I made it to the end! What a trip, nothing was boring or normal that's for sure.
It was a great short story. My one piece of advice. It might have more effect if you where to place the story in an area that doesn't label it as a Harry/Ginny Romance. It sort of gives it away.
Author's Response: I realized that, too. I \"kind of\" fixed it in the summary for the series, but... I don\'t know. I guess I just didn\'t have the heart to move it to \'general\'.
42 chapters! I think I might just like you, I haven't been this happy since....... when I found one with 70 chapters. Okay now I am off to read your story.
Author's Response: Thank you! When I started this, I never expected that it would end up as long as it is. Even now I'm still shocked by it. Make sure you check back in with me as you're reading it, I love to hear what people think!
Outstanding... must you taunt us with the spoilers?
Author's Response: Absolutely. ;) It gives me great joy to hear about how much you all despise them and it keeps you hooked. I would never give it up!
Excellent work on the book! I enjoyed reading it. I realize the next chapter is probably already written but it would be interesting to see the D.A. in the offence instead of the defense. The enemy is approaching through a tunnel, how hard can it be to take out a few while they are still in the tunnel. It's not like the enemy would have room to manuever, or set an ambush... ok now I am officially rambling, :)
It's a great story!
Author's Response: You are right, the next chapter is written. I will go as far as to tell you that there is some offense but things might begin to change. ;) Thanks for the review!
hahaha, nicely done! I wonder what problems will happen with them keeping secrets from one another? That was an interesting room they found on the way down into the dungeons, I wonder if either one of them will put it to any use? hehehehe
I am still reading and this part was funny. "he broke into a simpering, high pitched voice and raised his plate full of half eaten food towards Harry. “Would King Harry Potter like Dobby’s corn muffin, would he? King Harry Potter, sir?” " Keep up the good work
Nice! I like it...but it makes me wonder if he is portray someone else instead of his true idenity...oh well I will just wait excellent job
““I can’t this!” Ginny whispered excitedly,” It sounds like you are missing a word, believe or imagine would fit nicely in the gap between can’t and this.
““Hurry! Loverboy over there should be distracted for at least a minute,” she urged.” For a minute I thought Ginny was calling Harry, Loverboy! Then I remembered about the Ravenclaw boy.
I was surprised that the book didn’t have anymore safeguard on it, other than the incantation Harry said.
I don’t think it would wise for Harry to hide the new found book from Dumbledore. While he would be upset that Harry broke a few rules, I think he would be impressed that Harry was willing to try to solve the mysteries of the first diary. Although I could see him being remind to be careful in that scene also.
You had Dean and Seamus right on. Dean lying about it, to save face in front of his friends, Seamus the instigator, nobody else would have said anything if Seamus had kept his mouth shut, Dean telling the truth to save his own skin from Ron, but that didn’t work.
But the spell is iffy, did Ron cast a nonverbal spell? I could see Ron casting something much worse than a vomiting spell though, Ron knows Dean lied to his friends about it, that would only fuel his anger.
I enjoyed the chapter, the story is coming along nicely.
This chapter was a pleasant suprise. It seems all my favorites have slowed down on updating and that saying something since I haven't been able to check them in 4 months. The story is still as wonderful as when I left. Althought Harry is moving abit slow in the girl department. ;) But hey it makes it more like real life.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Most boys do move a little slow in the girl department. But we get there eventually...
A few comments about the previous chapters that I wrote down while readin the story. Wonderful personality for the portrait of Angus Potter. You got me laughing at that one, Harry Potter finally practicing constant vigilance an hexing Mad-Eye at a Birthday Party! The DADA professor, the exact opposite of Umbridge and a funny personality to add to it! First Mad-Eye and now Grendelhall! That was bloody brilliant dueling scene! ““You two are adorable together.” Ron’s face turned bright red. Hermione’s jaw dropped. “Well, toodles!” she said with one last cackle before disappearing into her office and shutting the door.” Hahahahahahaha, that was priceless! Quick note, I am not to sure of the time but it was the monks and religous clerichs (I misspelled that I know I did and I can't seem to get it right, anyway...) that added in the fancy drawings to the letters, (the loops the flowers and that sort of thing) learned that in my English literature class a little over a month ago. “…then I told the poor fellow to sit in the bucket of goat’s milk, close one eye, say the name of his goat backwards three times,” Reminds me of a portarit in St. Mungo’s…. Ron’s freckles. You are a truly wonderful writer, do not stop writing. Not because I am selfish and want to read more of your story but because you are a talented writer and it might present opportunities to you in the future if you keep writing.
Only thing I noticed was when you were talking about the walls and the pictures and you said the walls were bear. Instead of bear it should be bare. Other than that it is excellent although I wish the diaries would tell us more information to the plot. Your writting is moving. I enjoyed the chapter
Author's Response: Totally missed that. Thanks. You should consider applying for a mod position. I think they could use some help.
I enjoyed it. I think I know what shelf it its, I seem to remember you mentioning another shelf that didn't have anything on the top shelf.
Ah, It was well worth the wait! The little things like the elves and house elves and centuars give it a nice touch too.
ok goin aginst my normal grain in leaving nice honest reviews. I am just going to honest, You really know how to throw people for a loop don't you. Ginny's black hair, Harry with contacts, and now THIS. It had better have a good explanation. And with all the time jumping (something that sort a bugs me) you would think that Harry and Ginny would be together by now. Screw the crates, I am ordering tomatoes, heads of lettuce and all that other stuff by the SHIP load.
All because you said "por favor"
Los asesores hacen un trabajo maravilloso cada día y son excedente mirado y notado solamente cuando va algo mal. Pienso que todos merecen la alabanza para el trabajo que lo hacen. En al capítulo. ¡Habría sido malo si Harry habría golpeado a bloke italiano, puede usted imaginar el escándalo! Jugadores de Quidditch de la estrella y el muchacho que vivieron y ganaron en una lucha.
Todo correcto en pista y los acontecimientos que revelaron fueron a la velocidad humano. Deseo que habría sido más larga, simplemente porque gozo el leer de lo que usted escribe. Espero más pronto o (preferiblemente más pronto) un Ginny más último le dirá porqué se rompieron para arriba. Pero no vería a Harry el preguntar le que otra vez, no debería como él hacer algo como eso, por lo menos no para un par de semanas. Describir la cocina un poco habría sido agradable, pero no no necesariamente esencial para el diagrama. Con excepción de ése todo se parecía muy bien y gocé del capítulo.
Usted puede leer a los españoles fluido si usted consiguió esto lejano. Vaya con los dioses.
Author's Response: ummmm......wow....is this a bad time to mention that the only phrase from spanish i remember is ¿cuál es el tiempo oh el sabio?........dont ask me why.....
okay so this is what babelfish revealed to me..... The advisers do a wonderful work every day and excessive are watched and only noticed when something goes badly. I think that all deserve the praise for the work that does it. In a the chapter. He would have been bad if Harry would have struck to bloke Italian, you can you imagine the scandal! Players of Quidditch of the star and the boy that lived and won in a fight. All the correct in track and events that revealed went at the human speed. Desire that would have been longer, simply because joy reading of which you write. I hope more soon or (preferably more soon) a last Ginny will say porqué to him were broken for above. But it would not see Harry asking him that again, it would not have like him to do something like that, at least does not stop a pair of weeks. To describe to the kitchen a little would have been pleasant, but not not necessarily essential for the diagram. With exception of that one whole it looked like very well and it enjoyed the chapter. You can read the Spaniards fluid if you obtained this distant one. Go with the Gods.
I\'ll be honest, im a bit confused....
The cliff that holds back the humble rocks decided to let loose on me. I was pulverized with humble rocks, not humble pies. I could have chosen not to do this but I felt this was something I needed to do. My computer even crashed on my first attempt, but as you see it here, you know that didn’t stop me. I like your plot line and your style of writing, which is why I chose to continue reading after the first chapter. You did something out of the ordinary, against the flow of what a mass majority of other writers are doing. And some of us got upset. I can’t say you didn’t throw me for a loop with changing Ginny’s hair color, or giving Harry contacts. (I noticed very few people that are part of the wizarding world wear glasses, and I can’t figure out why.) My own words, “You really know how to throw people for a loop don't you. Ginny's black hair, Harry with contacts, and now THIS.” I can only say that there is a reason you introduced this girl, (I can’t even remember her name now, that shows me just how significant she really is at the moment.) and that we would all be better off approaching situations with a level head. “And with all the time jumping (something that sort a bugs me) you would think that Harry and Ginny would be together by now.” It is your story and I really have no right to berate you for the way you choose to write it. Looking back on my own personal experiences, I can see you are being very realistic or I am a really huge moron. (I hope I am not a moron.) It has taken me over four years to work out my feelings for a certain female and I still haven’t acted upon them. So, I have no right at all to say what you are doing is unrealistic. “Screw the crates, I am ordering tomatoes, heads of lettuce and all that other stuff by the SHIP load.” I honestly had not realized the play on words with using the word, ship. One of my friends, more like a second father, works on merchant marine ships going around the world. And I was trying to think of something bigger than a crate and that’s what came to my mind. I apologize for all of this and my actions. And for all you other people, stay off the writer’s back. It’s their story, not yours, try to remember that. We are guest that the writers are graciously allowing use to read their hard work. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Anybody else got the guts to step forward and apologize for berating the writer? On a second look I give you a rating of 10/10 for doing something new (to me at least). This would also be the first review that I actual every posted the rating score I chose. Blackfoot
I liked it! Wait I lied! I loved it!!!
"But you go through girlfriends like the rest of us go through chewing gum!”
Hahaha great comparsion a bit odd but it adds to the humor.
Author's Response: inspired by a convo i had with my roommate....except of course it was bf not gf cause well she is a girl....lol
Honesty is always a good thing…you never have to worry about what to remember. ;)
Babelfish is good for a word or two, maybe a sentence but after that it gets complicated. Babelfish translates word for word, not sentence by sentence which makes a difference in going to Spanish from English and in reverse. The objects, verbs and nouns are in opposite spot in the Spanish sentence structure that is why the translated sentences looked like they were written by a four year old.
For the other readers
Por Favor means please
Gracis which sometimes follows Por Favor means Thank you
De Nada means Your welcome
The English version
“The moderators do a wonderful job each day and are over looked and only noticed when something goes wrong. I think they all deserve praise for the work that they do. On to the chapter. It would have been bad if Harry would have hit the Italian bloke, can you imagine the scandal! Star Quidditch players and the boy who lived and won in a fight.
Everything is right on track and the events that unfolded went at a human speed. I wish it would have been longer, simply because I enjoy reading what you write. I hope sooner or later (preferably sooner) Ginny will tell him why they broke up. But I wouldn’t see Harry asking her again, it wouldn’t be like him do something like that, at least not for a couple of weeks.
Describing the kitchen a little bit would have been nice, but not necessarily essential to the plot. Other than that everything seemed fine and I enjoyed the chapter.
You can read Spanish fluently if you got this far. Go with the Gods.”
Author's Response: lol....oh yeah i know....thats one thing that i learned after taking three years of spanish....hahha.....but yeah I was able to get the gist of your review but i am far from fluent.....which disapoints my grandmother since her parents were from mexico ands it was her first language....but anyways, there is actually a scene in the next chapter that takes place in the potter kitche so you should get more discription there.......
“ “I’ll give you a hint,” Hermione said sarcastically. “She has two of them and they’re between her shoulders and her hips. But what can I say, every guy is entitled to one of those, how else will he appreciate the right girl once he gets her,” Hermione told Ginny as if this wasn’t of any great interest to her.” I believe we have the explanation for the writer. That part is very true and funny (to me at least) at the same time. “and if it helps the next chapter is the last chapter that we will see darling Phimie....” I think this calls for a party to be planned, don’t you. Not so much that she is leave but this means that some one much worthier is going to replace her!