I am completely brilliant, top of my class, drop dead gorgeous, star of my athletic team of choice depending on the season, the popular one, I can get any guy I want, and if you're actually arrogant enough to believe that, you're in for a surprise. :)
HAHAHA!!! Again, the PERFECT Remus... that is why it is The Remus story... excellent interaction between Remus and the Marauders. I really enjoyed the duel and the small dramatic details (like the bowing beforehand) you included to make it real. I did like that the boys were boys and made fun of Remus later in the room--to the extent of acting it out. Oh yes. :) Again, you've captured the essence of Remus and quality moments of the Marauders in your story. Love it!
Author's Response: You do flatter me, Roommate! "The PERFECT Remus" I'm so glad you think so, but of course, Remus IS perfect so all I have to do is keep him in character. I will try to do so. I expect I'll hear about it if I don't, lol. This was one of my favorite chapters to write and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know.
With school and things, I got a little bit behind in my readings. And I just want to say that after catching up with so many chapters... I forgot how much I love the Remus story.
Really. :) I love it. You have an excellent grasp of his character and little to no grammar errors. It's a well put together story and I'm excited to stay caught up!
Author's Response: *dances jig* Roommate is back! Woo hoo! Iím so glad you are still with me. :-D I donít know how excellent the grasp is, but I do have a firm one, at least of the way I see him. Iím glad you think it is appropriate. I really, really donít want to mess him up! As far as staying caught up goes, I donít think youíll have troubleÖIíve been going rather slowly here lately. Just ask my other readers. :*( But I hope to do better from now on. Thank you for the review. It is so good to know you are still with me. :-)
Yay! The Remus story updated! But oh... really, you got me with this chapter. I was laughing and--what are the Maruaders planning for their alumni? I'm dying to know. But poor Remus... I'm really dying here. It's so sad. This is the second time I've read it and... aw... I didn't really recover from the first time. Some stories are good. But this? This is just inspiring. I'm so impressed and in awe to be reading your story. Excellent Remus, excellent Peter, excellent interaction with all the Marauders. I love their friendship. I love what you've done with them. Wow. I don't think I can say much more with words. I am very impressed though, and I can't wait to read more. I look forward to this story everyday, and sometimes, when you don't update, I just read it again. :) That's how good it is.
Author's Response: UmÖ Iím speechless, I honestly am. Thank you. Iím so glad you like it. Thank you.
Author's Response: Okay, I had to come back and re-read this lovely review which had me struck dumb momentarily. I really think I should just stop the story here. You know, quit while I'm ahead. Of course, I won't because I have to get it out of my system and while I don't think I can possibly live up to this incredible review and the other such fabulous reviews I have received, I hope there will be some pleasant and entertaining things for you still to come down the line. But, when I have bleh chapters, (don't expect too much from the Marauders' alumni plans...*laughs nervously*) I'll just come back and read this review. Actually, I may print it out and laminate it, so I can set it up along side my pretty Remus picture for inspiration! LOL! Thanks so much!
Excellent again! Can't wait to see what happens with this new info... :-)
Favorite Quote: And with that, they spent the rest of the evening discussing which memories they should hide in Dumbledoreís Pensieve and whether it would be large enough.
Author's Response: Thank you, neither can Remus. I'm glad you liked that line. The boys have a lot of secrets, don't they. I'd love to dive into that Pensieve!
Once again, amazing... I really liked the Dumbledore scene you created. He was very in character and it was very appropriate and touching. I must confess, I love the moments with Lindi and Remus you've created as well as the ones with the Marauders. FYI, your story is now referred to as "The Remus Story" in our appartment... :-) So congrats! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Wow, Roommate, I don't think you could tell me anything more flattering than that you call my story "The Remus Story". As I think he is the greatest character ever, hearing that is so heartening. And intimidating. I only hope I can live up to it. (Unless, of course, you just don't like my title. lol.) I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and the characters' interaction. I hope you will continue to. I want it to seem natural and at least somewhat realistic, not to mention entertaining. Otherwise, what's the point, right? And thanks for commenting on the Legilimancy scene. Any HP fic needs some Dumbledore, in my opinion. *HBP SPOILER* *cries over book 7 and expects at least a portrait of The Greatest Wizard* Thanks for the fabulous review.
For all of you who wanted an update, I have a proposition. You may or may not like it, but it's all I can offer.
Check review challenge for the last chapter. details there!
James and Lily Potter were possibly the most famous parents in wizarding history. We know alot about their adult life, but what do we really know about their childhood? Even Harry never knew about the Drama, jealousy, danger, friendships, happiness, sadness, resentment,confusion and love that his parents went through as children. Here, their lives, from when the two of them were eleven to when they were brutally murdered at only 21, is recorded. Lily and James Potter were unsung heros. This is their story.
Real quick: I just read chapter 1 and am probably going to read the rest tonight... thus far I'm loving your story. I like that Lily likes James--interesting angle! I like that more than one girl likes James too... hm... :) Anyways, I just wanted to send a brief I like your story before going on... yay!
Author's Response: ooohhh yay thanks for the review!! :D I'm glad ya like it so far!! This sending me emails thing everytime i recieve a review works well, i was alerted the second this was entered. Yes, vveeerrryyy interesting angle, im surprised it's not used more actually, things are much easier to write when they get along, and I've seen no proof that they didnt get along when they were younger. I personally think that it would make more sense, because in real life as far as ive seen, most enemies are ex friends who got on each others nerves lol not that that's exactly what happens, bt you know what I mean! Thanks for reading..which you're doing right now, gee that's more than a little freaky coz at the moment im writing it you're reading im writing lol :S
I have to add a review right now... because I love this chapter. I've read it before and now I'm way excited--I couldn't remember what story it was that had James together with an evil Slytherin--it's yours! I love this chapter and I love the fact that James is with a Slytherin, but only in their second year? We have a ways to go now then, don't we... anyways, I'll give a better review when I finish all the chapters you have up...
Author's Response: hellooo again!! Thanks for the review!! omg, i lovwe it when that happens! That thing happened toi me with the movie the Princess bride. it took me years to realise which movie i was always remembering from my childhood, then one day at the video store, i looked at the movie, felt really weird so i rented it, and realised what it was!! woot! yes, tender young evil minds... :) Can't wait for the next review!!
Okay... I like the story... not going to lie, the earthquake thing is a little weird, but I'm sure it will all work out in the end and I'm looking forward to seeing how you're going to resolve this issue.
Anyways, as for your story. I'm a fan. Sometimes I forget (with all the things you're having the characters do) that they're only in their first or second year at Hogwarts--remember how the first two books are a lot... less mature than the others? It's because of the age, and I'm wondering how this will fit into your story.
Oh! My favorite scene so far is the part where... Oh! The part where they make it snow inside--genius prank (but again, first years? okay they are freaking geniuses...) and the part where they are improving the Tranfiguration class. :) I liked both of those scenes. And I liked the scene shere Lily finally yelled at James in this chapter. Thank heavens! I was wondering when we'd get to that!
Overall, it's a good story. There are very few grammar/formatting errors, and you have a steady plot (from what I see). The Snape thing was... okay... Your characters are pretty decent. You know who they are for the most part, and that's good--your writing is getting better as you go.
Overall, I'm looking forward to more chapters... so good luck!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.... Ok, each to their own. There was bound to be someone who didnt like the earthquake thingy, I'm not offended, it was only last minute ok-ill-make-this-up-as-i-go-along filler matierial. Well, please don't kill me for saying this, because I love Jk rowlings writing, but all I know is that me and my friends acted alot older then the harry potter world did wen they were 12, most of my friends still are 12, and they aren't still going oh my this isnt much fun, theyre up to omfg what the hell did you drag me into this sh##hole for?? ya know what Im saying? I know many people say the characters act too old for their ages, and they may well do so, only that would mean that my 12 year old classmates act like 16/17 year olds, every 61 of them. Yeah, well as for the snow thing, glad ya liked it, but we dont know everything about the magic world. As far as we know, they got the help of house elves, the magic is simple stuff, a 6th year helped them out, not everything is exactly as it seems. um.. yeah, lol I think this story might not be the absolute one for you if you want Lily to do nothing but yell at James. not gonna happen. :) Thanks again.
I really like what you've done with Sirius... I like that he is proud of his family from the beginning--he knows hexes and things--there is a point that he adores his family and his little tag-along brother adores him. I loved the whole paragraph about him being shocked that he was in Gryffindor. This story has definitely intrigued me... I look forward to reading the rest!
PS: Whoever wrote the sorting hat song, nicely done, not many fanfic authors can pull off a decent one!
Author's Response: He's too extroverted to have been an unloved child ^_^ Sirius was definitely spoiled at one point of his life. AOPT wrote that sorting song and I could have written it better myself! Great job AOPT ~nutty~
I really like what you've done with the characterization... very real, very personal... I really like how the whole James/Lily scenario is developing--you have a very good feel of what the relationship is and how it fits in to the world JKR created... some personal interpretations are slightly different, but I really, really like it!
Author's Response: Thank you. This means a lot to me: the thing I care most about is the characterisation, so if you tell me I got that across well, then... wow!
Wow... Can I just way wow? I really liked this one-shot. Intense, accurate... The only thing I would question would be if James would scream immediately when the Crutiatus curse was put on him... I know Harry ends up screaming, and so do all the others, but James seems the hero who would fight even internally against his enemy. But the more i think about it, the more I realize how I can't even pretend to imagine what it would feel like when someone--more specifically the Dark Lord--points his want at you with a desire to torture you... Basically, it's amazing... :-) I'll be looking for more fantastic one-shots! Good Luck on your other story...
Author's Response: Thanks! I had given a lot of thought to whether or not James would scream, but I decided in the end that Voldemort's rage would have been extremely powerful in this instance, and James was not completely braced for the curse on the second time, which would result in him screaming. Again, thanks for your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
When Harryís quest for the horcruxes turns desperate, he leaves the security of his homeland to seek out the advice of an ancient and most unusual Council Ė one whose allegiance is only to themselves but whose knowledge is so vast it may be his only chance. What Harry discovers there will change everything. Soon, he comes to see that this is all so much bigger than just he and Dark Lord Ė his role, though pivotal, is terribly minute compared to the challenges the Wizarding World must now face.
Meanwhile, across the Atlantic Ocean, a young witch uncovers the truth about her bloodline. But only when catastrophic events begin to unfold, does she realise her importance in the greater scheme of things...
It is a tale of epic proportions: bringing in the truth behind Slytherin's betrayal, and the choices the Founders had to make to ensure the longevity of their world. Enemies must unite, lines must be crossed, and children must forgo their innocence. And behind it all, fly the Spirits of the Storm, waiting, watching, scheming. Welcome to the greatest epic war the Wizarding World has ever seen.
Chapter 11 is posted.
Aw... yay! This chapter was lovely! I love all the threads you're pulling into this story--it definitely keeps me awake. Even when I've had no sleep and am at work at 4:30am, like I said. You are amazing.
I love Hermione's reaction to things. It's very fitting and real all at the same time. I love how you portray the intensity of the situations, and basically, I just love your story. I'll give you a better review when I read your story not early in the morning, but I just love it. The end.
This story is fascinating. That's the only way to describe it. Marie put it on the list of stories for me to read at work at 4:30 AM, and it is such a treat. I love the suspense you so carefully develop and build. The instricate storyline is very very well-written. I love Harry's situation as well as Lanette's.
Speaking of Lanette, what a brilliant character. I love the depth she has. I love her history and enthusiasm. I love her passion, or lack there of in certain situations. I love how naturally the founders fit into the story.
You've created a piece that fits into JKR's world so perfectly. Thank you!!!
Author's Response: Eeeeeeeeeeeeeee thank you thank you thank you! All your comments are immensely appreciated. I think I\'ll just go wallow in happiness now.
You read my story, I read yours... :) It's only fair, right? Okay, I like what you've done with the idea--interesting perspective on why Lily likes James and what happened with the Sirius/Snape incident. It's nice to be able to read short stories like this that still make you think and reflect on the characters... :) Thanks for the read! I look for ward to the rest.
Author's Response: Yeah, I like it that way... ;)! Thanks so much for the review! I agree about short stories... fanfics should be short, real books should be long. I remember your fic... it was AWESOME! The next chapter is coming as soon as I get it back from the beta. Thanks for the review!
Can I just say, this was/is my favorite line: "It seems as if the sixth yearís most famous couple has finally gotten together. Minerva, I believe you owe me one lemon drop." :) That was brilliant--excellent way to conclude this chapter! Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I actually thought of that line while in a restraunt, it was VERY spontanous. Thanks so much. I have to say that is probably the one and only amusing line that I've ever written. I'm glad you appreciate it. Thanks so much for the review, again!
I thought it was amazing... the first time I read it I thought Lily was being murdered by Voldemort, but apparently not... but I still loved it. I've read it multiple times and can't wait for more!
Amazing. Oh my gosh... I loved it. Intense. I just don't know how you'll have the energy to make every chapter this amazing, or possibly better, but I have a feeling you will. Keep up the excellent work!
The beginning of this chapter was a bit slower, but it needed to be done. The tea kettle scene... and the vacuum! :) Brilliant! I loved the style and especially the part about Gracie chasing Sirius around the yard... Yay for Sirius being in the picture! I also am wondering about the secret. What was it? What will happen? But I do love the J/L moments--even if she won't admit it to herself! Another great chapter!
Aw! This is so cute... FYI I'm very partial towards Charlie--you painted a slightly different picture of him than I did, but I still love it! Chapter two is my favorite so far (again, probably the Charlie thing). The only thing I would say is that you skipped over the hand thing at the end so fast, I was almost confused. I understand you didn't want to make it a huge moment or anything, but it still felt rushed... I know this is romance, so they'll get together eventually and you don't want to drag it out--props to you for that--but it did feel slightly rushed and not awkward, but... hasty I guess. Anyways, enough of that, I very much enjoyed your story and am looking forward to what comes next! :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'll try to see what I can do about the ending of Chapter Three to make it a little more clear.
Basically, this is an awesome start... Lily a trouble maker??? :-) I'm definitely intrigued. Apparently James is too... the only question left, which I'm sure you'll answer, is why hex them???
Author's Response: I made a couple of changes to the story to make it clearer. Sorry! Basically, she was pulling a prank on the nasty Slytherin that had been tormenting the younger student at lunch. Lily is not one to be messed with! I think she's rather fiery... in her own way. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! :) You're amazing!