I like Shakespear, but it's wonderful to see his rhymes get butchered into a zillion peices. Funnier still, is that I acted in Macbeth and had trouble discerning the lines of your story to that of the real thing. Well written, and funny ta boot, I highly enjoyed yours butchering of Shakespeare, particularly the Fred and George one!
"Love is unexplainable. There are no words for it. You can’t express why you feel so. It just happens," James said. "“Don’t you think that if I had the choice I would have chosen to love someone who didn’t hate me in return?”
“No,” Sirius said simply.
“You’re right.” James said, sighing. “I’m so screwed up, Padfoot.”
The drama-filled romantic tale of Lily and James's mysterious but unfortunate tale. It started with love and ended with death. It makes you wonder about the things they tried to live for. Pre-HBP
Well, the first time I read this story, I absolutely loved it. This time around it was just as good. Still very, very long though. :) Venus Adams is very well played though a few aspects about her still remain a mystery to me. You did a good job of explaining her motives, it's just, I generally don't understand sociopaths. Overall very well written and I love the end speech by Sirius: it was very him and yet, not him at the same time.
Summary: Hermione Granger lives her life by 5 simple rules. But what if in order to set things right, she has to go against the things she herself lay down? After all, everyone knows that rules are made to be broken… [H/Hr]
Interesting way to tell your story. The patterns were quite obvious, but it flowed well enough. The final sentence was really good, a nice brief summary of your main thought. It contained a lot of the teen drama. A lot like my 8th grade promotion dance to be truthful. Only it was more of hexagon than a square... Forget that. I liked your story and thoroughly enjoyed seeing Hermione with someone other than Ron...
Summary: Lily Evans and James Potter agreed on only one thing since they first met: they'll always hate each other. But after five years, James begins to see things, to see her, differently, and wants another chance. But Lily is one stubborn girl. Can he convince her that his feelings are real? Meanwhile, the pair is thrust into many different dangerous and humorous situations with their friends. Will it take a disaster to help Lily believe in true love? Or will a tragedy just push her farther away? How many times does James have to try before he stops messing up? Follows with the information provided by JKR, with some fun along the way.
*aplauds* well done and next time update sooner!
Summary: Sirius returns miraculously from behind the veil, uncovering a secret that's remainded hidden for too long and was obviously not supposed to be found...He undertakes the task of trying to fix the mistake he made all those years ago on Halloween night
Magnifico! it was amazing. You should continue to write! My only complaint is that you wrote those last three four chapters. The ending wouldve been more powerful if you'd left it at “You didn’t leave me…” Harry’s voice cracked. Sirius’ voice dropped so low that only Harry could hear.“And I never will, Emeralds…I never will.” As I said before wouldve been more powerful.
Author's Response: I had thought about ending it there, but thought that maybe I should wrap up a few more things, but I do think that would have been a good ending too. Maybe when I go back to edit I\'ll try manipulating some stuff to do that :)
Summary: Barty Crouch Junior’s world is about to be turned drastically upside down, when he suddenly finds himself trapped inside a horrifying nightmare between Death Eaters, a terrified family, cruelty and deceit. This story, which will consist of six parts, follows the events surrounding the notoriously well-known Longbottom’s Torturing Incident, slowly revealing the disturbing truth and evil genius behind it all.
I was surprised by the turn your story took. It was dark and vague, leaving the story to go in several directions. The ending was a little flat compared to the rest of your story. I felt it could've been further explained, with much more detail than you gave. All in all it was an entertaining read and a different outlook on the way things could've gone.
Summary: Voldemort attacks the Potters, James and Lily try to protect their beloved baby boy. Then suddenly they're in a house they do not know. Harry isn't with them and they don't know what happened. Where are they? And who are the redhead children running down the stairs? Why have they been sent?
The story is placed in the future, years after Voldemort's death, but danger is still lurking.
Features Harry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione.
Joint winner in the genfic category of the Multifaceted Fanfiction Awards
OMG!!!!!! i only read it cause someone reccomended it (i dont usually read that genre of fanfics) and I loved it!!!!!! It was long which i liked I never can find really lond chapters any more. in some parts the sentences need to be rearranged, but after coming up with every little way it could go I finally pressed on... anyway I loved the story, and the characters too. thank you for making my lack of a social life less important to me and for writing an AMAZING story!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm so glad you liked it so much. Thank you for telling me.
Summary: In this sweet one-shot, Lily receives a note from James one night, and finally admits to herself and to him her true feelings...
Even when you rumple your hair.
I hate that I’ve come to expect,
That life without you I can’t bear.
(Inspired by Kat's poem in 10 Things I Hate About You )
very good I wouldnt have changed the words at all... okay I would have changed the word order but hey im not perfect
let me clarify if something is perfect then in all actuality it isnt.... anywa wat I am trying to say is GREAT poetry, I should know I love that kind of stuff, and write that stuff and think about rhymes when Im not thinking about it...any way no I am NOT insane
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hmm... I've never qute taken that look at S.P.E.W. before... It makes the entire foundations of the organization crumble. The two's reactions to each others statements seems well thought out as well as excitingly realistic. I found your vocabulary and imagery excellent to say the least. The flow was good also...
Summary: The heartfelt sequel to Lily and James: Their Story of Love. Catch My Fall takes you from Lily and James' newfound adulthood to that tragic Halloween night in Godric's Hollow. Pre-HBP
excellente! I loved it the entire plot is unfolding smoothly... 10/10!!!!!!!!
good chapter but I dont understand the rating... Proffesors? I saw nothing worthy of that rating in this chapter....
Summary: James Potter is an obnoxious, arrogant prat. Lily Evans is stubborn and a bit arrogant herself. James loves Lily. Lily hates James. Will James ever conquer the love of his life when his each and every attempt always fails spectacularly? Humor is guaranteed thanks to the one and only, Sirius Black!
how did you do it??? You made James's birthday mine! I was born On the 18th of august. again HOW DID YOU DO THAT????????
Author's Response: Um... would you take it the wrong way if I told you it was purely coincidental? :)
Summary: Hermione goes back in time with one mission: to kill Tom Riddle before he ever comes to power. A difficult task, correct? An impossible one, she realizes, as a love between them grows stronger than anything she has ever known. Now Hermione has a choice to make. Will she condemn the Wizarding world to almost certain destruction, or will she take the life of the one boy she has ever loved?
Very convincing tale. The two are close enough to express intrest, yet different enough to keep them apart for the time being. I'm looking forward to seeing how the rest plays out.
Author's Response: Hm that\'s a really interesting thought... they are quite different, aren\'t they? In some ways they\'re so alike, though. Yeah, I definitely agree. The next chapter\'s in queue, and I\'m glad you\'re interested!
Wow this is cleverly written, the details are just vague enough to leave the audience asking, but it's entirely guessable as well. Who knows how it'll end? The pairing is well written, and just believable. I always prefered Hermione with a different guy, someone on the darker side.
Author's Response: Lol same here, I\'m a D/Hr shipper at heart, so I\'m all for the \'dark side\' thing. Something about bad boys just compliments Hermione\'s personality so well, don\'t you think? Thanks for all the compliments, and I hope you keep on reading.
You did a wonderful Job of portraying Malfoy. Just the right mix of cruelty and coldness I would expect in a junior death eater and a malfoy. It gave me shivers. Perticularly in the circle. You did a wonderful job showing how torn RIddle was as well. The emotions were just right for something so dark.
Summary: Ron has been acting strange lately, always running off to places no one knows of; Harry is determined to find out. Seventh Year - Hogwarts. One-shot. PWP. Harry’s POV. AU.
First off I suggest you change the rating on your story from 1-2 yeas to 6-7 years and throw in a sexual situations/consenual sex....
Other than that, that was pretty good for a four A.M. story. And no beta either! Other than the warning thing I have no nitpickies to say, which is a good thing.
Author's Response: I haven\'t been on here in a year, so I didn\'t know they changed the ratings. I had it on PG-13, but, yeah, I\'m going to go and change it. Thanks for reviewing.
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James and Lily Potter were possibly the most famous parents in wizarding history. We know alot about their adult life, but what do we really know about their childhood? Even Harry never knew about the Drama, jealousy, danger, friendships, happiness, sadness, resentment,confusion and love that his parents went through as children. Here, their lives, from when the two of them were eleven to when they were brutally murdered at only 21, is recorded. Lily and James Potter were unsung heros. This is their story.
EXCELLENT!! You didnt even warn me a new chapter was coming! Any ways very suspenseful excellent cliffie. The fore shadowing was great. overall I hope this was a transition paragraph, cause otherwise I'll be dissapointed in you!
Author's Response: You found out there was a new chapter before I did lol I had no doubt that this was going to be rejected...yet here it is, and here we are! I am soo happy! But...your technical language confuses me in my present state...aka transishiwatty? foreshadowing? I can't concentrate, please explain lol anyway, thanks for the review!!!!!
I liked the basic plot, but the turn the story is taking doesn't impress me. I'm sorry I feel that way, but your writing isn't flowing like it used to; it's really choppy... But I did like the story, just try and make it not seem like a seven year old is telling it. Your characters emotions are a little overplayed as well. My advice reread the next chapter aloud before you submit it. And also reread your first twelve chapters, and then look at these last five, there is a HUGE difference. I don't like waiting for a chapter, but I'd perfer if you made it the best you could compared to rushing through it.
Author's Response: hmmm well At least you were honest... I personally didn't think any of it was that bad... Honestly though, I havent been rushing, its just the mods accepting them quicker! I have had these chapters written ages ago! im not sure what overplayed means either, but ill look that up. Ill try to do better next time I suppose...
The entire chapters have been fantastic so far but I have to include that while it is a romance you are making the characters seem too old for there age. personally when I was eleven I didn't have such a "colorful" vocabulary. Otherwise I love it. Update Soon PLEASE!
Author's Response: Hey, it's great that you liked the chapters! um... about the age thingy yeah it all depends who you grow up with and how you grow up!! when I was eleven, my vocabulary was very colourful, and i was thought of as the polite quiet one in the school!! lol, but others may not even know what those words mean at that age!! Some girls I know had their first pashes at nine, some are still waiting, the characters are different, each had different lifestyles, some will swear, some rarely talk, it all depends!! :) I will try to update!!