I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.
In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....
Well, it made me cry.
Author's Response: Oh, I\'m sorry.. or glad? lol.. I don\'t know what to say -- I\'m really glad you were touched by it though. Thanks for reviewing=)
A lovely story! I can see you respect Neville as a character.
Author's Response: Hee! I hadn\'t thought of that, but yes, I rather do. Check out the rest of my Neville stories -- this one\'s all right, but my others are better! \"The Unknown\", which might not be up yet, is quite good (which sounds like shameless pimping, but I\'m really proud of it).
For me, especially, a very interesting story. Yes, that is how it would be.
Author's Response: Especially? Praytell. Thank you darling, as always, for reading.
A very strong story!!!
A very interesting look at things from HErmione's point of view - very literary, as she would be, and a keen insight into what the horcrux would find her exploitable weakness. You caried a them throughout which comes to fruition in this last chapter, doing a masterful job of avoiding being sidetracked by events and details which would not have contributed to your story and it's meaning. Fabulous job!
This story made me cry. (In a good way)
If I could make any suggestion for making it even better, it would be that
I would like to see the people actually thanking Dobby, rather than being told about it. It would improve and already good story...
Nice touch, byt he way, having the Devil Appear to Dobby as Lucius...
Author's Response: I\'ll definitely look into your suggestion but as I\'m writing another (and considerably longer) entry for the Autumn Challenge, it will have to go on the back burner for now. As for Lucius, he\'s just so perfectly devious that I couldn\'t resist. Thanks for the review!
I like this very much. I like that Albus is open minded and I feel you carry on his characterization well from what little we get in the book. If you don't usually write stories of this sort, maybe you should more often!
Wow! Is that Dean Thomas on the Run???
I like this story because I feel you are starting where Dudley was and bringing him along. There are moments when I feel you are rushing a bit, trying to fit things in, and that it sometimes leads to you telling things it would be more fun to be shown, but basically I like the story and always read it right away when I get an update!
Author's Response: Glad you like it! :)
Yes, this needed to be that long.
It certainly seems as if Dudley is changing, and it is believable in the sense that his parents catering to his every whim was what made him nasty to begin with. Now that he is having to come into his own a bit, he has a spine, not just a stick to hit people with. They are lucky he is not more like Snape - were he that unforgiving of the Weasley brothers, this would all be a lot harder for the Deadalus and Hestia.
I wonder if Dudley is a Wizard and this is why the door sealed itself?
I like the little moment of shame you gave him, where he feels badly about making fun of Harry about Cedric's death, but I am also a little surprised that he is not a bit astounded at all the fuss about his cousin, who was, after all, probably nothing special in Dudley's eyes to begin with, except for having saved him from the dementors.
I think he's just put more effort into getting all these bits of new straight than he's put into all his previous years of schooling combined.
I am really enjoying this and hope you update soon!
Author's Response: I'm glad someone mentioned that he should be more surprised! That was one thing that I tried to put into this chapter that just didn't come off right. It's actually part of why the wait was so long. :/ Obviously, he would begin to understand how important Harry is from what Dedalus and Hestia have been telling him, but not to the degree that it is portrayed in the articles. Anyway, I'm done ranting, so thanks for the review! :)
wow! I love it! I'm certain we're going to find out Dudley is a Wizard, and I anticipate a riotous scene at the hospital.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it!
I did enjoy it. I love the whole concept of this story, and I am itching to see what Dudley will do now that he's discovered magic.
I do have to chuckle at the argument about how to teach him - I can SO see that happening...
Interesting turn of events. I think that is exactly how most of the adults would behave.
Draco made really good points, but somehow I think I need a little more about what he is doing. He seems more sketched than the others, even though he is a bit more developed earlier.
Poor Scorpius, and how perfect that it is Neville, the least likely Gryffindor, to announce so firmly that everyone there belonged in that house. And really, any Malfoy willing NOT to be in Slythering clearly belongs in Gryffindor for Bravery. After all, he will have to face his parents with this.
I do think The Hat should have hung tough on Bernard, though.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I loved making Neville head of Gryffindor, I think if anyone has a chance of understanding the pressures of \"family duty\" it\'s him. As for Bernard, like most bullies, he has his own demons to face. Thanks for the review!
*whimpers in corner* I promise to always be VERY nice to your dogs...
Interesting , the way you have Regulus's thoughts about this developing. You have built a nice basis for the love between him and Kreachur here.
Do you think he would really have recognised that his act was one of youthful stupidity, rather than mere bog-standard stupidity?
I like how it moves from the things any kid would want to the one most important thing.
Author's Response: Thanks! I think Ron did some growing up in the seventh book, and finally realized that some things are more important than others :-P
Good. I suppose you could get it a little tighter, a little more compressed meaning, in places like "T\than any other" and "so that" but that is my taste, yours may differ. I dod think a better title could add significantly to the impact.
And I only bothered commenting because I thought it was good to begin with...
Author's Response: :D Thanks. It\'s in iambic pentameter. Yeah. -S
It also raises the question of why she left him...
It's a sweet idea. I can see so many ways an author could take this idea. But then again, I could complicate water, and water is fine just the way it is. ;-)
Well, very interesting. You have a unique character here. I'd like ot see what happens next...
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
Very interesting. I am waiting for the next installment.
Well, just because this has been here for six years doesn't mean it doesn't deserve a review, because it does.
First, there is the prose quality, the turn of phrase - it is consistent in voice, it's clever, it works.
The repetition is particularly well done - "At least it's not the Weasleys" and he is hoist by his own petard - he told Scorpius to stay away from Rose, and stay away from Rose he had. Draco's blindness to his son's proclivities - to the very possibility that there could be anyone but Rose that Scorpius could possibly have any interest in, sexual or otherwise, is so emblamatic of a family which has always assumed it knows exactly how things do work, and should work, that they cannot see any possibility that things as they plan them might not work that one has to feel Draco and the rest of them have got exactly what they deserve...
It is also typical of Harry that he would deal with this relatively easily - he has always had to deal with things, whether he liked them or not, from life at the Dursley's to Voldemort's presence in his mind to the realization that he has to die to end it all. So to that degree you've kept them in character.
It's a little over the top. Malfoy is a little bit tooo Malfoy, and Harry is a little bit, perhaps, too Harry, and I doubt Draco would have felt faint quite that way. However, as a comedy, it works beautifully.