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His Draught of Delicate Poison by Subversa
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 784]

Summary: In the wake of the Final Battle, the Order has opened Headquarters to house its youngest members during a summer of Ministry-sponsored social events. With Snape as a chaperone, and engaged to another woman, the advent of a busy Hermione, determined to see her friends in love-matches, can only be a recipe for disaster.

Categories: Hermione/Snape Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 199804 Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/26/06 Updated: 10/06/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 05/01/06 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Ooo...very interesting. Things are getting a bit more..complex, shall we say?

What suprised me is that Hermione voiced her feelings of affection out loud. I know that the Sleeve Potion has its side effects, but I didn't think that she would voice this. It makes the story all the more awesome.

“There, there,” he muttered, feeling like a fool.

That is my favorite line in this chapter. Snape is going to have to deal with his emotions now. I like how you began the chapter saying that his emotions have to be controlled, and now he's faced with them. I wonder how he'll solve that problem.

Superb job!




Author's Response: I think that Hermione was fairly humiliated by the uncontrolled words that fell out of her mouth while under the influence of the Sleeve Potion. Snape, of course, treated it all as if she were simply overwrought and not answerable for her actions. Thanks, doll!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 09/07/06 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27

Oh, my God. This is a lovely chapter. No, it's a fantastic chapter. No, it's not even that. It's an unbelievably amazing-stunning-staggering-beyond awesome chapter.

I've reread this so many times already. You're such a talented author, dear. *hugs*

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/06/06 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

First again! *does happy dance*

I really liked how this chapter focused on the girl's troubles. We now know more of their feelings on the various matters and such. I liked how you payed special attention to each character in turn, and it showed in this chapter.

Two girls fighting over Harry! Wow. I don't know who I'm rooting for. I'm not a blatant H/G shipper, just a minor one, and Skye's very nice too....so I don't know what to choose.

I'm looking very much forward to the next chapter. Balls interest me! *girly giggle*

Awesome!

Author's Response: ::big smile:: I'm glad you like this chapter. It was hard for me to write, until the scene with Skye and Shadow came to me, and the rest of it just flowed. So, the ball is coming up! And it's a REALLY long chapter, so get ready ;)

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/17/06 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

In response to Rebecca's review, I have to say I have the opposing view. The many plot lines make the story interesting, and not confusing. It's a matter of opinion, rather. I have run out of words to describe your chapters, dear. Good, great, fantabulous, awesome, terrific and so on are too vague. So, here are some new ones: breathtaking, divine, magnificent, marvelous, outstanding, sensational, smashing, stupendous!

Author's Response: Hi, Periwinkle. I am happy to hear that you are enjoying the many plotlines of the store. What an array of words! You leave me ....

Speechless!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really LOVED this chapter!! I'm glad you got through it, because, let me tell you, it was worth it!

I like how you emphasized on the preparing for the ball on the girl's part. It helped brighten the ball. I also liked your descriptions of the gowns...Hermione's is my favorite by far.

I cannot wait until the next chapter to see how and if you will write the scene where Hermione dances with Snape. I really want to read that. Hmm..It looks like Hermione is getting attracted to a certain someone with black hair and a long, crooked nose. I would like you to explicate more on that subject.

All in all, FANTASTIC!! Superb job! infinity/10. (That's infinity %) ;)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you are pleased with it. I think we girls just love getting dressed up for big parties, so we enjoy reading about that stuff! I agree, I love Hermione's gown; I can it so clearly, in my mind's eye.

Of course I write The Dance! But you'll have to wait; I'm sure you know MNFF isn't taking any new chapters for a while.

I don't think I've ever made infinity% before ... Can I have that for my NEWTs??

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Yay, Subversa! I'm glad you attempted another story! It has a very promising start, and I can't wait till the next chapter. One question though. Why did Severus drop the cup? Does he already like Hermione? Or did he drop the cup for another reason? 10/10

Author's Response: I think the most we can say about Severus at this point is that the mention of Hermione unnerved him. Other than that, we really cannot say... Hang with me!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/30/06 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Yay, first reviewer!

These are the kind of sentences I like to see in your stories:

“Oh, I like that one!” Luna Lovegood exclaimed, pointing over Cho’s shoulder at a quirky-looking wedding dress, something of a cross between the robe of an ancient Grecian priestess and the kaftan of a 1960’s Muggle hippie.

Very descriptive.

I enjoyed this chapter a lot. It focuses on the relationships now, and it was a welcome change from Fleur's evilness. Poor Harry! I'm glad you didn't have Skye walk out and find them - that would be terrible. I wonder how both of them will deal with their feelings.

Fantastic job!

Author's Response: Yes, undiluted Fleur evil is hard to swallow, like bubotuber pus! Harry would have been most embarrassed to have been caught by Skye when he's snogging Ginny. Thank you for your faithful reviews, hon.

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 05/04/06 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

This is, as always, a fantastic piece of work. I can see the level of effort you put into it and it really shows through. I really like the fountain idea...very ingenious. I especially like how you ended the story...how Hermione shut the drapes. The mood suddenly changes, from thougtful and anxious to final and devastating. You really left me hanging. Is this the last chapter of the flashbacks? Fantastic job!

Author's Response: I am so happy that you liked the fountain! I was so pleased with the fountain and the bubbles. I think you put that very well, that the mood changes to final and devastating. That is the last chapter of the flashbacks. Thanks, sweetie!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/28/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Why Fleur Delacour indeed? :] I agree with Zimmy. I do like how the story's going. You described the Snape-getting-accustomed-to-his-room thing really well. You're on Ch. 14 already? Wow. Can't wait! *squeals*

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed Snape getting settled in the library -- you'll see why his sanctum is important to him in later chapters. Yes, struggling with Chapter 14! Send lots of good thoughts to my Muse!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

At first, when you announced that the next three chapters would be flashbacks, I was dissapointed. I was having so much fun reading the current plot that I thought the next couple chapters would bring down the quality of the story. Boy, was I wrong!

This chapter is tying for the best in this story. I enjoyed it so much!! I should have known that such a talented author like yourself can pull anything off!

Firstly, I really like Hermione's personality. She's cunning, mischievous and smart. I especially loved her behavior when she was under the Sleeve Potion.
"...and your voice is just so sexy!"
That line made me laugh so hard, my sis who was on the other computer gave me a strange look. I just loved that, along with other sentences you gave her.

I am looking very much forward to the next chapter...when they have to spend a night together in the woods. Very romantic...and very dangerous. I really am looking forward to seeing how things go. ;) I can't even describe how good this chapter is. You're on a roll with good chapters. Smashing job, dear!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/24/06 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I posted the same review accidently for the first chapter. I'm pasting it here, where it rightfully belongs. I can't seem to delete it from the other ch.

At first, when you announced that the next three chapters would be flashbacks, I was dissapointed. I was having so much fun reading the current plot that I thought the next couple chapters would bring down the quality of the story. Boy, was I wrong!

This chapter is tying for the best in this story. I enjoyed it so much!! I should have known that such a talented author like yourself can pull anything off!

Firstly, I really like Hermione's personality. She's cunning, mischievous and smart. I especially loved her behavior when she was under the Sleeve Potion.
"...and your voice is just so sexy!"
That line made me laugh so hard, my sis who was on the other computer gave me a strange look. I just loved that, along with other sentences you gave her.

I am looking very much forward to the next chapter...when they have to spend a night together in the woods. Very romantic...and very dangerous. I really am looking forward to seeing how things go. ;) I can't even describe how good this chapter is. You're on a roll with good chapters. Smashing job, dear!

Author's Response: I am so pleased that you are enjoying the action/adventure portion of our programme! Poor Hermione, she keeps saying just whatever pops into her head! I could not resist the comment on his silky voice ;) Thank you for your enthusiasm, sweetie!!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 07/20/06 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Subversa, dear, first I must ask you to forgive me for my long absence in leaving you reviews for your wonderful story. Let me assure you that I still follow it diligently, if not eagerly and that your chapters get better and better. My personal favorite so far was the chapter before this one.

Yes, you must tell your husband that you were absolutely right in telling him that we would raid your castle, marching in and demanding to see the next part. He has avoided nightmares of girls pursuing the both of you by wisely letting you go on with the story. ;)

I promise to leave a longer review, but I must go now. Congrats on a job well done!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/20/06 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Wow, dear. I am amazed. This chapter has quickly become one of my faves. It is so awesomly written!!
I love everything. I'm sorry I can't give an adequete review now...but I will later!!

Author's Response: LOL! No worries; if you like it so much it leaves you speechless, how can that be bad?

 

Breaking the Mind Trap by coppercurls
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: February challenge #1, in defense of love, by coppercurls of Hufflepuff House. Hermione finds herself reliving her worst nightmare, the only problem is that the nightmare was real. Sometimes we only need a little help to pull us from our greatest problems.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1589 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/27/06 Updated: 02/27/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 06/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: Breaking the Mind Trap

What a wonderful story! How captivating!
I love how you start the beginning - so quickly yet powerfully.

She screamed, the animal-like howl stretched like a taut wire in the quiet of the night.

I love the sentence above. It introduces the story for the readers quite surprisingly. One would not expect for a beginning to be so rough, so filled with emotion. The description doesn't mar the beginning, however, it adds to it; fills it up. I like the choice of words - taut, howl, quite, wire, night. They're quite normal words, but when placed together in the context you put them in, they create quite a distinct atmosphere. What is interesting is that you started out your first sentence with a strong metaphor, something I don't quite see around here. And that's how you guaranteed the reader's attention....that's how you reeled them in. Lovely.

The way you presented Hermione's feelings was fantastic. It's how one would expect her to feel and act, but you added a special touch of your own.

The transition from reality to her dream wasn't as smooth. However, for some reason it fits with the story perfectly. The story up to this point is raw, tough, strong. Your transition gave it an edge; another push. I don't think a smooth transtition would have worked as effectively, then.

Your paragraphs flow fluidly together. You don't have Hermione feeling horrified and then calm the next. The paragraphs eventually give way to each other, they transfer cleanly from one to another. Even in that transition from present to past, the paragraphs' mood stays the same. It never really changes.

In that vein, I quite like how you managed to keep the mood consistent to the end of the fic. Even if the words and phrases had different meanings - opposite words, the mood never quite changed. Even at the end, when everything is sunny and hopeful, as readers we never forget what happened before. We don't forget. Even though Hermione is now happy, no longer suffering, we still remember how it felt before. That may sound too easy to you. That of course everyone remembers what happened earlier in the fic. But they momentarily forget when they read the solution. In your story, as we're reading the ending lines, in the back of our minds, something nags and holds on tight, making us remember what happened earlier WHILE reading the current text. And that's pretty impressive.

Dear, I've rambled on more than I thought I would. But your story is quite fascinating. Let me get back on track... ;)

To the dream...I like how you keep Draco's personality hidden in him. He's obviously changed, different. But you still have him posess some of his previous qualities, so it' realistic. He's not kind-to-everyone-suddenly-nice Draco, but the change is evident. You don't completely change him, like some authors do. Rather, you change one side of him, and leave the other intact. The other side of him still gives snide remarks. It still isn't as polite as it could be. It still is a part of him.

I love the ending of the dream...it connects with the rest of the fic splendidly. The light of in the doorway introduces the hope that the rest of the story brings. It is a great prelude to the rest of the text. What makes it a bit strange is Draco saying he's scared. It doesn't quite fit in with the current situation. He was confident at the beginning, and then he experienced hesitation; fear. But it is a human emotion, and almost an expected one. I suppose it's part of the change in the story that you're introducing, however, it mars the area there a bit.

At the beginning of the dream, Draco is saving Hermione. But then, at the end, you have Hermione saving Draco. It's a subtle hint, yet a profound difference. It shows what love can do and how it can change people.

The ending is satisfactory and clears away any doubts or lingering feelings. I think it's the perfect ending to your story, if there is such. You don't give away everything...there are a couple things for us to mull over.

Stunning job, Kristin! Loved it. ;)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the critiques/ comments, you have no idea how much I appreciate them. I really wanted this story to be raw emotion rather than plot, too much love seems to be the wishy washy stuff of pink paper hearts and butterfly wings. Draco is my favorite character to write, so I am really relieved that you (as a fellow Draco lover) think he is in character. As for Draco being scared, I wanted him to have thought about getting Hermione out, but not really contemplating what would happen after that. He could block it out up to the point where he was faced with the door and then he had to make and irrevokable decision. I probably should have showed that better rather than just assuming the reader would pick up on it. Oh well. Thank you again and glad you liked it!

 

Keeping the Boat Afloat by Jazz
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 78]

Summary: Harry goes into his sixth year at Hogwarts with more than a few surprises under his belt. Life is thickening around them, and some close friends can’t seem to handle it. Fights and passionate embraces are abound, but only to the strong-willed, of which there are many. The real struggle comes in keeping it all from going downhill – and fast.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 52136 Chapters: 28 Completed: No
Published:
03/04/06 Updated: 08/18/07


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/07/06 Title: Chapter 1: Summer Letters

You are allowed to put in author notes. As for your story, it's a promising start.It hasn't got a lot of the action in it, though. But that's coming up in the later chapters, right? Great start.

 

Finality by Eilime
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 175]

Summary: One-shot

He tore, bit, sucked, breathed, scratched at her as her flailing arms and legs won no victory.

She stood in silence for a while, knowing but not caring that he still stood behind her. She heard him mutter something and warmth surrounded her. A figment of imagination. An unreal cover.

Euphemism.

Though she was warm, it didn’t reach her body, her mind, her soul. She was freezing.

A hand came to rest on her arm.

This time, she let him.

At that moment, Hell froze over.

Warning: Contains mention of rape. Nothing graphic.

2nd story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots (Check out my author page for more information)

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Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 3049 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/10/06 Updated: 03/10/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Very superbly written! This isn't the normal Dr/H. I like how you used the "hell freezed over" thing. I liked your style, your repetition of words. I'd definately want to hear more from you. Beautiful job. This one shot is going to my faves. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the different ideas I've had. I'm happy to hear you'd want to read more from me, and it just so happens that I have another D/Hr one-shot coming up soon. It's different from this one though. Thank you, I'm honoured to be added to your fav list!

 

A Glint of Gold by hpmaniac666
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 154]

Summary: Harry's always been good at catching the Golden Snitch. But something equally valuable seems to be sliping through his fingers... Takes up straight after HBP, One-shot.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 3386 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/10/06 Updated: 03/10/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Glint of Gold

I'm very impressed. I liked the symbolism in this fic - the glint of gold, associating with Ginny's hair and stuff. That was a superb idea. Another thing I liked about this is the way they both realize they still love each other, and their want for protecting each other is overcome by love. This fic is realistic - it's along the lines that I imagined Harry and Ginny getting back together. Awesome job! 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it! But don't be too sure they're back together.... lol *ooooh* Thanks for reviewing xxxxx :D

 

Agapanthus by CLee
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1412]

Summary: A Sequel to Born the Day You Kissed Me


After losing Draco Malfoy, Hermione Granger is determined to have him back…so determined that she will go as far as inventing a spell that reverses the affects of the “Obliviate” curse. In this anticipated sequel, Hermione and Draco’s lives will collide, along with opportunities for Hermione to perform her new creation on her most valuable subject. However, when a new relationship between the two forms, will Hermione be able to summon the courage to expose their lost love? Will she reveal to him the missing portion of his life? Or will she simply accept the new Draco and without spells, attempt to revive the love that she knows is buried down deep in his soul....


This story is pre-HBP/DH CH 16 Coming Soon

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 52456 Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Published:
03/11/06 Updated: 10/25/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/15/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Pleasures of Sunlight

Very interesting. But your story is predictable, and your author note only furthered my suspicions. I don't want to spoil it for the rest of the readers, but let's just say Derek isn't going to turn out very gentleman-y.

I also think Hermione is too happy too soon. Shouldn't she be more sad? Anyway, lovely chapter! Update quickly!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/24/06 Title: Chapter 2: Rose Petals

It's a mediocre chapter..not a whole lot going on. But, it is crucial to the story, so it's good. Let's see then...

~Derek and Hermione - an interesting topic. Derek's starting to show his true nature. He's bold, unafraid, and unpolite. Poor Hermione. I'm glad you included him in the fic. It'll complicate things more.

~Draco - Poor Draco! When I read the part of the story including him, I almost made up my mind to stop reading your story until it was finished ; until everything was sorted out. I feel so bad for both Hermione and Draco. When will, if at all Draco get his memory back?? *furrows brow worriedly* But I'm still gonna read your story ;), even though there's dread in my stomach every time I do. Just shows what a superb author you are! Update soon..I don't think I'll be able to wait long. :)

 

Narcissa's Sacrifice by bittersweet_lullaby
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: The Dark Lord has a plan to kill Harry Potter once and for all, but he will need something done first, and he wants Narcissa to do it. But when the time comes that she has to complete her mission, will she be able to sacrifice something she loves to help her master, or will she turn back?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1524 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/15/06 Updated: 03/15/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Awesome. The way you go back in time, and repeat things adds to the story. It was very well plotted out, and you kept me hanging till the end. Now I feel sorry for Lucius. Your story had a big effect on me. Thank you for that. ;)

Author's Response: Thank you! Your review put a smile on my face when I couldn\'t conjure one up myself (what I mean is, I was depressed and your review made me smile). So thanks for that. :)

 
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