I never know what to write here. But whenever I actually force myself to write something I decide later that it won't do at all and then I delete it.
So I've decided to just not care. I'm me. Ashley. That's really about all there is to know.
With that said, know that I adore Harry Potter, JKR, and all the lovely friends I have made while on this website. They are 'the shiz', so to speak.
Tootles, my lovelies.
I must say, when I read the last chapter I was disapointed that you had ended it so suddenly. But this just made everything so much better. It was heartfelt and emotional and a true masterpeice. I was just thinking to myself how interesting it would be if you started writing about Hannah's experiences at Hogwarts ... But just as long as you write another story, I'll be fine. I want to thank you for sharing such a beautifu story with us all, and congradulate you on completing it! I take my invisible hat off to you!
So, I have no idea who the idiot who commented below me (or above me, for you I guess, since when you read this I will be at the bottom) is, but I apologize FOR them for being stupid. Because your story is absolutely wonderful and it gives me chills all over. I adore Hannah, she is an amazing character and I think you did a really good job developing her. I want to comment more, but the bell just rang (yes, I spent my lunch hour reading your story because I loved it that much). I will probably comment more later! 10/10, for sure.
Well, I've bee reading your story like a madwoman for the past three days and I was so mad when I came to the last chapter. This is brilliant and I cannot wait for more coming up. I think my favorite part is just the fact that you've been taking the relationship pretty slowly - which is perfect. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking your time to read TUP like a madwoman the last couple of days. I\'m really glad and thankful that you found it brilliant. More to come, no doubt, especially now that I\'m back! Yup, the relationship is going very slowly, which is the way I\'m going to keep it, so I\'m glad you like! Thanks once again!
Well, you succesfully made me burst into tears in the middle of my Journalism class, causing the editor-in-chief to look at me as if I were insane. I'm going to be degraded from Arts-Editor to reporter due to my 'insatity'. I hope you're happy. No, but honestly. This was amazing. I am a firm beliver that if you read a story and you like it, you need to let the author know. So here I am, writing this review, letting you know that I loved your story and that you are a very talented at story-telling. Good work, I'm off to see if you have other stories.
I feel somewhat disappointed. Not because you finished it badly, but because I just got all inyo this story a few weeks ago and now it is, sadly, over.
Following this story through has been a pleasure. Watching your characters develop, your plot thicken, and your reviewers 'boo' at the lack of snogging between Sirius and Jocelyn has been quite the experience.
I did find one part in this chapter that didn't quite click for me, though.
I want that, she her heart cried. I want children, and a family. I want someone to love me, take care of me…. She winced.
I noticed that it said "she her heart cried" and I figured it must have been a typo. Other than that, this was beautiful.
I will be watching for more writing from you.
Hello trinsy! Well, I must say, I was thoroughly captivated by this first chapter and I thought you did a wonderful job. The first line snagged me in like a fish on a triple barbed hook and carried me through to find a wonderfully imaginative character.
I do have one teensy criticism, because I believe in constructive criticism, and that is that I noticed you make Sirius say “Oi” a lot in this chapter, and it gets repetitive. That’s all I have to complain about. Tiny, isn’t it?
Also, I noticed that you’ve had a couple flamers reviewing and I thought you should know that flamers aren’t accepted on MNFF and if you have any more you should report them straight away to a Moderator. Nobody likes getting flamer reviews, so why not stop him or her before they have a chance to hurt somebody else?
Anyways, I will be sure to read the rest of your chapters when I have a chance and leave reviews for you. This is an amazing story, don’t give up on it please! I’m going to add it to my favorites
My word, yet another brilliant chapter; at this rate, I’m going to have run out of nice things to say that can be worded in proper English by the eight chapter and the rest of my reviews will consist of “OMG!!!!!111!!11oneone!!1 I Love tHis store-ee!” (This will never happen, by the way. A very large part of me would rather shoot myself than leave a review like that – no offence to those who do review like that, of course).
Some favourite parts:
“If you’ve just figure that out,” Remus told him, “you don’t deserve to be a Marauder.”
“You don’t want Lily and James together, do you?” she said accusingly.
“Well…” he said awkwardly.
“Sirius,” she said warningly, eyebrows raised.
“Well, no!” he admitted. “Think about it! Padfoot and Prongs will have to make way for Lily and James! No more pranks! No more raiding the kitchens! No more sneaking to Hogsmeade! It’ll be the end of an era! And they’ll be… snogging all over the place! It’ll be weird!”
And I absolutely adored the way you showed the scene with Lily and Jocelyn, and then you mirrored the same scene with the Marauders and we got to see the difference between what Jocelyn says to Lily and what Sirius says to James. Brilliant, once again.
Oh my word
This was glorious.
Favorite part: Everyone stared after her, everyone except Remus, who had been staring fixedly at Sirius throughout the entire scene. As Sirius’s eyes returned to his homework, Remus distinctly saw a tear slip down his cheek and drop silently onto the parchment.
I actually got teary about that. I always get teary when boys get teary about love interests. I don't know why, but I do. That part was just so touching; and it really gives us an in depth look at how much Sirius really cares about Jocelyn.
Yet another amazing chapter, I am so in awe.
Bridget, I'm too in awe to make this SPEW quality but ... my gosh, girl, can you write a fantastic story! I'm all wide-eyed and I think you've renewed my love for fan fiction. The whole concept of it was getting kind of stale for me, but now? I must keep reading!
Your characters, whether original, canon, long-term or on-the-spot are just breathtaking. And I feel like none of my words are good enough because I just love this so much. The dinner-party thing had me creeped out and I actually jumped when my dog moved in the chair below me. And Fred?! What's going to happen to him?
That's it. I can't make this review any longer because I just have to go read. And I swear that you can expect me to favorite this and follow along. You are my new hero. Go write more, my darling little word-minion
I've actually read this entire story already on a different site, and I just wanted to say that I was greatly touched and inspired by your work. I feel almost upset without being able to read more of it, because it's over (well, to me it is. Don't worry though, I won't give anything away). You have a talent that not many have to convey emotions and delve into the complexity of love and fate. This is beautiful, exquisite, my all-time favorite Fan Fic! I can't wait 'till you put your new story up.
Oh yes! I've been waiting for an update!! So, once again, thou art brilliant, thank you for amusing my brain some more! (Now get back to writing so I can read the next chapter! :P)
Author's Response: And thank you for praising my brain once more! I've got the next two chapter all typed up, and I was planning to send the next one in Friday or Saturday.
So, I did a little jig when I saw that you had updated!
Ron lunged forward and grasped the man’s wrist firmly in his hand, wrenching it away from Hermione’s delicate shoulder. “I said, get your ruddy hands off of her.”
It made me squee a bit - honestly, why can't he just come out and say he wants her?! Ahh!
That said, this was yet another wonderful chapter. I love your writing style and you're really god with plot and [/cough] knowing when to leave a reader hanging, waiting for more Great job! Can't wait until the next update!
Sincerely - Ashley-Rose
I have loved this whole story since the moment I read it, and actually...this was the first story I read after I joined this fanfic website. So yay! Keep up the good work! (P.S- I think you do really good at keeping everyone in character)
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks very much--I'm really glad you love it!
Oh, I saw that that you updated and threw aside my Planning Project - I love this chapter. I had to refrain so hard from laughing overly loud and making the teacher attack me. I can't believe Ron went after Hermione! What an idiot ... but then again, he doesn't know the plot, so he doesn't realize he's being an idiot...
I love this story.
Author's Response: Oh dear, you blew off an assignment to read this? I dunno whether to feel guilty or giddy! I'm glad you love it, though. Poor Ron. He doesn't know what he's in for....
[p]I feel broken in two. Somehow split between breathlessness at the way you managed to capture the utter beauty of this scene and the turmoil of its undeniable outcome. This was a masterpiece; a heartwrenching tale.[/p]
[p]Your characterization of Voldemort was bang on. Everything he said I could hear, I could sense the way the scene was going and the emotions that were being felt. So much detail and careful wording made this so utterly amazing. The way he told the story of the two snakes, and Harry's reply:[/p]
[p][i] "You make the assumption that we’re both snakes," he croaked, glowering at him in defiance.[/p]
[p]Every little detail like that just made this the wonderful story it is; was; will be.[/p]
[p]I believe these were some of my favorite lines:[/p]
[p][i]“This is what it looks like when love dies...”[/p]
[p]"For never saying... a piece of me... died... every time… you walked... away from me..." [/p]
[p]And therewith, brimming with love for his friends, he passed out of all thought and feeling and fell blissfully into the embrace of eternal night.[/i] [/p]
[p]I wish I could shake your hand, or just do something to show you how amazing this was. Somehow, all my words can't seem to express how deeply this touched me. If nothing else, let me say this:[/p]
[p]J.K would be proud.[/p]
I feel broken in two. Somehow split between breathlessness at the way you managed to capture the utter beauty of this scene and the turmoil of its undeniable outcome. This was a masterpiece; a heartwrenching tale.
Your characterization of Voldemort was bang on. Everything he said I could hear, I could sense the way the scene was going and the emotions that were being felt. So much detail and careful wording made this so utterly amazing. The way he told the story of the two snakes, and Harry's reply:
"You make the assumption that we’re both snakes," he croaked, glowering at him in defiance.
Every little detail like that just made this the wonderful story it is; was; will be.
I believe these were some of my favorite lines:
“This is what it looks like when love dies...”
"For never saying... a piece of me... died... every time… you walked... away from me..."
And therewith, brimming with love for his friends, he passed out of all thought and feeling and fell blissfully into the embrace of eternal night.
I wish I could shake your hand, or just do something to show you how amazing this was. Somehow, all my words can't seem to express how deeply this touched me. If nothing else, let me say this:
J.K would be proud.
Has anyone recently told you that you are brilliant? Not mildly brilliant, but the entirety of the most amount of brilliance one could ever have? I cried, I gasped, I was so scared that I closed my eyes and squealed like a two-year-old. You are an amazing writer, you completely captivated me with your words and your plot line. THE PLOT LINE! So amazing! I would say 'brilliant' again but you may have gotten tired of the word and I don't want it to lose it's meaning! One line that made my spirit soar in a past chapter: "Dumbledores Army had risen again." or something like that. It took my breath away! 10/10, I cannot contain my excitement for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm seriously blushing furiously right now. I'm hardly worthy of such praise, but I appreciate it and thank you just the same :). I hope you enjoy Chapter 10!
Okay, first of all, I love your story and I am going crazy for part 3.
Secong of all, if you go to submit a new story, it has a help section and a place where it explains how to do italics. But it's you basiacally just type <_i_> text goes here just like that but take out the under scores and you'll get.... text goes here
Author's Response: Thanks!!!! Sorry, but they keep rejecting Chapter Three because aparently the characters are out of character. Ok, let's try that italics. I hope that worked!!! > And, unitalics, hopefully. Thanks again!!
Winner of the QuickSilver Quills Award, categ. Best Marauder Era.What did being a Marauder truly mean?... Let's just say that some tunes cannot be played by a lone musician; and those four's lives were certainly not soloists' scores. In class or in detention, in Quidditch matches or full-moon wanderings, fleeing before monsters or confronting dark wizards, they wrote, measure after measure, their own eight-handed piece.
Messrs Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs, are proud to present a Symphony for Quartet.
Well, seeing as you are one of my favorite authors I have been checking for a new chapter for quite some time. Actually, I read this new one a few daysa go but didn't have time to review. So here I am; reviewing.
I loved it so much, especially the snow ball fight. I live in Canada but despite what everyone thinks we (or at least where I live) do not get much, if any, snow. So reading that part was like seeing myself outside with the snowballs ... minus the wands and the evil Slytherins.
Can't want for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Well, you know, in Paris... NO snow. NEVER. Or almost never. So this is mainly imagination. Hope the snow-addicts will find it realistic! Anyway, next chapter is up!
I believe you to be bloody brilliant. You are now somewhat of a hero to me. What with all these fan fics containing wrongly written words, horrible grammer and badly explained scenes, you are truly a breath of fresh air.
You have to be one of my favorite writers, you descride scenes well, give good details and perfectly capure my favorite Harry Potter characters; The Marauders.
Well done, my friend, well done!
Author's Response: Captain Grammar--to the rescue!!!! Oh my God, I can't believe it, I am always so worried about my English... and NOW you tell me I'm writing better than English-speaking people??? Wow, it's Christmas again!! Seriously people, I wake up to find three good fat reviews like that... I'm dreaming!! *pinches herself* Turns out I'm not. Well I'm laughing all alone in front of my computer like a maniac. Thank you sooo much for reading and reviewing. You made me happy for at least two weeks.