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In the Eyes of Others by Vindictus Viridian

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Severus has never seen the appeal of repetition, particularly of things that ended badly the first time. In his life, he has kept one pet, owned one broom, and had one close friend.

Winner of Mod Quicksilver Quill for Best Novel! Thanks, all!

Rating and warnings do not apply to all chapters; I just didn't want anyone hooked and then shocked.
"What is it?" His mother held out her hand, and he put the letter in it wordlessly. "Are you eleven already?"

His father lowered the newspaper to look at the calendar. "Yesterday. ‘Appy birthday." And that was the end of that.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 03/05/06 Title: Chapter 43: Darkness

Great chapter. I had initially thought you would end the story at this point, but now I can see you writing to the HBP and beyond - and I would read it. I always thought it odd for someone as prickly and independent as Canon!Snape to bow and scrape to The Dark Git. Your Severus is the same way. From now on he will be gritting his teeth through life.

Author's Response: "The Dark Git" -- okay, that one's going in the vocabulary too. Severus will probably still be my muse/collaborator/subject for some time yet, but I'm not sure how that'll cash out. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/26/06 Title: Chapter 39: Promises and Apologies

Ah, thank goodness! It is a mark of how involving this story is that I was tremendously relieved to see Saint and Prince back together safe, and stuffed with food. I'm very curious to see how far you will take this story.

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Date: 02/10/06 Title: Chapter 32: Letters from New Moravia

I love it! Will we get to see the other side of this correspondence?

Author's Response: "the other side..." Not anytime soon, I'm afraid -- those letters just never came up. You probably could guess some of the high points, though. Thanks for the (amazingly quick) review!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/26/06 Title: Chapter 39: Promises and Apologies

Ah, thank goodness! It is a mark of how involving this story is that I was tremendously relieved to see Saint and Prince back together safe, and stuffed with food. I'm very curious to see how far you will take this story.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm partial to seeing the Prince well-treated myself, on those rare occasions it can be arranged. There's 7 more chapters left, and then I don't know quite what happens to the Severus/Vindictus collaboration. AU's maybe. We'll see.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/27/06 Title: Chapter 40: Big Event

Ah, thank you for clarifying the birthday bit. I was so confused trying to figure out why Severus was having such good weather on his birthdays. I think it's funny that Rowlings made him a Capricorn after all - with Richard Nixon's birthday, to boot. I think I see where your story is going to end now. Sigh. Great job as always.

Author's Response: Richard Nixon was born on St. Severinus' day? Now that's funny.
Thanks for reviewing; I always do appreciate these.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/23/06 Title: Chapter 37: Eavesdropping

So sad, and so well-written. Snape seems to have given up on himself. I've always felt that canon Snape's only wish is to finish his appointed task and die. I don't think he's literally suicidal, - just played out and disgusted with himself and the world. Again, so sad. I'm very interested in seeing where you'll leave off.

Author's Response: Thank you, as always, for a thoughtful review. I had that feeling from him too, actually -- not actively suicidal, but fed up. And yes, especially after the glimpses of him as he once was in HBP, particularly sad.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 03/07/06 Title: Chapter 46: Afterward

I really enjoyed this story and am sad to see the end. I can think of no other piece of fan fiction that I'd want to have in book form. On the other hand, so much fodder for sequels and speculation. I would love to see a one-shot about Severus's shopping trip to London or find out what happens when his personal effects are searched. Write more when you can, please!

Author's Response: There are one-shots galore brewing in the mind-pot, but for some reason the thought of a foray into seventh-year fics make me nervous. That's Jo's territory, and the muse tends to clam up. Expect a good flurry once the tax forms are filled out and the masters document is submitted!

Thank you so much for reviewing. Quite a few of yours have really made my day!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 03/02/06 Title: Chapter 41: An Office

Heh. I particularly enjoyed this chapter because of all the jobs I've had, the one I have now - teaching middle school - kicks my ass the most. The trick is to take charge hard at the beginning of the year, but not lose one's temper.

Author's Response: Hurrah! A review from an actual honest-to-goodness middle school teacher! I was extrapolating from a life around universities, as sometimes the real difference seems to be only whether or not there are ashtrays by the entrances. "...but not lose one's temper" is making me chuckle. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/08/06 Title: Chapter 31: Looking Ahead

I really like these characterizations of Snape and Lily but I just don't see this particular boy joining the Death Eaters. He's just too selfless and essentially decent to become the Snape Rowling has unveiled so far. Of course, there are those who think Snape has been with The Order longer than we think. I can't see your Severus becoming a Death Eater in earnest for anything, but he'd be up for putting his own life on hold for a year or two (or so he thinks) to infiltrate the Death Eaters. For some reason the following line from Severus is stuck in my head. Severus is being recruited as a spy, and doesn't really see why: "Sir... the traits you mentioned are not talents. They're characters flaws."

Author's Response: "...but I just don't see this particular boy joining the Death Eaters." One of the things I'm exploring with this fic is what it takes to make someone do something that is fundamentally against their nature. Do you see no character flaws or weaknesses that might be used to break this essentially decent (but generally misperceived) boy? If you do not, I've screwed up and need to know about it! I happen to think that Severus as he stands right now is susceptible to the right sort of force from just the right manipulative character -- and there's plenty of those about.

New chapters soon, I promise!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/12/06 Title: Chapter 33: A Luncheon

Whee! Another chapter, and what a plot-thickening chapter it is. I love the subtle way you have Lily and Severus drifting apart - not because of actual estrangement but because of time and diverging interests. Severus is down to porridge and tea while Lily has a full life with a house and a job. Lily is fighting the good fight with a passion, Severus is the eternal observer. What will finally cause him to join the Death Eaters, I wonder? The promise of research funding maybe? I can't see Severus (your's or Rowling') joining the Death Eaters with eyes open, but could he be tricked? I can't wait to find out.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! We're getting into the bit where I can't reply much without spoiling something, but I appreciate the comment on the drift apart due to life in general.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 36: Marked

Oh. God. I can't believe I didn't see that coming. Surprising and inevitable - quite the trick you have there.

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Letter

I can't stop speculating about future chapters - a sign of a truly compelling story. Why couldn't Snape find an honest job, I wonder? Could it be.... Satan? I mean, Tom Riddle? Perhaps Riddle had his well connected minions cut off employment opportunities, then sent in Narcissa with her seductive offer. My alternate thesis is that the wizarding world is so small that half of it wouldn't hire him because of his muggle heritage and the other wouldn't because of his dark reputation. I like the first idea better.

Author's Response: I like the first idea better as well, but a touch of the second makes the first a lot less work, no? (And nice Church-Lady ref, BTW.) Thanks again for reviewing!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/08/06 Title: Chapter 31: Looking Ahead

i Do you see no character flaws or weaknesses that might be used to break this essentially decent (but generally misperceived) boy? Break him? Oh, dear, that doesn't sound good at all. Of course, Severus as you write him is deeply flawed. He doesn't believe in himself, he dying to be loved whether he admits it to himself and he a metric buttload of repressed anger. What's worse, he's afraid of his own capacity for anger and won't learn to deal with it. For now, though, he seems so clear-eyed and, well, sensible. Don't get me wrong, I've read all your stories and am sure you'll make a great transition. I just want to see how you pull it off. Oh, look at that, another 10 rating.

Author's Response: Whew! I was afraid I'd done another impossible thing and Gary-Sued poor Snape. Thanks for the review, reply, and ten! (And also for that new unit of measurement -- I'm going to be chuckling over "metric buttload" all day.)

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/13/06 Title: Chapter 34: Narcissa's Offer

It's a rather understated compliment, perhaps, but I love how this story makes sense. In other hands a Severus-Narcissa pairing could be painfully awful, but here it's natural. Lily is out of reach on so many levels. Narcissa is doing exactly what bored, underestimated trophy wives do. Severus is lonely, curious... and 18. I am by no means sympathetic to adultery, even in fiction but I admire your handling of the theme. How typical of Severus to allow it to continue until Narcissa decides to pull away. I assume that Mrs. Malfoy has decided to sprog now and doesn't want to chance any black-eyed cuckoos coming home to roost. Poor Severus - it seems his fate is to be used.

Author's Response: Actually that's a very nice understated compliment. And I'm chuckling at the roosting of black-eyed cuckoos, as well. Thank you for reading and reviewing, and for understanding the 18-year-old.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/14/06 Title: Chapter 35: A Lesson In Deportment

Ah, poor Severus thinking he could go to first base with the Devil and not get screwed. Thank you for writing quickly like a mad thing! It's always nice to log in and find something new and worth reading up so often.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It prompts me to put up new chapters when I ought to be writing a thesis -- oh, well, nobody'd read the thesis anyway. "New and worth reading" is deeply appreciated.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/04/06 Title: Chapter 30: An Early Morning

I am so glad you added more chapters. I'm enjoying this story so much, not only as backstory to the Rowlings canon, but as a work in itself.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad to hear it.

Once by Vindictus Viridian

Rated: Professors •
Summary: The Order has held its first meeting in No. 12, Grimmauld Place, and two of the members are lingering to discuss their chances. A Snape/Tonks moment, prompted by a musing on what talents went naturally with Legilimency.
Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/12/06 Title: Chapter 1: and Never Again

"A year’s celibacy made for a long and bittersweet finish." -- A year?!? Do I sense a sequel? I found this story very grown-up, sexy and in character for both Severus and Tonks. You just know he's the type of man women chat up on a dare without thinking of the future -- and in your story he seems to know it too.

Author's Response: Sequel? Err... Not right this minute, but we'll see if he feels like kissing and telling. Thank you for the review (again!) I think he's probably found the sorts of places to loiter in the summers to find that sort of woman who chats up that sort of man on a dare by now.

Discovering the Bible in the House of Gaunt by Vindictus Viridian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After his task is completed, Draco finds himself left alone to consider his assumptions. He finds interesting reading material to help him along as he frets in an abandoned hovel. This was a Ravenclaw entry for the February Challenges, in the "Love Yourself" category, in which the character had to feel better about himself at the end than at the beginning, and contains some adult themes and HBP spoilers.
Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/13/06 Title: Chapter 1: Discovering the Bible in the House of Gaunt

Ah, interesting! Would this story intersect in any way with "In The Eyes of Others"? Funnily enough, my review for the most recent chapter of that story makes reference to "black eyed cuckoos". It looks like I should have read this story first.

Author's Response: "Would this story intersect in any way with "In The Eyes of Others"? " *hands in pockets, whistling*

As always, thanks for reading and reviewing (and conjecturing!)

The Curse of the Toad by Vindictus Viridian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: "If you judge people, you have no time to love them." --Mother Teresa.

To love James, Lily needs to discover his better side. To earn Lily's love, James needs to fight his own prejudices -- and learn to cope with battle-scarred tomcats, toads, and the sneakier side of his own nature. This was a Ravenclaw entry for February's Challenges -- and it won, by the way.

The SSP warning is because I simply cannot resist sticking Peter and Sirius together at all possible opportunities, even in the background of other higher pursuits. Mild profanity will also occur, a natural side effect of putting James and Severus within shouting distance of each other.

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Giving Up

I only recently discovered Harry Potter fics (yes, I live in a cave) and tend to comment on your stories because I really enjoy them and you post so often. There's only a few authors I check on regularly now and they tend to be less prolific. Most of the Snape centered fics I've read tend to start promising, then go wildly out of character - especially Snape/Hermione fiction. Some Gary Stu Snape, which is just nuts. (One fic had him not only becoming physically attractive and wearing Armani, but being the descendant of dragons. Seriously.) Anyway, long response, but I just wanted to let you know I appreciate your work. Good luck with the thesis.

Author's Response: "Less prolific" -- dark chuckle. I sometimes tell my friends I have the attention span of a puppy, and that if I seem particularly focused on something they should probably take that shoe away from me. The appreciation is appreciated deeply, and I'm relieved to hear that I have not Gary-Sued poor Severus. It seems the worst possible thing to do to the man. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Blackpenny Signed
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: Giving Up

This story is turning out to be even more fun than I had expected. I love the curse, but I love the countercurse even more. If you don't mind my asking, when did you decide that Snape was a profane little monster of a boy? I've read fics where his background is ever so exalted, and they feel ever so wrong. Even with all his gliding and elegant diction canon Snape has always struck me as a man on the make rather than a silver spoon feeder. Besides, how many upper crust types become teachers? I've yet to meet on in sixt years of teaching.

Author's Response: I don't mind the queston at all, as it happens. Some of it was the "Snape's Worst Memory" scene, where he is described as offering up a mix of swearwords and hexes. Somehow it didn't seem to me the first time (or even the tenth) that James had soaped his mouth for him. Some of it is that even as a carefully-retrained professor he does have an explosive temper, and as a teen he had far less reason to watch his language -- so he swears as fluently as any other teenage boy (and, in fairness, most of the girls if caught in the right mood) I have known. Some of it is our short glimpses of his home life in OotP and HBP, which seemed to me not to lend themselves to Silver-Spoon Snape. And a little of it is my warped sense of humour, and the idea that "knew more curses than most of the seventh-years" may have had a more innocent origin than ending in the Hogwarts rumour mill. I thoroughly enjoyed the countercurse myself -- James utterly deserved that, and the hallmarks of a Snape detention are that they are carefully tailored and thoroughly unpleasant. Thanks for reviewing!