“It is our choices, Harry, that show what we truly are, far more than our abilities.” -- Dumbledore
This was a great story! As everyone else has said in their reviews, your writing skills are great and the story is very moving. I also think it's cool that the lullaby you chose to use in the story is one that I grew up with. Very good and keep it up!
Author's Response: I thought I would touch a lot of people with that choice of a song. That and the lyrics fit perfectly, but that's besides the point. ;) I'm really happy you commented on it because now I know that other people think the same thing if just one person steps up, and that I accomplished everything I set out to do. So thank you very very much for commenting.
Very cool. You wrote really well... It was cool that the whole thing was a dream, even though the ending was a big *questionable* lol... Anyway, great job. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I do realise the ending was questionable, its just one of the many possible versions of the ending of book 7. (v unlikely but you know! I just roll with whatever I feel like writing) Thanks again! :D
Awesome. Just awesome. I'm speechless... You are just such a great writer! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Aww! I usually only write good reviews b/c I only bother commenting on fanfics that are worth the trouble and this was definitely one of them! Truthfully, I'm bored and was just looking for a finished, 1 chapter story to read. But this was good and definitely worth my time! And you have no reviews despite your well-written and moving fanfic, so I decided to change that. Keep up the good work. It's awesome. A little short but, hey, you got the point across I tend to be impatient sometimes anyway ;)
Author's Response: :) I'm really glad you liked it. I know it's a little short but I was trying to 'feel my way' a bit since I've never written a fanfic before. Thanks for reviewing, it means a lot to me to know what peoples' opinions are. I hope you like my next fic as much!
I usually don't read fanfics in Genaral Fics but I decided to check it out and I saw your story... it's great so far. The fact that you have good spelling and grammar is a breath of fresh air. The storyline is great and I like your style. I'm definitely hooked, so I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks a ton. It is so nice to get a review! I wrote this story mainly because I couldn't stand other ones with horrible grammer. Oh, and because I am unhealthily obssesed. I'll submit the next chapter as soon as I can. Thanks for taking the time to review my story. It gets much, (notice the comma) MUCH more exciting.
Oh my goodness. I just found this and... wow, I'm glad I did, because it was awesome. I have never read anything like it, and it was written so well. I actually got teary-eyed at the end, which is a first (: Love it.
I've been reading this for the past 20min or so and it's really good! Unfortunately I don't have time to finish it today but I'm about half way through. It's a very original storyline with an interesting view on Bellatrix's past. Can't wait to finish it!
Author's Response: Thank you! ^^ I know it's rather long, but I wanted to keep it in one piece; I didn't think it would break very well into chapters.
Dude! The other person, whose username I don't remember, who reviewed this was so right. Idk why people don't review the good stories and give the author compliments. You write well, your idea was awesome and original, and incredibly beleivable. I'll keep an eye out for any more of your fanfics!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate you taking the time to leave a review!
This is a fabulous idea. Quite a new and interesting twist by landing Harry, Ron, and Hermione in the middle of the Salem Witch Trials. Your writing is great; you write just enough detail so that I feel like I can imagine it, and I understand the history of the Salem Witch Trials thanks to your information throughout the story and the excerpts at the end. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Yay! I was waiting for this next chapter... I think the trial was written well; I couldn't really expect much better considering records of the real ones are, as you said, limited. Also, I'd like to say something about what (I think) you have said before about a previous chapter about the dialogue.. Right now, in school, I'm reading The Crucible, which is also about the Salem Witch Trials, and the dialogue is not that different from what it is today. At least, nothing that would make your story look bad. So if The Crucible was written with the same type of dialogue in the 1600's (which is probably the case) then you're not too far off. Anyway, enough of my rambling (: I gave you a 10.
1st story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots (Check out my author page for more information)
Your little series of Draco/Hermione one shots all looked really good, so I decided to give them a try! Although you said these don't relate to each other, I felt the need to start at #1 & go in order, lol.
Anyway. Very funny! Extremely rushed, just like these fics usually are, & I loved how the characters made fun of it themselves. It's just oozing with sarcasm :D
My favorite line: "His kisses were apparently muscle debilitating. Who knew?" *laughs*
One thing I didn't notice was Draco's eyes being described as "silvery orbs". I swear, whoever started using that phrase should be hit over the head with a brick.
Humor fics are so much fun to write. I just posted one in which I make fun of a lot of different cliches, & Dramione is one of them. I admit, I have read D/H fics that are good, but some are painfully ridiculous. Good job of showing the humorous side of it! You'll probably be hearing from me again as I make my way through these one-shots :]
Author's Response: Well, then, hearyoume, welcome to the series :) You\'re welcome to start from number 1, as others have done before you. Thank you, I\'m glad you liked it. It was indeed unfathomably rushed. I\'m a dedicated practitioner of sarcasm, so yeah, you might have been able to sense it here ;) \"His kisses were apparently muscle debilitating\" was actually a sentence I put in quite recently, because I suddenly remembered how a lot of fanfictions have Hermione almost swooning into his kiss, making him have to hold her upright. So I just had to add that! I\'m glad you liked it, then. You\'re right - \"silvery orbs\" is missing! Luckily I\'m in the process of writing another parody (on the Masquerade theme) where I truly believe I can find a place to put it in. I have read good Hr/D stories, too, but there just came a point where I needed to write this. I\'ll be looking forward to your impending reviews, then! Cheers.
Wow, this was freaking amazing!! I really loved it. You have a lot of talent and the story was great. I gave you a 10.
Ha, this is kind of funny...: I also wrote a fanfic about Tom Riddle's past before the HBP was released, but when the book came out, my story was also disproved. But I decided to submit it anyway, because I didn't want it to just go to waste. Anyway, this is cool. Very unique idea. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Hey, how cool! I'll take a look at your story. Thanks for the review ^_^! The next chapter's in the queue, so hopefully it will be validated soon.
I think this was my favorite part:
"Lupin!" Peter cried, picking the rabbit up and cuddling it. "I wondered when you would show up."
Oh man... awesome. It's rare that I find a humor fic that is so good.
Oooh man. *Sniffs* This was amazing! Where do I start?
First off, the lack of quotation marks - I LOVED it. I was able to follow along just fine, & I like the effect it had. It didn't interrupt the story, in my opinion, & I think it makes it flow better. Awesome idea to leave them out :]
I love the sentence fragments. Especially the beginning paragraph - & then how you tied it into the end? WOW. That's when I got a little bit teary-eyed.
Let's see. These are some of my favorite lines:
"Your daughter Hermione has magic running through her veins." - I don't know, just the way he said it gave me goosebumps :D
"The wall has crumbled again, but this time at a harsh price."
"Hermione smiles, and closes her eyes once more. There is no more darkness there. Only light--their light."
There was just so much power in your words, &... I can't even describe them. The whole thing was just wonderful.
This entire part I absolutely love: "She wants to wait, oh how she wants the world to wait for her. But no, it drives on relentlessly like a master cracking a vicious whip at the backs of slaves. Hermione wants to tell her mother that she loves her, but she has no time. Curse this cruel world. It gives her no time to live. To love as she would want to.
But Hermione loves her mother. It's there in her eyes."
Again, powerful words. It's so emotional, & the simile at the beginning is really effective. Everything's just beautifully written.
I'm so blown away I can't think of very much to say! This is definitely going to be added to my list of favorites. & congratulations on it being picked as a featured story - it's exciting, & you definitely deserve the recognition :D
Author's Response: A good review! I love good reviews! Anyway.
Yay, I made someone happy about no quote marks. I wanted it from the beginning, and I\'m so glad to hear that it even made it flow better. I wanted that, though some didn\'t think so. And sentence fragments are, IMO, more powerful than normal, blah sentences. lol.
The rest of the review just makes me grin. You can tell I picked all my words carefully - amazing. :) Thanks so much - this really makes my day.
I only saw one mistake:
“Er…yeah. Yeah your right,” said Harry -
Your should be you're.
But that's all :D If this is your first story, you should feel extremely proud. I mean, not only is it well written, but 255 reviews?! This must be good.
I've seen other fics involving Harry making the choice to hang out with Malfoy, but this is the first one I've read. I'm excited to see what happens...
I also love the quotes you're using, in the summary and in the beginning of the chapters. Well chosen.
Great job! (:
Author's Response: why, thank you!!! i\'m very happy that you have chosen to read this story where before you didn\'t. Yes, its my first fic, and i am so pleased and excited that i have that many reviews! yay!! i hope you continue to read more and tell me what you think. i value my readers opinions, so that i can become better. thanks for the review!! ~Sara
Um... I'm pretty much speechless. Wow. Powerful. Tragic. Breathtaking yet... heart breaking.
I've read many fics (and written a couple myself) which include Draco turning his back on the life that was chosen for him and refusing to serve Voldemort any longer - and then turning to "the good side". But this, I have to say, is probably the most realistic version of what he'd be thinking when he finally snaps. It is certainly nice to think that Draco would be capable of becoming one of the good guys, and I don't think it's entirely impossible, but once you really consider his character and think about everything he's done, this is probably the best depiction I've ever read of what his breaking point would be.
*Adds to favorites* All in all, amazingly well done. I wish I could write a better review, but for some reason I'm having a heard time putting my thoughts into words. I guess your story blew me away so much that I can no longer form coherent sentences (haha, just kidding) :D
:) Yay I'm your first review.
This was very well written. I like the kid's narration; it makes it more interesting. Part of me was a little surprised that a young kid like that could so easily speak of people being murdered, but the more I read I realizied it was just her naivety.
Anyway, though this was good as a one-shot, I think it would be great for there to be one or more chapters to it. Great job anyway, though.
Author's Response: Yes, more chapters are on the way! More little Narcissa to admire. ^^ I've got to sort out the whole plot, though, before I can post more! Thank you for your opinion. I agree, she is very naiive, and from what I've written so far, it's very much so. <3
Yay, D/H one-shot number two!
This was so heart-wrenching and powerful. I thought it was very realistic when Draco lost it & started yelling at her. You can understand his frustration even though Hermione's emotions are described so well.
The only thing I did not like was the fact that Harry did it... D: But that is, of course, my personal opinion. It was great nonetheless!
Author's Response: #2, indeed. Thank you, I\'m glad you liked it. I liked Draco yelling at her to show her emotions, too, so I\'m happy to hear you found it realistic. Yeah, some people don\'t like the Harry part, but what can I say... Glad you liked the overall story, though :)
Awww! I loved it!! For a while I've been writing D/G & have just been focusing on that ship, but I had forgotten how much I love Dramione :D
I loved all the flashbacks - they made me laugh out loud. I don't really know what else to say. This was so warm & fuzzy, lol :]
Author's Response: Happy to hear it! Well then it\'s good you came back and read some Hr/D stories :) Pleased to hear you liked the flashbacks. You\'ve said enough - you\'ve made a smile appear on my face, so thanks!