A 16-year-old Ravenclaw girl who is passionate about reading, music, and the beautiful things in life. She loves language, Vienna Teng, films, Doctor Who, and books of all descriptions, amidst a whole host of other things. It would make her very happy if you took a moment to browse her favorites. There may be quantity, but there is most definitely quality as well.
Wow. I can hardly make my thoughts get into a more orderly form! I found your explanation of why Slughorn disliked James and Sirius very satisfying, as well as the way that you show Sirius and James' attitude toward Snape. I rather think that they make him a scapegoat for all that's bad. It occured to me that your writing style reminds me of a film - the way that you describe and set up a scene. James' loyalty was very nicely done and I think it was well-setup to make Lily regard James in a more positve light. Although, "your" Lily doesn't have quite the amount of animosity that I would expect, but it's not horrible. Speaking of which, I liked that "your" James preferred to keep his feelings for her private; in all else James is bold and brazen, but because he loves Lily he chooses to keep it moderately quiet. It's so sweet!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's always interesting to hear how readers react to the L/J relationship... well, I didn't really want to put a huge amount of open animosity there - my idea is, that at this stage a year has passed since that scene by the lake in Snape's pensive, so I think they'd be far more mature. Secondly, his father died very recently, and Lily was supposed to have been a very nice person, so I wouldn't make her mean to him, which is why she treats him so civilly. That's my explanation! I agree, even when writing I often think of films for inspiration (another passion of mine) - as I think descriptive writing is often a bit like cinematography - you're painting a picture, after all, and you have to show what's relevant to the story. I'm glad that the idea of James' loyalty to Sirius proving to Lily that he had positive qualities shone through - which is what I intended! And their attitude towards Snape, and Slughorn's towards them - I doubt he appreciated trouble-makers! I'm also pleased that you liked my version of James' expression - I've often read fics where he is "bold and brazen" too, but I decided that he tries to be subtle here (but I he's not very good at it - he's like an open book, simply because he's never needed to hide his feelings before, unlike Snape). Thank you!
Gorgeous! *dances around in glee* Your imagery and description were as breathtaking as they usually are, and the characterizations equally stunning. I'm actually became quite melancholy while reading this; I think it's because I'm listening to the soundtrack from Angela's Ashes. *sigh* Haunting music=Love. But it's also due to the fact that I know what's going to happen to the Marauders and Lily, I think. Are you going to continue the story until Lily and James die? It'd be a good emotional climax, methinks. I mean, it seems like the purpose of their life is to die...is that odd? Everything that they do in their lives leads up to their partial fulfillment of the prophecy. It's a strange combination of fate and chance.
Sorry. I won't bore you with my vague contmeplations any longer; you don't need any concrit, so I need *something* to say, right? lol. Wonderful job; just keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I really liked writing the imagery because I wrote those parts in the midst of a heatwave, so it was inspired by reality – at least to some extent! Yeah, I think it is a very melancholic tale – I mean, the end result is so tragic that it can’t be hugely upbeat and stay in canon at the same time, but I try not to make it depressing! As for Angela’s Ashes – now there’s an effective combination of suffering and humour – have you read the book as well? It’s so funny and yet the subject matter is so serious – I’d say that’s a difficult thing to achieve when writing! I’d really like to continue the story up until their deaths – and perhaps a bit afterwards, as an epilogue, but I don’t know if I’ll have the time this year, and by the time I get any way close to that period of the canon the seventh book could be out, no doubt disproving any little theories I might have about that aspect of the series! But that is what they’re fated to do, and the thing about Marauder fics is that we all know what the outcome will be, so we might as well throw a bit of destiny and fate into the equation. Anyway, thank you once again for your lovely review!
Sorry, I have an overwhelming need to clarify something. When I was talking about Mars, I meant the part in OotP where Firenze talks about there being a lull between two wars, but war will break out soon.
Author's Response: Yes, Mars - I thought originally you were talking about the first book, but this part is also very relevant (I had forgotten about it mentioned in OotP, actually). Anyway, enjoy the next chapter, and do let me know what you think of it!
You're making me sad. :( Have you abandoned the story? I for one won't send hate mail if you have, but the suspense is killing me! (Though it would be a shame to discontinue probably the only realistic L/J story out there, I have to admit, lol).
Author's Response: I\'m sorry! I definitely haven\'t abandoned the story - I Iove writing the story, so of course not! But I\'ve been away from home for quite some time, and therefore haven\'t had much of a chance to write all of the next chapter! I\'ve written some of it, but it\'s going to be really, really long - to make up for everything... and also I have a lot of ideas for this chapter and I want to incorporate them all in it... so there you go! I can\'t say exactly when, but I think it\'ll be up within the next four weeks, but I have other writing projects I\'m focusing on as well. Don\'t be sad!
Ron comes across Ginny's diary, four years after the war has ended.EDIT: 1000 reads!
This is one of the best HP fanfics I have ever read. Really poignant and well written. Write something else! Please!
This story still makes me tear up! You have TALENT, girl! I hope you know that. Every sentence has something deep and it all flows so wonderfully that I envy you. If I could write this well I would be beyond ecstatic! I think I spotted a canon error, though. Didn't Harry's knfe melt or something? Apologies if I'm wrong. Bye.
It says in your profile that you like Tamora Pierce...have you read her Circle of Magic books? 'Cause what Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Neville did to rescue Sirius seems like what Sandry, Tris, Daja, and Briar did to rescue Rosethorn. Hmmm...lets see. This is a good fic, but I think that Git in Shining Armor is better. So...please give me a response!
Author's Response: I've read...hmm...Squire, Earth, Fire, Air, and Water. Possibly a few others from the library--there's one where Sandry helps this dancer-mage guy learn magic, too. I didn't really think about it, but the thread thing is quite similar... Weird. I didn't base it on that though. As for Un-Veiling Black, I've sort of...lost hope for this fic, as it was my first and in my eyes a flop--Git in Shining Armor is definately better, I agree.
Lovely. I first read this fic on fanfiction.net...I think. But anyway, great work! Let me take this moment to say that I love your penname and Gone With the Wind also!
Author's Response: thanks! and I love Gone With the Wind! I'm actually writing a GWTW fic right now....you should check it out over a ff.net when I post it!
Just...wonderful. I loved the ideas, the title line, the characterizations, the structure--everything was lovely. And I think that will suffice for a review. You have enough, I think!
Wow...that was disturbing, clever, and tragic all at the same time. Wierd. But good. You did a really great job; this is utterly intriguing.
This is a WONDERFUL monologue! People try to often to thow together some depressing thoughts and call it a one-shot, but you've taken all the old stuff and put together in a fresh, heartbreaking perspective on "being a hero." This is how I will always see Harry. Thank you so much!
OMG! Where do I start? I suppose the beginning would be a good place...I love the dry humor that is interspersed in everything! Your way of introducing an American character is so much more tactful than is usually seen as well. Your analogy "like someone trying to explain to a five-year old why dogs licked themselves" was...erm..."different," LOL! I also enjoyed the line, "Oh my God...I'm IN Dicken's!" It was excellently timed and delivered. I have a little idea that is poking me insistantly in the brain (ouch). Is Jessica Voldemort's daughter? Guess I'll have to just read on...And by the way, I don't think I'll be reviewing EVERY chap, no matter how much I want too, because there's just simply not enough time...sorry!
Author's Response: Hey Lady! Good to see ya! I have actually added a lot to this story and when I fine tune a bit more will summon the courage to post on Circle.
[GreyLady prostrates herself in front of Wiccan, while doing an impromtu happy dance. Never mind that it's impossible] I keep doing impromtu happy dances all over the place...perhaps I shouldn't call them impromtu anymore. Anyway, my idea died. *hangs head in shame* Jessica is now my favorite major OC and I'm even more in love with your humor. Fudge is PERFECTLY in character and......YOU HAVE DUMBLEDORE! [GreyLady sobs in gratitiude] Please don't kill him, please, please, please.....
Author's Response: I'm not quite sure if the changes I made to this story to keep it in 'canon' 10 years later are on this particular site. Later on I added how Snape and Dumbledore devised a scheme to...well you know. So in this later story both Snape and Dumbledore are alive and well and working together still. Thanks for your comments!
Your story is so wonderful, I hate to put a damper on it, but....Hermione seems a little...off. Sorry. Had to say it or it would have bugged me to no end. She's much more overbearing than she ever was, and she had even mellowed out a lot by OotP...I really want to continue, so I'll shut^ now!
Author's Response: LOLOLOL! You won't believe that this chapter was refused here three or four times because Hermione wasn't acting like her eleven year-old self! Nah, she's just a little hyper at this point and the reason comes up shortly enough...simple, the girl doesn't know how to act with a friend, but she learns shortly.
Dumbledore is becoming quite...extravagant. But I suppose he deserves it if he has survived the war! Jessica is going to hook up with Harry...NO! I'm a Harry/Ginny shipper! That aside, your interior dialogue is brilliant and funny and now I still need to read on!
Author's Response: Oh, my dear Grey Lady Grey...so sorry about Ginny, but heck, I had to give Jessica a chance! Let some time go by and re-read this at Circle...I have explained the emotions much better than my first, (or second) try. I am delighted, however, that you are reading and enjoying. Thanks so much!
Hey, I'm still reading!
Author's Response: Tee Hee...Dang, I love it when readers follow directions so well! Well, I guess I asked for it. I really need to take that A/N off!!!
Yes, yes, like the darker tone, still very humerous, let's get to what I really wanted to say.....the paragraph with Lupin. That paragraph made me cry! If you've looked on my Favorites (Cream of the Crop is there!) you'll notice I'm a RL/NT shipper. The paragraph was just perfection...Tonks is dead, but they had a daughter....wonderful idea! Her name is so sweet and the whole thing just fit in a very bittersweet manner. I don't think this paragraph was intended as anything more than an innocent filler, but I just loved it. Thanx!
Author's Response: Actually I added Lupin because I adore him and even though he had no 'role' in this, I just had to get hime in there. By the way, her full name is Tinker Tonks Lupin... ;-)
It was wonderful! Funny, sad, fluffy, nice plot, romantic...too bad it's over! Please write something else? Pretty please?
Author's Response: Well...I actually have four chapters of a sequel written, but the darn plot bunny keeps morphing! Thanks so much for hanging in. I really appreciate your reviews!
Wow. That was absolutely gut-wrenching. Sirius leaving before she could tell him...the fact that it was he himself who made her give up Harry. I love the characters that you've created in Sirius and Miriam, and their beautifully flawed relationship (even if I want Sirius for myself, lol). That scene with Snuffles in Hogsmeade was the cutest thing I've read in a long time, and the scene where Miriam finds Lily and Sirius finds James masterfully done. Overall, this is a very romantic and decently written fic with some tastefully done angst, and I look forward to the end.
Oh, dear. =(
But...you updated! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm not quite sure I can see Miriam getting drunk to deal with her grief, but you wrote it pretty well. Now I'm just anxious to see where the story goes!