Hi, I'm Evie. I'm fourteen and I live in Suffolk, England. I have loads of plot bunnies bouncing round my head, so I doubt I'll ever stop doing this! :D Have a read of my stories - go on, you know you want to! :p
I have many more original stories over at the-red-chair under the name apollo13 (which I also use on the forums) so please go and check them out.
I am available to beta, so just email me if you want something done - no slash or student/teacher pairings, please.
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Teddy - have a read, go on!
I really like this fic, I think you have the characterisation perfect. Is there going to be another chapter? I know that it said:
Completed: Yes, but considoring that this is a Harry/Ginny fic it seems to be an odd place to end: they haven't got back together. I really love this fic, so I hope that you do add another chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I don\'t think I\'ll be adding to this one- the next chapter would be Book 7 and I\'m not ready (or able) to write Bill and Fleur\'s wedding or what follows- but I am really pleased that you think I could. I may let it sit awhile and then give it another shot. Best, Liz
Author's Response: By the way, this isn\'t a H/G fic, just a General Fic.
This was a really good chapter - even if the formatting was all wrong. But,I don't think Harry would name his kid Harry. I like Anna-Leah, but not Harry Jr. Yeah, just my opinion.
Author's Response: Yeah, I fixed, Thanks! I am glad you liked it! Well, they will be calling him James.
The door had been painted a cheery red to match the newly added shutters.
Houses don't have shutters in England! :D
Sorry, but I just had to point that out, because that Americanism made me think of them all speaking in Texas accents! :D
Great chapter, albeit a little sappy! :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the tip! I changed it. I never knew that before...
In England, you can't just go into a shop, slap down some money and walk out with a gun. You have to have a licence, and even then, the police check up on why you have one, and whether you're responsible enough to own one. I think they should do that in America, there'd be a lot less gun crime.
Sorry, but that just annoyed me.
Everything else was wonderful, as per usual. :D It's sad about Hermiones parents and Nevilles grandma, though. Although, they seemed to recover from it pretty quick. ;)
Author's Response: Errr, I\'m well aware of the handgun restrictions in England, (being English and the holder of a shotgun licence.) Why do you think I had Harry purchase his gun, along with his fake identity from a \'dodgy\' geezer in a cafe? While my description of the bloke, the cafe and the meeting may not be very accurate, it is probably not a million miles from the way you would get hold of an illegal firearm over here. England is a country where you can not own a legal handgun but where gun-crime is at record levels. Just had to put the record straight there. I do, however, agree with the characters reactions and recovery not being spot on. This is probably my weakest chapter (wheras six is shaping up to be one of the best). Is truggle to write a convincing reaction to grief and turmoil. Don\'t be put off though, please carry on reading.
Eeep. Sorry if my review for this chapter sounded really harsh (about the guns and things), but I really cannot stand guns. I think they were an awful invention, and I just think it's odd for Harry to carry one. Sorry!
Author's Response: Hi Evie, I was concerned that your review implied, that Harry had just wandered into a shop on the High Street and bought a gun, (which would have been dreadful, inaccurate writing) whereas in fact, he bought it for a considerabe cost on the black market, from someone particularly unpleasant. I have no problem with people thinking (and telling me) that Harry carrying a gun is a bad idea. The reason I included it, is that Harry is basically going to war against Voldemort and his Death Eaters. The odds aren\'t good and he\'s desperately looking for anything which may give him an advantage - an advantage over pure-blood wizards who would never sink to using a muggle weapon. If its any consolation, Harry is not going to run amoke shooting every Death Eater in sight like Arnie !!!
Yes! I need the sequel, submit it soon!!!!!!!!! I love this story, it rocks, but I would have liked to have seen the stuff in the riddle house from Harry's POV
Author's Response: lol I\'m glad you enjoyed it! As soon as my beta\'s finished with the sequel, I\'ll post it asap. Also, if (and I probably will) I write the prequel, it will be the Riddle House scene, from Harry\'s POV. Woot. :) Thanks for reviewing!
Yeah, I noticed the signs reference! Love the fic, I'm putting it into my favorites!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I\'m glad you like it. :-)
Wow, best Bday ever - fantastic party and my favorite story gets updated with an awesome chapter! Love it, update soon!
Author's Response: Well, happy - late I guess - birthday! I just sent the third chapter to my beta last night, so I\'ll post it as soon as she\'s done with it. Thanks for reviewing!
HOLIDAY!! NOT VACATION, THE ENGLISH IS HOLIDAY!!!
I have followed this story from the begining and I'm really very sad that it's ended. Apart from occasional Americanisms (which I am very fussy about, sorry) this story has been absolutely flawless, and I look forward to reading more work from you in the future. :)
Author's Response: Hi Evie, HOLIDAY!! Got it!! It\'s a little hard to take all of Yankie out of the girl; but for you, I\'ll make the change. :) Thanks for sticking with the story and me from early on. It\'s been a thrill.
You keep spelling Horcruxes wrong - it doesn't have an A in. Other than that, this is an awesome story! :D
Author's Response: Thanks for catching that. I\'ve edited them out.
What the hell is up with Ron?! Update soon!!
Author's Response: I\'m glad you asked that question. Ron\'s maturing. You\'ll get much more on him in the next chapter. Thanks for reading.
I loved this chapter - it was really informative. The only thing that irked me was that loads of question marks were missing:
“I have shown you much hospitality since arranging for your freedom, have I not?”
"Yes, My Lord?” cried the rat faced Death Eater.
“Hi, Jillian,” he said. “Sorry to bother you, but could I come in for a minute? I want to run something by you.”
“Really?” he said. “I mean it’s Saturday. I don’t want to intrude.”
“Yes, Harry Potter, sir?” whispered the house-elf.
“How about the beginning?” he offered.
“You did?” said Harry, completely surprised.
I'm sorry for being fussy, but missing question marks really annoy me. :o Plus, I'm rather bored today, so I thought I might as well correct the mistakes. ;)
Can't wait to see what happens next - or what Ron and Hermion (Or Ginny!!!!) are going to think about him staying with Jilian overnight! That should be funny!
Author's Response: Hello \"I\'m rather bored today,\" :) Thanks for reading. This is one of my favorite chapters, as well. I\'ve been anxious to tie up the rest of Jillian\'s story. And sorry for the question marks. I did go back and edit most of them. However, one or two were left as is, since they\'d been intended to sound more like mild statements. There are about five more chapters left to this tale and I hope you\'ll keep reading. Thanks much.
This was really good - I love the feeling of awkwardness you get from both characters! I still don't understand why it needed a sex situation warning though...
Meh, probably for the better; it's more innocent and sweet this way! I'm a bit confused as to why Remus asked Tonks out on Valintines if he didn't want to go out with her, but I do like the fact that he kissed her first then thought he'd made a mistake.
Author's Response: Ooh my very first review for this story! Thank you so much for taking the time to read! :D Yes, I wasn\'t sure about the warning but better safe than sorry, I guess. Hmm, I found this plotline difficult to work with actually which may explain it being a little muddled. I was orginally asked to write a Valentine\'s Day fic, set in Harry\'s 5/6/7th year with a Remus/Tonks pairing so this seemed the only way to incorporate it! Hehe! However, challenges in writing are hopefully the way to improve, and that\'s what I\'m looking to do! :) Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Phily :)
Ha! Wow, just imagine Ron's face if he saw a Ron/Draco fic! I love the plotline to this; it's hilarious!
Author's Response: LOL! Ron and Draco! OMG, what if Ron DID see that? Man, too bad this is a one-shot . . . Thanks! ~Lindsey :)
Poor Dumbledore! This was superbly written - the plot line was very clever. One little thing I did have, though, was that Brooke is a very modern, American name and we're talking about before the second world war here. Also, I'm not sure how common "bastard" was used as a vicious insult.
Other than that, fantastic job, good luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: My beta said the same thing about the name...I guess I had gotten so attached to it I couldn\'t get rid of it...although I\'m starting to hate it now. Too late to change it, though. Anyway, thank you so much for your compliments!
This is such a cool story! I really love it, you've hooked me already. Watch your Americanisms, though, police officers over here in England don't carry guns, unless they're armed officers, but you only get them for drug busts and raids and things. There's usually about 50 of them. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks. I was told about English police officers not carrying guns after I\'d already posted that chapter, and to be honest it would be a little difficult to go back and change it now. On the bright side, there won\'t be many more references to it. Thanks for making sure I knew; I had no idea before writing this. Anyway, I\'m glad you like the story; thanks for reviewing!
You have the begginings of a good story here - I love the complex feelings you describe for each character. Your writing style is very good, but I think it needs a bit more... something. Like, Drama, mystery, action, suspense, ectr. In this chapter not much happened. I look forward to the next chapter - there is a next chapter, right? I know it said that it was completed, but this just looks like an odd place to stop. I reckon that you've just clicked the completed box by mistake, right?
Author's Response: Hi Evie, Thanks for the nice comments. There\'s LOTS more to come in the adventure/action/romance department. I just had to get a little of the preliminaries out of the way first. Wait until the next couple of chapters and you\'ll see what I mean. I must have clicked the complete button by mistake. I\'ll change that. Thanks for your encouragement. aurorahope
I love this! I set a drabble challenge for this in the Slyth CR, because I've always wanted to know how she found out and how she reacted! Love it!!
You have a lovely story coming along here. You seem to have the characters nailed and your grammar is flawless.
There's a slight confusion of canon when Ginny's explaining things to her mum, because it was HER that brought Harry to the hospital wing. ;) Apart from that, it's true to the books and mimmics Jo's writing really well. :)
This is for MQ's Potions class, NEWT level.
On the whole, I think that the making of the Love Potion was very well done. I loved the ingredients - they were unusual, without being too unrealistic. (Eg, no blood taken from the lover at full moon while he is eating a blood red apple, or something. >.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Evie! I had a really hard time with figuring out the potion ingredients, actually, and really just ended up picking things that sounded interesting. >.> Hee. Anyhow, thanks for reading!