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Real name: LongottomsLady
Member Since: 11/07/05
Website: http://www.freewebs.com/lupinslover.htm
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Bio:
Hey, I'm Lilypudding AKA LongbottomsLady... I just started writing fanfic a few months ago, but I've been writing all my life!

I'm really sorry I had to delete "A Summer to Remember." I fell of the face of fanfiction Earth for nearly three months and once I rejoined, I had forgotton my plans for chapter two. I solemly swear never to attempt another chaptered story again and I am sticking to one shots. I am sorry for the pain it has caused any of my readers. The regret I put into deleting it is unmeasurable.
Series Status:
The World's A Stage for Lily and James: I'm updating that periodically; however, I'm only going to add a new story when natrual inspiration strikes. I'm thinking about songs from several shows, like RENT, Into the Woods, Guys and Dolls and maybe even Fiddler on the Roof.

IMPORTANT UPDATE: "I'll Cover You," a songfic to the song from RENT, is in a beta's hands as I type this. I'm hoping the nature of this song in the musical won't turn people off, as this fic completely focuses on Lily and James's wedding and has nothing to do with the homosexual relationship of Angel and Collins. "I'll Cover You" is a romantic song, and can fit many couples regardless of sexuality.

Stories Status:
Perfect for Each Other: Completed
How Did It Happen: One shot
Defying Gravity: One shot
A Mother's Love: One shot
Somewhere: One shot
Such Sweet Sorrow: One shot poem
Your Eyes: One shot poem
A Summer To Remember: WIP chaptered L/J
COMING SOON: I'll Cover You- One-shot L/J.

ABOUT ME:
I'm just a HP fan who is obsessed with musical theatre and dogs. I enjoy performing, even though I'm not very good at it, and my love of theatre is second only to my love of writing. I generally try to be a constructive reviewer - don't be insulted if I leave a long and not-so-positive review on your story, as I sometimes will, because my intent is to help. While I usually give long and guiding reviews on barely-reviewed stories, I'm not above the occasional "Great story!" review.

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/22/05 Title: None

Please update soon cuz u're story rox! Sorry this is so short but I am being yelled at 2 get off the comp, anyway keep up the good work

 

A Daddy's Poem by Luna_Lovegood831
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 96]

Summary: The daughter of Harry and Ginny goes to Daddy's Day at her little wizarding school. Her dad is not around to be there with her physically, but she knows he's in her heart. Based on a poem called A Dad's Poem written anonymously.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 895 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/04 Updated: 11/06/04


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

This poem is definitely an impacting poem. It's a big tearjerker. The constant use of rhyme and steady rhythm really gives this poem a good beat. Furthermore, your words really gave me a cause to celebrate. You are really an amazing poet. I only noticed one small mistake - how could a girl with jet black hair and green eyes look like a Weasley through and through? I liked that play on "Dumbledore's man, through and through" though. You really brought new meaning to my favorite quote from HBP. Your poem was really different, a good story told well in poetry. Great job!

 

Summary: Harry is pushing his friends away. He can't bear to see them, especially her, hurt, God forbid killed. Can someone convince him against his belief that everything he touches turns to dust? She can. (The song "Tale as Old as Time" is from Disney's Beauty and the Beast.) Ron and Hermione in the background.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1147 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/04 Updated: 11/06/04


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One and Only

I really liked this story. I'm a huge sucker of Broadway musicals, and always freak out when I see songfics based on Broadway musical songs. This story did not dissapoint me, either. I have a few things, though, that you may want to correct.



First and foremost, I want to ask you if you've ever read a songfic before. If you have, you will notice the song lyrics are in italics or are otherwise distinguished from the rest of the story. In case you are unsure, you put words in italics by surrounding them with the tags {} and {} only, without the brackets (I was afraid if I didn't bracket the tags, the review would become italicized.) Second of all, I don't get how the term "Beauty and the beast" refers to Harry and Ginny. While Harry isn't the nicest person at the time of his life, he's certainly no beast. Also, don't the song lyrics refer to physical characteristics? I understand where you are coming from, and know the song lyrics can be taken different ways, but I think some disscussion on how you can interpret the song lyrics is very important here.



Secondly, I think that the ending of the story is too cliche and storybook. You have a great romance story, and a great fic before it, but you end it in such a rushed way. I write one-shots a lot, and I understand the trouble of getting an entire story into one chapter which you don't want to be really long. However, you gave the fic a storybook ending that made it seem like you didn't care very much. Think about the ending of the musical (or even the Disney movie) Beauty and the Beast. Now, I haven't seen either in a while, but I do remember the ending wasn't very happy. Sometimes the best stories to read don't have happy endings. While it is hard to add such a low note such as Harry dying, Voldemort winning or something opposite of the ending you put to a story that can be viewed as cute, fluffy and romantic, your story isn't as fluffy as it seems. The too-happy ending makes the story seem almost fake. Harry and Ginny's romance really isn't a very happy one at all, and it's important that you adknowledge that.



Other than those few things, I really liked this story. Even if you don't edit your story, I think its important you remember those things for future stories. While I don't expect a sequel to this story, I'm looking foward to reading more stories, especially Broadway songfics, by you in the present.

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One and Only

I really liked this story. I'm a huge sucker of Broadway musicals, and always freak out when I see songfics based on Broadway musical songs. This story did not dissapoint me, either. I have a few things, though, that you may want to correct.



First and foremost, I want to ask you if you've ever read a songfic before. If you have, you will notice the song lyrics are in italics or are otherwise distinguished from the rest of the story. In case you are unsure, you put words in italics by surrounding them with the tags {} and {} only, without the brackets (I was afraid if I didn't bracket the tags, the review would become italicized.) Second of all, I don't get how the term "Beauty and the beast" refers to Harry and Ginny. While Harry isn't the nicest person at the time of his life, he's certainly no beast. Also, don't the song lyrics refer to physical characteristics? I understand where you are coming from, and know the song lyrics can be taken different ways, but I think some disscussion on how you can interpret the song lyrics is very important here.



Secondly, I think that the ending of the story is too cliche and storybook. You have a great romance story, and a great fic before it, but you end it in such a rushed way. I write one-shots a lot, and I understand the trouble of getting an entire story into one chapter which you don't want to be really long. However, you gave the fic a storybook ending that made it seem like you didn't care very much. Think about the ending of the musical (or even the Disney movie) Beauty and the Beast. Now, I haven't seen either in a while, but I do remember the ending wasn't very happy. Sometimes the best stories to read don't have happy endings. While it is hard to add such a low note such as Harry dying, Voldemort winning or something opposite of the ending you put to a story that can be viewed as cute, fluffy and romantic, your story isn't as fluffy as it seems. The too-happy ending makes the story seem almost fake. Harry and Ginny's romance really isn't a very happy one at all, and it's important that you adknowledge that.



Other than those few things, I really liked this story. Even if you don't edit your story, I think its important you remember those things for future stories. While I don't expect a sequel to this story, I'm looking foward to reading more stories, especially Broadway songfics, by you in the present.

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One and Only

I'm really sorry for the repeat review, I can't get it to delete! Also, the tags didn't come out, but they're the little carrot thingie i little carrot thingie and to end the italics, little carrot thingie slash i little carrot thingie. (I'm sorry if that doesn't help, when I say little carrot thingie I mean this: < and >)

 

Dear Harry by Unicorn13
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 27]

Summary: A prophecy was made by the descendent of a great Seer, destining two lovers for each other. Sometimes, though, fate needs more than a little nudge to fulfill itself.

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 7862 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
11/14/04 Updated: 04/23/05


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Notebook

I usually never read Harry/Cho stories, but I'm incrediably glad I've decided to read this. I think you portrayed the Chang family extremely accurately. Also, you really made me feel empathy to Cho when she came home after Cedric's death. The fact that Mr. and Mrs. Chang didn't know of Cedric's death until after Cho came home really showed how closed up Hogwarts was from the rest of the world, and almost was a hidden foreshadowing of the tyranny in the wizarding world to come. I think this story is really intriguing. I really don't read or ship Harry/Cho, and I still don't know why I clicked on this fic in the beggining, but I'm really glad I did. You get a 10/10 from me.

 

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Summary:

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/11/05 Title: None

James had an older brother... I'm gonna guess Greg turned out to be a death eater but he does seem kinda Percy-like. I'm just wondering, where's Regulus. And lastly, why do all Marauder-era fics start at the train? Its becoming kinda cliche, this isn't just to you but to everyone- god maybe the marauders+ lily didnt meet on the train? hello anyone whos reading this and planning a marauder fic where they meet on the train have you ever considered starting in a more different way. whoa i got a little overexited... so sorry your story is anything but cliche though its great.

 

Summary: lily has isolated herself from evryone, but what happens when something as important as a diary gets into his hands? Will he be able to get Lily back into reality without her pusing away?

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1325 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
12/19/04 Updated: 03/14/06


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 03/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Laugh

Hmm... this story is pretty good, it's definitely got potential, but it definitely needs a lot of work. First of all, in the summary you refer to Lily as a "he" several times. I think you meant to say "James", and if you put James, the summary would be spotless, but for now it just looks sort of wierd. As for the story, it definitely had potential but I was sort of confused. Sometimes, I couldn't tell whose point of view it was in. For example, in the first paragraph you rocket from describing Lily, to James trying his hardest, then back to Lily. I had to read that a few times before really understanding. I really don't think you should refer to Peter as an a-hole, even though it's probably true. Whose point of view is this in? Remember, Peter was a Marauder. Obviously, he was well-liked enough to hang out with James, Sirius and Remus for seven years. Who was saying that about him? His friends were too loyal to say that, and Lily probably wouldn't use such wording. There were a lot of grammerical mistakes, especially involving the quotes. "Him that close seems too close for comfort," was a very awkward pharase. I understand you were striving to be different, but it didn't work. I didn't like the wording at all. Otherwise, though this story has potential. I really like the idea. I also like how the Marauders talked about McLaggin, that was funny. I think you probably need a good beta to help you sort through this story. Is this your first story? I think you're a great author and have a lot of potential. Read through your story again and see what you can improve. I really hope this review wasn't too harsh, and I hope you do the best. I can't wait to see the next chapter!

 

Daddy by blondebouncingferret
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1739]

Summary: Past Featured StoryPost Hogwarts: Ron and Harry are sent to America for Auror training. Ron spends his last night in England with Hermione, and after returning two years later, he finds Hermione with a fifteen-month-old baby ...

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 40801 Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/02/05 Updated: 03/21/06


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 12/25/05 Title: Chapter 4: Catching Up

I was told by a friend to read this and I really like it, but at the part when Ron starts throwing up, I doubt little Miranda would ask, "Marmee, is he ill?" She's fifteen months old! I know she's Hermione's daughter and probably inheireted Hermione's brains, but honestly, how many babies do you know who know what the word "ill" means and can use it in a sentence properly? I'm sorry, that stuck out as being really awkward. But aside from that, 10/10, definitely! Great job! I really like this so far!

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 12/25/05 Title: Chapter 7: Past and Present

Great job! I think you need to add the HBP cannon a little more subtly but other than that, excellent! Keep up the good work!

 

Summary: Imagine you live a broken life, with no one to love, no hope of rescue. Then imagine that you have a chance to escape your personal hell...This is the story of Seirian Macnair, twin sister of [Executioner] Walden Macnair, a damaged seventeen-year-old girl from a horrible home. Sent to Hogwarts to get her out of the way, Seirian will learn a lot more than just more magic...she will have the chance to live a life she only heard of...a happy one. That is, until she realizes that her happiness might also mean her death, and the death of the one person closest to her...(MWPP)

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"I wanted to know why I'm not allowed to go Hogwarts, and Walden is..."
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To my own distant surprise, I was overjoyed when I smashed my head on the edge of the bottom stair and sank into blissful darkness…
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I didn't know how to care anymore.
*cough* And any author certainly appreciates some kindly reviews, eh, you guys? Come now, brighten my day, dears. 7/25/05: IT'S NOT DEAD YET!!! :) Oh em gee, an update?! I hear you cry. Go ahead, have a blast. New readers welcome!

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Sexual Situations

Word count: 43731 Chapters: 10 Completed: No
Published:
01/02/05 Updated: 07/25/05


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 08/23/06 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9: Resignation

Aww, I can't believe you updated! I am so happy! I fell of the face of the fanfiction world for several months, and seeing that you updated made me so incrediably happy! I really idenified with Sieri in this one, especially about liking someone with a significant other who fails to notice that they are so wrong for each other. *sighs* Boys... Anyway, I was getting off topic here but the point is, this is a great story and even though it no longer applies to canon, its still a wonderful fic and in my opinion, the best one ever written. Great job, as always!

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 12/13/05 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Fury

I'd just like to add to my other two reviews that making me cry is good. I cried for several days after, you know, the ending of HBP and its my fave book ever! I'm very anxious waiting for an update, though! I know you have written about a zillion other great fics, but this one really has some die-hard fans. Like me!

Author's Response: Ahah! Well, that's good to hear. Yes, HBP = pure luff. Everywhere. I'll try to update...I really will...I had the chapter planned out, too, and it DIED, but it does me good to know I have die-hard fans. *hug*

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/20/05 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: Shame

i loved u're story and but couldnt figure out who the myserious beater was. i checked the review 2 c who it was and thought out it couldnt be the creeveys' dad cuz they r muggleborn. thats why colin was attacked. however, if u've seen the GOF movie yet, u could make him nigel's dad (dont ask) still your fic is amazingly good and like all your others, made me cry several times why arent there guys like remus at my school?

Author's Response: *headdesk* Thank God for someone who pays attention to the canon. I'm so ridiculous. I'm glad you pointed that out! I never liked Chamber of Secrets, I forgot to check up on that fact. Hmm, it could be Nigel's daddy, though. I liked Nigel, he was a cutie. I'm sorry it made you cry. :( And I agree. WHERE ARE ALL THE REMUSES, DANGIT?! lol. Thanks verrah much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/20/05 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: Agony

Wow I'm a Remus/Tonks shipper and have read all your R/T but cuz Tonks probably wasnt even born then, I am officially a Remus/Seriri shipper. Its so sad, though about going to the Shrieking Shack and all. Just curious, are you one of those famous Snape is a Vampire believer? Sorry, aint gonna happen Still one of my fave stories of all time though.

Author's Response: Haha! I think this is the first time anyone has ever said they ship one of my original pairings. That makes me feel absurdly special. *beam* I thought the Shrieking Shack scene was all right. A little vindictive, though. I hate doing stuff like that to Remus. And no, I don't think Snape is a vampire, don't worry about that! I just thought it was a nice ploy to sidetrack Seiri from the real issue at hand -- i.e., Remus is a werewolf. I'm not one for vampire-Snape myself. Thanks for the fab review!

 

What Grown Ups Believe by Kewii
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: A young Petunia is faced with a choice that will ultimately shape her future. A One-Shot fic.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1668 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/05/05 Updated: 01/05/05


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 12/26/05 Title: Chapter 1: What Grown Ups Believe

Wow, I really really like this fic! Its short yet sweet, and just absolutely wonderful! The only thing I'm curious about is why would Lily be punished if the man sitting next to her spilled his drink over her? Shouldn't it have been Lily not getting in trouble because she spilled her soda into the business-man's lap? Besides from that, I loved it! Great job! Keep up the good work!

 

Between Now and Then by erikthephantom
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 724]

Summary: In this riveting sequel to the "acclaimed" Veiled Revelations, Voldemort has risen to his full strength and is threatening both the wizarding world and the muggle world in an attempt to gain total control. A small group of people - the Order of the Phoenix - are all that stand in his way. Join James Potter, Sirius Black, Remus Lupin, Peter Pettigrew, and Lily Evans as they battle the most evil wizard the world has ever seen. (Reviews are always nice and appreciated - and Erik has rated this story 6th-7th years as a result of her incorrigible pride).


Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 120076 Chapters: 34 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/14/05 Updated: 09/01/06


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 04/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Main Events

This seems to be a really good story so far. I really like how you characterized the young Vernon Dursley ("B positive"!- that made me crack up hysterically) The only real error I saw was the fact that you didn't capitilize "Muggle." I don't often read long chaptered stories (I rarely get to second chapters) but I'm looking foward to reading the rest of your story. ~Lilypudding~

 

I love...who? by Hermiones_Revenge
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 985]

Summary: Harry writes a love note to one person...but someone else recieves it and gets the wrong idea. From here, confusion and chaos come about. Who is really sending the notes? Who really likes who? What is going on?!







Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 13418 Chapters: 8 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/25/05 Updated: 03/26/05


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/11/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Note

omg i love this story so much. absolutely hilarious, even Neville/Parvati. I would just like edit the whole thing and add Lav-Lav to it, if you have time, thats my only post-HBP suggestion... bring on the sequel!

Author's Response: Nooooo sequel...haha, writing this was confusing enough, and I don't want to completely kill myself - glad you liked it though!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: None

Funny... I love this whole thing! I don't like how at the A/n at the end of the first song you use chatspeak, but other that that, amazing! Absolutely hilarious! I can just imagine Sirius singing... my computer screen would break! Funny!

 

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Summary:

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/11/05 Title: None

Wow, definitely 10/10! I loved how totally random it was- I did not see that Severus Snapee thing coming! I was rolling on the ground, laughing. I made my sister read it, and she hates humor fics, and she just loved it. What a great story!

Author's Response: Glad you loved my random ending! Yay for laziness!

 

By My Side by MoonysMistress
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 59]

Summary: One-shot. Remus Lupin lies half-dead in St. Mungo's, and Tonks kneels by his bedside, reflecting on what she might lose. Far more humorous than it seems! Written to the ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT song "By My Side" from Godspell. PG for mild language.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4729 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/19/05 Updated: 02/19/05


Reviewer: Lilypudding Signed
Date: 11/08/05 Title: Chapter 1: Confessions

definitely 10/10. *sniff* i wouldnt mind that as sorta like an alternate ending to HBP- how lupin and tonks got together was kinda lame, unless u considered the circumstances- u know, dumbledores's death and everything. have u ever considered making up your own characters and writing a story sorta like this, or a novel, or even a play? you would be really good at the real deal, you're amazing at fanfic.

Author's Response: It wasn't so much how Lupin and Tonks got together that bugged me -- I actually rather liked that -- but the lack of story behind them. I was like, "WHAT --? HOW --?!" And then the lack of action. We want snoggage, darnit! Haha. Hmm, I've never considered turning this particular storyline into anything original. I do write original fiction, quite a lot (I aim to be a novelist), but to use this...hmm. I like it! Thanks for the input!

 
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