinister plot by Hermione to get him to kiss her in the library. Evil Hermione. But, I'm just wandering off in fantasy land. Right? Oh. Don't tell me. I'm having a great time waiting to find out!
I can't wait to see how you have Harry do his task!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again! Hehe, I did try to make people seem suspicious of Harry because readers thought that Hermione forgot about it too soon. And Ron isn\'t nearly as stupid as everyone thinks. By the way, Hermione didn\'t talk to him about it. I like to picture Ron as a guy who notices some things other people don\'t. :) As for Colin, I won\'t say anything. *shifty eyes* Aha! You think Harry will kiss Hermione in the library? >.> Ooh, interesting thought. But I can\'t comment on that either. Thanks again for reading!
Sorry I didn't get to review this earlier, I had printed it out and taken it with me to my silly doctors appointment. Needless to say, the nurse was worried about me because I was sitting in the waiting room crying.
You did an amazing job of describing the confrontation betwen Harry and Voldemort, including Ginny's rols as a Horcrux.
I really like the end, the use of the Thestrals to show unity in a time of despair.
Hmmm. There was something else I was thinking of when I read it, but I seem to have forgotten (Darn old age!), I will review again if I think of it.
All on all, this a hauntingly beautiful piece, and I think you captured the emotions perfectly. Great job!
Author's Response: You have no idea how happy your review made me. I had to giggle because I\'m picturing you sitting in the doctor\'s office crying and the nurse seeing. I\'m so glad you liked it an thanks soooo much for uch a lovely review.
Author's Response: Just out of curiosity... What part made you cry?
The ending with the Thestrals made me cry. It is so hard for me to share my pain, that I could not imagine that many people getting together, so overwhelmed by their grief, to share their pain.
Author's Response: Thanks for answering... and thanks again for the review.
I was so glad to see this got posted! Congrats! I really like the moments of doubt before the wedding. The added twist of Remus and his feelings, and Snape and his feeling, was excellent. My favorite part was the chasing of the rings. I laughed so harad at the idea of James and Lily (Hand in Hand) chasing Sirius around the church. Hysterical.
Author's Response: Lol thanks, I figured there had to be something different about a wizarding wedding :) I\'m glad you came and read it! Tell me when yours is up and I\'ll come and have a look :)