Summary: Isla was born into a well-known and respected family: the Blacks. She grew up with their traditions and was proud to be who she was – until she met someone who showed her that what she knew was not the only world.
Follow a young witch through her teenage years and discover how a traditional one will change and rebel against what she believed was the only truth.
Oh dear. I'm not sure that I like Savaric at all. Quite obviously (to me anyways), Isla doesn't truly like him either. Although, her fainting could just be from excitement. But if it were, I'd be very very very very disappointed and my opinion of her would drop quite a bit. I hope the truth of whatever hits her soon or I might have to pretend to. Or maybe not. That makes me no better than her father, and I don't like him at all. Who am I to condemn a daydreamer? I myself am an expert and can get away with it with none the wiser.
Author's Response: Thank you, clabbert2101, for reviewing. I could make it easy and tell you how Isla thinks about Savaric and what it is with her fainting, but that would take all the fun in reading the next chapters. So stay tuned to find the answers.
That's okay, I don't really want to know. What fun would that be, eh? You'll tell the story much better within the fic than you could in a response to a review. Speaking of which, I feel bad that I've been the only reviewer for chapters 2, 3, and 4. Here's something to help: Shining Through Blackness is on my favorites list. Please update soonish,
Author's Response: Thank you so much, clabbert2101. I\'m really flattered that my first ever published story made it to your favorites list. And I\'ve just submitted chapter five to the queue, and I\'m looking forward to your opinion about it. Thank you for reading.
It took you long enough, but this chapter was well worth the wait. I loved the dream sequence with Robert, and the transition between their thoughts before that. The whole chapter has a feeling of anticipation, and I absolutely refuse to wait so long for the next one. *squishes*
Author's Response: Yay! *squishes back* Thanks for leaving another review. And, um... I try... but I can't promise anything. There are my other stories that need nurturing, too, lol. But I will definitely keep writing cause I love my story to pieces. :)
I'll try for coherence, shall I?
Isla meets the freaking Emperor of Austria?!? :O
Okay, so that's not really all that shocking, but that he took an interest in her because of the myth is (seeing as I'm pretending that the story is real right now, and putting myself in Isla's shoes). And Savaric.....he's grown on me. In an overprotective sort of way. I still like Bob better....
By the way, I burst out laughing when Isla said she doesn't speak German. I know she's British and all, but you are German, so....yeah.
As for the little dusty shop of mystery.... :O (yes I did use the same smiley twice in one review)
I'm a bit sad now, though, because I can tell the story is getting towards the end. And I don't want it to end. Not that I want you to prolong it indefinitely by leaving months between updates, either.
~Bella (who didn't quite manage to be coherent after all)
Author's Response: *huggles* The incoherency made me laugh though. So you get a thanks for that lol. And yeah, I might be German, but that doesn't mean Isla can speak it, right? I'm not Isla. ;) And I'm working on the next chapter, honestly, I do. My muse just... let's not talk about her. <.<
Summary: Every year the Sorting Hat thinks up new lyrics to present on September first to introduce the first years to Hogwarts. The following poem is what the Hat could have sung one year.
Longer than most Sorting Hat songs, but I really enjoyed how the Hat told of Hogwarts' history and about Voldemort and the Trio, and the Battle of Hogwarts. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. And it took my sister and an awful long time to come up with including Voldemort, the Trio and Hogwarts' Battle.
Summary: Once again the four most mischievous boys Hogwarts has probably ever seen have been caught when executing a prank. The consequences? A detention. But they never saw this detention coming…
Miss Norris with a fluffy bow? That would have been quite interesting. I must say, most of Jame's questions seemed like the sort that I would be most likely to ask.....
perhaps that's not a positive thought.
Anyways, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: LOL And thanks. *squishes*
It's nice to see you write about the Marauders. I can just picture the looks on their faces when they were told that they had to work on the newspaper. Can't wait for the next chapter, Cheers!
Oh, also, did you mean to say 'heed over to this small little box below' or was the heed supposed to be head?
Author's Response: My loyal reader! *huggles* Thanks for the review. And <.< I'm confused with all these "ee"s and "ea"s. >.> That's a "head over" - at least I think it is... *runs off to check dictionary again. >.< I'll go change it... *sidles away*
Summary: Changes can be frightening, and Hagrid is more than just nervous about the change that is currently occurring in his life. Will he keep his nerves to stay strong? And, especially, what kind of change is he facing?
Oh, this is so sweet! I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks, my dear. Your reviews brighten my day.
Summary: Lily Evans is on a weekend camping trip with her family, and Severus Snape is invited. The day starts out peacefully, but when James Potter appears, trouble isn’t far behind…
Oh, I love your writing so much! This story starts out so sweet with just Lily and Severus, I really think that they would have just hung out like that. And then when James showed up, well, the reactions were just perfect. Thanks so much for another great fic!
Author's Response: Thank you. Especially for your first comment. *squishes* I love getting your reviews.
Summary: Every month a werewolf experiences the worst – and it’s always when the full moon rises.
This is a poem about the Lycantrophy’s curse.
This poem is really good. It's so nice to see more of your poetry. You really seem to have captured what the change to a werewolf is like. *hugs*
Author's Response: *hugs back* Thanks for coming and reviewing me once again. And thanks for the great comment. By the by, did you get my message?
Summary: Hogwarts could never have been built without magic. Yet even ‘simple’ magic alone doesn’t let a castle as huge as Hogwarts appear out of nowhere. There have been other forces at work as well, given by the spirits to humankind to command over them.
But whatever the spirits have humankind presented with, it can take something to settle a balance…
So beautifully written. I can't wait for the Valara series. I find this is the first Founders story that I have been truly interested in, and the idea that they each control one of the four elements is fascinating. I never thought of that before.
Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you, Bella. I'm happy that you liked it and that you're excited for the next story to come. Know that the first chapter of the second fic is as good as finished and will then go to my beta. In the meantime, there are some snippets of the coming story in my drabble thread in TTB as well as in my homework thread in the DADA class I'm taking (DADA First Years).
Seventh grader Alexandra Quick returns to Charmbridge Academy. This year she faces bullies from another wizarding school, a secret Dark Arts club, and the machinations of her father, but her greatest trial yet awaits her in the dangerous Lands Below.
This is the second book in the Alexandra Quick series.
I'm going to be a bit incoherent for a bit, so I'll leave it at this:
Summary: Harry has seen many Christmases; some of them were cruel and cold, others were what a Christmas should be – a holiday of love, celebrated with family and friends.
Will this year be as bright as the best Christmases Harry has experienced? Or will the memories of decades back close in on him?
*is almost crying*
Oh...it's so beautiful, Bine.
Author's Response: Awww, thank you. *hugs*
Summary: Sirius and Regulus steal themselves away and have an excursion towards the suburbs of London. What awaits the brothers?
Oh, Bine, I love it. It has such a sentimental and magical feel to it, even though it is set in muggle London. Superb job! *huggles*
Author's Response: Bella! Thank you! *huggles back*
Ellie has always been green-eyed with jealousy over her older sister’s ability to do magic, and Marie has always taken pleasure in flaunting her magic in her younger sister’s face.
Refusing to acknowledge her own feelings, Ellie can’t help wondering, what was this feeling in the pit of her stomach, which only came when Marie was near?
It’s all left to Ben, the older brother, to sort everything out. But will Ellie ever manage to see the simple pleasures found in watching, or will her jealousy never go away?
YAY! I'm glad you got a story validated.
Other than that, I loved it. I think the idea is wonderful, and the tone is very sincere. Excellent job.
..................but I still win.
Author's Response: Thank you :) I apreciate your love. Lol. I'm very glad you like it.. but... uh... I win. Sorry. -Lex
Summary: Born to and raised by the Hawthorn family, Melody and her sister are everything a respected Pureblood family could ask for. However, when Belladonna is sent to Beauxbatons, Melody is faced with the prospect of entering Hogwarts alone.
Fully expecting to be placed in Slytherin or Ravenclaw, Melody is given the shock of her life when she becomes a Hufflepuff.
With her sister in another country, her family miles away, and friends no longer talking to her due to the disgrace of being placed in another House, Melody has never felt so alone. To top that, the people surrounding her are from social backgrounds completely contradicting of her own. People she never expected to spare a second glance, she is forced to live with: Muggleborns and Halfbloods.
Everything that she has ever been taught or led to believe is being challenged. All that her parents have told her is being proved wrong, and Melody no longer knows what to believe. Everything is completely unfamiliar, and she is scared she may be changing. But Melody needs to learn that sometimes change can be a good thing. And sometimes, it can be exceptional.
*evil laughter* Now, to review.......
I'm just kidding. You're off to a great start. You gave the sisters very subtle characterization through their interaction with one another and the house elf. It's already apparent that they are two very different people. I can't help seeing an underlying similarity between them though. It's like they have the same personality but different interests.......yeah.
Done rambling now.
Author's Response: Haha, but I love your rambling.
Must write more now, lol. -Lex
*waves* Guess what? It's your number one fan come to review! Aren't you surprised?
Interesting. You managed to show all the facets of Isla and Savaric's relationship in just this one little scene. The choice of chess was quite....hmm...how to put it, intriguing in light of all the chess references in chapter 13. Somehow, I get the feeling that Savaric is sadly mistaken when he thinks he'll win. Ah well. I feel sorry for him sometimes. When I'm not railing at him......
Always a pleasure to read about Isla!
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, Bella! *hugs* Your reviews are always a pleasure to get.
Summary: The only things Teddy Lupin knows about his parents come from the memories of others. On his seventeenth birthday he will finally have a memory of his own.
Hey, Sara! This was just beautiful. I love that Remus and Tonks planned ahead in the case of their deaths, leaving Teddy a gift for his 17th birthday. It was a tearjerker, you had me going from the time Harry showed up with the present.The concept was wonderfully carried off, I applaud you.
Your characterization is stunning. The loneliness that Teddy feels is completely believable. I love how you used his hair color throughout the fic to express his mood, noting how quickly it would shift when he was alone and how he controlled it to hide his feelings in the presence of others. It helps show how isolated he feels, loved but not quite belonging. You put it perfectly here:
No matter how he put the puzzle together, his piece did not fit. For the last seventeen years, the puzzle had been painted over giving the illusion all the pieces were in place.
Ah! Simply amazing.
The integration of the memory was just, wow. I loved that Remus and Tonks had the foresight to put it in there, just in case. And when Teddy realizes that all their dreams for him had come true, that he has the family they wanted him to have, it was one of the most beautiful things I had ever read. When he changed his hair to bubble gum pink I nearly died from happiness. Ah! It was wonderful.
There were just a few things that slightly lowered my enjoyment of the fic. You have a tendency to not use contractions in dialogue, which sometimes added marvelously to the character’s speech (such as when Lily said I am waiting. I am waiting for you to think of something fun to do instead of nothing. Wonderful! It perfectly captured how six-year-olds speak when they want to be serious.), but sometimes it left the dialogue feeling formal and stiff (“We are so glad you are staying with us this weekend, come on downstairs if you are hungry.” most people would just say “we’re” and “you’re”). It would feel a bit more…comfortable I guess, if you would use some contractions in places like this.
Also, just for clarity, you might consider putting Remus’s and Tonk’s notes to Teddy in italics. That way, the reader could see immediately where the letters began and ended. I was a bit confused the first time I read through and all of a sudden I was reading a letter; it felt like I didn’t have any notice that it was about to happen. Of course, that could just be me and my crazy brain.
Once again, just thank you so much for writing such a wonderful, beautiful, stunning, amazing fic (have I overused enough adjectives yet?). You’re a very talented writer and I can’t wait to see more from you.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story. I am so glad that you enjoyed it, and that the emotions I wanted to display showed through so well for you. I wanted to especially thank you for the comments that you gave me for improving it. This being the first story that I had validated I found your review to be incredibly helpful. Hopefully the changes I made will make the story more enjoyable for those that read it in the future. Thank you again. Sara
Summary: Who ever said life is going according to ones wishes? It would certainly make it easier, and more so when you possess the power to change things at will, like your appearance. But wouldn’t life be boring without risk and danger?
Lucy is about to find out exactly that. But she would never learn from it for her experience comes too late – albeit being early for her.
What? I still haven't reviewed the last chapter of STB but I'm reviewing this? *hides* I can't think of anything to say for STB yet......that being said:
This is a really dark fic for you, Bine. You do it very nicely though. The way you wove the flashbacks through out the running sequence (does that make sense? Running meaning, like, stuff happening in the present. Like you're running a movie or something....*uses weird expressions*) is really wonderful. I really love it.
Author's Response: Thank you! And I know what you meant. :)
It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.
~ Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen
Narcissa Malfoy wishes for her son to marry, but Draco is not content with her decision. Though, when a young woman enters his life in an unusual way, he finds himself wondering if he feels more than just the need to possess her.
This stories is the prequel to A Christmas to Remember, but can be read alone.
The rays of the rising sun fell into the room through the high windows, illuminating the dining room in an ocean of warm colours that ranged from golden yellow to flaming red. The beams of light danced over the walls and pictures of snoozing people who, from time to time, stroked over their cheeks as if wanting to brush off the sunlight. The tablecloth gleamed in a bright white that – if one looked at it too long – hurt the eyes. And yet, the already warming sunrays welcomed us lovingly into the new day, engulfing us in their gentle touch.
Beautiful description, Bine. It paints such a wonderful picture in my head. *sighs* You are one of the best people I know for bringing scenes to life.
Your characterization, of both Draco and Astoria, was lovely. They feel alive and real, and right. It doesn’t seem forced. You gave reasons for their feelings and actions, and the writing made it feel true.
But something changed. War came upon us, and war usually changes everything, even within ourselves. Draco seemed to have changed to someone softer, to someone who could feel affection for one other than himself. The way he had shown care for me on that one winter day, when I had fallen onto the iced surface of a lake, that had been a different Draco already than the one I had met months earlier in Hogwarts’ library. His eyes were less cold; they now held some shimmer of the most powerful feeling there is: love. Not necessarily love for me; it might be too early for that. But he was able to feel love which gave me the hope that one day he might love me.
There, see, that’s what I wanted to express, and you already had Astoria express it perfectly. The war affected Draco’s character, and this entire fic shows the results of those changes.
One thing you might want to look for is tense change. Sometimes the tense would change within a sentence, from past to present.
Author's Response: Thanks, Bella. :) *hugs*