Penname: Periwinkle [Contact]
Real name: Anna
Member Since: 12/19/05
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Stream of Consciousness by Foxy Wolf
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Hermione thinks of her love for Harry. Her mind is wandering and reflecting on her feelings for Harry and their relationship.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 179 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/16/06 Updated: 03/16/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/31/06 Title: Chapter 1: Stream of Consciousness

Very nicely done, Foxy! I liked this because it showed her feelings for Harry in a different light. It's a bit estranged, but in a good way. It's not too close, but it's not too far away. Am I making sense? Like, Hermione's feelings for Harry in the poem aren't being shown as too close, but they're not of dislike. It has a bit of mystery to it, too. Great Job! 9/10.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your great review, and you make perfect sense ;-)

I didn't wan't her feelings to seem too direct because I didn't wan't the poem to be fluffy. I'm glad you noticed that.

 

Two Lattes from Hell, Please by Eilime
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 98]

Summary: Post-Hogwarts

Hermione sighed in relaxation. She was sitting in her favourite café, the cafe latte steaming cheerily on the small, round table as she immersed herself in the news of The Times. As she flipped a page, the newspaper folded annoyingly backwards and revealed the scenery beyond.

Hermione let out a piercing scream.

4th story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shot (Check out my author page for more information)

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Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2778 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/20/06 Updated: 03/20/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Darling, that was by far your best one shot. I'm absolutely in love with it. It's so beautiful!! I like your Draco, too. Very nicely done. The cafe thing....when she realizes that he's not coming, and leaves, and goes to her fifth cafe, and he's not there, and..so on. That was just awesome. The way Hermione realized that she actually missed Draco. 10/10.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked this one too. I'm pleased you hear you liked that part of the story where the presence of Draco was actually anticipated. I'm very flattered. I hope you like the next one as well (once I get it done). Thanks!

 

On Edge by Eilime
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 37]

Summary:

His knuckles were becoming white. Draco tried not to look down the cliff as he held on for dear life. He was hanging by the edge of his fingers now, his muscles vibrating with the effort of holding on. Searching for somewhere to fasten his footing and maybe crawl back up, his foot slipped as small stones glided down the vertical cliff, and he was left dangling, holding on by his wish to live. He could hear the sea crushing unceremoniously against the rocks bellow. They crashed imperviously with the stone, inviting him to their midst.

“I can’t reach you; you’re too far away...” she spoke softly.

5th story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots (Check out my author page for more information)

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Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2502 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/27/06 Updated: 03/27/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 03/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

I liked it, but not as much as I did TLFHP. It was a very interesting read, and definately something different than from the normal Dr/H fics. I liked how you transitioned from the dream into reality. Pagans. Ha. *shakes with laughter* That was a good one. Nice, Eilime, nice.

Anyway, I like how this went with what Draco had to do - change himself. I like how you took that one simple topic and turned it into a great one shot. Awesome job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm pleased to hear it was good and different, and that you liked the dream/reality transition. So you at least liked the pagans :) Thank you. I'm happy to hear you liked the overall theme of the story. Though a lot of D/Hr stories have Draco changing, this was not the change in itself but what got him to change, or who, and I'm happy to hear it turned out all right. Thanks!

 

Late Bloomer by Just Tink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 110]

Summary: Cassandra Pralent was your typical pureblood- rich, spoiled, and prepared to go to Hogwarts as soon as she turned eleven. But Professor McGonagall delivers horrible news- Cassandra is a Squib. When she is rejected at home and at school, she is forced to accept unlikely friends. And just when Cassandra feels life is getting better, her fate becomes entwined with that of the Trio in a most sinister fashion…

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 31672 Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Published:
03/29/06 Updated: 09/05/07


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: The News

Very nice. I could also feel Cassandra's dread. You captured her feelings very well. I like your style. I don't know, but it has a certain aura around it. The only thing I didn't like was the parent's reactions. I mean, they should love their daughter and hide their dissapointment.

That aside, great job! 9/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Between you and HP_Ber I've never gotten so many great reviews on my style. Although Cassandra's parents aren't very nice, are they? I've got to admit, I also wish they were a bit kinder about her squibness, but that wouldn't have been very interesting. I might work them into a later chapter just so I can write them again- they're good characters to write.

 

Right To Be Wrong by HPLoverForever
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 44]

Summary: Lily Evans had never expected what came during her 7th year at Hogwarts. Love was something that was farthest from her mind. With the deaths of her parents, Lily wasn't ready to take any chances with things like that. Academics only, right? Wrong. Follow Lily through her final year of school and watch her fall in love with the one person she thought she'd always hate.

Oh my gosh, you guys. I'm SO sorry for the HUGE lack of update. My computer is in the shop at the moment and I won't have it back for a while. Chapter 3 of RTBW is almost finished and then it will be sent off to my lovely beta. Until then, I'm planning on the future chapters of this fic and my other fic, 'Dear Diary,' which I am really really focusing on. In the mean time, you could always take a look at that... ;)

Thank you all so much for your patience! xox

EDIT: Chapter three is officially written. I'm going to have it betaed tomorrow and it should be ready within a few days!

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 3164 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
04/04/06 Updated: 07/13/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Hayli, that was awesome! I loved it! It's so much better than 'Stuck'. I see I'm in your favorite author list. Thank you so much, darling! The only thing I didn't like is that I thought the death of her parents went by too fast. Can't wait till Ch 2!

Author's Response: xD Thank you Anna! I personally think it's better than Stuck too, hence my reasoning for deleting it. Ohh don't worry, the deaths haven't even been mourned for yet ;-)

 

Bittersweet Revenge by atkarid
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary:

He was known as weak, the stupidest of the stupid, the frailest of the frail, and the nicest of the nice.





But they were wrong.



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1084 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/06/06 Updated: 04/06/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 08/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: Bittersweet Revenge

What a great portrayal of Neville. I must admit that this is the first fic that I have read featuring him, and I am impressed with your skill. You write as if you really know Neville, which is lovely. Many authors think they know a character but when they write one, they'll find out that they're not as good as they thought they'd be. You, however, write Neville perfectly and that is refreshing to see as many author have a particularly hard time with him.

Your description is also noteworthy. You choose vivid words and place them in a place where they'll be most effective. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks, Anna! I sorta like character studies, so yeah... and most of the vocabulary credit has to go to my BETA. But I\'m glad you thought the characterization was good. Thanks!

 

Aftermath by Just Tink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: As Hermione Granger walks through the destruction left from the final battle, she finds that life can come from the most unusual places. Written for the Poetry Challenge Number 2: "Rebirth, the phoenix dies and is reborn again. Isn't it amazing how beauty can blossom from something that begins so ugly." Third place winner!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 215 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/15/06 Updated: 04/16/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Aftermath

I really like it! I liked your style, and the way you conveyed the detail. Nice description. ;) You ended with a very powerful ending. Great job!

Author's Response: thanks so much! It was my first shot at Harry Potter poetry, and I think it turned out alright. Thanks again!

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Aftermath

I really like it! I liked your style, and the way you conveyed the detail. Nice description. ;) You ended with a very powerful ending. Great job!

Author's Response: thanks again!

 

Dear Mrs. Potter... by DaisyMaeEvans
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 202]

Summary: Past Featured StoryProfessor Granger deals with a pair of students who have inherited a knack for trouble...

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1446 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/15/06 Updated: 04/16/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 07/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

This is an awesome story and I had a great time reading it. I love your idea - it's very unique to have professional and casual letters exchanged between Hermione and Ginny. You showed us different sides of both characters and that's what made it enjoyable. Like a few other reviewers have already mentioned, there were some constant mistakes in this that didn't quite mar the story, but were there nevertheless. Ginny's name is spelled wrong - you need to switch the 'v' and the 'r'. Hogwarts is a school, not an academy.

In spite of this, I laughed during this and you've managed to turn it into a good humor fic. Great job!

Author's Response: Yes, I\'m EXTREMELY embarrased that I made such stupid canon mistakes!!! I\'m glad you liked the story though. Thanks for letting me know! -Daisy

 

Snape's Folly by Dumbledore Prince
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary: Post-HBP one-shot. Only two days after Dumbledore’s murder, Severus Snape is sitting in Number Thirteen, Spinner’s End. He is thinking about what he has done, and what rewards he has got. Little does Snape know about the vicious trap he has walked into, and the price he has to pay in return …

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 2640 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/17/06 Updated: 04/24/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 08/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

What a sad, almost heart-breaking story!

My eyes were pretty much glued to the computer screen the whole time, which just shows what an amazing author you are.

This fic has really affected me...I wasn't able to type the first sentence of this review right after I finished reading the last line. You've got me thinking, quiet. A feat not many authors can do, so I congratulate you on a job well done.

The whole conversation between Snape and his mother is enthralling; engaging. That part was when I realized this wasn't going to be any ordinary Dark fic.

The jet of green light hit her squarely in the chest. Severus was extremely angry. He snatched his wand from Rookwood and, before anyone could stop him, yelled “AVADA KEDAVRA!” and pointed his wand at Bellatrix; who fell to the ground a second later; dead and lifeless. Severus stupefied Bellatrix’s husband soon after killing Bellatrix. He looked around only to see the other three people Disapparating after one of them cast the dreaded Dark Mark into the air. Now he moved towards his mother’s body, and knelt by her side, looking at her pale, long face and into her blank, lifeless eyes.

This section is blunt and to the point, which fits the mood of the story spectacularly. It makes the reader feel very strongly for the desperate situation.

Although I noted the suicide warning before clicking this story, I forgot all about it until I came to the respective section -- another justification of what a lovely author you are.

As Severus Snape swallowed the chill potion and felt his body go numb, he sat down in a chair, and closed his eyes. His last thoughts went to the only person who had truly cared about him.

Not Albus Dumbledore – but Eileen Prince.


One of the better endings I've seen on MNFF. I don't think I have to explain why it is so incredible. Everything -- all that Snape had done and learned and seen in his life -- comes down to this.

Remarkable job!

Author's Response: *SQUEE!* Anna, what a long and appreciative review! Thank you! It seems you like everything about the story. I\'m glad that I managed to move you and ... er ... momentarily stun you into silence. :D

Author's Response: This isn\'t the only angsty/tear-jerker fic that I\'ve written. More stories of that kind can be found at my author\'s page, if you\'re interested in reading my other fics.

 

Overlooked by Foxy Wolf
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Hermione knows Eloise Midgen from the halls of Hogwarts. She noticed how she was always alone, almost abandoned. Looking back, she wonders what became of the girl that everyone seemed to have forgotten.


Submitted for Challenge 1: 'Apathy is Lethal' in the Monthly Poetry Challenge. By Foxy Wolf of Hufflepuff House.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 140 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/18/06 Updated: 04/19/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 08/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Overlooked

Only three reviews? My dear, you deserve a million!

Waaay back on the old forums, I saw the wonderful banner you made for this story and have always wanted to read it. Actually, I believe I read it but didn't leave you a review. Well, it's high time I do this now, isn't it?

Where to begin? This poem has more elements in it than meets the eye and I'll see if I can capture them all.

Was it my fault you turned out the way you did?

Perfect, perfect, perfect. Stunning opening line; you definitely have the readers reading the poem. This line shows many things: the tone of the poem, the overall mood of the poem, the wondering, sad component throughout the poem, Hermione's thoughts...the list could go on and on. The way that she asks herself: Was it my fault? is so like Hermione. Only Hermione would notice such a thing and perhaps blame it on herself.

The questions between the stanzas are poignant, powerful lines. They are the ones that truly portray what's going on; the stanzas inbetween are fillers, yet touching all the same.

This is such a sad and melancholy poem and I'm sure that the result you wanted from the readers -- thoughtfulness, stillness, even having them mourn for the girl that had no friends -- succeeded.


Author's Response: You read my mind, love.

Or rather, you read my poem and understood it completely. I really love this poem myself because it touches so many thoughts inside myself and I can totally relate to Eloise.

Thank you, dear, for this very lovely review. You\'re the bestest.

*huggles*

 

Drama Dolorosa by joanna
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Dolores Umbridge has the worst birthday of her life, although it could have been so wonderful! It's the first (lessons- and students-free) day of the Easter holidays and she just got a very expensive gift from the Minister for Magic himself.


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4531 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/21/06 Updated: 04/21/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 09/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: Drama Dolorosa

I didn't expect to read what I did when clicking on the link to your story, dear.

It was a highly entertaining and amusing read -- only proving that you are a talented author. Kudos to you for writing a lovely one shot such as this.

I really like the various interactions between Dolores and the students/teachers. You're quite creative and keep your readers reading.


Severus Snape was enjoying his free day in his sanctum. No ignorant students, no melting of cauldrons, and certainly no Neville Longbottom or Harry Potter.


I laughed out loud on this one. The humorous ways you let the readers get acquainted with the characters you've portrayed is certainly well set-up.

Your description also lets us see the situations the characters get themselves into and it goes without saying your imagery provided clear, mental pictures.
Bravo!

The only concrit I have for you is to not make the situations too far-fetched, such as the one with Dolores bathing while the students scrutinize her. Conversely, those are the situations that provide the backbone to your stories and make them more creative. What I'd really like to see is you telling us how Umbridge happened to be bathing and the such.

Overall, I'm very happy I have read this story, as it is a rare treat! And thank you, for making the wonderful banner and avvie for me.

*hugs*

 
Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 09/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: Drama Dolorosa

I didn't expect to read what I did when clicking on the link to your story, dear.

It was a highly entertaining and amusing read -- only proving that you are a talented author. Kudos to you for writing a lovely one shot such as this.

I really like the various interactions between Dolores and the students/teachers. You're quite creative and keep your readers reading.


Severus Snape was enjoying his free day in his sanctum. No ignorant students, no melting of cauldrons, and certainly no Neville Longbottom or Harry Potter.


I laughed out loud on this one. The humorous ways you let the readers get acquainted with the characters you've portrayed is certainly well set-up.

Your description also lets us see the situations the characters get themselves into and it goes without saying your imagery provided clear, mental pictures.
Bravo!

The only concrit I have for you is to not make the situations too far-fetched, such as the one with Dolores bathing while the students scrutinize her. Conversely, those are the situations that provide the backbone to your stories and make them more creative. What I'd really like to see is you telling us how Umbridge happened to be bathing and the such.

Overall, I'm very happy I have read this story, as it is a rare treat! And thank you, for making the wonderful banner and avvie for me.

*hugs*

 

Your Eyes by Lilypudding
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Hermione Granger has always loved Ron Weasley secretly, deep in her heart. Only in his eyes, can she find truth. However, when she comes to this realization, how can she cope with the knowledge she has known forever?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 253 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/22/06 Updated: 04/25/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

I really liked this poem. You focused solely on the eyes, describing them in their entirety. It's very well written! I'm left speechless by this poem, especially in the last stanza. It has a lot of raw and unsaid emotion poured into it, making it heavy and light at the same time.

Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Periwinkle. I focused on the eyes because the person who I wrote this poem thinking about has very nice eyes. :) I put emotion into it because that what I was feeling as I wrote it. This entire poem is the truth. Anyway, thanks for the reivew!

 

The Life After by joanna
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: On a fateful night a Death Eater attacked Hermione, her daughter and Ginny while Harry and Remus were trying to hunt him down. See Harry cope with the repercussions of a decesion that changed his life forever.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 4074 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/24/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 05/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Life After

Iloved this fic. It went immediately to my favorite's list...and I don't do that very often. ;)

It was moving and heartfelt, and you really connected the reader with the story. The beginning starts out pretty mediocre until Heather comes in. She changes everything - the mood of the story, any quick opinions you might have had, what you thought would happen. I'm really glad you included her because it gave us a view of what the whole ordeal looked through a child's eye. I think that Heather's attitude towards the matter was pretty appropriate. I mean, this girl has a mother whom she barely knows, and that scares her inside. She knows her mother is alive, but her mother can't communicate with the girl. Heather, as is with all young children, needs a mother by her side, and taking everything in consideration, Heather's behavior was very appropriate.

When an author ventures out of the ordinary, and tries something new, their fic is most likely to be more memorable than other ones that aren't so original. I think this one shot's originality is the key to why it had such a profound effect on me. It was so different from the others, which feature Harry the one who's struggling and his friends happy and/or content.

Your word choice was another powerful factor. You didn't use vivid description, but placed the words in an exact spot, in the best place available so that it would have a deep, thougtful meaning to its readers. It's interesting the way syou do it...because some of the words are quite vague but it works out perfectly. I believe it works so well because if you're given vague words, there's room left for imagination and so different readers have different opinions, pictures, ideas etc. Each person can take this story and make it into something completely different.

The ending was very powerful. Very intense. It was so moving; so heartwrenching. It just made you want to sit there and not move. I think the ending is very important to a story. It's the last thing a reader remembers, and I think your end left quite an impression upon it's readers. Sensational work!

 

On The Rise And Fall Of Kingdoms by Noldo
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: In another time, perhaps, they might not have fallen apart so. (Regulus, Sirius, solitude.)





First place in April's Poetry challenge.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 333 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/25/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: On The Rise And Fall Of Kingdoms

This is a very interesting style you have it in. It's refreshing and unique, an added bonus to the poem.
What I like in this poem is the vivid imagery. You captured the emotion that you wanted to convey quite well. This is a very thoughtful poem. It has many results, or outcomes, I believe, because you don't really mention the exact, specific subjects of this poem.
You use complex, large words which make the reader stop and think. They have to read the poem slowly, in order to find the meaning of it.

Fantastic job!

 

A Present To Die For by whatapotter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Some people say that you can find anything imaginable in Knockturn Alley. In the dark recesses of one shop, a piece of jewelry, which has haunted history for eons, lies hidden. It is a beautiful piece; striking and elegant in every way. Truly, it is a gift any woman would die for.


Winner of the 'Borgin and Burkes' one-shot challenge.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 4389 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/25/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 06/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

When I finished reading this, I sat still for a long time. I'm not kidding. And after sitting still for a long time, I reread this over and over and over. Rhi, this is...Wow. Really. The idea, the plot, the way it's set up is so perfect!

Your plot is firm and has many details that grasp the reader. Such an interesting fic too! Let me stop gushing here and get onto the real reviewing!:D

A tall, dark figure slipped between the murky shadows of Knockturn Alley. His form melted effortlessly between the various rusted carts selling fresh human fingernails and newly acquired shrunken heads. His cloak danced in elegant swirls behind him, as it whispered to the rutted cobble stones he passed along. One gloved hand gracefully cupped a silver snake’s head, which posed with fangs laid bare, ready to strike.

What vivid description! I could not think of a better way to start this story. It's so grim, so dark and a lovely foreshadowing of what's to come. Your word choice and your sentences heighten the already-set mood and add to the apprehension that's starting to build up. Lovely start...it's really got the reader reading on.

The onomatopoetic words that you have throughout the story are placed in just the right places to create a special atmosphere of inquisitivness - it helps the curiosity move along.

Again, I have to point out your description. It is beyond what I would have expected in any fic. You know, it's rather interesting that you this story full of vivid description, yet it doesn't make the fic less interesting and doesn't give the feeling of being bombarded with too much information. Some authors complain that too much detail makes them cringe, and many agree. In your case, you have provided sufficient description and managed to make it engrossing at the same time -- a feat not many authors make.

Your dialogue is another thing I must mention because I can't just let it go without commenting on it. It's captivating and fits the personalities of the characters. You place the dialogue in just the right places so it creates suspense and has the right amount of effectiveness on us, therefore it doesn't detract the description or other details of the fic.

I like how you keep the names of the characters secret until the next part. Reading that whole section, I thought it was Lucius, because Quentin sounds so like him. It was a shock when I finally saw that it wasn't Lucius, but another person altogether. Very nicely done there.

Your character Quentin is very sly...he's very like Lucius in many aspects. My only nitpick in this wonderful story is here. I think it would work better if you gave Quentin another trait that seperates him from slightly from Lucius. Right now, he's too Lucius-like for my taste.

The ring's and May's thoughts intertwine very eerily. This part of your story was the most profound in my opinion. It was a very sinister and horrifying section, and we learned how evil Quentin is. I felt sorry for May...that she would be seduced by the powers of the ring so heinously. That part was very sad, and was one of the most emotional paragraphs that I have read in my life. Wow, Rhi, wow.

The ring is truly horrid, and it's sad that it has been used against so many women. The list that you included was worked for your favor, because it only increased the emotion in this fic.

Now the ending -- that was very well placed. I can't express what I felt when I read it...so many emotions!

“Narcissa, darling,” the striking figure called up the sweeping staircase. “I have a present for you.”

This last sentence fortifies your fic so much! Ending your story with a jolt like this made it all the more fascinating.

You are such an amazing and talented author, Rhi! This story is one of my favorites.

Wow.

Author's Response: Wow, Anna! I don\'t know what to say! Thank you so much for such a stunning review! Seriously, I think this review is better than my fic, lol. I\'m so glad you enjoyed it. I really loved writing this - it was one of those fics that just flows so easily on to the computer that I didn\'t even really have to think about it. Pity I can\'t replicate that for my other fics, lol. Thanks so much for your review, my love - you really made me day!

Author's Response: Okay, I just re-read your review again and spotted something which I didn\'t think was quite right.- The original man in the shop was Lucius, as was the man at the end. The bit in the middle was a flashback to earlier people the ring had affected, and therefore had different characters. I don\'t know if you got that, hun, or if I just read your review wrong, but I thought I\'d comment just in case! Thanks again, my love!

 

Summary: A poetic account of a night long ago atop the North Tower, from the POV of Harry.



Submitted for the poetry challenge number one by Avenger_of_Dumbldore. A huge thanks to the nutty imp for BETAing this for me!



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 235 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/25/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 04/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: One shot

Very interesting...

I like the how you managed to make it rhyme. I liked it very much. One thing you might want to partake is that some parts of the poem are a bit choppy and cut up, like this:

The jet of green light
hit Dumbledore’s chest.
It was all my fault.
I know it, don’t protest!

Then Snape gave a laugh,
ran down the stairs.
Please, someone please come.
Answer my prayers!


It doesn't fit together very well. You include a lot of emotions in that short space, and it confuses the reader.

Overall, great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment. I dont really get what you mean witht he not fitting together. Care to explaine? Do you mean it is to wordy?

 

Time's Healing Power by RedheadedWeasley
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: On a bright sunny day Luna thinks of her friends. Time's Healing Power is being submitted for the poetry competition, challenge 2 ("Rebirth, the phoenix dies and is reborn again. Isn't it amazing how beauty can blossom from something that begins so ugly.") by RedheadedWeasley of Hufflepuff House.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 100 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/25/06 Updated: 04/26/06


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 06/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Time's Healing Power

Amy, this poem is fantastic!

Your word choice is intense and the words are use sparingly, but they make a large impact on us.

I love how you put it in the form of a phoenix, it only makes the poem all the more interesting.

I love it!

Author's Response: Anna, thank you so much! I\'m so glad you enjoyed reading it. I think I am going to work on another that I might submit. Thanks so much for reviewing! You are my first ever!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Periwinkle Signed
Date: 05/22/06 Title: None

Wow. I really like this prologue! Your description is really awesome, and it's very interesting. I can't wait for ch. 1!~

Author's Response: *squees* Glad you enjoyed it! Chapter one on the way! Thanks for the review! AJ

 
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