Hello, I'm Hermione_Rocks, though you may call me Anna, or D.E, or Mrs. Snape . . . whatever flies your kite. I'm a high school student who is hopelessly obsessed with many things, such as Harry Potter, musicals (current favorite is Sweeney Todd), books/reading, various Internet web-sites, and food.
As you can probably tell, I have an incurable love for writing fan-fiction. Would I do better to be working on original fiction? Probably. But at the moment, I just want to have fun with writing. One day I hope to be published, but I'm really not in any rush. Right now, I just want to enjoy all this. :)
I hope you find something you'd like to read while you're here, and please leave a review to let me know your thoughts. I'm always looking for feedback, good or bad.
Yay, another chapter, and it's very good too. :) Poor Cassie, I hope Frank can trust her again, she didn't do anything to him.
A nitpick: “You’re mum is right; you really don’t seem like youself,” Bella told her.
It should be "your", not "you're". Otherwise, excellent! :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Anna. I\'m glad you enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for pointing out the error.
So, I just read all the chapters I'd missed. Sorry for not leaving individual reviews on the chapters, but I'll try to make this one longer to make up for it. :)
Wow. Where to start? I'm glad to know that Bella got through her time in Azkaban all right, and it's nice that she's got her magic back. I personally don't think *I* would've gone through with that; Bellatrix is braver than I've given her credit for.
I like how you've brought Susan Bones into this fic. I've always liked her, and you've characterized her really well: she's got a definite sense of justice, and she's hard but sweet. The potential romance between her and Draco is interesting -- I'm not sure how you're going to make it work between them, they seem very different to me. But then again opposites attract, right? ;) Teehee.
And . . . I have to bring it up . . . Bellatrix's remorse in the part where she was talking to Susan. I really can't see her regretting some of the things that she's done. Sirius' death can be wavered, seeing as she didn't cast Avada Kedavra, but in canon Bella does genuinely seem to *like* causing pain to others. It just seems odd that she regrets torturing the Longbottoms and the others, this just seems to really go against what we know about her. I can see in this story that she has changed, and I could see her *possibly* regretting those things now. I just have a hard time thinking that she never wanted to torture the Longbottoms in the first place.
Overall though I'm still really enjoying this story, it's really interesting to see how all these characters have changed due to circumstances and time. :)
Author's Response: *hugs Anna* Thanks for the review. :D
*hugs Bella* Yes, she went through with the procedure. Prior to her time as Harry\'s slave, Bella was very proud and independent. She would like to get some of that back. She doesn\'t like having to depend on the Lupins and never being able to give them anything in return. She grew up knowing nothing but magic, and simply has no idea how to function like a normal person without it. She knows that it is the only way that she can be the person she wants to be, and the only way she can began to repay the Lupins. Bella has been through painful situations many times in her life, and assumed this would be no different.
Susan is fun to write in this fic. She has a tad more common sense than the rest of the characters so she\'s a nice contrast. As for her and Draco, they\'re budding relationship is really secondary in the story. It is known that they seem to be bonding, but whether it works out or not will not be revealed.
And Bella\'s remorse. I actually discussed this with Will on AIM. And I have to admitt, I didn\'t give the Longbottom scenerio a lot of thought as I wrote it. I don\'t know if you have ever heard my rants about that night, but I have trouble beleiving it happened the way it was portrayed. So I may not have handled it overly well because to include me theories in this story would have been needlessly complicated.
Anyway, as for Bella\'s remorse, she genuinly regrets what she did looking back on it. How much she regretted it at the time, is debateable. Remember that what she says may not be what she\'s thinking. Bella is not a bad person in this story, but she is not an idiot. She wants to be free. She wants to go home to her family. She may well decide to slightly hide some of her previous motivations. There is no need to make herself look any worse than necessary.
Anyway, thanks again for the lovely review, and I\'m glad you\'re still enjoying the story. *hugs again*
Okay, I have started the past two reviews with 'aww' and was determined not to do so again, but -- but -- AWW!! ^.^ I'm amazed that you could start with such a miserable setting for all these characters and make it into such a nice one, without causing the story to be unbelievable.
My favorite part of this chapter was definitely Bellatrix's dance with Harry. It was just so perfect, and great. These two people have both done horrid things to each other, and yet are both able to move beyond their past and -- though they won't forget -- they'll forgive. And that's just such an amazing and wonderful thing.
Definitely one of the better fan-fics I've read in a long time, and it's really a darn shame you can't be nominated for a QSQ. :D *applauds* Greatgreatgreat job, Elle.
Author's Response: Well, happy endings aren\'t really my specialty. Normally, my characters are worse off at the end, but I really felt they deserved to happy in this one. I couldn\'t bear to torture them anymore.
I enjoyed writing the dance, actually. It was a little weird to throw them together after all that has happened, but it had to be done. Their lives were going to collide regardless. And I really think at this point, they would be able to forgive. For once, my characters learned something. I\'m so proud of them. *hugs Bella and Harry*
And thanks so much for another lovely review. Also, thanks for sticking with this story all the way to the end, reviewing all the way. It really means a lot. *hugs Anna*
Another great chappie! Poor Narcissa, getting attacked like that. At least Draco got the pardon though, he deserves something good. . .
I have one nit-pick, right here:
“What is your purpose here?” he demanded, after ceasing their wands.
It should be seizing their wands. ;D Other than that, excellent work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Anna. Yes, Narcissa had a rough day, but it was all worth it in the end. :D
Thanks for pointing out the error. I have fixed it. :D
Aw, that was cute! I liked it. Neville's characterization was really good, and it seemed like something he would wish for. Clever how you came up with the name Teutonians too. :) Good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Ahh, Anna... Thank you. I was worried about trying to write something with Neville as the main character because it was new territory and I will be honest when I say that I have not done a WHOLE lot of research on him prior to this. *breathes sigh of relief* I\'m glad you enjoyed it. *huggles* Nicole
*SQUEE* It's the sequel! I was honestly a little worried that it wouldn't be quite as good as the original...no worries anymore, teehee. ^.^ Awesome chappie!
Author's Response: Hehee, thanks! I\'m glad you liked it. I submitted Chapter 2 quite awhile ago, but it still hasn\'t been submitted.
Oh. That was excruciating to read. Not excruciating as in I didn't enjoy it, just excruciating in I felt so much emotion while reading . . . I definitely see why this story is featured. It's amazing. Your writing style -- the descriptions are just so vivid, without being overdone. A beautiful mix of horror, suspense, and tragedy. Great job.
Author's Response: I understand, I wrote it and I still have to read it as fast as I can to get to the end. (Like I need to see what happens even though I already know.)
Aw. . .poor Rodolphus. I really liked how you showed him reflecting over what Bellatrix had become, and how he would still always love her. It was really sweet, and I thought it was a nice one-shot. Great job! :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Anna. I\'m glad you enjoyed it. *huggles*
Woah, that was. . .depressing. >.> It was odd how Severus was ready to throw everything away for a teenage girl -- his entire life even, just because he couldn't have her. I think he puts a higher price on his own head than that, and even if he didn't he would want to continue fighting against (or for, if you think he's evil) Voldemort, and would not dispose of himself like that. . .I just can't see him commiting suicide, at least not like this.
However, it worked well for the story, which was very emotional and nice. So I would still say it was a great story, good job! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Oh, and I\'m so glad that you bring up that point, because right as soon as this was validated, I realised that I would have wanted to have added a bit more on the upcoming war, but I didn\'t. So, I think that another HG/SS fiction should be in order. :) Not anytime soon, though, because I have about five other things that need to get written yet. *sighs* Thansk so much for your review, and I\'m glad you liked it! ~Lindsey :)
Yay, it made it through! This is such a lovely story. I really don't have much more to say other than what I already said when I beta'd it, just wanted to pop in. Good luck in the challenge! :D
Author's Response: Thanks! For the nice review and the great betaing! Good luck to you, too!
Oooh, what a great take on the Gauntlet! I really liked how you handled all these prompts. I especially liked the part with Sirius, although the action was written really well too.
Now, while it was a lovely ending, I still have a hard time seeing Bellatrix turn away from the Dark Lord. I think she is too devoted to do something like that. While she may not totally worship him, leaving him seems to contradict with what we know about her. But, you handled the ending very well regardless. :P Great job Elle, and good luck in the challenge!!
Author's Response: *huggles Anna* Thanks for the review. I\'m glad the part with Sirius is going over so well. It\'s my favorite part of the story.
*giggles* As for Bella turning away from the Dark Lord, we\'ve had this argument before. I know she seems insanely devoted in canon, I just can\'t believe it. She has to have more sense than that!
Anyway, thanks again for the review. *more huggles*
Nice job, Evie! I really liked this take on the Gauntlet. Interesting sub-plot on the family that could have been, I liked how you fit that in there. I also thought it was funny how Harry was able to just ask the key to come down, and it came. How cleverly simple. ;) Great fic, good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! It\'s so nice that we all support each other like this!! ~Evie
Oooh, what an unique take on the Gauntlet prompts. I'm very impressed that you managed to do this through a Fawkes' PoV, and I really liked how you fit it into HBP. Lovely job, good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thanks!
I really liked this, you have a very good characterization of Severus. So you think that there was a prophecy about him? Interesting, I've never thought of that, and now I'm wondering what it's about...well, good luck in the challenge! :)
Author's Response: It wasn\'t my idea originally, but yes, a friend of mine has the idea that there was a prophecy about Snape, although at the time the Gauntlet was under way, my notes had been lost and we hadn\'t reconstructed it yet. Thanks for the review!
That was really great. I loved how you moved Bellatrix into Ravenclaw, and yet showed how the House, in the end, didn't really matter: in essence she was still quite the same. I also enjoyed her interaction with Rodolphus; this is a really interesting idea of how they meet. Excellent job! :)
Oh Laur, that was amazing! I truly could not tell you were writing about Dumbledore until the Grindewald line. What an interesting back-story you developed for the man, it seemed like a very plausable history. Wonderful job! :D
Author's Response: Thanks Anna! I\'m glad you liked it; I thought it was plausible as well, especially considering DD\'s pleading lines in the cave when they go after the locket. I always imagined that came from bad dreams he must\'ve had with his daughter, son, and wife being tortured. ANYWAY... Thanks for reviewing!
Oh. . .so sad. Poor Hermione. Lovely images, you are very talented in your descriptions of both scenery and feelings. Great job! :)
Author's Response: thank you so much! I\'m glad you liked it.
Oooh, lovely fic, Suzie! :D I liked how you showed how Draco was influenced in his childhood to act the way he is now, how everything just came full circle in the reader's face. The piece was short, but it was to the point, and what a great point you made.
I do have to say that I don't think Lucius is abusive though. He's shown no tendencies to be physically cruel to his family, and *personally* I don't think he is. So I didn't really like the part where he hit Draco. Otherwise his characterization was impeccable. Lovely job! :)
Author's Response: Thank you Anna! Sorry for not replying… I personally don’t agree with Lucius being abusive either, I guess the story just turned out that way. I actually think that he’s very proud of his family line, and very much wants to further it, but would never actually hit out at his family. He’d get pretty mad maybe …
Thanks for reviewing hon!! <3
*whimpers* Lucius! How could you!
This was a very well-written story, very brutal and great. However, I just can't see Lucius ever doing those things to his wife. He and Narcissa may not exactly love each other, but I've always thought they had at least a fairly respecting and caring relationship. But, for purposes of the story it worked, so excellent job. :)
Author's Response: Aw, I\'m sorry you didn\'t like it that much! I\'ve just always seen the Malfoys as kind of a brutal family, so that\'s kind of what I tried to incorporate. Thanks! ~Lindsey :)
:D I was so excited to see that little 1 by your author name this morning! Great job, Sophia. I really have nothing more to say than what I've already said while betaing, just that I'm so glad your story got accepted. :) *huggles*
Author's Response: Thanks! I just looked at the date and kinda yelped, I\'ve got to submit a few more stories before the DH! So expect to hear from me soon! Love Sophia