I'm a girl from England. My interests include reading, writing, music, photography, art and horse-riding.
My favourite fan fics are from the Marauder Era, and therefore my favourite ship is James and Lily. I also like fics that include Sirius and Remus; I think they are very interesting characters. I like to try and include a lot of emotion in my fics, which means that they tend to be eithe fluffy, or angsty. You have been warned...
The stories that I have uploaded to MNFF at the moment are:
Make It Right - a Lily & James two-shot
What Went Unsaid - a look at what I think might happen during the final battle.
Love and War - a Marauder-era chaptered fiction, focusing mostly on the relationships between the characters. Love and War has a sequel planned, if I ever manage to finish it.
That was a nice story, and I liked your ideas. Who doesn't love a bit of Lily/James fluff? One thing I could say though is that the story would have been better if there was more detail in some areas. Perhaps when James faces the dementor in the classroom you could describe what he's feeling as it happens, and not just have him tell the others afterwards, and little things like that? Great story though.
This is a beautifully written story, with a plot that manages to avoid cliches. The interaction between Lily and James at the end was quite unexpected, but amazing. 11/10!
I love this story, and think that the emotions were very well portrayed, in particular the part where Ron and Hermione are talking about marriage. I think that you have got a very good grasp of what the characters would actually be feeling, so well done! There are, however, a few americanisms that could be changed, such as "expressway" becoming "motorway", but other than that I think that this fic is very, very good.
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much, I really appreciate it! It\'s funny that you should mention it because I had used expressway specifically because I was trying to avoid an Americanism. We will name them expressway, but for the most part we call them highways or freeways. Initially I had intended to use motorway, and to this day I don\'t know why I used expressway. It probably also didn\'t help that this story and Right Here were both written before I started using betas. Now I have three regular betas, oneof which is actually British, so I don\'t think I make that mistake anymore. So I\'m very honored you think I have the characters down well, and I\'m really glad you enjoyed it. I guess the only thing I could say is that I really wish you would read the rest of my fics... They\'re all in the same universe, starting with Right Here, then One Good Day, then Epilogues (part I, 2, and 3) of which I\'m only up to the third chapter of the first part, and finally another one shot called Everybody Does It.
Wow, this was very good. For some reason the lines "And then there were three" after James dies and "And then there were two" after Sirius dies really stood out to me. I can't see anything that could be improved on - it's perfect as it is. Well done!
Author's Response: You really think it\'s perfect? Thank you so much!!!
Oh, how interesting! This story grabbed me from the very start and I just had to keep reading. It's very well written and I love the ideas, too. I wouldn't have guessed that English wasn't your first language, either. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I\'m glad you liked the story, and I\'m so happy you liked my style of writing. Means a LOT to me! Again, thanks!
Just like in your previous chapters, once I had started reading I simply could not stop. I found that there was so much suspense and well-written action that the longer paragraphs were easy to read.
I think that you portray Harry's state of mind very well. I hardly think that he would come out of this war with Voldemort without being badly damaged in some way or another, and I find your story believable. The plot is well thought out, and your style of writing is excellent too. I feel as though I ought to add a little constructive criticism in here somewhere, but I can't actually pick up on anything that I didn't like, so a very well done! I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: Such lovely comments... what am I supposed to answer? I\'m very happy you didn\'t mind the rather long paragraphs, I know a few people who would have been discouraged just by glancing at the chapter.
I agree with you, a \"he lived happily ever after\" end isn\'t really believable after all Harry has been through. I\'m glad you think my story believable, though that opinion may change as you read the chapters to come... Even to me, it seems sometimes almost preposterous, but I\'ll keep my fingers crossed and pretend it\'s an author\'s pessimism.I\'m going to start next chapter just now. Thanks for the review!
Intriguing start, and I look forward to reading the next chapter. It's not too difficult to guess who this mysterious new DADA teacher is, but why he is taking on an alias is a mystery.
A good bit of writing here, and expect another review from me when the next chapter comes out.
Author's Response: i know it\'s kind of obvious to us who the new teacher is, but it\'s suppossed to be. the mystery is why nobody recognizes him. thank you for the review!
Author's Response: Haha i spelled supposed wrong! And I call myself a writer *rolling of the eys*
Author's Response: And I just spelled eyes wrong...this just keeps getting better and better.
There was some very powerful emotion in this fic, and it takes skill to write something that can make the reader feel so much emotion and sympathise so completely with the characters. I also think that you died in the lyrics very well, so good job.
I'll certainly look out for more fictions from you in the future.
Author's Response: Why thank you. I love writing, always have, probably always will. nice to hear that I\'m good at it.
Entertaining and amusing, with a hint of sad irony in there, too. It was a very enjoyable read. Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks, apparently this story is a LOT better than I thought! ;D Yeah, this is basically irony in a box, if that makes sense... poor Remus, eh?