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Highly Improbable by Vocalion

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 480 Reviews
Summary: COMPLETE. A woman visits Hogwarts expressly to meet Severus Snape. Her eccentric aunt led her to believe that he was the kindest, handsomest man to ever grace the earth. What will she do when she discovers the awful truth - let a few minor imperfections stand in the way of romance? Highly Improbable has been recognized by the Multifaceted Awards as Winner in the Laughter Category and Runner-Up in the Identity Category (Best Original Character), and also by MNFF's first annual Quicksilver Quills Awards. Thanks, MuggleNet!
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Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 12/20/05 Title: Chapter 38: I'll String Along With You

Well, I have to say this is one of a very few believable Snape romances I have read. I enjoyed it a great deal. The work you obviously did to correlate your story with the six canon books is also impressive. Great story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and took the time to let me know.



The Pretend Boy-Who-Lived by immortal_evil

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 16 Reviews
Summary: Harry's mind is racing as he is forced to take part in a photo shoot for an article for the Daily Prophet. He can not help but feel alone in a room full of people.
Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 12/27/05 Title: Chapter 1: GoF Photo Shoot

Well written, very consistent structure. Excellent imagery without resorting to wordiness. Some rhythmic flaws, but nothing too jarring.



Into Temptation by AJRoald

Rated:8 Reviews
Summary: The wedding of a friend introduces Remus to a Ginny who’s all grown up and on her own. Will she ensnare him with her charm? Will he woo her with his words? A dance, a drink, and…Ginny talking to herself? Where will this little encounter lead? RL/GW
Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 12/20/05 Title: Chapter 1: Into Temptation

I am impressed. I love RairPairs, especially Scandalous Liasons, but as Ginny is one of my favorite characters, I am even more attached to stories involving her. These things kept in mind, my obvious prejudices showing, I am also impressed with the technical abilities showing herein. Lupin in particular is well characterized, and I enjoyed Ginny's internal monologue. Outstanding! Off to read the other.



Private Universe by AJRoald

Rated: Professors • 17 Reviews
Summary: Companion story to ‘Into Temptation’. What would Rita Skeeter say if she knew what was taking place at Ginny Weasley’s London flat? And with a werewolf no less! A steamy look into the romance of Remus Lupin and Ginny Weasley.
Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 12/20/05 Title: Chapter 1: Private Universe

Twice, in one night, I find myself blown away by the same author. I am definitely impressed. Your characterization remains spot on, although I would have to say that your setting suffered a little bit in this story. The attention to detail between the two of them seemed to draw your focus off of the backdrop of the rest of the world. I guess the best way to phrase it would be that compared to your other story, this one felt a bit like it was taking place on a stage. All that said, I still liked it, and, if anything, your characterization has improved. Thank you for an excellent story.

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for your review! I love it when someone critiques what I write, tells me where my strengths and weaknesses are!



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Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 12/20/05 Title: None

Your story is based on a very interesting premise. I think it needs a bit more flesh, however. As the prior review states, it feels a bit abrupt, and there does not seem to be a whole lot of background in general. I would say that the dialog also feels a bit stilted. On the bright side, I think your characterization of Ginny in particular was outstanding, and the setting was very well presented. I would definitely say I enjoyed it, overall.

Author's Response: I agree. This does need much more body. It's kind of like a zombie. It has no blood. Whoa, that was a random comparison. Anyway, I'll use the break to assemble a better, fleshed-out(no zombies) fan-fic.



The Puppies! by Slian Martreb

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 15 Reviews
Summary: Written by Slian Martreb of Ravenclaw House for the Secret Gifts Challenge. Attempt at a lighter one-shot to give new meaning to the phrase 'the puppies!" with the hope of making Wolfstar shippers squee. One Shot. Enjoy!
Reviewer: nitouken Signed
Date: 01/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas Presents

Hmm. I enjoyed it, despite the fact that I do not really ship Wolfstar. The image of Remus pretending not to have a present was wonderful, and I do like your choice of name for a puppy. I am, however, forced to agree with VV on your use of commas, i.e., there should be more. In general, though, pretty good.

Author's Response: Ha! You did review! I'm so proud! I thought the puppy's name was a stroke of inspiration, actually. So ha! on your own complications. Lol. There will be no commas. You know why? Because people don't talk or think like that in real life. That's why. So. You have no become one of many in a long line of reviewers that I have stuck my tongue out at. *somt!* Don't worry. It's a good thing!