Author name: Purplemage/Harald
Current Location: Caracas, Venezuela
I was laughing so hard!! and that hardly ever happens when Iīm reading Fanfics!!
I LOOOOOVED this story!!! Is so sweet and cute and yet it's not fluffy. James and Sirius' dialogue between notes was hilarious! I couldn't stop laughing, especially when they were calling each other Mr. Prongs and Mr. Padfoot and Sirius letter, I swear god it almost made me cry. Especially when he was writing down all the reasons why he loved Remus. This was greatly written. Amazing story.
I like your story very much. Is simple, random and completely hilarius. Keep it up. (btw I love how you write Hermione)
Loved it! Very funny!
This is the best fanfic I've read so far and I'm being completely honest. I loved it. You're a talented writer
I imagine Henry all chubby and with glasses, I don't know why but it makes it look more funny. "Oh and it hit me" "An idea?" "No, a monkey" I was laughing my ass off
Great chapter, Jenna! I've been meaning to review this for the longest time, but I...well...I hadn't. *rollseyes* This story gets more interesting with each chapter.
I'll start fom the beginning saying that I just love the title. It's a great word that it's no oftenly used, but it's not unheard of. A great eye-catcher if you ask me.
I believe that one of your strenghts as a writer is writing the dialogue, and it is very visible in this particular chapter. Even the one between Siobhan and Snape was enjoyable. How can you not like a tense discussion between to witty charaters as these? "Itís funny ó you donít really seem concerned about my well-being -- more about proving your own point" I particularly loved this line. It is very Siobhanesque. (hehe, I just made up a word.)
The scenes between her and Lucius are always enjoyable, of course. It was interesting to see them having their first huge fight. They've had discussions and arguments before, but never drama such as this. It was so irratating how Lucius kept avoiding the questions. I just wanted to stick my hand through the screen and bitch-slap him.
As the dialogue, the smutiness is very enjoyable. "Siobhan gasped as he muffled his pleasure with his teeth against her shoulder," This mental image made me smile. There is just something about bites during love-making that makes me guh! Sorry, for a second I forgot we were on MNFF and thought that we were on that dirrty community. *whistles*
Wonderful chapter, Jenna. I really want to see where this is going. I may not read it as soon as it is posted, but I must certainly will at one point or another.
Finnally I get around to finishing reading and reviewing your lovely fic, Jenna. I read from chapter nine till the last one in one sitting and I could read more. Seriously it's just wonderful. This will be a more general review since I haven't reviewed any of the other chapters.
First of all, Siobhan. You're probably tired of hearing this, but I don't care. I LOVE her. Seriously, it's my kind of character. She's witty, smart, a bit of a loner, sexy, and she wears heels!!!! What more can you ask for? I just love those dialogues between her and Lucius, they're a pleasure to read, seriously. Always teaching each other and making sarcastic/witty remarks. One of my favorite discussions was the one they had about the Muggles. She sometimes insults him, but always in a very classy way.
Hey Jenna, letís try this again, shall we? Ok, here we go. First of all, Iíll tell you why I love your fic: itís different, itís original, youíve created an amazing OC and itís well written. There are not many people who would dare to write about a romantic relationship of a married man with a student, and for that I applaud you, because I love reading fics that are different and out there. (I think I just out-gayed myself)
Letís start with the characters because thatís the part I like the most. There are not enough praises for the incredible Siobhan Murphy. She is as real as you can get and besides that sheís my kind of female character. Sheís witty, smart, strong, independent, and has a great sense of fashion. Itís funny because in the scene of the Death Eater attack in Diagon Alley, in my head I was picturing Siobhan wearing high heels, and in the end she was wearing them. That shows that youíve made such a good job with her characterization that I can actually imagine what sheís wearing/looks like without you having to describe it for me.
The characterization of the canon characters is worth mentioning as well because itís just fantastic. Lucius is perfection. I donít think Iíve ever read such a great portrayal of this character (yet again, I havenít read many fics with Lucius in it, but thatís besides the point). You took a character that J.K. left a little flat and turned him into a human being. I may not agree on many things he does and on many of his points of views, but I understand them. I understand why he thinks the way he does and as an author I think you should congratulate yourself for achieving this because it is not easy at all. The other canon character that I love how you portrayed is none other than Mr. Potter himself. I just love his relationship with Siobhan and how he has the need to protect her; itís annoying and sweet at the same time. Itís very refreshing to what weíve come to know as the typical Harry friendship.
The setting is great. The descriptions of the Malfoy Mansion were just delightful. It was so decadent and elegant (all that I love). I think the black marble table will stick with me forever (and what happens on the table also). The fact that it takes place during the wintertime adds it an extra touch. The weather is just another excuse for Siobhan and Lucius to look for ways to warm each other up. Another of the scenes that will stick for me is the one at the beginning where Siobhan is in the train looking through the window. I donít know why, but it was beautifully described, and I can really relate to the looking-through-window-and-not-paying-attention thing.
My only critique is for the flow department (that sounded weird). I felt that Siobhan and Lucius got together a bit quick. I wouldíve liked to see a bit more sexual tension between the two before they finally get together, but thatís just me. I like slow romances, but since the attraction of these two is mainly physical at first is understandable that they hooked up quickly.
Well, there is really nothing to say about the plot because I already raved it. As I already said it is original and refreshing. It is something that I had been looking for a while in fan fics. Keep up the good work, Jenna. Iíll definitely keep an eye on this.
PS: I canít wait to see whatís going to happen. Since Harry and Snape know about the affair this just got more exciting.
Author's Response: Hee, thanks, Harald. Siobhan\'s characterisation, apparently, runs right down to her toes? *hug*
And, yeah, I didn\'t want to prolong the actual \"initiation\" of their relationship just because a) it\'s the tip of the iceberg, and b) it sort of benefits the dynamic. It was definitely a rushing into something and getting caught up so fast that it confuses the emotions and you don\'t know the difference between love and lust and blahblahblah. *cough* And, YAY for wintertime. *wishes she had someone to warm her up* sigh. And, also thanks for the compliment on Lucius -- I was talking about that to another writer the other day, the process of taking a \'bad\' character and revealing a more human side. The only problem is that some people just don\'t want to accept it and think I\'m romanticising. Heh. *is definitely not romanticising Lucius any time in the near future* Anyway. *hug* Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reviewing.
I just read the whole thing in one sitting and I think that it's quite histerical. I was laughing out loud more times that I had thought I would. Random humor or as I like to call it "In your face humor" is not an easy thing to pull off, in fact not many people can, but you do it pretty well. My favorite line of this chapter was "If we want to survive this fanfiction experience, we had all better get a move on." that one really made me laugh. Can't wait to see what happens.
PS: Don't listen to the mods I love humor fics where the author inserts him/herslef.
Author's Response: :D Why thanks Purplemage! I also enjoy fics where authors insert themselves.
I really like your story is very cool!! I want to know what happens next! Where are Ron and Neville??
It was a bit to violent for my taste but it was still very funny. I almost fell of my chair when Voldie got hit by the train.
Author's Response: LOL. I know. I can be a bit too violent at times. I watch a lot of war movies (mostly on WWII). But, thank you!
That was a very good scene, I think you rushed it to much by the end but it's still good. The "I love you, I love chocolate" part was very sweet, good job!
Author's Response: I like that part too. Thanks!
I want moreeeee, add the final chapter pleeeeaseeee??? Sorry I know I'm a pervert but I need that sex scene!
Author's Response: If you're a pervert then I am too. Just think of it as being intimately curious, not perverted, like I do! Thanks for reviewing! I promise to add the final chapter soon!
hmmm... interesting, i wonder what would happen
Author's Response: *wonders along with you*. No, really. i know what I want to happen with the rest of the story, but I haven't actually written it yet. sorry! BTW, thanx for reviewing!
Love it! I love the idea is very original
The whole poem situation was really cute. We have to get in contact and see if I'll write a chapter or not, I would've done it sooner, but I've been really busy. Anyways, great story. You guys are doing a great job!
Author's Response: Hee. Glad you liked the poem. I was wondering what had happened to you actually; you can feel free to get in contact with me through the feedback form (if that still exists) or through PM\'s on the beta forums. Thanks for reviewing!
I really enjoy this fic, is very original and funny. I loved Harry banging his head on the mashed potatos, hahaha, I laughed so hard. Update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks!! I'm glad you liked it, yeah - laughter is awesome!! I'll try to update soon! Thanks for reviewing!
Congratulations Oppungo!! This chapter was magnifique! The part of the crazy frog made me laugh so hard! I really, really, really hate that song, I'm glad to see I'm not the only one. Also the chimney part was very funny. "Like Santa!"
Author's Response: Thank you Purplemage! I\'m really pleased you liked it! Oh, that Frog gets on my nerves - croak it already!! Though I thought it would be the perfect weapon for Voldemort! Oh, I\'m glad you liked the bit about Santa, that was one of my favourite bits too! Thanks for reviewing!
Another great chapter!!! I loved Voldermorts letter it was very funny and Neville's was also cool. I'm confused about the person that wants to stand out is it Ginny or Ron? Or is it someone else? anyways I'm waiting for the next chap
Author's Response: Thank you!! Yeah, Voldy and Neville's were two of my favourites to write, but I actually had a bit of trouble with Unique Wannabe. One of your guesses is right though - you'll find out in the next chapter who it is!! Thanks for reviewing!