I read this once it was complete, and it was pretty good. Although I think it belongs to the general section cause of the dark moments and the fact the whole thing was about Harry not blaming himself for someone's death. Kinda seemed serious to me. But I'm not saying that they were not light or funny parts.
But like I said above, great story, I even read the sequel, waiting for your latest chapter to come out.
You are probably one of the most imaginative authors (in a story is not to crazy and it still makes sense sort of way) I've come across. So good job on that as well.
Author's Response: I appreciate your reviews and compliments. I still have trouble believing it when people call me the "most imaginative" or stuff like that. But maybe I'm in the top group. I am planning something very unique for my next story, though I'm having trouble with a plotline. Thanks again.
Nice chapter, just a quick question, doesn't Harry mind that Ginny still says you know who instead of Voldermort's name?
Author's Response: Wow, you caught that. I wondered if anyone would. All I\'ll say is they\'ll talk about it later on.
Lol, Harry's predicament was hilarious, and how he thought of actually sliding down the pole to freedom was quite typical of his stubborness.
I disagree with the previous reviewer, I thought it was a perfect Ginny behaviour, aggressive and stubborn. I didn't see an update for a while and was worried that you abandoned the story, glad you didn't, it's one of my fav.
I liked this chapter a lot. Please update soon.
hmmmmm....the story seems to be a lot more interesting now finding about the story about the founders. i wonder whats in the forth book.
good job, i like the detail you put in your writing, and i love the creativity of your story.
waiting for your next update
Nice and fun chapter.
I wrote a review a few hours ago but forgot to actually post it (stupid me). I really loved this chapter because you pretty much negated the only thing I didn't like about this story that Harry was growing up faster then what someone of his age should. I liked the fact that you had Lupin and him sit down and talk a lot about his parents and their childhood antics; it was lighthearted yet important as it gave Harry a moment to be a kid again.
I think my favorite part of this chapter was Lupin asking Harry the reason for going after Voldermort and challenging Harry to think of a life after him; that fighting only for the past is useless (something like this could be used in the real world). Good chapter, and I hope you continue this story all the way to the end.
I just read your fic for the first time, and I personally think it is one of the best ones around. Few things I would like to point out which I like best. First, your story is really interesting, in-fact, I read all 31 chapters in one go, each time I decided to stop and continue reading later, I couldn't. The plot is really original and finally different from other post - OOTP fics that focus on Harry becoming some super wizard (unless that happens later). You kept him as a normal wizard. Second, which is probably one of my favourate part of this fic (kindof), is that you didn't bother rushing into romances that a lot of other authors do. With Ron and Hermoine, you did it exactly the way I would imagine Rowling would do it (maybe) in the 7th book. As for Harry/Ginny, don't know where your going for sure, but I like the constant interaction between them if you plan on building up something later. You kept the characters completely in canon, as well as Mudblood428 does, and she's a fantastic author.
Now for the part I didn't like (or am not completely thrilled about), is how Harry is growing up too bitter. I can understand how he may be angry with a lot of things, but he is still 16 years old. I can see your method of making Harry regard everything non-war related something simple and unimportant, but I think as a 16 year old, he still has some kid in him to be excited with the small things in life. (I might be too critical, or completely wrong, so ignore if you think so).
Overall, I really like your story, and can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. I love to hear what people like and don\'t like about the fic. I think you\'re right -- I have made Harry pretty bitter. My rationale for that is he\'s a 16 year old who suddenly finds himself a savior for the entire wizarding race. In his mind, the \"kid\" part of him died when he heard the prophecy. In future chapters, however, he will learn this isn\'t the case. Thanks again for your input.
Well, I have to forget about HBP before reading this.
Other then that, I liked this story.
Author's Response: Yeah, I did write this before HBP came out. I'm glad you liked the story though. You've been busy, reading both of my stories, and leaving reviews. Thanks!
hmm.....I can't say I liked the chapter before this one so much, personally, I didn't see what the purpose of it was in terms of the overall story. But I guess that was the only thing I had a problem about, the rest of the story I thought was great, I never read a story like that one before, and the plot wasn't lame at all, rather it was quite interesting, and I wanted to keep reading it till I finished.
As for the last chapter, I personally think you should end it. The story (actually series) was really great, and I'd hate it if you had just dragged on the story. I think you would do a good job (I have no doubts in your writing), but I think that all good stories have an ending. Basically quit while your at the top.
Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive critique. I am glad you liked the series and you are probably right about quiting while ahead. Thank you.
I think the name Harry is just jinxed. No matter what life he's in, it just turns out bad.
Anyhow, I came across this story recently which is why I haven't reviewed before. I guess the only thing thats wrong with this story (personally) is Lily's overprotectiveness. When she came to Harry's dorm and pulled the curtains, I immediately thought 'why is she there and how come she didn't just send some guy to fetch Harry?'. I made an assumption that the overprotectiveness was due to something in the past, which kinda justifies her actions. Just a suggestion, maybe their could be a chapter or something small to explain it.
Anyhow, if you think I'm completely wrong, no worries, thought I'd give an idea. But I truely am enjoying the story and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Good luck with the rest of the story.
Author's Response: Thanks for wishing me luck. I'm glad that you and several others enjoy my stories. As for Lily's overprotectiveness, I think I made a mistaken assumption. I tend to assume that everyone thinks like me and could get what I'm thinking from what I write. Your assumption was correct however. Lily is very much afraid of Voldemort using her children against her. Love, while strong, is a weakness for the Dark Lord to exploit. I suppose I could write an annecdote about her losing Harry in a super market, but I thought Voldemort was an adequete reason. But her finding him also ups the level of embarrassment; something all teens can identify with.
Sad ofcourse. Im hoping for a no one dies at the end of book 7 kinda person, but your story truely was great.
One thing that you did that was good was letting Hermione let go of Ron and move on. She is a bright witch and the world is hers to work for. You don't portray her as some girl who goes crazy or become closed which I think is good.
Good job. Going to check if you got any other stories.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and for the positive comments. I haven't written anything else yet - I lost interest for a while after HBP and now I've got exams and stuff. Hopefully I'll write some more over this summer though.
Like the previous chapters, this one was amazing. When the chapter finally came out yesterday, (after my lunch hour ended), I was anxious to go home and read it. In the end, I printed the chapter out and read it during work.
Anyhow, back to the chapter, I loved it. Like the real HP books, I can read and imagine the scenes in my mind. And thatís something that no other fan-fiction author has been able to do. Another thing that I really like about your writing is that you get the characters perfectly, and everything they say or do seems so natural rather then forced. Like when Harry was given a choice to go back and live or just die, I immediately thought it was something glaringly obvious that he would choose life without a second thought. But then the guilt he felt after he was given the choice to live while no others like Dumbledore had been, stopped him; survivors guilt basically. This was my favorite part of the chapter because it is something a lot of people couldn't have pulled off without sounding fake or cheesy, while you did it flawlessly.
After reading chapter 11, I thought that if Harry came back to life, it would simply ruin the story by making sappy or something. But as usual, you wrote that part magnificently, and the way you reasoned it, (love being his strongest power), it made perfect sense.
Honestly, I could go on and on about things I liked/loved about this chapter, but I'm going to save the huge essay style review for the end of the story.
I hope you write a novel or some type of story of your own later on, you can really make the characters seem so original and thatís my favorite part of your writing.
well, i've just finished reading this, ive been waiting for it for a while though. been checking almost every 5 hrs since you published this chapter. and i can say easily that i don't think anyone can complain about that wait between chapter 10 and 11. wow, i actually was hoping for a happy ending, i kinda got sucked into the characters, could feel their emotions and stuff (pain being in particular, war is ugly). but wow again.
i know i said id rather wait for a while for a good quality chapter instead of a rushed one, its just im so keen on finding out. hmm....i guess the only thing for you to do in this chapter is draw something, your other drawings are amazing, i would think that some part of the battle scene would be quite neat to draw and see. but meh, the story is fine by itself.
cant really find anything to complain about, everything was written well, i like your imagination and i would really be interested if you eventually write a book or something later on (non-hp book). anyhow, whatever u choose to do, good luck cause your quite talented in writing.
I think I submitted a review, but I can't seemed to find it. Anyhow, just incase I didn't, wanted to let you know that I've read a lot of FF, and this is the best one I've read so far.
Wow. I've just finished reading your chapter (hard to do at the moment since I'm at work).
And obviously it was amazing. It was not the perfect ending that all the bad guys die and good guys live, but bittersweet that so many lost their lives for an unneeded war, and still the struggle for power continues (Rufus S by trying to gain popularity by sentencing the Malfoys).
There were two parts of the chapter that was my favourite, the begining and the end. I love how you started it lightheartedly with the usual arguement between Ron and Hermione, and ended it with a feeling of satisfaction between Harry and Ginny.
Good job, please don't take too long with the epilouge, don't think I can handle another 4 months (just kidding, but sooner is better).
Author's Response: Hooray! Thank you so much! I definitely wanted to problematize the ending because in the real world, problems don\'t spontaneously go away so much as we must rely on people to help us recover. I\'m so glad you thought it all balanced out all right!
Oh, I just forgot what happened in the last couple of months, so ignore the update soon thing.
Author's Response: Don\'t sweat it. With any luck, there won\'t be any family issues to interfere with the epilogue. :)
This is the first time I read this story, and all I can say is that it has been the best ff I've read so far. And I've read a lot. Like someone said in the earlier reviews, I wouldn't be surprised that you are Rowling, because the style of writing is extremely similar.
I guess the only fault I could find, which is a really really small one that really doesn't matter at all was that in the first chapter, Neville was reading a transfiguration book, but he didn't do well in his OWLs to continue. I just remember that since I was reading that particular chapter just yesterday.
Anyhow, great story, really looking forward to your next update. As the next chapter will be a pretty important one since its the final confrontation between the two (I'm assuming), I'd wait to get the quality chapters like the first 10, then to get something rushed.
Author's Response: Hehehe... that dang Transfiguration book. I really must think of a witty replacement to stick in there, but I've been procrastinating ;). In any case, thank you so much for your positive review :). This has been quite a trip for me and some of the most difficult stuff I've ever written - and it's only going to get harder it seems. Chapter 11 has been plotted out and certain sections have been completed, but fleshing it out and tying it together will be a rather emotional and heart-rending experience - so I'm really glad you don't mind waiting while I construct the chapter. Thank you again!
Great chapter. I like your style of writing, quite professional unlike a lot of other authors. As well, the story is also pretty good. I like the fact that Harry's obstacles are not only the death eaters, but also the people who love him.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Oh great. You know, I love getting complements like, "you're a very professional writer," or "your writing style is like JKR's herself." I wanna be an author when I grow up, and JKR is the one that said if you wanna be an author to start with someone elses story. And I'm sorry it's taken me a few days to respond, I've been REALLY sick. But I can tell you that this is one of my favorite reviews.
great! waiting for the next update