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01/23/06




I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.

In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....


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I Believed in Lily Evans by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 5 Reviews
Summary: Christmas 1976 and Severus Snape sits in his room with only his thoughts to keep him company.

This song/poem is a parody of probably the best (and bitterest) Christmas song in the entire universe. The original, called I Believe in Father Christmas' was by Greg Lake of Emerson, Lake and Palmer. I strongly recommend that you listen to the original.

I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff, and this is my entry for the Extra Credit in the Great Hall Christmas Challenge.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling or Greg Lake. (I never thought I'd ever type that sentence.) Please don't confuse us.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nice job. I can really see a fifteen year old Snape feeling exactly like this. I'd thought he'd taken his mark later, but that's probably based on Chapter 15 of In the Eyes of Others, as I do not believe canon actually gives a particular date.

I find "I gave you my soul; you gave me a ... scarf," particularly heartbreaking. And while she probably did see his interest, I doubt she understood, as a person loved by many people, just what her friendship and love meant to him, a person so isolated and lonely.

You know, as you've written it, you really show what a prick Lily was.

Not that Severus wasn't reading things into the friendship that might or might not have been there. (JKR did apparently say once that if things had been different Lily might have loved him romantically) or that what he said was all right, but really, she GAVE UP on him.

Real Gryffindors do not give up. They throw effort after effort and good money after bad when they've got a "Project" going. "The best way out is always through" is pure Gryff. I think Lily had a very SlytherClaw moment here, and if you look at it a certain way, she ended up paying for it with her life. I mean, what if she had not given up, and Severus had relented just a bit, and somehow he had never ended up being a Death Eater?

Severus may be a _____ (Fill in with word of one's choice) but it is an undeniable fact that the unkindness of other people helped push him in that direction.

Hm...Maybe I need to write another chapter of that Snape!Fluff.

Oh, yeah, great job! Normally I don't read anything like this, but since it was yours I gave it a shot and I am glad I did.

Author's Response: Oh, Now, I disagree. I think Lily had already thrown too much effort at Snape. There are some points where I think you have to give up and I really don't think Snape was worth all the effort - certainly not the way he defended Mulciber and the others. And although he may not have become a DE, how would she have gained? If she'd showed any interest in another man (like James) then Snape would just emotionally blackmail her into chucking anyone decent. Sorry, I just don;t think that either 'love conquers all' or that it was her responsibility to save him. (This is turning into a rant - please excuse me - hee hee) The other thing is that she did pay with her life, but that was partly his fault. He did relay the Prophecu to Voldemort after all, and in my mind I have no doubt he'd have done bog all if Voldy had decided Neville was the threat. (ends rant)

Now, I didn't mean that he got his Dark Mark that night, simply that by the time of the Christmas of year six he'd definitely thrown in his lot with the DE's.

My favourite line is the scarf line - ha ha - scarves are so innocuously awful as a present - if you're a bloke. I think Lily was partially aware of his feelings, but didn't want to encourage them. JKR said that 'she might have grown to think of him romantically, if he hadn't loved the Dark Arts so much' - that's his tragedy. But on the whole, James was hotter (yes, I am that shallow)

Get back to the Snape!fluff - I liked it a lot. ~Carole~



A Christmas Flower by Apollonious

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 11 Reviews
Summary: It is Christmas Eve, 1998.

Fleur sits alone, reading, in her bedroom at Shell Cottage. All around her, the freezing coastal winds carry snow. Suffering from the sorrow of Fred Weasley's death, and convinced that she is an outsider, Fleur is determined not to join the other Weasleys at the Burrow.

That is, until she is rudely awakened by a visiting spirit.

After all, when one cannot see the joy of Christmas, what one needs most is a little vigilance.

This is Apollonious of Hufflepuff House, with my entry for Prompt 4 of the Christmas' Past, Present, and Future Challenge. Enjoy!
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/09/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: Wilt?

I particularly like this chapter, and your characterizations of future! Fleur and Moody. It is very in character for Bill to go find his drunken wife and bring her home...



Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Beneath the Snow

Well, I just love Moody, and I seldom see him anywhere, so you've got me at hello, pretty much. Although this is the rough side of Moody, and I am interested to see if you show any other side of him...

As for Fleur - she's not really well established in the books, is she? Can't wait to see how you see her...



Another Chance by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 15 Reviews
Summary: Lily Evans is working at St. Mungo’s on Christmas Day when an unexpected patient arrives and changes her holiday plans.


This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Christmas Challenge, Prompt One.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Another Chance

well, of course!

I have to hand it to you, Gina, I am NOT a James/Lily shipper, and this is the FIRST fic I have ever read that gave me any idea at all why Lily should bother with James.

And of course I loved your Moody moments there...

Excellent, really. Thank you! I fell like I've had an early Christmas present...

Author's Response: Oh Thea, thank you so much! That is high praise indeed coming from a skeptic like you. ;) I'm glad you liked the Moody moments. I had a bit of an issue when I originally took out that chunk of his nose, only to find that it didn't happen for another few years, according to canon. So I gave him his hand injury instead, poor guy. Thank you so much for reading this, I really appreciate it!! Happy Christmas! ~Gina :)



Not Broken by lucca4

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 5 Reviews
Summary:

It’s Christmas 1998, but Susan Bones doesn’t feel like celebrating. The loss of both her best friend and her favorite aunt have created wounds that might never heal. But with the help from a most unlikely person, she may be able mend what has broken, and gain a little Christmas spirit as well.

This story is for Gen/Sagen for the Gryffindor Christmas Craziness Secret Swap! Have a wonderful Christmas, Gen!
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Not Broken

Oh please, please tell me you are either going to make this longer, or else do a chaptered fic on this pair...

Author's Response: A chaptered fic…hm, that could be a possibility… It's funny because before writing this I wasn't sure how much I liked this pairing, but I'm starting to like Susan and Theo, and I do agree they need more time together. Thank you so much for your review, it made my day! xx Ariana



Master Barty Regrets by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: At the Yule ball in 1994, Harry watches Mad-Eye Moody clump across the floor with a long-suffering Professor Sinistra. What no one knows, however, is that the dancer is Barty Crouch.

This poem was for a challenge in Poetry Anyone. We had to use music from the films as inspiration for a poem. I chose two pieces from Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire - the waltz and 'Do the Hippogryff' by The Weird Sisters.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, Jarvis Cocker or any type of musician.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/22/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nicely done. the first part starts out, at least, sounding like Moody, and the very last part is all Barty, and the transition is very subtle.

If you don't know it's Barty narrating, even "I have my orders, Cannot be entranced" could just be Moody in his vigilance refusing to be sidetracked by a pretty face. But if you do know it's a subtle turning point.

Of course the real pity of the whole thing is that it wasn't Real!Moody, and Elizabeth wasn't there to dance with him...

*ducks and runs*

*ducks back in to say*

The transition of style and meaning makes excellent use of the music, movie, and actual story which the ball goers are unaware of at the time. Beautiful job. And that is my professional opinion.

Author's Response: Thank you, Thea. I agree, that the tragedy is that it wasn't Moody and Elizabeth, but could she have got into Hogwarts? Actually, I have a little backburner story surrounding Barty and his lovely dance partner (the delightfully named Aurora Sinistra). One day I shall invent a timeturner and find time to write it. Thanks again ~Carole~



Trick... or Treat? by kehribar

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: On Halloween evening, ten-year-old Teddy Lupin discovers that Muggles know more about the Wizarding folk than he would have suspected. The answers to his questions, however, will come from a very unlikely source.





Won second place in Halloween Drabble Challenge at the beta forums; expanded into a one-shot.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh! I love it! I get the sense there is some special reason she's come this Halloween, and that it may be the only time she can, and that makes me want to read more...

Must have been a full moon...

Very nice touch, btw, his not having thought Muggles would know about Halloween. Tell me, are they at Grimmauld Place?

Author's Response: Grimmauld Place- now why have I not thought about that before? Harry would've easily given it to Andromeda and Teddy.. But I think they live downtown, for some reason.. Thanks very much for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed the story :)



The Torture of Hermione Granger by littlebird

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 17 Reviews
Summary: One above, two below. We know the boy's story, what about the girl's? One-Shot about Hermione's torture by Bellatrix.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Torture of Hermione Granger

Very compelling. I've read the other reviews, and I agree with you - in this case, the torture was merely to serve the purpose of getting information - Bella may or may not have enjoyed it as well, but the reason for it was to extract information.

I am also mystified about the part where you have Harry falling on top of her, dead. Is she hallucinating? Have you gone AU? It's not really necessary to do that for impact here, and the rest of the story being canon, I wouldn't go off in that direction without a very specific reason, so I wonder what that was.

Author's Response: Thank you for the questions. Honestly, I'm kind of glad you were "mystified" by the ending. First off, not to put too fine a point on it, but Harry did not fall on top of Hermione. Second, no, I did not go AU. Since the story is from Hermione’s POV, I wanted to convey her deteriorating mental state by leaving the reader with a bit of ambiguity. That said, there is a cue that lets the reader know that Hermione is probably hallucinating. It’s very subtle (perhaps a bit too subtle), but it is there. I do ask the reader to consider a broader definition of the Cruciatus Curse, and I only do so because, at some point, the physical has to impact the psychological for anyone to be defined as "Cruciated". We are never told in the canon why or when the mind begins to unhinge, so I filled in the blank.



The Substitute by hestiajones

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: It was the last time for them, though he was yet to know.

Disclaimer:I am not J.K.Rowling; the characters and their world belong to her, though.

AU because these characters never kissed in canon. If you’ve seen the Deathly Hallows 1 movie, you might be able to understand what’s going on. ;)



This story won the QSQ for Best Non-Canon Romance in the One-shot categoery.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 12/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

WOW!

Yes, I liked it! It is EXCELLENT! And thank you, thank you, thank you! I've never been in a story swap, and no one's ever written me a gift story before!

Runs around room in circles feeling all chuffed!

Author's Response: :D :D :D I really had to write the "succumbtion".

~Natalie



The Lion In Winter by SadiraSnape

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 6 Reviews
Summary:

This is The Silver Doe from Deathly Hallows, but I felt it should be told from Snape's point of view... let me take you to the wintry Forest of Dean, when a mysterious silver doe leads Harry to the Sword of Gryffindor, and one leads Ron to Harry...

Disclaimer: I don't own any of these characters, J. K. Rowling does, and she gets all the money. I just have fun with it.


Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/02/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nice portrayal from another point of view.

I do have to say that I don't think Snape has this much self-awareness. I also think he has a lot more anger, and that he may never have come to accept the degree to which he is actually a component in his own miserable life. I think your point that he may be a closet romantic is well taken, but I believe there would probably, in reality, be more complexity.

However, as far as it goes you did a very nice job. I particularly like the details about the ice. And I do love the line where Albus tells Snape that when Snape says always, he means it.

I do believe Snape's heart is a complicated place, and that there is certainly both love and regret in there. I just don't think he's got it as neatly sorted out as this.



Constant Vigilance by floatingcloudbadger

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: The people in the Burrow learn of Mad-Eye's death, and Tonks reminisces over their time together.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: Constant Vigilance

Nice little hint there of why she goes after Lupin...

I like the part you showed. I think this could have been a chaptered fic and showed a little more - it seems a bit short. I am a great Moody lover myself...



The Run of the Mill by kehribar

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 4 Reviews
Summary: During their third year at Hogwarts, Harry and his friends came to know Remus Lupin as a sickly, poor man; a wonderful Defense Against the Dark Arts professor with a sense of humour; a former friend of James Potter; a werewolf, and a redeemed friend of the infamous Sirius Black.



He was a man that everyone had been sad to see leave.



What was this man up to before coming to teach at Hogwarts? How had he become such a good teacher? Why was he looking ill at health all the time? Had he been all alone in life since that fateful night on 1981?



This is his story, beginning six months prior to his coming to Hogwarts, and following him as he strains to make ends meet.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What a cliffie!!!

There are so many things to like about this chapter - the little details of his existence really bring it to life - "Muggle Composer Peter T...," the titles of the magazines he's got lying around, the meager breakfast - it all adds up to a life I can really picture.

As something of a curiosity, btw, the building Daniel Radcliffe bought in NYC is nineteenth century with a room in the basement that can be rented out. All those buildings are pretty much the same, and those basement apartments are down f few steps from street level, sometimes with the door under the stairs up from street level to the first floor. I am now picturing this going on in one of those apartments, and I have to laugh because I think the first thing your OC would have said about the fireplace in NYC would have been, "Wow, working fireplace - you're lucky!" whereas in Britain I am quite sure there are many apartments still without central heat because of the age of the housing stock. So I got a good little laugh at myself in there...

The way he has chosen to work in the Muggle world because it hurts less when he's rejected by Muggles really speaks to me. I see him doing the same thing. It makes good sense, and it is to irretrievably sad that his life is this way.

Just a lovely story. I await your updates breathlessly. Too bad you don't know anyone who could draw you some illustrations for it... :-)



Mirrors by hestiajones

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 10 Reviews
Summary: The war changed a lot of people, and he was one of them. What he didn't know was that she was going to bring him back on Christmas Eve.

Thanks to Carole for reading this over, and to Cinderella Angelina for her prompt for the Badgery Secret Santa swap. Thanks also to Lea for the perfume.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Love it.

Author's Response: Yay!

~Natalie



Learning to Fly by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 7 Reviews
Summary: Severus Snape fell off his broom the first time he tried to fly. He had no natural talent, not like the loathsome Potter, and couldn't really see the point at all in Quidditch.

But then he saw Lily watching a certain Chaser play and suddenly flying becomes very important.

I am not JK Rowling and I know nothing about flying on a broomstick. This is all made up.

Thank you Natalie (thelastolympian) for beta'ing this story in its original form a whole year ago.


Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: Learning to Fly

Oh, SOOO good!

Teary part - "When the Owls are over..."

"He laughed, not the hollow, sardonic cough he was given to uttering, but a joyful, euphoric shout of a laugh."

See, he IS capable of true joy - just not often...

And thank you for not making Lily likeable. She was. And in the sense that she was, she is here. She is exactly the sort of girl I'd probably hate, which is what I've always thought...

Shallow byotch, watching the silly Quidditch playing James as if that made him better than someone else...

Author's Response: We're never going to agree on Lily, are we? Despite you having the same shirt as her, you still don't like her *sigh*. Hmm, I thought she was rather nice, certainly she was the one that helped him off the grass when he fell. I can't blame her for finding the star Chaser attractive when she was 16 - hormones are a dangerous thing. Anyway, thank you for reviewing and I am pleased you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~



What They Deserve by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 11 Reviews
Summary:

For someone who 'missed the screaming', Argus Filch was in his element the day the Carrows set foot into Hogwarts. Who knew that his kindred spirit had been walking the halls of the school for years already?

And it wasn't even Mrs Norris.


Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/18/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, it is perfectly in character, as far as we know them. So the indifference to pain and suffering is appropriate.

Really, when you think about it, that school employed some pretty horrible people over the years...

Author's Response:

Indeed they did. I just figured that there had to be some kindred spirit within those walls for Filch who wasn't Umbridge. Now THAT ship would make me vomit. :-(

I'm glad you liked it, Thea (at least I'm assuming so). Thanks for stopping by!

~Jess



Close Your Eyes by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 15 Reviews
Summary: Hermione and Lavender weren't particular friends. It was true they shared a dormitory, but for much of their school time they lived parallel and separate lives. Then Lavender helped Hermione get ready for the Yule Ball and that set off a chain of events that left both girls confused.

This story was inspired by a suggestion from Gina (Gmariam) and a drabble written for Natalie (hestiajones). This story is in no way 'caron -compliant' with Lavender, blue - a Gryffindor true.

Thank you Natalie for beta'ing this story.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, her lawyers agree, so don't confuse us. Lawyers for Miss Brown and Miss Granger were unavailable for comment.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 01/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You know, I despise Lavender, and this seems perfectly in character with everything I don't like about her.

How utterly satisfying!

And I can see this all happening just this way - you've got Hermione totally in character, as well. But it does raise the question - why is Hermione always attracted to people who are not quite her level? Not that Ron isn't great, and better in the books than the movies, but Hermione is AWESOME. Like, they should have to invent an entirely new type of human male just for her. And Lavender... meh.

Ah, well, we've all been young and confused...or just confused... GREAT job, Carole! Very well developed - all Lavender's emotions and actions, Hermione's emotional reaction to the MoM, the whole thing.

Author's Response: Now you see, I don't like Hermione much. Okay, I don't hate her or anything, and I don't despise her, but Hermione would have been the girl that really irritated me, and Lavender would have been the girl I liked - ha ha. Oh dear, I think we're destined not to be friends, Thea. I am glad you liked the story because I did hesitate the characterisation and the un-canonness of it. Thanks again ~Carole~



My Funny Valentine by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 19 Reviews
Summary: Looking forward to a romantic Valentine's Day with his fiancee, Ginny Weasley, Harry finds himself caught up in a truly hideous case with Romilda Vane from the Misuse of Muggle Artefacts Department.

Seven men have been accused of inappropriate behaviour with the same girl, and Romilda is sure she knows who is to blame. Is it simple Muggle-baiting, or does the witch concerned have her talons flexed towards an unsuspecting eighth victim?

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. This is far, far too silly to have come from her quill.

Happy Valentine's Day to all the readers and writers on MNFF.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 02/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

LOLOL!

I know you are too much of a Canon Chic to let him knock her up and spend the rest of his life with her, but it would be so much fun to watch....

Good on Seamus for at least reporting it, and...I can't blame Harry, I have to say...

Author's Response: Draco knock Millicent up ... or Harry knocking Romilda up. heh heh, that could make for a very interesting Platform nine and three-quarters in 12 years time. Thank you, Thea. A bit of Valentime's fun resurrected from a drabble written over 2 years ago. The original girl was Lavender ... but I like her too much now. ~Carole~



A Captain Captivated by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 9 Reviews
Summary:

Even the jubilance of a Quidditch Cup could become taxing on Percy's nerves, but it seemed almost cruel when he couldn't even take a shower in peace, despite it being well after midnight.

Driven out of his own dorm and to the prefects' bathroom that he scarcely ever visits, Percy finds that the room hadn't yet been vacated by its prior occupant. 


Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 03/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Interesting. I find it very interesting what people get out of the characters we know so little about. I've been working on a very long Oliver fic that will probably never see the light of day, and I find it interesting that "my" Oliver has a similar sense of...Brave honesty? Brave we can expect from Gryffindors in general, but honesty in relationships I am not sure we can expect from anyone, and I don't think it is explicitly demonstrated in Canon. Yet it must really be there in Wood somehow - no matter how Quidditch mad people make him, I don't think I can recall a fic in which he wasn't essentially honest in his relationships.

I find the idea of ANYONE pulling Percy on to their laps for a snog somewhere between between impossible and delightful. You pulled that off well. I find it totally believable.

Author's Response:

Oh, thank you, Thea! I've never written Oliver!slash before, but Hannah really wanted someone to pick that prompt for LoveNotes (which I took as her subtle hint that she wanted me to do it, lol).

I know what you mean about Oliver. I've written him in four different fics, and each time, he is portrayed so differently, but that rudimentary level of honesty has always been there. I think we are subliminally on the same wavelength in that regard. I just see him as someone who sees no reason to lie. Mendacity doesn't suit him, I think. 

I was far more worried about Percy in this story, actually. He's the uptight one, and consequentially a character I've never given more than a passing thought in terms of how his life ends up, but crawling inside that martinet little brain of his really allowed me to make this pairing not so much an 'OMG, it's like canon!', but plausibility. I'm glad you find it believable. :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing, especially at this late hour!

~Jess



The Phoenix Or The Flame by GinnyRULES

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 118 Reviews
Summary: Several years after the final battle, Dudley Dursley is struggling to come to terms with his past and the things he has done wrong. His life is turned upside down when he meets a charming young witch and is drawn into a path that leads him back into his cousin's world.
Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 09/12/12 Title: Chapter 11: CHAPTER ELEVEN

That punch, in it's own way, is as good as watching Hermione punch Malfoy...

Fast thinking for Dudley, but as you are developing the character, he seems to be improving as he moves out on his own, away from his parents, and that makes perfect sense in context. I'm really glad he was able to rescue himself, and I am assuming he doesn't die from the venom...

I really like this chapter in particular. Not only is there a lot going on that is not over-explained, but I can see the action, and while dramatic, it isn't melodramatic. Nice fine line you've walked there.



Hollow Soldiers by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 9 Reviews
Summary:
"This is how the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper."
 
-- T.S. Eliot,  The Hollow Men
 
Michael Corner was just one of many who fought for everything he believed in at the Battle of Hogwarts. He went in with all the right intentions and on the side of good, but the enemy he never thought he'd have to face proved to be fiercer than any curse that he would encounter during the fight.
 
And that enemy was himself.
 
 
 
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Dark/Angst Story.

Reviewer: ProfPosky Signed
Date: 05/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I came over here from LJ to read your top five, and of course started with this one. (It was the one on top, after all.)

Very clear, very concise - which is not to say short, but, rather, that you didn't throw anything in here that does not play to the effect of the story - a masterful show of restraint and good judgement.

I don't find myself particularly horrified, but then, I have lived longer and seen more than most of your readers. Yes, life is like this, people have very unclear motivations, the motivations shift from moment to moment, they do things they regret - but they also don't do things they should do, and they also regret things that make no sense to regret. In that sense, I find this story very true to life, indeed, but not so much dark as just the color of the sky - overcast, perhaps.

On a related note, pertaining to one of your responses - yes, many times in history, you find that the disciplined troops are the winners, however, it is by no means always the case. Moreover, to say that the Americans had no real victories until the French came in and taught them how to be an army ignores several important things, including Trenton and Von Steuben, who was by no means French. They were a key ingredient at Yorktown, but they were in some respects mixed blessings and to just hand the Revolution over to their organizing influence is over simplification. The issues of supplies and pressure on an ancient enemy and so forth do not carry through your analogy, if analogy is what you were going for...

But that is in the responses, not the story. Yes, I'm left quite convinced that Michael will be affected by this for the rest of his life. I don't think the Cruciatus should bother him at all, however. Those characters have done far worse for far less.

There are issues here no one else has mentioned. Is it so certain that Miles wouldn't kill him at this point? I have no problem seeing the character you've described hitting him in the back just because he can, as a last grasp at some sort of victory, even if he is on his way to Azkaban. I'd have at least disarmed him and tied him up, myself.

The question of how much of the killing was motivated by previous things the cousin has done is a good little complication.

Overall, a good job, and I think you did what you set out to do. Congratulatoins...

Author's Response:

I think you hit the nail on the head in terms of the moral ambiguity of what people did during the war. Even Lupin himself berated Harry for not being willing to kill when he Disarmed Stan Shunpike rather than Stun him or worse, and it's more or less a given that Remus was a man of above-average character. And he was willing to kill people to get done what needed to get done. Many others, I wager, were aiming for the same. That's where I created the baseline for what Michael did and how he reacted to it.

Miles is a character with a story in my head canon, and yes, he has a history with Michael. While I won't go into it because it's convoluted and rather detailed, suffice it to say that neither of them would've cared overmuch if the other dropped dead. What Miles did was throw whatever punches he could before the inevitable happened. They both knew what was happening, and Miles wasn't stupid; he knew where he was going to end up. But goading Michael and hurting him was a battle he thought he could win. He didn't count on Michael snapping, but they were maybe a bit more alike they either of them cared to admit. Neither was a killer by nature, but when their buttons were pressed and the issue forced...well, you see what happened.

The analogy between the non-Death Eater side and the American revolutionaries is actually pretty apt, I think. The Death Eaters were unified in that they dared not stray, but the Order members in canon often had their own agendas and things they had to worry about outside the cause. However, like the Americans, the Order side were fighting for their equality and the right to exist the way they chose, and I think that provides an unique motivation for them that, eventually, might have tipped the scales to be in their favour, or at the very least not so lopsided.

All in all, I wanted to tell a story about a 'winner' who didn't think he was all that much of a winner. Whether Michael hated himself for killing Miles or if he hated himself for not feeling as bad about it as he possibly should've been, I'll leave that for interpretation. But ultimately, this story is about moral dilemmas and how not everyone makes the right choices and, when they go unpunished, they go about punishing themselves in some manner because it's the only way they can cope. Yes, Michael is messed up for a long time, for life, but this is only the beginning of his story and how he learned to live with the man he had let himself become. And this is why I lurve Dark/Angst!

Thank you very much for your visit. I hadn't actually expected anyone to read/review due to the meme, but it made a long, s*** day a lot better because you did. Very much ♥

~Jess