Excellent story. Very well thought out and equally well written. I have to wonder how the sequel will progress with Harry being so massively powerful at the beginning of it. I like your explanation for how Dunbledore always seemed to know more than possible about the happenings in Hogwarts. Well done and I look forward to the sequel.
Interesting. When he calls on the green fire to cast the Patronus it comes out as a phoenix? Could this affect his animagus transformation? I guess I'll just have to keep reading to find out. Excellent story so far.
Excellent beginning. Now it's time to binge on the rest of it.
Strong emotion is hard to write well. You did it wonderfully.
My hat's off to you (or it would be if I wore a hat) for another fine chapter. I was especially empressed with the sorting hat song. Very well done.
I just finished reading everything up to and including chapter 35 over the past two months and had to tell you that this is one of the best pieces of fiction I have ever read. Definitely THE best on Mugglenet. You have seemingly captured every character not of your own creation, flawlessly. You should be published, if you're not already. I am very interested to know what you could do with a world and characters all your own. Both BLOOD OF THE HEART and ANCIENT MAGIC were creative, consistent, and very well written. Excellent Job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm not sure about that "flawlessly" bit, but it makes me smile to think you think so! No, I'm not published, but who knows? Maybe one day :)
It's just a coincidence that Draco's Patronus is a creature with a bushy tail...right? Because Hermione has bushy hair, and Draco's Patronus having at least some bushy hair might indicate...something.
I am eagerly, yet patiently waiting for the next chapter of this excellent story.
I expected a bit more interaction between Tonks and the Dursleys, but you have a solid beginning here anyway.
I thought I recognized that last bit about the ring.
I only have a couple criticisms.
First, the bedroom scene: It bordered on cheesy, plotless, cliched, and unrealistic romance novels. The only thing that kept it from crossing that line was the fact that you ended it when you did.
Second, the Harry/Ginny reconciliation: Like most fanfics of this kind, you did it a bit too quickly. They meet and he apologises by way of a kiss. I came out of nowhere as if Bullwinkle pulled it out of his hat. There needs to be SOME interaction between them to lead up to it.
In spite of those nitpicks, I think you have a good story on your hands. Over-all, it is well written. If you pay attention to the authors on this site (as well as over on the forums), the best writers are the ones who read a lot. I am surprised that you have written something of this quality without being an avid reader. (your profile mentions that you had not read anything until you picked up HP after seeing the movie). Reading more and a wide variety of stuff can only make you a better writer.
Now I'll shut up and go read the rest of your story.
This is shaping up to be just as good as 'Oblivious'. I wish I had read it immediately afterward. I just wasn't in the mood for it at the time. Your writing is superb, as always.
I want to address the dementor's kiss on a werewolf. If a feral being kissed leaves behind the human mind and the wolf mind is gone for good, then wouldn't the opposite also be true? If a non-feral were to be kissed, the human mind would be gone and the wolf mind would be left behind. That much seems obvious, but what about a transformed werewolf who is not on wolfsbane? Could this be a cure for the danger? They would still be a werewolf, but not lose their mind when transformed. Sort of a permanent wolfsbane? But who would volunteer to test this? Hmmm.....
Excellent beginning. I assume the lollipop and bald head was supposed to have been inspired by Kojak? Most of your readers will never get that reference, even though you mentioned that the twins got it from a television program. I like little things like that. It makes me feel superior to know that I got the reference when others won't.
I like the story. After reading the first two chapters, I decided to review and add it to my favorites. I look forward to the rest of it.
Amazing! Short, but Amazing!
Another unbelievably good chapter. Wow!! You have done a fantastic job of creating something that even Voldemort would be terrified of.
A worm animagus? Interesting idea. That alone would be reason enough not to register. Could you imagine how people would mock you if they knew?
I also liked that Ron, being Harry's best friend, would get the prototype of the Lightning Bolt. Nice touch.
That's what I don't like about Quidditch. Ron stopped every shot, and the whole match still came down to which seeker got the snitch.
Just a guess, but Ron's going to Diagon Alley to buy something 'special' for Hermione. That's why he didn't want her to go along.
This Daktyloi is frightening. And he's only the minion?!
I noticed that Ron's special purchase (for Hermione?) is small enough to fit in a pocket. Could it be a ring?
Author's Response: lol...you\'re making my night man....giving me your impression chapter by chapter. Thanks a LOT for reading :)
You need to go back to math class ; ) Harry has known Hagrid for seven years, not eight. He met him on his eleventh birthday and it is now three days before his eighteenth birthday. 18 - 11 = 7
I am curious if this Professor Potter situation would fall under the heading of Teacher/Student relationship. You know, for the purpose of putting warnings on your stories. You started this story before MNFF instituted that requirement for any story containing one. Either this situation doesn't count, or they don't make you go back and add warnings when they change their requirements after the fact. I was just curious whether this situation would count.
Ah, so Grindelwald was something more than your average everyday dark wizard. I get the feeling that he was so much more than even Dumbledore knew. Interesting.
I knew it was a ring.
Also, this having to log back in after every chapter to get my review to post is getting a bit old. It's not your fault, I'm just venting.
"...take five points for your excellent taste in each other." That's great. Sounds like something Harry might do.