I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.
In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....
I read this while I was holding my infant in my arms (Well, that's the only way I get to read much these days)... Thank God I know the difference between fiction and real life. (Not that things like this don't happen all the time in real life, but I do my best to avoid encountering them there...) To me is showed how one wrong decision leads to others, and how one wrong assumption can just keep the downward spiral going. Snape thinks it is too late to go over to the right side. He obviously rethinks that later. What would have happened if he had thought it right after this happened?
There is the added irony - and of course, Snape does not know whose child it is -but the added irony that Lily dies for her child, having no way to know that he will survive her by more than seconds, and Snape kills his, because to him it will happen anyway, what would be the point...
As for Lucius, I could not have a lower opinion of his as a human being, and I have no particular sympathy for Narcissa, either.
Also, he never seemed younger to me than in this chapter...
Author's Response: *shudder* I cannot imagine a worse context for reading this chapter. There is, of course, another dose of foreshadowing on that will-die-anyway thought. This is one of those chapters that seemed deeply necessary to the story line and was perfectly awful to write (and rewrite, and apparently to beta, and...) Lucius is pretty much my definition of a truly evil human being; he has now even betrayed Narcissa and wiped her memory of it, after all. "Thank you" seems like an awkward thing to say in this context, but all the same -- thank you for responding.
Love your Fred and George, ADORE the chicken... and I am on tenterhooks waiting for your updates. Do you know what tenterhooks actually are? Do you have any idea how uncomfortable they can be? Take pity on us all, please, and update as soon as life gives you a minute...
I knew when I was reading this chapter that you HAD to be a genealogist! I am casually engaged in the never ending search for a particular ancestor myself - you know, those ones that don't want to be found... Sadly enough, his will is probably at the courthouse where they lived, less than 30miles from here, and I never get a chance to get over there... sigh... At any rate, back to the story..I've been enjoying it all along. I have my own theories on why I never received my letter, myself, for instance. And I LOVE Diane...
Author's Response: Thank you! S.
Again, you have a very consistent world here, and this fits in very well and is about a million times better than the Ron/Draco story....
"A million??" you say? Well, just getting into the spirit of some of the reviews I've read around this site... Perhaps not a million, literally. Shall we say, I have not a single suggestion?
Author's Response: Hmm... I wrote a reply and the computer ate it. I had thought this the more abrupt story, to be honest, of the two SSPs. However, I'd gotten a little static on the Snapish innuendos of the main fic and decided to back them up a bit. You have indeed gotten into the spirit of the thing -- but if, as your email says, you are new to fanfic, you are probably unaware of the HMS WolfStar, a noble and battle-hardened ship that fights mightily for the belief that Remus and Sirius are a couple and have been for ages. Personally, though I seem to be very much alone on this, I think the RatStar makes far more sense with canon.
I love this! I read it on recommendations from my potions professor - it is a hoot.
Did he ever getot Egypt? And have you ever seen "Don' t Drink the Water" by Woody Allen?
Wow! You cover a lot of ground, very believably...
I really feel like there is enough of a story here for this to be longer, if you wanted it to. I think you did very well with the length you chose, but I think the whole romance with Colin, etc. would be very interesting to read. Considering the ending, however, it might be difficult to spend that much time on it...Anyway, I like how you've shown Harry. The glimpse we get is very credible to me. In fact, it reminded me of something that happened to me a long time ago...
Author's Response: Hey, thank you for your kind words! I actually don\'t know about the colin/Ginny romance... I kind of just tossed that in to make things a little more... complicated, I suppose you could say. Just so that there\'s more of a reason to have a problem. But I\'m glad you liked it. I *might* continue it, but I haven\'t yet come up with a decent bunny... thanks for your review. :)
The man controlling the dragon is very interesting, and also the beings Red Robes...It does seem like an awful lot of forces have been leveled at a train of children, but then Voldemort is not exactly sensible...
Jaundice AND Malaria? That seems so unfair - either one alone makes you sick enough...well, I'm glad you are feeling well enough to post again.
I enjoyed this, I especially enjoyed Harry telling off Umbrage, and Scrimgeour getting the news that it wasn't his Aurors that saved the train... but I am not so sure about Vidar. I would think that any spell that makes you trust someone is devoutly to be suspected. All HArry has to go on is Vidar's word when he says he would die if he tried to betray Harry.
Is Vidar talking about the time in DADA class when Harry threw off the Imperious Curse, or am I missing something?
This just keeps getting better. My favorite line in this chapter is
" he was torn between the indignity of having to assist in perpetrating these horrors upon his students, and his fierce determination to protect the students from the indignities being perpetrated upon them"
You'd think anyone who's been through what Snape has would realize that dignity is not all it's cracked up to be... well, that's my perspective, not his, but then no one could accuse me of coming from an old, dignified Wizarding Family, or having a Position in Society to protect...
If you let him marry Fleur... (PP gives her best, scary, "you don't want to mess with a girl from the neighborhood I was born into" warning look)
Author's Response: Oh no! Don\'t be scary! I can\'t tell you what is going to happen, for that would spoil the story -- but Snape is *very* much on his dignity.
Thought I really ought to leave a review, since I look for this story every single time I log on...
I love the faerie silk. I love "Auntie Min" I love that Ron has a devoted sweetheart, and that her sister loves everybody, but is not IN love with Harry, because in this fic, at least, Harry is Ginny's. I like Hermione's scheming. I like the insight into your version of Lucius Malfoy - I actually think canon Lucius is beyond hope of redemption, but I think you are making him work in this story... And I want to go to the ball!
If I think very very hard I can probably come up with something for you to improve... mostly I have just been enjoying this.
Hope you pupdate again soon.
Author's Response: Thank you for that long list of "loves". Can't you just see Stormy wrapping McGonagall around her little finger? I wonder what house she'll be sorted into at Hogwarts? I really wanted to go to the ball, too -- the good news is that the next chapter is REALLY long. I hope you'll leave me notes and let me know how you like the story as we go on.
I love how he expects the neosporin to work immediately, as if it were a potion or spell of some sort. I do have a question - if he has only to think of what he wants to have it appear, can't they read his mind? For me, it would work better if he had to verbally ask for what he wants every time. a very minor point in an enjoyable story.
Author's Response: Hi Prof, Ya I had thought about that question too. My way of getting around it was answered by Snape when he said to Hermione "That is the house and our warden the dark lord". My thought was that they can't read his mind, but the house is enchanted to respond to the basic needs of the occupents. When Snape asked for the healing potion the house didn't feel that "He" needed it, so gave him the most baisc of items in answer to his request. When Hermione asked, it answered with what she needed by not only giving her a healing potion, but a stress relieving one at that, to heal her mind as well. (I know it is feeble hahaha) but I can't let the jailers know everything they are thinking, because then Snape would never let his guard down. I am glad you are enjoying the story. I hope you will stick with it. I don't know for sure how long it will be. It all depends on where my head/heart take it.
I love it. I especially love the line where he says that if his needs were being met he'd have a wand to hurt her with...
Author's Response: Snape always has good 1 liners. It\'s part of his \"Snarky\" goodness. muhahahaha
Author's Response: hmmmm I can\'t, for the life of me, figure out what question.
I really like this chapter. You are handling the relationship between Hermione and Ron very well, little snippets here and there which is exactly how I think it would be for them... I can just SEE Hermione demanding to speak to Admirals and Generals, and am only a bit surprised she hasn't tried calling the White House yet... What stuns me a little, and I only say a little because I do think very highly of both characters, and because maybe it is taking a moment to sink in, but what stuns me is that neither Ron nor Hermione seems personally devastated by the loss of their magical powers. I think you have them more concerned about the world at large, and I think that is true to them - but they have got to have a mement, whether we see it or not, when they think - "No MAGIC????" on a very personal level. Wel, I just think so... So far, very interesting, and I am going to follow this one!
LOved this - Snape being as close to sweet as Snape is ever going to get...and interesting to see that there are some things to which even Draco Malfoy's company is preferable...as to why he makes you think of religion - I really think the poor child needs it!
Author's Response: "As close to sweet..." *coughchokedie* as the local saying goes. The religion suggestion you offer is one possibility. Another is that one of my Draco models is an ex-roommate who was also a fundamentalist. Utter, total Slytherin. (Look out, friends! Any of you can end up in a fic at any time!!!) Thanks for reviewing! You have now challenged me to catch Severus being sweet without being utterly OOC. You have been warned.
Very accurate description of what the patient's loved ones are going through there. I like the way it is so simple, although how did he know the injuries/sickness would have been enough to kill her? Especially if he knows more about magic than about Medicine? And I am very glad she will be getting better soon, although obviously he's going to try to get to her in the hospital. Or maybe he has another plan I haven't thought of...
I assume it might be that something Hermione did not really think twice about is what is killing this guy - maybe he wanted a job she got, ro something like that? I thought at first it might be Ron, but it does seem convincing so far that he is dead... (I like ron - I was assuming some horrible curse had put him out of his right mind, not that he just devolved into a psychopath)
Author's Response: I like Ron too and if I hadn\'t killed him off this would be about him and Hermione. As for the rest....more to come.
I like the friendship you established between Snape and Regulus. I like the irony of Harry having also been a part of Dumbledore's death. It is a very interesting take on things.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Did you make up empathmagi? I absolutely love the idea. I probably can't hide what I'm feeling anyway, so I don't find it frightening - well, maybe if Voldemort were one. But then, I doubt most people would be feeling much but terror in his presence...
Ah, yes - is it only what you are feeling at the moment that can be sensed? Selene seems to have Snape's whole menu...
I am very much looking forward to your next chapter.
Author's Response: I did make up empathmagi, yes. :) Generally, Selene can read a whole scope of things - like current emotions, bottled emotions, the person\'s nature, etc. So she can really sense a lot when she decides to take a dive into somebody. Precisely why she only uses it on occasion - as you\'ll discover later, it can be a little overwhelming for her. :) I\'m glad you\'re enjoying it! :)
Congrats! I'm revising my first right now. It does take courage, doesn't it? I like the relationship you have between Hermione and her son, and I am curious about exactly why she thinks she has to keep this a secret,although I do have a guess..
Author's Response: Publish your first fic takes a lot of courage, but I can tell you it\'s worth it! :0) I\'m glad you liked how Hermione and Nathan interact. Why she has kept this a secret will be revealed as the story develops, then you\'ll see if you guessed it right. ;0) Thanks for reading and reviewing! :0)
I'm waiting for the penny to drop - for Snape to do a little basic math and realize that there are only three possibilities - that some else took advantage of Hermione's state of mind right after she got away, that she recovered AWFULLY quickly, or that he must be Nathan's father. In fact, I am sort of waiting for him to say soemthing nasty about Nathan's father... maybe during detention...
Author's Response: It seems that everybody is waiting the penny to drop. :0)
It would be very unfortunate if Snape said somenthing nasty about Nathan\'s father during detention, but it would be also ironically funny.
Thanks for reading and reviweing, ProfPosky. :0)