Summary: Neville Longbottom has never known his mother. Sometimes though, he stands at the foot of her bed and talks to her, just wishing that someday, somehow, she might talk back.
This is a one-shot of a series of moments in Neville's life as he talks to his mum, about growing up, and learning to fight in a war which is much, much bigger than himself.
Ok, you made me cry! good tears, good tears...I'm a mother, and I hope my children love me that much...(OF course, in a way it is much easier to love a mother who never makes you eat your peas...)
I like the way you "age" him as it goes along.
I love the way he pulls the lion in him out "By t e scruff of the nec.k"
I'm not entirely certain that it's really entirely Neville's diction and voice int he later entires, but we never hear very much from him at once in Canon, so it is hard to tell, isn't it?
I love your concept, and I really enjoyed the story.
Author's Response: Lol, thank you very much. I hate saying that I love to make people cry - it sounds completely horrible, lol. I\'m glad it had such an effect on you, however, that was, after all, the intention! Thanks so much for your lovely review!
Summary: On the night before her wedding, Lily has second thoughts.
First I have to say, BRAVA, LILY!
Even though I love Harry. (Yes, I really do love Harry. It may not be fashionable, but I do,) and not because I am just sick of friends having husbands I can't stand and can't see why they can stand and I'm not sure I can stand James, because I am intimidated by Lily, and she is not my friend. No, Brava because I always, alwasy bleed for your Snape and his utter loneliness, and Lily would not leave him behind.
I know this is AU for your version of the Potterverse, but I swear, if you write another chapter and send her back to James I will have to do something very dark and Angsty indeed!
Oh, nit-pick - are you sure you wanted both the second to last AND the third to last paragraphs? Looks like you were trying to decide between them, and accidentally put both in. Perhpas I am just missing a subtlety.
I LOVE this story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted both paragraphs, but also wanted a sentence between them, which now is where it should be. I don\'t know where it wandered off to, or why. Bad, naughty sentence! And no, she\'s not going back. This is AU for everyone\'s Potterverse! Poor James. He thought he\'d won. In the usual universe, he did win, as always. I\'m not crazy about people who always win.
Summary: 2007 QSQ Awards Runner-up for Best Post-Hogwarts
Petunia Dursley is enjoying dinner with her family when someone starts pounding on the door. Ready to tell them off for being so rude and refusing to leave when they didn't answer at first, Petunia opens the door to have a baby shoved into her arms and told she is his only family. Years after the great Harry Potter defeated Voldemort, Death Eaters have risen to power and taken over Hogsmeade, Hogwarts, and even the Ministry of Magic. Their marriages announced invalid, their children in danger and their lives hanging by a thread, the heroes of the war with Voldemort must once again take a stand against evil.
H/G and R/Hr
*Quote from The Epilogue*
Suddenly Harry was kissing her as if he couldn’t resist the temptation. There was a kind of frenzy to the kiss at first, a kind of desperate need, but it melted into something soft and sweet and gentle, a promise of a future when kisses would never be limited. When they broke apart he rested his forehead on hers, sprinkling a few affectionate butterfly kisses across her face. “I love you,” he murmured.
I don't think I find this confusing. That is, it seems Harry is in some trouble, Peter has spared James in return for Harry's sparing him, and Petunia Dursley has exhibited unusual courage and compassion by going next door to Mrs. Figg.
(I am another person who is convinced Harry wouldn't leave his Aunt without a portkey, although maybe we are all giving too much credit to a seventeen year old with a lot on his mind.)
Mrs. Figg does not live next door, though - she lives quite near, but not next door, and not on Privet Drive.
Author's Response: I\'m glad it doesn\'t confuse you, thanks for the review. I\'ll have to change that fact about Mrs. Figg.
I like that Petunia and Harry used the same floorboard to hide things under. I like that Pettigrew took the baby to Petunia, and I am dieing to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ok, I admit, I thought it was Harry. But when I found out it was Ron, it still fit...
Author's Response: I was trying to trick you . . . but I'm glad I didn't go too far and you could still see it as Ron! Thanks for the review.
Summary: Harry Potter has fulfilled his destiny, and survived his final confrontation with Voldemort; the Dark Lord has been vanquished, but at a terrible price. Dozens are dead, including some of those closest to Harry, and he blames only himself for failing them. Desperate, he returns to Hogwarts hoping to change what has happened and save those he loves. In doing so he unknowingly saves himself, but the consequences require great sacrifice.
This short story is now complete. It begins on the battlefield just after Harry’s duel with Voldemort, and follows Harry as he tries desperately to right the mistakes of the past, only to rewrite his own future.
VERY clever piece of magic, and qually clever bit of plot, having Dumbledore keep the time turner, and pass it to Harry through the desk drawer. It hearkens back to the philosopher's stone in the Mirror of Erised, but does not repeat it.
I am assuming that Harry saw himself on the battlefield, bu t I'm not sure...
Author's Response: Hi Theresa! Thank yo SO MUCH for reading this story, this is the one I was talking to you about the other day. I\'m thrilled you enjoyed it, I\'ve worked really hard on it. And here I was worried someone would call me on the Time Turner - glad you liked it! I hadn\'t made the connection to the Philosopher\'s Stone, how about that. There are several other things that look back to the previous books, however. As for your last bit. . . .well, you wouldn\'t want me to spoil it, would you? ;) Especially since Chapter Five was accepted yesterday and there is only one more chapter to go. Feel free to PM me though if you really want to know. ;) Thank you so much for the wonderful review, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!! ~Gina :)
Thank you so much for the mention! This ls fascinating. One would htink this was over, but obviously, it isn't....
And I was Right! SQUEEE!
I find what happened to the pheonix intriguing.
On the one hand, he seems to have died, bout, on the hother hand, he has sent his faeather back, as ihe did in OOTP when Dumbledore sent him to keep watch... And I find it very fitting that as Harry has grown past just being James's son, he grows into such an amazing patronus...
Waiting on tenterhooks for the next chapter!!!!
Author's Response: Hi again! Oh, I\'m so happy you continued reading! Thank you so much for the great review! I\'m glad you liked the bits with Fawkes and th phoenix patronus. I really tried to think this all through and am happy you enjoyed that bit. There is actually not too much to go, just one final chapter to wrap things up, and it is with my beta now. I\'m rather proud of it, and this story. Thank you so much for reading it, and leaving a review! ~Gina :)
Summary: Before Regulus chooses a pair of socks, he asks Kreacher's opinion. Before tackling something larger, he needs to ask a more experienced sneak's advice.
Oh, I LIKE this!
Author's Response: Good! Thanks for reviewing. This was prompted by a Mod Truth-or-Dare session one fine day, and my drabble proceeded to grow to greater size than expected.
Summary: At some point there had to have been a choice.
The logical place to begin a story is at the point of the first decision. But what if there were no decisions? What if, at every point, there was only one possible act? What if the story simply cannot be told?
Completed (though not posted) entirely pre-DH.
The most amazing thing here, and you have built to is so carefully that one does not even notice the building, is that Snape does not even really need to Forgive Ginny, and yet forgiveness for merely knowing this is something he probably couldn't summon up for any but one or two people, if that.
Gasping breathless here.
Author's Response: Thank you! I wonder if the building would seem as gradual if the chapters were coming up faster, but so it goes. And you\'re right; that\'s a very big deal, that he can stand to have her know.
Ah, Severus...you get to learn to pick, and for that you need things to pick between. And the end result is that hopefully you end up being more of a friend, and less of a goldfish...at least, that is my understanding.
Although I perfectly well do understand the feeling that if God were being merciful, he wouldn't have made me, me.
*sighs* Always a pleasure. I had reason to be up tonight and reread the whole thing...
Confusion - is she a Wizarding Lawyer, or a Muggle Lawyer, because she says she had to read Wizarding law as well as Muggle - shouldn't it be the other way around. Well, I probably missed something.
How very clever Of course the basic connection between them goes back to that diary. And really, more than she had to do to tell him. It's working up nicely....
Oh - I liked it.
Author's Response: Severus has missed something, since his usual nosiness is a bit quashed at present, but Ginny did Muggle law and then the short course in precedents the Ministry offers, since the wizarding world is simply too small to have a law school all its own. They\'ve been rather winging it. Glad you liked it!
The "She looked surprised" paragraph does not sound as much like you as you usually do.
Author's Response: I couldn\'t remember which paragraph that was, so went and looked. To my great disappointment it wasn\'t the paragraph done by committee. Glad to know you\'re still here!
Summary: Professor Snape receives an unexpected Christmas gift.
Oh, how utterly charming! I think you have caught several things very well here - Dobby's character, for one, and Snape's grasp of it, for another, but also that these character's lives do not entirely revolve around the fraught moments - that those lives involve underwear, and pajamas and tedious notes to the staff - all the sorts of minute details that we all deal with.
I especially like three things. One is the note from Madam Pomfrey ( especially "embedding strawberry pilonidal pox" ); another is the touching moment when Snape recalls giving presents as a child, and the third is Minerva's question. Why does she ask? Is there something interesting about those Snapes? Are they Wizarding Snapes? Will we hear more of them, someday?
So, he has some students who give him gifts as well. Now that would be interesting to explore...what on earth would a child decided to give Professor Snape?
I'm sorry, I really could go on and on, I enjoy so many things about this. There are a few nits I might pick, but they really are just nits and it is Christmas, so no, I am afraid I can't.
Author's Response: Well, thank you! I love writing about Professor Snape. Actually, I just enjoy thinking about Snape. He\'s so interesting. He\'s so stickery on the outside, I have always had this feeling that somewhere inside, there must be a core, no matter how little or how well-protected, that understands hurt feelings. And the pajamas... Oh, when I saw the photo of the official Yorkshire tartan, I knew--I just knew someone who had to wear it! And you can pick nits. Owing to the MNFF\'s new thingie, I\'m cautious about how much I correct, or I end up with huge gaps between paragraphs, but I never seem to catch all my oddities.
Summary: Remus goes with Sirius to James and Lily's Christmas party, despite his misgivings and his head-cold.
I saw you in that fic! I saw you!
Is James suspecting Lupin? Was the ornament destroyed with the house, or might it yet turn up somewhere?
And to think that after all these years I have only FIVE plates of My china...
Well, I wonder a bit where some of it is coming from, but I'll bet gmariam doesn't, and it is her gift fic, so that's nothing to complain about, and - I like it. I like Remus being a snow globe. Not everyone would enjoy that.
(Pictures Percy as a snow globe. Hopes and Prays someone tries it on him some day. Hopes it is one of those snow globes with little OBJECTS mixed in with the snow...)
Author's Response: (Pictures Percy as a snow globe, too, just for the fun of it, with spiky little silver things stuck in his hair, making his eyes water, poking up his nose...heh-heh-heh...) Why is it that everything I write seems to have a back-story? Because it does, you know. (sigh...)
Summary: It had been the best day of his life! What five year old boy could ask for anything more than a trip to a dragon reserve for his birthday? Charlie Weasley was certain that he really did have the best dad in the whole world!
Oh - this is so cool! You NEVER see Bill and Charlie together, and yet of course they were close in age and might have been close friends as well.
My very best favoritest part, however, is where Charlie is playing with the tassels on his father's cap. That is just perfect!
I would never try to SPEW a SPEWER, so that's all I'll write...
Author's Response: *giggles* you are too much! Thank you so much love!
Summary: SBHG: Her best friends’ fates – and that of her world – lay on her shoulders. At 20, Hermione Granger can’t do it alone. But Fate steps in, and the Impossible gives her hope… and love. 'Sirius'... :Abstract Prologue:
I'[ve been reading along avidly, and your plot twists are phenomenal. I have to say, though, that your prose is a little...and please understand that I very much like involved prose, complicated sentences, even slightly archaic diction, but knowing that, I wonder if this might not have lost you a reader here or there. I found it awkward at times. I think it could be one of your strengths, but I think reading it out loud and making sure it is not too too inverted, scattered, twisted, might lead to some improvement.
In short, love the story, like what you are trying for with the diction, think the diction could still use some work.
If you want more specifics, you can pm me at the Beta Boards. I'm not being lazy, just trying not to be pedantic unless you'd like.
Author's Response: lol... Actually, I completely agree with you. I KNOW I\'ve lost many a reader to the more complex wording and insanity the style has taken; alas, sometimes one must simply bow down to the muse and do as the story demands. It is rare that I write \'quite\' that complex and twisted in wording, but for some odd reason this particular story simply demanded it. Perhaps it is due to the whole surreal nature of Sirius\' return or Hermione\'s dreams? I\'m not sure, but it simply would not let me get away with more pronouns... lol. ;-) If it is any consulation, my muse has about run its penchant out for the more difficult and hard to read format. The next story - already in the works - is not quite so \'lofty\' in writing. Trying to write such is quite exhausting! * * * Your comments and suggestions, however, are spot on and appreciated. I was already well aware of it, but I\'ve fallen to being such a slave to my Muse that I didn\'t fight it on this one. The next... again, much more readable. * * * Thanks, again!
Summary: A young man accepts some unfortunate advice from Gilderoy Lockhart on Valentine’s Day.
Oh, NICE! I can see the whole scene happening! But I am glad you let us know it did not ruin him for life....
Author's Response: Hi there, Prof! Thank you so much for stopping to read this. I\'m glad you liked it and could picture it happening, I wanted it to read like a story. Who do you think the boy was?? =) Thanks for leaving such a lovely review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
Summary: Remus has been having a hard couple days. What he doesn't realize, is that his life is about to take an even bigger turn to the depressing. Halloween was two days ago, followed the next night by a full moon. Remus has a bad feeling when he recieves a letter from the head of the Order of the Phoenix telling him to not check any news until after he has had a chance to stop by.
This was for the Green Dragon New Years Challenge By Cheshlin of Slytherin House
I like that Muggle woman, and I wonder why Dumbledore jsut lets Remus run and hurt himself more...I can think of reasons why, but I still wonder... And I do think that running blindly like that would be the exact thing Remus would do... Verynice start. It has hooked me.
Author's Response: I\'m very happy that you liked her. Someone thought she would come in more later, but she never did. She just served to help Remus get on the correct path. :) Cyns
My favorite line is
Nothing was new, but it all seemed to portray a feeling of care and peacefulness.
I know that feeling. I could feel it when I read the description of the room.
I also think you did a very good protrayal of a nightmare, and I thought it was a neat point that the inn seemed quiet and peaceful. I also really like Tilly. She rounds Blenkinsop out...
Author's Response: I\'m so glad that you liked Tilly! She was fun to write, and I thought she really completed my view of the inn. I\'m also glad you \"got\" my description of the inn. :) Cyns