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A Thousand Words by annie

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: For the rest of the Ministry, the interdepartmental challenge was merely a failed attempt to restore trust between workers. But for Draco Malfoy and Hermione Granger, it was the catalyst for an unexpected relationship built on passionate letters, concealed identities, and secret meetings – and the beginning of an end that neither of them could ever have imagined possible, not even in their wildest dreams.

Post-war. Based somewhat on the story of the Phantom of the Opera. Also contains R/Hr, so don't read if you can't stomach that ship.

Status: Complete. Thanks for reading, everyone!
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/09/06 Title: Chapter 8: Secret Dreams of Beauty

oooh, annie, I've been reading your story for the longest time and I can't believe I haven't left a review yet! First and foremost, I have to thank you for writing the most BEAUTIFUL, CREATIVE, ORIGINAL and TERRIFIC (wow, that's a lot of caps ;) ) Dr/H story that I have ever read. You make the characters so realistic; I love how you portray Draco!Your story is just perfect. I wish I could give it 1,000,000,000/10. It's that good. This story is very descriptive, and I can feel what the main characters go through. Keep up the super job, and please update soon. I don't think I'll be able to stand it if I have to wait long.

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 5: The Dark Arts and Potions

This is my favorite chapter out of your whole story. First , the whole Ron argument is just great. It's worded just right, and sounds totally like Ron. Secondly, I HEART the exchange at the library w/Draco. It's - just.....perfect! I love how Draco acts towards Hermione and visa versa. I love those moments best - when you have him in that quiet, cold, yet civil, half-amusing, mood...I could go on and on about that. Well done! *huggles*

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 08/10/06 Title: Chapter 16: Let Your Spirit Start to Soar

Ooh, it's getting lovelier by the minute! Lovely story, annie. I'm sorry I can't leave a proper review at the moment but I just want to say that I'm hanging on to each chapter. ;)

The Boy who Lived by Diamond Quill

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A short poem about Harry Potter.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 07/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

Hello Diamond Quill!

Just like you left me a wonderful review for my other poem, I'm only obliged to do the same here.

Let me just say that this is an original and alluring piece of work. I love how you continue on with the Boy Who Lived phrase and carry it on.

This poem is quite compelling and has a certain charm to it. Wonderful!

Author's Response: Hiya! Well first of all I loved your poem so it was a pleasure to leave a long review :D And second of all thankyou for your comments, they mean a lot. I\'m glad you liked it! xx Dquill xx

Excerpts from Nagini's Diary by Scheherazade

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A look into the life of Voldy's pet snake, Nagini.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 06/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Memiors of a snake...

Goodness, you made me laugh! This has got to be one of the funniest fics that I've read here on MNFF. You've got a real knack for turning ordinary things into something extraordinary.

Take the Firewhisky, for example. "Glass tubes." Huh.

This is a very unrealistic story that's quite OOC, but you pulled it off splendidly. A few authors try their jab at humor, and only wind up having it unrealistic and not funny. Humor comes to you naturally, and it shows through your writing.

A couple things that I want to point out -

One is that your use of ellipses and hmms sort of ruin the story, in my opinion. They destroy the flow of the story, and dilute the humor. It would be much better without so many of them.

Two, you take Voldemort and make unnecessary comments involving him, in my opinion. For example - the one about him singing Macho Man. The humor just dies there, and makes us readers rather cringe than laugh. My advice is to take everyday things and interpret it through Nagini's eyes, and not adding silly things that don't turn out well.

Otherwise, I very much enjoyed this story. Two thumbs up!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the insightful reply. I\'ll definitely keep what you said in mind when I go to write chapter 6. :-) I really appreciate what you had to say.

Sins of the Father by TheVault

Rated: Professors •
Summary: There was something about him that made him irresistible to her. Siobhan Murphy will go to any lengths to ascertain her deepest desires - but when the object of those desires is a married man twice her age with secrets darker than she can imagine, she will find herself caught in a scandalous liaison that she can't walk away from. Not Canon-Compliant.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/08/06 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Black Marble

It appears that the relationship between them is growing. It doesn't look like it's based purely off lust. Other things are coming into the picture. I'm excited to see what you have planned for this. This fic has already earned a spot of honor in my Favorites. I want to congratulate you on a job well done. You create the sexual tension between the two perfectly. *applauds*

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 11/06/06 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Rising Tides

Here's review Part 2! (Sorry for messing up your page.)

You build things up nicely in the beginning, with McGonagall and Siobhan's conversation, leading me to assume that Harry and Co. were actually in Hogsmeade, talking to Lucius or something of the sort.

The part that you wrote in -- about Siobhan's feelings on Harry and his part in the war -- was, I thought, truly exemplary. It gave a good bit of insight into how Siobhan perceived Harry's role in it and how she thought of that situation.

And Siobhan could not envy him such a life.

There's something in this sentence that catches my eye...your usage of words creates a phrase that is strong in expression. The words 'could not', 'envy' and 'such a life' cast a certain aura around these two characters (Harry and Siobhan) that delves into characterization: what Siobhan's outlook on life is and how she would like to spend it; we can make out that she doesn't like the way Harry is leading his life. I'm probably overanalyzing this sentence, something that I usually do, but I wanted to let you know that is is one of the better sentences in this fic. With each passing chapter, I feel much more closer to Siobhan and understand her and her motives better. It goes without saying that your characterization on her part and how you let us know more about her is wonderful. xD

“I’m simply tired of your moronic tangents.”

*looks around* Splendid word choice, anyone? Lucius is another HP character you're quite comfortable with; it shows how well you've depicted him.

For constructive criticism, there's only a small matter that I caught: however properly you've written the aforementioned characters, I'm not quite satisfied with Snape's permormance in which he is conversing with Lucius. Snape seems to equal Lucius in some way; you make them both sound somewhat eloquent, in this section:

“Well, well, well,” Snape said silkily, “what have we here?”

I've always seen Snape as much more harsher, a critical and minimalistic person. See, in one instance -- 'Lucius interrupted Snape’s haughty discourse with a spiteful glare.' -- you describe Snape as haughty and accepting in terms of finding out what Lucius/Siobhan were up to. I would interpret his behavior being more cruel and severe.

The little clues towards the end that hint at what Lucius 'is capable of' increase the anxiety between the two. You've formed something special between Lucius and Siobhan, it isn't love, and it isn't basic need, either. You're keeping me wondering about the status of their relationship; that's quite impressive.

Siobhan curled up into Lucius arms and studied his face with ardour

It's almost as if Siobhan isn't sure of what she's gotten into, of who she's dealing with. I love the part about her studying his face, like she's trying to hold on to him and never let go.

Closer Than I Ever Imagined by 3secondfish

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: After the Voldemort's defeat in the second war, former Death eaters are still at large. The Ministry of Magic has begun cross-training between departments to make up the shortfall of qualified wizards. Draco and Hermione are involved in a training accident and end up closer than they ever imagined.
The last chapter has been appended. I'm *done*.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/26/06 Title: Chapter 14: Gate-Crasher

I don't think it was confusing at all. It was perfeclty un-confusing. And it was a hell of a story too. You're a very talented author, and I want to thank you for writing this and providing me enjoyment. This is definately one of my faves! I wish I could give it infinity/10!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/08/06 Title: Chapter 9: Tales of the Darkness

I like this chapter particularly because of how you portrayed Draco's rage getting to him, and possibly showing more feelings towards Hermione. I also like how you developed Esmeralda. It's how I imagined a vampire woman to act and speak. A job well done on that part. Also, I thought it was a bit wierd for Draco to get rid of Niklos, without anyone really noticing or caring. I know that Esmeralda said he's a trouble maker, but wouldn't more people notice, or at least care? Excellent chapter!

Author's Response: Muggles! Never notice nuffink, do they? ;) Seriously, though, I would think that vampires would merely be tolerated as long as they didn't pose a danger to the public. Niklos mesmerizing Hermione in front of Draco was the magical equivalent of pulling a gun on a cop (don't forget Draco is an Auror here). This would be especially true since it's in a *Muggle* goth club; the magical world would certainly *not* want Niklos to draw attention to himself and expose the magical world by indulging his penchant for real blood. In this sense, live people are more valued than the undead. In contrast, Esmeralda just comes to the club because she likes attention; otherwise, she is perfectly willing to play by Ministry rules. Niklos is an example to those who don't.

In Loving Memory by Lainie xox

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Though not entirely visible from where Ron stood, he knew that one of those long lifeless black banners that hung so solemnly in its’ place, had the careful stitching of both himself and Hermione in shiny gold string. ‘In Loving Memory of Harry James Potter, the hero of two wars, and many hearts.’

This time, it was Ron and Hermione’s turn to be the heroes. The second war under Voldemort’s power has officially ended, but Ron is still at war with himself. His ever-growing feelings for Hermione are still ever-so confusing. When death befalls their very dear best friend, not everything in Ron’s world has to go wrong. And for once, he does something right. Ron and Hermione dance at a ball to This is the Night by Clay Aiken.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 07/11/06 Title: Chapter 2: This is the Night

I really like this! It's one of the few R/H stories that I have read, because I avoid the pair as much as I possibly can. But your summary drew me in, so here I am.

Your description is extremely well done. You have a great talent with that and help the readers create a good, clear image in their minds. Hermione's characterization is on the spot as is Ron's. Wonderful, from beginning to end.

A couple things though - I suggest that you leave out the Start of Flashback/End of Flashback/End words, because they disrupt the flow of the stories. Instead, italicize the flashbacks. I know that clashes with the lyrics, but I think the readers are smart enough to realize that it is, in fact, lyrics.

Those are my only nitpicks there. I very much like how, in your prologue you included that bit of humor when the story was generally sad, or quiet-like.

Superb job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I\'m really honoured that you decided to read my fic as one of the few Ron/Hermione stories that drew you in. I\'m also very glad that the characterization is good because I take pride in getting to know the characters really well when I read books. Also, thank you for your suggestion to italicize the flashbacks - I was told that be someone else too but haven\'t gotten around to doing it yet. =)

No Going Back Now by SomberBallad

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After Harry leaves Hermione tries to find love in a place unconventional to the innocence of her heart.

(An eventual H/Hr romance, begins with some SS/Hr situations)
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 6: Toxic Lust

Very interesting. You have a unique style, and I like it very much. Snape is being very very naughty, isn't he? Poor Hermione. I love how you describe the setting. I can see the whole story unfolding in my head. Perfect, lovely and terrific. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I love it when people like my writing style. Thank you for reviewing :)

The Veil by acire

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A short poem about the Veil.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/15/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Veil

Wow, very nice! You combined the right words together to make this a great poem!

Author's Response: Thank you. :)

The Upside of Being Down by Kimberley

Rated: Professors •
Summary: *COMPLETED!*What happens when you put a hopelessly "romantic" man-hussy and a girl with a soft spot for bedtime activities (not THOSE activities, silly!) together in a dark bedroom? Well, I don't happen to know either, so I suppose we'll find out together, won't we? Come with me, Tia C. Spencer, on a lovely ride through the countryside... er, lakeside... okay, so we won't actually be riding NEXT to anything, but it will be lovely, I promise you that. How can it not be, with me as your illustrious (and quite possibly mad) companion?

And no, contrary to beliefs very likely impressed upon you by this summary, I'm not a gormless prat.

Well... not entirely.

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/08/06 Title: Chapter 25: Follow the Big Green Arrows, They Know What They’re Talking About

Kimberly, I'd like to applaud you for writing an awesome fic that provided me hours of enjoyment! I loved this story a lot! You have a really nice style of writing. Every sentence has vivid descriptions, and I can totally feel what Tia's feeling. I like Tia. Her personality is really well thought out and unique. She really does have a unique mind! I like your Sirius, too. ;) 10/10

A Seed From The Ground by Seren

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Auror-in-training Kingsley Shacklebolt is learning to blend in with the crowd in downtown London. There, he meets a small, lost girl, and learns how much impact a simple act of kindness can really have.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Seed From the Ground

Amazing fic!! I liked your style. You described everything well, I could imagine myself there. Not all authors are the best at this, and I really liked how you portrayed everything. You put in a few metaphors and personifications in all the right places, and it turned the fic out nicely. I think that at the end, Hermione's words were a bit too dreamy. I would have put the same sentences down, but more subtly. I also like this whole plot. I wonder if Kingsley will tell her later....wonderful story, yet again. 10/10

Voices by miss padfoot

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Remus is trying to cope after Hallowe'en 1981.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 02/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

I loved this story; it is truly one of the best in this genre. What I like about it is the style. Remus was thinking just like any other human being would if they thought they'd been betrayed. You could really feel his pain and sorrow. You got the feelings down perfectly, and I feel that was really important for a story of this nature. Great job, Preethi, dear. I wish I could give it more than 10 points!

Author's Response: Ooh, *blushes* Thank you for your comments and thanks a million for taking the time to review Anna, dear.


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 01/12/06 Title: None

Hey Hayli--sorry you haven't heard from me earlier...just got my account. Anyway, just reread your story ...its sooo good! Can't wait till the next chapter! Im adding this story to my faves! Keep up the good work! ;) See ya at school;)

Author's Response: Hehe thanks Anna! Ch. 7 is written and hopefully will be up soon....hopefully....:) I'm really glad you like it. Now YOU need a story up ;-)

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 01/12/06 Title: None

Hey Hayli--sorry you haven't heard from me earlier...just got my account. Anyway, just reread your story ...its sooo good! Can't wait till the next chapter! Im adding this story to my faves! Keep up the good work! ;) See ya at school;)

Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 01/14/06 Title: None

Really sorry for the double review. My computer has just been crazy!

Author's Response: Anna! Lol don't worry about it ;-)

Despair by Foxy Wolf

Rated: Professors •
Summary: After Harry’s death; Ginny find solace in Blaise Zabini. She thinks of the time when she knew him as a Slytherin, as a saviour and as a lover.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 08/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Despair

*mouth goes dry*


*blinks and loves*

What a gorgeous poem. The word choice is so appealing and just amazing!

I trembled when your lips caressed my thighs
Adrenalin rushed through me
I became another person with you

My favorite part. *loosens collar* It's getting a bit hot here.


I cannot do anything but squee over this. You represent the girl's feelings very well and you show that perfectly, in each line.

*huggles and walks off mumbling incoherently*

Author's Response: *Loves teh Anna*

What more can I say. This is actually the first HP related poem I\'ve ever written.

The Prongs Complex by Cherry and Phoenix Feather

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: James finally asks Lily out. The problem is, he chose a roundabout way of getting to her. Plus, he stands a high risk of breaking his neck in the process. Told from Remus Lupin's POV. Rated 3rd-5th years for slight language and mild innuendo on James's part. One-shot.

A/N: Quick note to all: I am sorry, but there are no plans for a sequel for PC. I hate to disappoint you all, but I feel that the story is better standing alone, leaving the rest to your imaginations.
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 06/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Prongs Complex

Liz, darling, I don't know what to say. I really don't. I'm speechless.

This story was so damn good, girl! Everything about it fit together so well, and the ending was so spectacular.

You can check the SBBC discussion thread in a while, as soon as I discuss it!
It's definately one of my faves, and you made me love J/L again!