I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.
In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....
First I have to say, BRAVA, LILY!
Even though I love Harry. (Yes, I really do love Harry. It may not be fashionable, but I do,) and not because I am just sick of friends having husbands I can't stand and can't see why they can stand and I'm not sure I can stand James, because I am intimidated by Lily, and she is not my friend. No, Brava because I always, alwasy bleed for your Snape and his utter loneliness, and Lily would not leave him behind.
I know this is AU for your version of the Potterverse, but I swear, if you write another chapter and send her back to James I will have to do something very dark and Angsty indeed!
Oh, nit-pick - are you sure you wanted both the second to last AND the third to last paragraphs? Looks like you were trying to decide between them, and accidentally put both in. Perhpas I am just missing a subtlety.
I LOVE this story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted both paragraphs, but also wanted a sentence between them, which now is where it should be. I don\'t know where it wandered off to, or why. Bad, naughty sentence! And no, she\'s not going back. This is AU for everyone\'s Potterverse! Poor James. He thought he\'d won. In the usual universe, he did win, as always. I\'m not crazy about people who always win.
I don't think I find this confusing. That is, it seems Harry is in some trouble, Peter has spared James in return for Harry's sparing him, and Petunia Dursley has exhibited unusual courage and compassion by going next door to Mrs. Figg.
(I am another person who is convinced Harry wouldn't leave his Aunt without a portkey, although maybe we are all giving too much credit to a seventeen year old with a lot on his mind.)
Mrs. Figg does not live next door, though - she lives quite near, but not next door, and not on Privet Drive.
Author's Response: I\'m glad it doesn\'t confuse you, thanks for the review. I\'ll have to change that fact about Mrs. Figg.
I like that Petunia and Harry used the same floorboard to hide things under. I like that Pettigrew took the baby to Petunia, and I am dieing to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ok, I admit, I thought it was Harry. But when I found out it was Ron, it still fit...
Author's Response: I was trying to trick you . . . but I'm glad I didn't go too far and you could still see it as Ron! Thanks for the review.
VERY clever piece of magic, and qually clever bit of plot, having Dumbledore keep the time turner, and pass it to Harry through the desk drawer. It hearkens back to the philosopher's stone in the Mirror of Erised, but does not repeat it.
I am assuming that Harry saw himself on the battlefield, bu t I'm not sure...
Author's Response: Hi Theresa! Thank yo SO MUCH for reading this story, this is the one I was talking to you about the other day. I\'m thrilled you enjoyed it, I\'ve worked really hard on it. And here I was worried someone would call me on the Time Turner - glad you liked it! I hadn\'t made the connection to the Philosopher\'s Stone, how about that. There are several other things that look back to the previous books, however. As for your last bit. . . .well, you wouldn\'t want me to spoil it, would you? ;) Especially since Chapter Five was accepted yesterday and there is only one more chapter to go. Feel free to PM me though if you really want to know. ;) Thank you so much for the wonderful review, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!! ~Gina :)
Thank you so much for the mention! This ls fascinating. One would htink this was over, but obviously, it isn't....
And I was Right! SQUEEE!
I find what happened to the pheonix intriguing.
On the one hand, he seems to have died, bout, on the hother hand, he has sent his faeather back, as ihe did in OOTP when Dumbledore sent him to keep watch... And I find it very fitting that as Harry has grown past just being James's son, he grows into such an amazing patronus...
Waiting on tenterhooks for the next chapter!!!!
Author's Response: Hi again! Oh, I\'m so happy you continued reading! Thank you so much for the great review! I\'m glad you liked the bits with Fawkes and th phoenix patronus. I really tried to think this all through and am happy you enjoyed that bit. There is actually not too much to go, just one final chapter to wrap things up, and it is with my beta now. I\'m rather proud of it, and this story. Thank you so much for reading it, and leaving a review! ~Gina :)
Oh, I LIKE this!
Author's Response: Good! Thanks for reviewing. This was prompted by a Mod Truth-or-Dare session one fine day, and my drabble proceeded to grow to greater size than expected.
The most amazing thing here, and you have built to is so carefully that one does not even notice the building, is that Snape does not even really need to Forgive Ginny, and yet forgiveness for merely knowing this is something he probably couldn't summon up for any but one or two people, if that.
Gasping breathless here.
Author's Response: Thank you! I wonder if the building would seem as gradual if the chapters were coming up faster, but so it goes. And you\'re right; that\'s a very big deal, that he can stand to have her know.
Ah, Severus...you get to learn to pick, and for that you need things to pick between. And the end result is that hopefully you end up being more of a friend, and less of a goldfish...at least, that is my understanding.
Although I perfectly well do understand the feeling that if God were being merciful, he wouldn't have made me, me.
*sighs* Always a pleasure. I had reason to be up tonight and reread the whole thing...
Confusion - is she a Wizarding Lawyer, or a Muggle Lawyer, because she says she had to read Wizarding law as well as Muggle - shouldn't it be the other way around. Well, I probably missed something.
How very clever Of course the basic connection between them goes back to that diary. And really, more than she had to do to tell him. It's working up nicely....
Oh - I liked it.
Author's Response: Severus has missed something, since his usual nosiness is a bit quashed at present, but Ginny did Muggle law and then the short course in precedents the Ministry offers, since the wizarding world is simply too small to have a law school all its own. They\'ve been rather winging it. Glad you liked it!
The "She looked surprised" paragraph does not sound as much like you as you usually do.
Author's Response: I couldn\'t remember which paragraph that was, so went and looked. To my great disappointment it wasn\'t the paragraph done by committee. Glad to know you\'re still here!
Oh, how utterly charming! I think you have caught several things very well here - Dobby's character, for one, and Snape's grasp of it, for another, but also that these character's lives do not entirely revolve around the fraught moments - that those lives involve underwear, and pajamas and tedious notes to the staff - all the sorts of minute details that we all deal with.
I especially like three things. One is the note from Madam Pomfrey ( especially "embedding strawberry pilonidal pox" ); another is the touching moment when Snape recalls giving presents as a child, and the third is Minerva's question. Why does she ask? Is there something interesting about those Snapes? Are they Wizarding Snapes? Will we hear more of them, someday?
So, he has some students who give him gifts as well. Now that would be interesting to explore...what on earth would a child decided to give Professor Snape?
I'm sorry, I really could go on and on, I enjoy so many things about this. There are a few nits I might pick, but they really are just nits and it is Christmas, so no, I am afraid I can't.
Author's Response: Well, thank you! I love writing about Professor Snape. Actually, I just enjoy thinking about Snape. He\'s so interesting. He\'s so stickery on the outside, I have always had this feeling that somewhere inside, there must be a core, no matter how little or how well-protected, that understands hurt feelings. And the pajamas... Oh, when I saw the photo of the official Yorkshire tartan, I knew--I just knew someone who had to wear it! And you can pick nits. Owing to the MNFF\'s new thingie, I\'m cautious about how much I correct, or I end up with huge gaps between paragraphs, but I never seem to catch all my oddities.
I saw you in that fic! I saw you!
Is James suspecting Lupin? Was the ornament destroyed with the house, or might it yet turn up somewhere?
And to think that after all these years I have only FIVE plates of My china...
Well, I wonder a bit where some of it is coming from, but I'll bet gmariam doesn't, and it is her gift fic, so that's nothing to complain about, and - I like it. I like Remus being a snow globe. Not everyone would enjoy that.
(Pictures Percy as a snow globe. Hopes and Prays someone tries it on him some day. Hopes it is one of those snow globes with little OBJECTS mixed in with the snow...)
Author's Response: (Pictures Percy as a snow globe, too, just for the fun of it, with spiky little silver things stuck in his hair, making his eyes water, poking up his nose...heh-heh-heh...) Why is it that everything I write seems to have a back-story? Because it does, you know. (sigh...)
I'[ve been reading along avidly, and your plot twists are phenomenal. I have to say, though, that your prose is a little...and please understand that I very much like involved prose, complicated sentences, even slightly archaic diction, but knowing that, I wonder if this might not have lost you a reader here or there. I found it awkward at times. I think it could be one of your strengths, but I think reading it out loud and making sure it is not too too inverted, scattered, twisted, might lead to some improvement.
In short, love the story, like what you are trying for with the diction, think the diction could still use some work.
If you want more specifics, you can pm me at the Beta Boards. I'm not being lazy, just trying not to be pedantic unless you'd like.
Author's Response: lol... Actually, I completely agree with you. I KNOW I\'ve lost many a reader to the more complex wording and insanity the style has taken; alas, sometimes one must simply bow down to the muse and do as the story demands. It is rare that I write \'quite\' that complex and twisted in wording, but for some odd reason this particular story simply demanded it. Perhaps it is due to the whole surreal nature of Sirius\' return or Hermione\'s dreams? I\'m not sure, but it simply would not let me get away with more pronouns... lol. ;-) If it is any consulation, my muse has about run its penchant out for the more difficult and hard to read format. The next story - already in the works - is not quite so \'lofty\' in writing. Trying to write such is quite exhausting! * * * Your comments and suggestions, however, are spot on and appreciated. I was already well aware of it, but I\'ve fallen to being such a slave to my Muse that I didn\'t fight it on this one. The next... again, much more readable. * * * Thanks, again!
Oh, NICE! I can see the whole scene happening! But I am glad you let us know it did not ruin him for life....
Author's Response: Hi there, Prof! Thank you so much for stopping to read this. I\'m glad you liked it and could picture it happening, I wanted it to read like a story. Who do you think the boy was?? =) Thanks for leaving such a lovely review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
I like that Muggle woman, and I wonder why Dumbledore jsut lets Remus run and hurt himself more...I can think of reasons why, but I still wonder... And I do think that running blindly like that would be the exact thing Remus would do... Verynice start. It has hooked me.
Author's Response: I\'m very happy that you liked her. Someone thought she would come in more later, but she never did. She just served to help Remus get on the correct path. :) Cyns
My favorite line is
Nothing was new, but it all seemed to portray a feeling of care and peacefulness.
I know that feeling. I could feel it when I read the description of the room.
I also think you did a very good protrayal of a nightmare, and I thought it was a neat point that the inn seemed quiet and peaceful. I also really like Tilly. She rounds Blenkinsop out...
Author's Response: I\'m so glad that you liked Tilly! She was fun to write, and I thought she really completed my view of the inn. I\'m also glad you \"got\" my description of the inn. :) Cyns
I think it is a very nice touch that time seems ot have no meaning inside the Green Dragon, and that the children of the founders find Remus. I like that your Remus always wanted to teach, and finds a way to put his own cursedness to use...I see that in his advice to Arthur Gryffindor, and that makes me look to see what deeper connection there may be between his own situation and Slytherin's...
Author's Response: The Founders kids come from my story Revelations. I had just written that story before writing this one, and the lessons seemed to go together. I\'m really glad you liked the timelessness. I think you can sometimes get great lessons from people of other times. Cyns
Oh - a wonderful touch that the Love room Chooses the people who work there! And now he is beginning, I see, to have hope.
Author's Response: Most of my stories connect in one way or other. My version of the Love room goes back to my OC fic Behind the Door. Declan made his first appearance there, though he has shown up in many stories since. I thought that was a great way to bring hope in. :)