Jade is a Piscean teenager living in a small village in New Mexico, USA. When she is not traveling or procrastinating with her homework, she enjoys writing, reading, languages, dance, music, and art and crafts. She takes care of two adorable and wonderful siblings. Along with being an author, singer, dancer, guitar-player, outdoorsy hippi girl, and pseudo-mother, Jade plans to be the future director of her fatherís business, The Tracking Project. She is a homeschooler enrolled with a prestigious curriculum and thus receives a prep school education in her living room. Hee.
Lei, I love your writing style! Their feelings were so real, I could pracitically know what they were thinking. Amazing. You are already in my favorites, but I will put this story there too. Alright, on to the rest of your awesome writing...
Hey there you...three? Jade Green is a friend of mine, but she's getting kicked out of her account, so she just called me to tell me to tell you guys that you can email her at email@example.com, k :)? Bubye ;D óTasha
You are going on my favorites. This is one of the best first chapters I've read in a really long time, and that's saying something! My favorite parts were: "Sirius thought we should wake you up before you started snogging your pillow again." ó "So, was it the hot-tub again? Or was this Room of Requirement material?" ó And finally ó Lily whipped around and her hair slapped him in the face. Do you know how many times I've done that?! Oh my gosh, I love it. So yes, very, very, very good job, and do update soon! Good luck!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! Please keep reviewing so that I know what people like/don't like. Hopefully, with creative criticism, I can write a better story that everyone can enjoy!
MadJH, another fine story that you have come up with. I love the intimacy of this and how close-knit everything seems to be. Iíve noticed that you are very good with incorporating real-life feelings about pregnancy and childbirth into your stories. *has read A Secret Love* Very well done with that. Your writing style is very enjoyable and flows for the reader, and I found myself falling into a sense of calm and quiet while reading. This is a really great short fiction just for downtime reading. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Much of what I wrote in this fandom, I wrote right after I had a child of my own and it seeps into my writing ;)
You killed Harry, Ginny and Ron!!! My god, I was almost crying. But Hermione and Charlie, that was fantastic. I love the way you write, it flows really well and everything fits together perfectly. I have absolutely no criticisms, unless there's one called "Longer"...lol, just kidding. And I will read your other story, but have no time right at this second :). Lovely, darling, lovely! ~Lady Jade
Author's Response: LOL! I frequently use that complaint..."longer..." and never fear, for it actually shall be! I hope you enjoy the other story when you get to it, my dear.
Awesome job. First of all, I just wanted to tell you congratulations on picking a fine title, because that's what drew me in...that was one of my favorite parts of HBP :). Your writing style is really good; my only suggestion would be to make James and Lily a little less formal, get some contractions in there, lol. But other than that, I love it! You're in my favorites :). Good luck!
Author's Response: Thanks about the title Natasha and thanks a LOT for the review. It just encourages me so much to write. I'm glad the story is in your favourites and hope it remains so. Thanks a lot for the reveiw again and keep reading.
rita_skeeter and I think very alike...no cliches! It's bliss! I can tell that you love Remus, and it shows because you take time to develop him...but of course that's second nature to you ;). The chess part was very good for getting a feel of Sirius and Peter, and Peter's playing style is just hilarious, lol. And the chapters are long! *Happy Dance* Do you find that it's easier to write longer stuff than shorter? I myself cannot write anything under 14 pages...lol. Alright, please update this one soon! Awesome job!
Well, since it's been so long since I read this story, I am refreshing my memory... and reviewing again.
I really like this chapter, I get a very peaceful, wintery feeling from the whole thing. I also like the way you didn't try to start the story with a huge, life-or-death kind of bang, but with subtle hints and a more realistic approach.
Also enjoyable is the mischeivous nature of Lily when she's around Remus, I think that's very original. They seem to cute! Lol.
And of course, your portrayal of Remus is perfect, but then again, you are Lei, so I think that says why.
Ahahaha! I don't know why, but this chapter suddenly hits me as completely hilarious now. I like the way you did this chapter, especially since it was dedicated to the undeserving moi *wink*. Lol. Until the next...
That was fantastic! I love the humor; the pillow fight in the morning perfectly portrayed all of their characters... I really like the twist you kinda put on Peter, because I've never heard the words "Peter" and "lecherous" in the same sentence before...
I'm very fond of the dance scene. I like how you bring Olivia Brampton in; it gives the story that random humor that you only understand if you've been paying attention... which is what I always look for in a story! Yay, lol.
It's really good, Lei, you should be proud :). Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon. Laters!
I found you, Leandra! YaY!
And I like this story a lot, so far! I like that you wrote Peter in (even if it was just a few lines) because he's SO HARD to write. And I also like that Artemis is not one of Lily's friends, because that can get tiring after a while *is being major hypocrite as she types this*.
Update this story, darling! And you can send it to me for beta-ing or anything else you need okay? You're in my favorites (authors and stories) so I can keep track of you.
And now, to fulfill the evening by daydreaming of a certain someone whose initials just happen to be SS...
Yay, it's up again! You know I love this chapter, since I've read it a million times before now, so yes, you know I love it. Sorry this is so short, but I can't think of anything new to say! Lol. Ttyl!
Author's Response: Thanks, hun, that\'s real sweet of you to say so. I know how much you love it, so I forgive the short nature of your review. Hopefully you can put up something a little longer for chapter 2, which is now up for the first time on MuggleNet! Thanks for the review, dear, and thanks for being a great BETA. I\'ll try to get around to reviewing your stories sometime soon!
Itís wonderful, Noldo, really. Itís incredibly unique and pleasing to read.
Your tone gave so much to this story! Parvati is always the character that we read about, and it never occurred to me that Padma might be the more subdued sister. Your portrayal of her character was lovely. I really did feel as if I was experiencing moving to the UK and going to Hogwarts and watching her family with Padma. Twins can be hard to write, sometimes, because theyíre very similar-looking, but can be very similar in their behavior ó or not. I loved the dynamics you created between Padma and Parvati because it was completely new and fascinating!
Your opening paragraph was so interesting. The descriptions of the photograph on the wall and Ashishís smile drew me in so well. It made me think of the old photographs I have of my own parents and how young they looked. This was a really beautiful opening and immediately showed characterization of both the parents as well as Parvati and Padma.
I loved the quirk of pronouncing Birmingham. It was realistic ó I could hear it in my head! I loved that Padma thought it sounded like ďburning ham;Ē that showed both her childhood and also the humorous side of her mind.
The paragraph in which you described Padmaís feelings towards Parvati and their reputations in the community was such great characterization. I thought it reflected quite well the relationship between siblings and how we feel about one another, because sometimes it does feel as if one is afforded a better adjective than the other. I loved your inclusion of that!
I started laughing as I read the part where Padma asked if it was always raining, and how she feels as if it could be true because itís that kind of rain. Her father ruffling her hair and her mother ďsitting very straight, a bit like a candle and a bit like a fighterĒ were such fantastic reactions. I loved your word choices there. The following sections were also incredible in terms of description and characterization. I just canít get over how well you captured the mind of this young girl!
I really, really liked the scene on the beach and what you described about Parvati always being in motion, and Padma being the person reading a book on the rocks and always looking up to make sure everything is where itís supposed to be. Again, the dynamics between the two took the story to a completely different sphere of writing for its originality.
My absolute favorite part was where Padma is looking in the mirror and wondering why she canít be like Parvati because they look the same. It was beautiful description, and the ending sentence was just lovely.
:) So, lest I simply gabble on about the wonders of this story, I will end this review to say that this is honestly a completely fantastic job that you did with it. I am in love with everything ó your descriptions, your characters, your enigmas and metaphors, everything. It was realistic, it was cute, it was hopeful, it was innocent. You captured the mind-frame of Padma from when she was six to when she was sixteen perfectly. The beginning was perfect, the ending was perfect, and so was everything in between.
Youíre in my favorites, Noldo!
The Great Wizard War has ended and a lot of things have changed in the magical world as a result. Perhaps the most significant change is the fact that the existence of wizards and witches is no longer a secret to Muggles. Hermione Granger is the new head of the Muggle Liaison Office and her life has become hectic since the end of the war. Historically under utilized and under funded, the Muggle Liaison Office has become one of the busiest arms of the Ministry. Ten to eighteen hour days have become standard for her and it is beginning to take a serious toll on her personal life, namely in her relationship with Ron.
This story was written for the February One-Shot Challenge and got an honourable mention!
Ah, another brilliant piece by Skipper. This was, hands down, the best Ron/Hermione story I have ever read. You have actually given me new faith in this pairing. Let me explain why.
Well, first of all, your writing style is superb. Itís perfect for reading ó it flows, and it doesnít feel overdone or forced. Itís straight out with a good range of vocabulary, without making it seem overthought or making me have to hit the dictionary. LOL. The way you write is really ... *searches for the right word* ... perfect. I find myself not really analyzing your words like I do with other stories. Itís more that the story comes alive for me, like it does when I am reading a fantastic book, and I stop thinking about the phrasing of sentences altogether. I see whatís happening in my mind rather than seeing the words on the page. Not a lot of authors can paint a picture so truly and easily to break me of my basic beta instincts.
The setting was also quite lovely. Very realistic, very Weasley. I love the places you chose for the story to take place, because they are exactly the kinds of places I would expect these things to place at! LOL. Starting off the story with Ronís anger about Hermione standing him up again immediately pulled me in. Part of it was how well it was written, and the other part was that Ron seemed so human, I could really relate to what he was feeling.
Ronís broom shenanigans after fighting with Hermione was quite familiar. Men really do like to go off after having a row with their other half, and this struck me as such Ron Weasley behavior. If I hadnít been so sad about them fighting I might have laughed. LOL. That part actually made me think of my own parents ó after fighting with my mother, my father will go outside and work in the yard until itís absolutely impossible to see anymore, after which he will reenter the house with a half-rebellious, half-resigned look on his face.
So, actually, all of your dynamics between male and female in this story were fantastic. From Hermione and Ron fighting about time put into work, to Harry admitting that heís more afraid of Ginny than Voldemort, all was completely in line with everything Iíve learned about relationships. It was so realistic! Very cute, very endearing.
As for characterization ó ace. Iíve honestly never seen anyone write Ron and Hermione so well. Itís difficult to write romance between the two because it can so easily become OOC. But Iím just marveling at how well you kept them true to the pair we know in the books, as well as show how theyíve grown and gotten older and have deeper feelings about everything from love to work. I loved how their goals hadnít really changed, but theyíre still plainly older.
My absolutely favorite part was the scene in the restaurant! That was so perfect. Your description of the setting was wonderful; I could see it in my head, just like I like to. I loved that neither Hermione nor Ron knew about the otherís attendance, and again, the dynamics between them ó and their reactions to Harry ó were so perfectly fallible. Ron and Hermioneís conversation was amazing, and I mean that, because it wasnít melodramatic in any way, yet it almost moved me to tears with cuteness and realism.
The ending was completely ... *searches for synonym for amazing* ... remarkable. LOL. *marvels* The fact that you didnít resolve it completely, you know?? I love that it ended on a not-so-happy-ending kind of thing, because seriously, thatís the way these things really work! Ronís final line ó ďJust me.Ē ó made me want to laugh and cry at the same time. Perfect.
Yes, so, I loved this story. Obviously. This review hasnít been very constructive, itís more of rambling, gushing fangurling, but sometimes you have to endure these things in life. LOL ... Just so you know, I am reviewing this for the NEWT Romance class on the Forums, in which we were to Find and Share an exemplary key canon pairing story (Harry/Ginny, Ron/Hermione, James/Lily). And I thought, ďHey, hasnít James written something that qualified?Ē I found this, and Iím really happy that I did, because it is now going in my favorites.
So, lovely, fantastic, wonderful job. I am so jealous that Abigail gets to beta-read for you, as I tell her every time we start talking about your writing. LOL.
Good luck with everything, James!
I think I have some reviewers who are being far too kind! Thank you very much, Natasha. The funny thing is that Iím not even a Ron/Hermione shipper. Actually, I donít ship at all. Maybe thatís why this story worked so well. One thing that happens with shippers (in my humble, good for nothing opinion) is that they get way too absorbed in whatever pairing theyíre into. The result is a loss of focus when they write. That leaves the door open for things like OOCness and excessive fluffiness to sneak into their work.
The truth is most relationships are not storybook material. Theyíre hard, hard work. Itís less about those perfect moments, like long walks on the beach, and more about the sacrifices you make along the way, hoping to get to that next moment like that. In this story, that is the crux of Ronís dilemma. Heís frustrated because he wants to see more of Hermione and she is in the middle of what may be the defining moments of her career, and life. So, what does he do? Abandon her at a time when she needs to know heís there for her more than ever (even know sheís never there to say it or show it)? Or, does he hold on, trusting that when the two of them get through all of it, it will be worth it in the end. Thatís what relationships are all about (again, in my opinion).
Okay, that concludes my lecture on relationships. Take all of that with a grain of salt because I am certainly not an expert.
Thanks again, Natasha, for one of the most wonderful reviews I have gotten on a story yet. Itís appreciated more than I can put in words!
Gosh, I remember sitting at my computer, betaing this story and saying to myself, "This is so amazing." I really, really admire this idea that you have developed into a story: That love is so powerful it can change people so completely that they'll never be the same again. Like I said before, this work is fantastic.
You begin the story and already their roles are reversed. I find that a lot of authors use the stories to color the actual changes of what happened between two people to make them who they are. But in this one, they had already been changed, and you dealt with the aftermatch of the changes, which is a new, fresh perspective.
Your writing style is very unique and poetic, and your word choices are wonderful. They accurately describe all emotions that I would envision in such a situation. You are quite a maestro with metaphors as well. The one about Eden and Luna's garden remains my favorite, lol.
So, all in all, fantastic job! I'm so happy that this has finally been published and now I can go and give everyone the link for this story! I told some people about it and they were very interested. You are in my favorites, darling. Take care!
It's wonderful, Emily_the_Poet! Very interesting take on things, as I've never thought of Hermione in this kind of context. But this is a very moving sonnet and I think the words are beautiful and your meter is perfect. *Alas, is no poetry expert*
I like that you used a potion to signify Death because it's such an interesting metaphor. And really, your choice of words is fantastic. Beautific. Lovely way to earn House Points, haha. Great job!
6 years post HBP
H/G and R/Hr(DH spoilers are very minimal, just in terms of a use of a name- it doesnt follow canon storyline wise)
Jessica, congratulations on being published. I'm so happy that you can share this tale with everyone. As I've told you, I really enjoy the action and adventure of this chapter, and also the introduction of an interesting new character, Holly. Good characterisation, word choice, writing style.
Amidst the writing I caught one thing that you probably missed in your deletion of my comments. (Um, here, I would put a little more arguing before and after Holly tells them that she's from the future. Why does she trust them, you know? I'd want to know a little bit about that, and I think the trio and Ginny would want to know that too. Not to mention Hermione is the type to demand answers, haha.) You might want to delete it, haha. And you can also thank me as Natasha Johnson as that is my beta name. (I like to keep my email private.)
Other than those small things, though, everything is lovely. Congratulations!
Hi BloodyRayne! I agree with Skipper, this is a really well-done fiction and your portrayal of Peter is very nicely done.
As I've mentioned before, I loved your idea that Peter would have been changed by his friends and their comments, instead of something more predictable. It just proves that words hurt, and that revenge lives in a weak heart.
I also loved your incorporation of the whole Sirius scene from the books. I always like it when authors take an idea of something that we don't know much about, and then integrate that to hug a scene that we know is canon.
So, lovely job on everything ó style, word choice, description, everything. I'm happy that this has been published and I really believe that you have a shot at winning!