I loved this tory the minute I first read it, sometime last month. I'm glad you posted the last chapter :) It was vey cool. And Harry is soooo cute, as I've said before. Great explanation for the song in Chapter four. That was one of my fave bits of this story. Cracked me up sooo much!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it. :-D I was laughing so hard when I wrote the "extended" part of chapter 4. Thanks for the R&R!
Wow! Incredible story! I love Harry, he's so cute. Especially everytime you mentio his green eyes and his cute giggling. That's just really adorable, lol. Can't wait for your next update! Bye xx
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, Harry was a really cute little baby! Chapter 5 (the last one) is still in queue, unfortunately. Hopefully it'll be added soon.
This has the most incredible stoyline! You've really written this well. The characters are some much like their real selves. Especially Dumbledore! I love the ending of this chapter! Please write more soon - it's absolutely incredible.
“Wait a moment… how the devil did you know I was recounting the story of my life?” I mean, I was doing it in my mind, you know. “You’re a Legilimens, aren’t you? Oh, how cruel of you not to say anything before! I feel so – so vulnerable, now! All this time you’ve been spying on my thoughts! But then… why didn’t you get angry when you saw me thinking about Lily in that sexy lace lingerie I’d seen in that store next to…” I trailed off, staring at the look on my friend’s face.
“You were talking out loud to yourself again, you dolt, I wasn’t doing any mind-reading or—” He paused, looking suddenly rather greenish. “What’s that you said about my girlfriend and sexy lingerie?!”
Why don’t I ever keep my mouth shut? Why? “Me? Your girlfriend? Sexy lingerie? Prongs, I think you’re a bit confused, aren’t you? I never said anything like that…”
He was still glaring at me. “Right. Right. I’m sure as hell you didn’t.”
“So, um, what brought you up here to overhear my thoughts?” I asked, trying to change the subject.
I succeeded. He relaxed visibly. “Lily wanted to know what happened to the turkey we were supposed to have for dinner,” he explained, emphasizing the last word.
One thing I didn’t tell you is that right now, considering the fact that I’m 19 years old and don’t have much of an income, I share an apartment with James and his girlfriend. So that’s why Lily would be caring about some turkey for our dinner.
“Turkey?” I repeated, feigning a surprised look. “We have turkey down in the fridge? I had no idea.”
“We had turkey down in the fridge, but we don’t have it anymore because someone ate it.” James stared at me pointedly.
I shrugged. “Must have been a stray cat or something.”
“More likely a stray dog, wouldn’t you agree?” he asked.
“Yeah, definitely,” I answered. “Yeah, I’m sure it must have been a stray dog.”
“Possibly very big and shaggy and black and stupid,” continued James just as conversationally.
“Certainly. Actually, now that you mention it, I think I saw a dog like that roaming around the house. Big, shaggy, black…” I trailed off, thinking. “Hold on a moment! You’re talking about me, aren’t you?!”
James raised an eyebrow. “Am I?”
I rolled my eyes. “Of course you are. But I seem to have told you that I didn’t even know we had turkey.”
I HAD to quote! I'm sorry but this conversation made me laugh so much and I cannot wait for next chapter! It was so hilarious! I can just imagine Sirius sayng it! Keep up the absolutely EXCELLENT work! It's terrific!
I'm not sure whether you have to code reviews or not, so if it messes up, just go with me, ok? LOL.
Author's Response: Wow! That must have been the longest review EVER!!! THANKS for your support! ; ) And don't worry: chapter two is on its way to approvement (or so I hope!)
"Is it just me or is his voice’s volume turning up? He’s actually getting quite red in the face. I fear he’s hyperventilating." OMG! That was absolutely hilarious! I find the very simple things really funny and, while that was totally simple, I could just imagine Sirius saying that in a very simple yet funny way. Great chapter!By the way...My vote goes to Sirius, simply because he's extremely funny (or at least you write him that way) and Jo Rowling has said (if I recall correctly) that Sirius was the sexier/hotter of the two, lol.
This is terrific! I tried to write a HP7 fanfiction once. It was terrible. Yours was so believable and so much like Jo's writing, I swear to God when the 7th book finally does come out, I'll be confused. LOL. Honestly. I'll start getting mixed with this fic and the real thing. Definately update please. :)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks!! The next chapter is being validated ... so check back in, I definately value your opinions.
OH My GOD! This is great stuff! You've really got to keep writing! Wow that's just beyond good! LOL. That was one excellent twist. You pulled it off magnificetly! Keep writing!