Oh dear, I do wish I could change this penname...
Oh. Sweet. Merlin!
I love it! Oh, the hilarity! I never saw any of this coming, not in a million years (but I guess you'd know that, having read my last review).
I can't wait to read your next work! Or perhaps the sequel to this one? *nudges*
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks. I\'m so glad you didn\'t suspect anything that happened in this chapter... I was hoping for that effect!
Lol, I love re-reading this...
Anyway, I'm reviewing again partly to tell you that this story doesn't get any less funny second time around (which is true, you know!), but partly to ask you something.
I was browsing myspace earlier, and it suddenly hit me that there should be a real Dark Lord's Blog! But, seeing as how you inspired me, I thought I'd ask you first, just in case you'd rather do it yourself...
Wonderful story (but you already knew that anyway...)
Author's Response: Hehehehe! Thanks! Actually, there IS a real Dark Lord\'s Blog, and this is it: http://voldie666.blogspot.com/. This came before it was posted on MNFF, though an online aquaintance of mine made it for me, seeing as I\'m hopeless with html. ^_^ I kind of don\'t want this story to be associated with MySpace, because that\'s not something that I\'m allowed to participate in... I\'m sorry if you really wanted to make Voldy\'s MySpace...
" LYK A PIG SUCKING CHEEZ OUT OF A FYR HOZE "
Do I even want to know what was going on there? LOL!
Another wonderful chapter! I loved readding Hermione's letter. Although... If she was counting the forks, why didn't she remove them at the same time? If she was really desperate to wear uensils in her hair, why didn't she just got some of the chopsick things? The mind boggles...
OK, some predictions/theories;
~ BlondeD is the informant (Tonks, possibly? XD ) If not, then it's Snape (who has incidentally stopped commenting... Hm, how strange.)
~ RAB is... A sleep-walking Lord Voldemort! XD OK, that was a joke (I don't write humour, as you may have worked out!)
~ That date will go well, until the Order ambushes!
Well, much love until the next chappie!
Signed; The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: No, I don\'t think you do... Answers to thingymajiggers
1. No, you don\'t want to know WHAT Bellatrix was saying... your brain will be forever contaminated.
2. Obviously, you, unlike me, do not have Hermione-ish hair! When you get stuff stuck in your hair, it is IMPOSSIBLE to untangle it! It just... stays there.
3. You shall seeee.... (And the odea of a sleep-walking Voldy is the funniest thing I\'ve heard in days... I\'ll guarantee that that\'s not what happens in the story, though. You\'re much more creative.
LOL! *composes self*
I adore this fic so much! I think it's wonderful.You have such a way with randomness, and making OOC-ness seem funny, rather than tragic.
I also loved the references to POTC. I thought that was brilliant. Can't you just imagine Voldemort sneaking into the cinema wearing a long coat with the collar up and a baseball cap for anonymity...
Also, I think you may have to send me an e-Crucio because I didn't get that reference further up. Is it an American thing, or something a Brit should know?
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Nice username, by the way... it\'s a theory that you get to shove in people\'s faces every time they see your name! Yeah, I can see Voldy as being the biggest film buff ever. As for the \"I read the news today, Oh Boy...\" it\'s definitely something a Brit should know. It\'s from the song \"A Day In The Life\" by my favourite band, the Beatles.
LOL! I love this! I can totally see Arthur sneaking artifacts home...
I loved the image of Perkins at the beginning, swatting at it with a broom! I suppose it must be a little scary to them, poor things! Incidentally, what music was it playing? In my head, it's Eminem ("Without Me", perhaps?), but it'd be nice to know what you had in mind!
Signed; The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Oh, I\'m sure Arthur sneaks things home all the time. *coughFordAngliacough* I\'m glad you like Perkins swatting it with a broom; it was one of my favorite parts. I really don\'t know what music it was playing; I tend to leave some things to the imagination of the readers (simply because I\'m lazy. ; P), but something like that is what I imagined would be playing. Thank you so much for the review!
Tonks' world has fallen into shadow. Voldemort has returned, the Order of the Phoenix has risen, and Sirius is slowly drowning in memories and Firewhisky. Tonks needs more than determination to fight the darkness. She needs Remus.
Wow! I never saw that one coming! I'm absolutely gobsmacked!
I adored the image of Ginny and Tonks playing dress-up; it was so cute! I'm looking forward to Sirius joining them for a game of pirate! ;)
I also had a lovely little giggle at the allusions you made to Lavender when they were talking about Lucy Steele coming between Ron and Hermione (though I do wish there was no illusion to make...)
Lovely chappie; well done!
Author's Response: Me too! Wouldn\'t it have been lovely if Hermione had stood up to Ron the way she did at the end of the Yule Ball (the most sexual tension in the entire series, imho, lol) and nipped his Lavender payback in the bud?
Oh, this was lovely! One of those rare things that are sad, but still leave you with that warm, fuzzy feeling inside!
Author's Response: heehee! thanks a lot! I really like that responce! Ya thats what the song allways did for me. Even to this day when i think about it i still get that fuzzy feeling! Every time!! Thanks again!
Oh, I really enjoyed this! You have a very simple style and it's such a pleasure to read it. However, and I know poems don't have to rhyme, but there were a couple of places where some rhyming might've helped the flow. There's a wonderful class on the Beta forum about poetry. You might be a little late to sign up, but you can still follow on, and maybe pick up some tips!
Good work overall!
Author's Response: Thank you! I had some trouble with the rhythm of this poem. (I actually have six discarded verses and an alternate ending). I don\'t really like poems that rhyme. I find they have to be very cleverly done, otherwise they sound cheesy and are predictable, but thanks for the suggestion. And thank you for reviewing!
This is a really nice take on this part of the story, and overall, it was a pleasure to read! There are just a couple of things I wanted to bring up.
First of all, I was a bit confused about whose perspective this was. It starts out as Narcissa, but then the last paragraph is Draco's. I do that all the time, but still...
Oh, and the other thing! I thought that we could've seen a bit more emotion in a couple of places. Most of the time, it was great, but things like; " “Thank you for the vote of confidence, Mother,” Draco replied. "
I thought it would be nice to put something more in there, that's all!
Aside from those couple of things, I really enjoyed this! I particuarly liked the exchange between Narcissa and Bellatrix at the start, especially the question of what was making Bellatrix dizzy! ;D
Author's Response: Hehe! Thanks for your compliments.
So I switched POV. *Sighs* I actually didn\'t notice that I did it. This was a little hard to do anyway because you really need to see both Draco and Narcissa\'s POVs. It doesn\'t seem complete without the ending from Draco but it can\'t start in his POV because he\'s not event there. Hmmm...will have to think on that one.
For emotion. I think, in this particular scenerio, if you want emotion, you\'ll have to look to Narcissa. Draco and Bella are too busy planning the future to get overly upset about anything. Besides I don\'t think he would be that upset with his mother. He knows she\'s scared.
I particularly liked the what is making Bella dizzy conversation as well. For some reason, I think both she and Sirius would have missed alchol a great deal while they were in Azkaban. :D
Anyway, thanks so much for the review.
I don't think this is odd at all. It's actually rather beautiful. It's such a lovely tale, and I adore everyone in this fic - I thought the characterisation was spot-on!
However, I do have one thing to say. I normally find that it's easier to write second tense if you use First Person, rather than third. That could just be me, but you might want to try it in future.
Aside from that, you made me very happy with this!
Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for reading this story! I\'m glad I could make someone happy with it. I\'m also glad I got the characterization correct, tricky to do in a dreamscape, perhaps. ;) I\'m intrigued by your suggestion of using a different tense. Just moving away from past tense was a stretch for me, but I can certainly \"see\" a story like this being written in first person. Thanks for the idea! And thank you for the wonderful review - see you around Ravenclaw! ~Gina :)
Oh, I love it! The exchanges between the characters were so funny, and no one is yet OOC. Well done!
Hey, does Hermione know she's a witch? Ooh... This could get messy!
Update soon, please!
Author's Response: *does shifty eyes at your comment* Hmm...Not quite. No. She doesn\'t know she\'s a witch...yet. Lol. I\'m trying to stay in character so thanks for your comment. I\'m glad it was funny - I tried. *hugs* Ritta
Oh, this is lovely! Such a sweet story, and a very interesting angle. I don't think I'd have ever thought of it!
If I might make one suggestion? In some places, you had some punctuation a little out of place. If you ever decide to do a longer fic, I'd advise you to get yourself a Beta reader, just to help you catch little errors!
Lovely story. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to leave such a lovely review. The angle just sort of came to me, as I have often wondered why no one realised what was going on with Harry. I do actually have a couple of longer fics with betas, however it is not something I normally worry about so much on my one shots. As you said, it is the little errors that get me and I never notice, but they don\'t tend to be so bad in shorter pieces. I may start running my shorter pieces past a beta though. Thank you again
Albus Dumbledore is a man of many secrets. One of them is his secret identity as an advice columnist, the Wise Wizard. When he coerces Snape to fill in, readers discover the Sagacious Sorcerer answering their queries would be better named Snarky Severus!
I absolutely *love* this story - the advice is perfect, and I adore all the pairings it alluded to (particularly Dotty Debbie and Nervous Nigel!)
Awesome stuff, as always!
Author's Response: Thank you! I do think he\'d be fab at seeing beyond the front people put up, (even without Legilimency) and so give good advice. I also think most people would only take advice from him if they didn\'t know he was the one giving it! :D
Precious to me, cute as can be.... Tonks was supposed to be with Teddy at her mother's. Why couldn't she stand waiting? What caused her to look 'anguished'? Not a deathfic, just a possible explanation of why Tonks 'sped off' to find Remus.
That was beautiful, though sad - I have tears in my eyes! Oh, I really can't get over how sad this is... I think I may actually cry!
As for Tonks being irresponsible... I personally don't think she was. We saw in HBP how she managed without him... OK, my parent's are only divorced (not dead), so I still see them a lot, but it's better for them to be seperate and happy than to be together and depressed; it does project itself onto the child...
My point is that it's better for Teddy to grow up in a Voldemort-free world where his parents are dead than a Voldemort-free world where one parent is constantly upset. Does that make sense? Lol...
Besides, he has Andie! :D
Author's Response: He has a grandmother that is reeling emotionally from the loss of both her husband and only child within months of each other. Also, what if the Dark side won? Teddy would\'ve been a target with only Andromeda to protect him!
Believe me, I\'m glad there won\'t be widowed Tonks hooks up with every bloke possible from Charlie to Kingsley stories, but I believe Tonks didn\'t swing the battle for the Light, her presence there wasn\'t needed compared to how Teddy needed her at home, and since I\'m not going to have her die, she\'ll get to deal with lingering guilt over that!
Oh God... Stumbled across this clicking randomly through people's Favourites and I'm so glad I did...
For one thing, your style is lovely. The mood of the narrative is fantastic, and this is just a total pleasure to read. For another, you characterise Teddy very nicely, really feeling for him and his struggle with what to do, poor thing... :( And the intruige... I'm torn between wanting to write you a much longer review, and itching to just get on with the next chapter... Love it, might just make it onto my own Favourites list! :)
Oh, wow... just read the whole thing in one sitting and think it's utterly fabulous! It's going straight in my favourites!
I must admit I almost got a bit lost during Penelope's explanation (the words "temporal" and "portal" started to blur into "temportal" after a while, and it got a bit confusing...), but the whole story was very interesting and you executed it extremely well :)
Oh, and don't worry about breaking your Canon rule - I think it was worth it for this... ;)
Hi :) Just discovered your fic, and I think it's rather wonderful!
I'm not usually a fan of stories that have Remus and Tonks really know each other before OotP, because it usually seems quite contrived, but you've actually pulled it off here; her loyalty to Sirius pulls it together quite nicely :) I think your characterisation is spot-on too :)
One teeny-weeny thing that bugged me though - it's a "chest of drawers", not "chest of draws" :P
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, when you have the time :) I'm interested to see how Tonks deals with imposter-Moody, though I suppose you've set it up that they're drifting apart a bit now that he's retired... Hmm, interested to see where this is going, lol :)
Author's Response: Oh Lordy, that error would bug the life out of me too. Once I can get in and edit the story, I will. Thank you for the review. I always found it strange that Sirius didn;t know Tonks before OOTP despite what Ron said. And I wanted to give Remus and Tonks more time together because I still hate the fact that JKR killed them. It's the one thing I can't forgive JKR for. *sigh* I get quite boring on the subject, sorry. Imposter Moody will feature in the next chapter ... sort of - heh heh. Thanks again ~Carole~
Just read the whole thing, and think it's rather wonderful :D Think the characterisation is spot on - particularly Bellatrix... Though I'm not sure if she'd have said that, as she seemed a bit nonplussed when Voldemort first mentioned it to her in DH... but it was so chilling that I don't really care! ;) I also love Tonks' old patronus as a monkey - it suits her, but it never crossed my mind... Overall, fab fic :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I basically took the pruning thing from DH, although it is slightly outof time, but it sort of fitted with the story. Thanks again. Carole
Oh, poor Remus... :(
I must say, I really do like the way you characterise all of them; totally canon-compliant, but still fresh and interesting (and this goes for all of your fics that I've read so far). I particularly like Peter (so many fics make him rather amoeba-esque, but you've actually given him a personality - his lack of confidence is particularly interesting), and Mcgonagall (who, quite frankly, deserves that slug of Firewhiskey...). All in all, very nice :) (though it would have been nice to see Lily... can't have it all though ;) )
Author's Response: I think Lily would have been interesting, but I wanted to focus on the four Marauders, and she would have distracted form that dynamic. Thank you very much for the review. I always ache for poor Remus as well. ~Carole~
This is hysterical! Poor Remus, I don't blame him for being confused! And I love the idea of Moody's eye being knocked out - I can imagine that would change the fight somewhat... Great fic, lol :)