Chameleon I: Emeralds and Green Light: On Hold. Chapter Two was rejected for "unnecessary italicising at the beginning of some paragraphs" (which I couldn't find) and an abrupt end that might have meant the chapter was cut short. I replied to the email but never got a response. I'm waiting till the beta process is done before I try resubmitting.
Oh, I KNOW this is going to be interesting. I take it it's SS/HG then? Yippee!!
All right, I'm going to be serious now. *coughs* A wonderful beginning, you really set the scene nicely. I am familiar with the game the girls played, I find the outcomes really amusing, and poor Hermione's was hilarious. Not to mention "Sevie".
I can just tell she's going to slip up and call him that by accident ... am I right???
“Revolting! I love them!”
“Seven years has taught me, if nothing else, that your bark is worse than your bite, Sevie”
That was BRILLIANT!!!!!!!
Only one nitpicky thing: Brits don't say candy, they say sweets. I should know, being one myself. But, seriously, I absolutely adore this story!
Ahh ... lovely. Fluffy and funny at the same time! I'm sorry, usually I try and leave a load of concrit, but with this story I think I love it too much to find much wrong with it!