I really like your story. I want to know how we end up at the part in your summary!!
That was lovely. I really liked the letters at the beginning, and the idea of Weasley's Wizard Weezes branching out in America, and I think I can see a kindling of romance between Ginny and Harry. I woder if they will be able to keep it up from either side of the Ocean.
I loved Molly's feelings as well, you really got into the head of a mother who's saying goodbye to her daughter. I can imagine that Molly would be scared, but she wants the best for her children, and would know that Ginny needs to go. you really got that across.
I thought the Nexi were great, especially when you used them to explain the bermuda triangle, and what will happen to an unauthorised person. If I'd written that, the unauthorised person would have probably ended up in Askaban, but the Earth's mantle is far more imaginative!
'An old wine bottle' was also a great way to describe the aeroplane in Ginny's eyes. It's made me look at aeroplanes in a new way, because I guess they can't look that safe to someone who hasn't grown up with them.
I just have two teeny, nit-picky things. I'mguessing you're american, so I can totally understand, but I'll just point them out anyway. First of all, as you may have noticed from what I said earlier, we don't generally say 'airplane' in Britain, but 'aeroplane' or just 'plane. Also, 'sweepstakes' is generally and Americanism, I think it was actually a raffle that the Weasleys won. Anyway, I am loving your story, please keep it up.
Author's Response: I did know about planes; that's why I had Arthur refer to it as an "arrow planie". Grayson was sufficiently Americanized after 12 years to use the term we do. But thanks for the heads-up on "sweepstakes".
I really love your story and I really want to find out what happens next so please, please, please update
Great story! Just one thing, you see thestrals if you watch anyone die, not just if you see someone you know die, so Ron and Hermione should have seen the thestrals anyyway because they had seen Pettigrew die.
Author's Response: Ok, I will go back and review the story and see where I went wrong. Thanks for your review. Natasha
That was really lovely, and interesting. I'm a little confused as to this gifts idea, but maybe that will be explained when I read the next section. I thought you had done the characterisation of Luna and her father really well, and I am wondering what was in Luna's box that made her father cry. I also liked the idea of the malfoys suspending Harry and Ginny up-side-down, it just seems typically evil. The only thing that annoyed me a little was the spacing, you seemed to have about four lines between each paragraph, and when there were long patches of dialogue, it was a bit irritating. I loved your story though, and I hope the next bit will be as good.
Me set trap now
last one! muahahahahahaha
oops! I did too many
Author's Response: CATRIN!!! Now I have to change the contest!!!
When will we play quidditch???????????????????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: that's the 7th chappie of course! I just started writing it so a preview of it will show up soon!
(In evil voice) I like it, I like it a lot!
Author's Response: (in Elvis voice) Thank you, thank you very much!
I think the quidditch team should be from either Timbictoo or Disneyland or Pottville! HEEHEEHEE
Author's Response: I'm trying to find either a very hilaarious country name or simply a country with a hilarious reputation! I'm thinking about Jamiaca but....
Or it could be from Swaziland -I like that name!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Does that place exist? oh well IT DOESn'T MATTER!!! I could have the team from Alderaan or Tatooine if I wanted!!!
What number reviewer am I
Author's Response: um 290 i think....I'm listening to Like A Virgin by madonna!
Ok erm.. you are the greatesestestestestestest author ever
Author's Response: YAY!!! THANK U!!!!
I will be the 300 th rewiwer
Author's Response: I'm sure you will! seeing how much you've reviewed already!!!
Hey I spelt that wrong - its reveewerere
Author's Response: ............??? Grammer doosn't mftter whan u review really.....
No I am wrong its is spelt reviewerer
Author's Response: R-E-V-I-E-W-E-R!!! U have an extra 'er' tehe Someone's been reading 2 much Harry Potter! (is there such thing?......)