Well, I have to say this is one of a very few believable Snape romances I have read. I enjoyed it a great deal. The work you obviously did to correlate your story with the six canon books is also impressive. Great story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and took the time to let me know.
Well written, very consistent structure. Excellent imagery without resorting to wordiness. Some rhythmic flaws, but nothing too jarring.
I am impressed. I love RairPairs, especially Scandalous Liasons, but as Ginny is one of my favorite characters, I am even more attached to stories involving her. These things kept in mind, my obvious prejudices showing, I am also impressed with the technical abilities showing herein. Lupin in particular is well characterized, and I enjoyed Ginny's internal monologue. Outstanding! Off to read the other.
Twice, in one night, I find myself blown away by the same author. I am definitely impressed. Your characterization remains spot on, although I would have to say that your setting suffered a little bit in this story.
The attention to detail between the two of them seemed to draw your focus off of the backdrop of the rest of the world. I guess the best way to phrase it would be that compared to your other story, this one felt a bit like it was taking place on a stage.
All that said, I still liked it, and, if anything, your characterization has improved. Thank you for an excellent story.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for your review! I love it when someone critiques what I write, tells me where my strengths and weaknesses are!
Your story is based on a very interesting premise. I think it needs a bit more flesh, however. As the prior review states, it feels a bit abrupt, and there does not seem to be a whole lot of background in general. I would say that the dialog also feels a bit stilted. On the bright side, I think your characterization of Ginny in particular was outstanding, and the setting was very well presented. I would definitely say I enjoyed it, overall.
Author's Response: I agree. This does need much more body. It's kind of like a zombie. It has no blood. Whoa, that was a random comparison. Anyway, I'll use the break to assemble a better, fleshed-out(no zombies) fan-fic.
Hmm. I enjoyed it, despite the fact that I do not really ship Wolfstar. The image of Remus pretending not to have a present was wonderful, and I do like your choice of name for a puppy. I am, however, forced to agree with VV on your use of commas, i.e., there should be more. In general, though, pretty good.
Author's Response: Ha! You did review! I'm so proud! I thought the puppy's name was a stroke of inspiration, actually. So ha! on your own complications. Lol. There will be no commas. You know why? Because people don't talk or think like that in real life. That's why. So. You have no become one of many in a long line of reviewers that I have stuck my tongue out at. *somt!* Don't worry. It's a good thing!