Summary: This story is written from Hermione's notebooks, her point of view. Bare feet, Hogsmeade trips, quidditch games, and broken hearts.
Nik, you promised...
I have really enjoyed your story thus far. I like that Hermione didn’t rush into liking Harry and that she dated someone before him. I thought it was an interesting twist that her boyfriend was cheating on her. I thought that she had fallen for him so hard and so fast was a little out of character as she didn’t even seem to know him that well before they started dating. I like how she has eased into her feelings for Harry though as we don’t always notice when we like our best friend. Though a masquerade ball is a little cliché I like that you at least tried to have a plausible reason for there being one. I like all the details you put in about the ball.
Summary: This story is set in the dystopian society of Wizarding England under the control of Voldemort. Fifteen years after leaving Hogwarts, Harry Potter is in hiding; he fears the words of the Prophecy and has lost the will to fight. This story tells the tale of an adult Hermione who sacrifices everything: her family, her moral beliefs and eventually her dignity, in order to save the Wizarding world. She becomes a Death Eater under the recommendation of someone she barely trusts. She struggles to find the courage and strength, but with every choice she makes she gets deeper and deeper into danger.
Chapter 33 is finally up. Thank you for your support and patience..
I found this chapter very intersting. I haven't read all of your story but this chapter has turely intrigued me. I find your characterization interesting. Though the characters have obvioulsy been changed by the circumstances of your story they still seem to hold onto some of their intrinsic qualities which I think is a tough task you handled well.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! It is lovely to hear a review from someone new. Don't feel pressured to read all the story too quickly - it is long, has taken me 18 months to write and so I like it when my readers don't rush. Characterisation has been my biggest challenge with this story, no doubt about that. And I'm glad that for you it works.
Summary: The war is on and the only person with the power to stop Voldemort's second reign of terror is sulking alone in a cold, dark room. The unexpected arrival of an old school chum in Privet Drive jolts him to action, however, as Harry begins his most exciting year at Hogwarts. Year 6 will include a visit to the ancient village of Godric's Hollow; a first hand account of the 1000 year old quarrel that ripped Hogwarts apart; a Fred and George-style farewell to a certain ex-Minister of Magic; and the discovery of the Half-Blood Prince, a mysterious figure who holds the key to winning the war...
(And, as J.K. says, what's life without a little romance?)
Great chapter. I am glad he finally told someone he was being quite an idiot :) I love the last line from Ginny that is something i could totally see her saying and its the one thing Harry needed to hear more than anything else. keep up the great writing
I really enjoyed the history lesson from the portrait i think that was a very interesting touch. I could see something like that happening with Harry and Dumbledore in the last book. I am sure Harry will find the next diary but i really cant think of where so update soon!
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I enjoyed your prologue a lot. I think you did a good job of setting up how Harry was to find out about his parents and the past. It was a creative touch that it just wasn’t a pensieve or something like that. I think you did a good job of capturing Harry’s mixed emotions. I wish it had been longer but I understand that it is a set up and not so much the story itself. I am interested to see where this story goes and what other creative touches you add to it.
I really enjoyed this chapter. I like the small details that really illuminate the background and motivations of the characters. I particularly like Sirius's becuase it showed what kind of mother he had it showed his father as a positive influence which i htought was a nice touch. I have read other things which had him as abusive and i enjoy this version better. I also like how you have a variety of sources such as letters, diaries and news artivles. Very interesting approach toyour story.
Summary: "Be careful what you wish for," the old adage goes. So what happens when Hogwarts is under a spell where what you say is what you get?
Chappie 14 is UP! And while it is the end, let us not be sad, but instead read the insanity that has driven so many to review and nearly wet themsleves with delight.
This was too funny! It is just the most random thing i have ever read. So in the name of randomness there needs to be a fock of winged monkeys that attempt a coup and make neville thier queen. Dont you agree?
Author's Response: I seriously hope you meant to say "flock" right there. But perhaps I shall find a spot for flying monkeys, and Neville has been quite absent thus far....
Summary: “You were the first thing they took from me,” whispered Sirius. “My only happy memory. I haven’t thought of you in fourteen years.”
“And I’ve had to think about you everyday. For fourteen years,” said Miriam, darkly. Her voice trembled. “I win.”
Miriam Daniels had lost everything she’d ever loved the day Sirius Black was sentenced to a life in Azkaban. Now, years later, she needs to find the strength to accept a past drastically different from the one that she had just begun to acknowledge as truth. Will the most celebrated Healer in England be able to nurse back to health a broken heart and shattered dreams? Or will a secret kept locked away for fourteen years drive Miriam even further away from the man who once adored her?
A/N: A/R with aspects of MWPP-era-ness! I hope you like it!
NEW CHAPTER! I really hope you enjoy it.
I really enjoyed your story and am particularly impressed that this is your first fanfiction. I thought you did a really good job of capturing the true characters of Remus and Lily. It was interesting to see them come to know each other in a different light. I also enjoyed the foreshadowing of Lily’s future. Your vocabulary is impressive too Though the story seemed slow at times I think as a character study it worked really well. It is interesting to see how Lily relates to James’ friends and I like how Remus’ feelings about Lily are subtle and almost ambiguous. All in all very impressive I was sad to see it end.
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Summary: Patrick Thatcher’s older brother teases him, his mother worries about him, and his father defends him. His family sounds very much like any other, but somehow Patrick’s is far from average.
In Patrick’s world, adults disappear into thin air, owls deliver mail, and the most popular sport in the country is played on broomsticks. Not to mention that every member of his family is, and always has been, a wizard. When your grandfather is a famous American veteran, being a Thatcher isn’t the easiest life to live.
When his acceptance letter to the most prestigious American school of magic arrives addressed to another student, Patrick’s position in his former world begins to take a tumble—right along with the newly elected President of Magic’s approval ratings. With the Wizarding world’s eyes shifting toward a new wizard, can Patrick figure out just why his first year is off to a rocky start?
Inspired by J.K. Rowling’s wondrous Harry Potter Series, Patrick Thatcher’s adventures of wizardry in the United States is a tale all its own while still respecting its English origins. Readers are sure to find that the magic across the pond is just as unforgettable.
Another brilliant chapter I really enjoy your version of American Wizards. I like how the school is different but based on Hogwarts. The East Coast definately has lots of British roots. I am dying to know more about the compass though...thought we would get to the history part in this chapter but not quite huh? Thats okay better to leave your readers wanting more right :)
Author's Response: Yes, seeing as New England has many influences from \"Old England\" it\'s appropriate for that to show at Wentwater. So, you didn\'t get everything you wanted in this chapter, but it\'s not totally wasted there\'s a lot of valuable information you can learn here. Plus, it\'s not all the way finished either...=)
Author's Response: I just forgot I haven\'t even added in the stuff they talk about...this chapter is a lot longer than what you\'ve read so far. You\'ll get some background in a bit.
I really enjoy youre writing style, youre chracters are all very interesting. i think i need to go back and reread the story though cuz i was a little confused about what is going on, a little refresher will probably clear everything up though, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Haha, you should probably re-read chapter twelve. I think I added the latter portion of the chapter after you read and reviewed it...my bad.
Summary: Remus Lupin is a man with a tragic past, filled with pain, suffering and sorrow. But it is also a past filled with great adventure, true friendship and…love? Even though the odds were against him, Remus found happiness at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. He had the Marauders, he was a prefect and his transformations were less horrible, thanks to his Animagi friends. What more could a teenage werewolf want? And how long could his happiness last? Remus and the Marauders prove that in the saddest of lives and darkest of times, there can still be moments of bliss.
Remus centric but with a lot of the other Marauders. This story is a romance, but has almost as much general Marauder era background and side story as romance.
Pre-HBP and DH, so some things from DH will be disregarded, as the warning indicates, but some Spoilers will be incorporated.
I just finished reading your whole story and i must say i love it cant wait to see what happens next! I love the way you portray all the Marauders even though its mainly a story about good ol' moony :) I also HAVE to say that i love how you used my boy Phil in your story...he's the reason i got into golf! too cool :) keep up the good work
Author's Response: Thank you, Courtney22, I’m happy to know you are enjoying it. Yes, it is definitely focused on Remus, as I am obsessed with him. ;*) But it wouldn’t be his tale without his best friends, so glad you are enjoying them, too. Phil…LOL! Would you believe that that was purely accidental? Honestly, I enjoy golf (though I rarely play) but I didn’t even think of him. Unless it was subconscious…hmmm…He is a nice guy. ;) LOL. I was so happy when he won the Masters for the first time and then again this year. So anyway, if I’m going to subconsciously name characters after people, he’s a good one to pick. At least it wasn’t some big jerk! *giggles* Thanks for reviewing. :)
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Youre writing style is excellent it flows very well. This is one of the best stories I've read. It is very creative and well thought out. I would love to hear more about snape and how the trio plan to deal with the tiara and what not. Keep up the good work!!!!
Author's Response: Keep reading, my dear, and your curiosity will be satisfied (I hope!). Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Love the chapter...i must admit i was a little worried about where you were going with the last chapter and the attacks and all. i hope the order thwarted all the attacks cuz thats just to scarya thought attacks on essentially helpless people. Very well written love the story keep it up!
It was a very sad chapter but well written. It really does illustrate the grim realities of war. I like how you used the Prophet as a narrative tool.
Summary: Since the tragedy at the Astronomy Tower, Harry has become an even more formidable wizard, but a shocking revelation may mean the difference between life and death for The Boy Who Lived. It is the final stage of Harry's quest to destroy Lord Voldemort - can he save the Wizarding World and those he loves from the treachery of the Dark Lord... and also save himself? [Action takes place in media res towards the end of Harry's Seventh Year at Hogwarts (Post-HBP).]
Your write the action sequences particularly well i am very impressed it really flows well from one thing to another. It follows logically you know...theres no cheating...its all explained. cant wait to find out how it all turns out.
Author's Response: Lol... I'm so glad you think so - it's mighty hard to create a sense that the action is flowing when there's so much stuff happening. Writing action is the toughest thing I think I've ever had to do. And lucky me, the biggest action sequence - Harry v. Voldemort - is getting closer! Thanks again for reviewing and I hope you enjoy Chapter 9.
All i can say is beautifully written. You have a great gift fro language, imagery, and humanity. Bravo
Lord that was the most beautiful thing i ever read. You have me in tears. I really hope this is how the book ends it was fantastic!
Author's Response: I am so happy you enjoyed it! (It makes me happy to see you review, you\'re among the ones who\'ve been with the story since the beginning. Thanks so much for following it!) :)
BRILLIANT CHAPTER!!! Wow I hate people who write in all caps so that tells you how much i enjoyed it. For someone who doesn't like writing action you do an incredible job of it! I really hope Harry doesn't have to do what it appears he has to do. I hope there is some sort of loop hole for him. For someone who has had to endure so much it hardly seems fair. But I guess if it is to a be a truely self less act you can't expect to come back from it right? I don't know I guess I will have to wait and see.
I like that Neville got his revenge and that Snape finally chose sides. I think that was an important moment for his character...perhaps the first time he truely acted for someone other than himself...interesting. I also like how you almost feel sorry for Wormtail at the end of it. He has led a pretty retched existance if you think about it, even if it was his own doing.
Well heres to hoping the next chapter comes quickly and doesnt get stuck in que forever!!!! Keep up the great work!!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much :). Indeed, it hardly seems fair for Harry to endure so much, which is why his decision at the end of the chapter is so important. He could walk away and save his own life, but instead he willingly chooses to sacrifice himself. It's an empowering moment because, for the first time, Harry is an active participant in his fate. He's taking back control of his life. I wish I could say more about Harry's ultimate fate, but there's no way to address the issue that wouldn't give it away. I'll just have to hurry with Chap. 11 :). Thanks again!
The chapter was fabulous!! I keep forgetting it’s not the real story and I find myself worrying about how it’s all gonna turn out. You are causing me to lose sleep but I’ll try not to hold that against you :) I’ll say it again you truly do action better than any of the other stories I’ve read and to me that’s the hardest thing to do so keep it up. Can’t wait for the prequel too by the way. When you mentioned the whole nagini thing I was like wait what did I miss!! Make sure you let us know how the Order and the DA are doing in the next chapter I’m worried about them!!
Author's Response: Lol! Trust me - no one's losing more sleep than I am! Half the time I think of some cool tidbit or particularly gut-wrenching detail just before putting my head to the pillow. You will definitely - let me repeat, DEFINITELY - find out what's going on with the DA! And lastly, thank you again for coming back to review :). It really does make my day to hear your thoughts and reactions.