Good chapter. You played out Remus's emotions very nicely, and I liked how you kept it all in character. Looking back on all of Sirius's old things was cool, too. I really liked the kind of handwriting you chose for each marauder- it fits each of them perfectly. Very good job, can't wait for the next chapter!
Good story. You did a nice job incorporating the song into the fic without going off on too much of a tangent. The only thing I would say is that it's all very choppy and rushed. I would slow the action down a bit, but other than that it's great.
Another great chapter. I love the careers you chose for each of the characters; they suit them really well. The only thing I must comment on is that you have quite a few grammar issues. I suggest a beta from the forums. Otherwise, great job. 10/10
Very good chapter. I don't really support the switching spell theory, but the way you had it explained made it seem completely plausible. And awww, baby Harry! It makes sense that he would call Remus "Uncle". I wonder if Remus remembers them? Anyways, it's really a great piece of writing! 10/10
This is a marvelous story. I laughed so hard when I read how you talked about Aberforth. It just never struck me that he would be the polar opposite of his brother. Another great thing about the story was how it started out so lighthearted, then went much darker. It was so cool how you never actually said Mrs. Black, but at the same time you can just tell who it is. Fabulous job!
Very funny! I am rolling on the floor laughing. What a great switch of perspective! However, I agree with d3pr3ss3dNhappy; I would have liked to have seen his initial reactions. Overall, you did a really great job! I can't wait to read more of your fanfics!
*die from laughing* That is the most pointless story I have ever read. Definetely the best fanfiction ever. Ahem. I laughed, I cried. This story is a work of art. After reading it, I have decided to dedicate my life to serving you, the best fan fiction writer ever! *salutes* That is just hilarious. 300/10!
Ravensgryff, this was a fabulous story. I never shipped Ron/Luna, but the way this was written, it seemed totally plausible. I think that you portrayed his feelings very well. Their relationship wasn't too hurried, and Luna was finally seen as something other than a bumbling loon who says random things for the heck of it. Great job!
Great story! I love how you explained everything through dialogue, instead of saying "this is what happened." It's interesting to see how each character reacts to what the other says, and I think you portrayed them well. Good job!
Author's Response: Woohoo! I'm so happy you liked my story! I really loved writing this one... Thanks for letting me know what you think!
Very well written! I love how you managed to keep it all in canon, yet still give us an intriguing hook. I can't wait to read the rest of the mystery. Wonderful cliffhanger ending, as well! Great job!
I absolutely adored this chapter and the first one. The only thing I would comment on is Hermione's outfit. It seems a bit OOC. Also, Harry's hat threw me a little. I think that if he was going to wear a hat, he would wear something with a sports team on it. And dark-colored. But this is just me. Anyways, it was overall a very good story. Can't wait until the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Hermione's outfit is a bit OOC, but you know why she put it on, right? And as for the bit about the hat... just wait and see. Chapter 3 will be in queue soon (I hope). Thanks again!
This is very well-written. I love how you took it all through the eyes of a casual observer. It really puts a different perspective on Fleur, Madame Maxime, and Beauxbatons. I adored the last bit about Harry Potter. [i]We all knew what Harry Potter did, how he had saved us. It was because of Harry Potter that most of us were still living.[/i] This is an extremely powerful line. It shows just how far the "domino" effect of it all reaches, and really ties in the fourth book well. Fabulous job. 10/10!
Lovely story! Ravenclaw and Salazar are portrayed beautifully. Salazar is so sly and Slytherin-y that it made me shiver. He's kind of creepy, but that's why it's so perfect. Rowena has quite simply become my favorite founder. I love the way you describe her! Fabulous!
OOOOOH! That is so sweet! It's short, but I think that just adds to the quality of the poem. I really, really love it. It actually made me cry a little! Fantastic job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Wow, this was a great story. I loved how you chose the character's animagi; I think it suits them perfectly. My favorite line is the last paragraph. It is an extremely well-written story. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you!