Hi everyone, I'm gad you clicked on my profile. If you are searching for the third chapter of "The Other Worldcup", please note that it can't be posted here, as it features a real English football player. You find the missing chapter at www.phoenixsong.net under my author name Mira Miracle.
I think with the last chapter you did a huge improvement. I didn't like the first two chapters - the humour was too random for my taste and there were a lot of grammar errors - but the third one was good. I notive you put a lot of work into this, there was some not-so-random humour (I still laugh about Fliwick's comment) and a good plot. Just try to write more in this style and I'm looking forward to your next story!
Author's Response: Thanks! Flitwicks comment was a favorite of mine too.I look foward to posting my next story!!
I so love you story! Normally I don't read next Generation stories, but, well, it was so captivating I couldn't stop reading.
The plot is fascinating and the 3 main characters are well developed. I'm really curious about their special bond. Wendy is also really interesting, though when reading about her she doesn't seem to be 11 years old but a lot older with the Polyjuice Potion and everything. But this could also come from growing up as Voldemort's child. O, I also like how you bring other well-known surnames into the story like Longbottom, Goyle etc. The one thing I don't like is that most of the teachers are from Harry's old year, Blaise Zabinie, Professor Abbott (I guess it's Hanna Abbott), Hermione and Luna (ok, from the year below) and Harry himself. I kept asking myself if all the other teachers (Hagrid, Snape, Sprout etc.) had retired or died in the war against Voldemort and why they had been replaced only with people Harry is close to (well, more or less).
But apart from this you've done a great job! I'm adding this storyy to my favourites and please please update soon!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for such a detailed review! I was a little wary at first about the three girls, that they were all too much alike. I\'ve tried to make Millie a little more adventurous, Halle wary and shyer, and Giselle wiht a \"i don\'t car what you think of me\" attitude on the outside. I think Millie and Giselle only really care about what each otehr and Halle think of [them.]
The only original teachers i have are Hagrid, who still teaches CoMC, a little greyer and wrinklier, and the backround professors, such and Vector and Sinistra and such. The \"Big Battle\" ahs takne place, but in this fic it\'s a one on one battle between Harry and Voldemort.*eeks at name* Thank you SO much for the lovely review, it made my day! *blushes at the \"captivating\" comment* -Steph
I have just "found" your story and I've been reading for hours. It's great! I really love it! You have a very realistic view onto the future lives of the main characters and you also portray them very well. The plot is thrilling, I'm so excited to read your next chapter. It makes me think about the different possibilities for all of this myself and I think this is one of the best effects a story can have. The only thing I don't really like is Olga and Ginny's sudden ability to do Occlumency. In my eyes she's never been quite the type for these things but everyone has a different view on things.
Altogether it's a wonderful story, please update soon! 10/10!
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
I really love your story! It's crazy but in a funny way. Those Ron-Hermione sequenzes are hilarious, I'm so excited for the next issue of "Dear Dumby". Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I really enjoy writing the Ron/Hermione scenes! Issue 5 will be coming soon, thanks for reviewing!
Hey, I love your story! It's funny and romantic and everything, well-written and exactly the pairings I love :-) And I absolutely loathe Emily! By the way, Ron doesn't know about Harry's bet with her, does he? I can't wait to read on, I'm really looking forward to your next chapter.
What I don't like that much is Harry going to USA but you made it quite plausible so I'm going to accept it. And if Harry's sure that Emily is the searched criminal, why doesn't he just blackmail her back? Well, he would be a criminal by then, too, but it was just an idea. Nah, mybe the two bets are just more thrilling.
And I do hope Ron and Hermione will come together again very soon, although I have to admit that I like their clash. It's quite realistic and as a girl I just have to feel with Hermione ;-)
Your story is really fascinating! I love this pscho-stuff, Harry being completely disturbed... It's something very different from those "happy end after Voldy's death" stories and I enjoyed that very much. It's really thrilling and you build it up very well, leaving your readers in the dark... I want more! :-)
Author's Response: Thank you, I\'ll give you more!! I agree with you, I think happy endings after Voldemort\'s death are quite improbable after all Harry\'s been through... I hope you\'ll enjoy what\'s currently brewing in that weird brain of mine!
It was great! I laughed so hard I nearly fell off my chair... You did a very good job, everything was believable and followed a plot (something that not each humour fic does). Hermione and Ginny sounded natural and very well IC. I also liked the descripition of the Potters' children, they're quite realistic. Once again, great job - 10 points out of 10.
Author's Response: Thanks so much-glad you didn\'t fall off your chair!!!!:) I\'m thrilled that you liked it and took the time to tell me. Thanks again- -Daisy
Well, first of all, I really liked your story. I really love your style, it's both distanced from Harry and giving insight in what he really feels without needing a lot of words. I think you did a good description of how he could feel after Dumbledore's death and, most importantly, it sounds realistic. You show Harry as a vulnerable human and I'm very thankful for that.
By the way, isn't "Dies ira" a sequence of the"Totentanz"? I remember it being something about the Last Judgment. "Dies ira, dies illa, finet saeclum in savilla" or something like this, I might be mistaken with the "finet". Where did you get the idea for the title? It would really interest me!
Oh, and I'm from Germany, too and quite familiar to the "foreing flaws", too :-)
It's a great story! You have a wonderful concept and having everything being told by Anthony is a great chance to add something original. I really like your style, it really sounds like a 20-year-old boy who speaks about his life. Your characters are as well canon as original and the new perspective on the trio (or foursome) offers plenty of opportunities to bring in new ideas. Keep the good work up! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! 10/10
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the positive review! I was really disappointed when it turned out that Anthony would never be a major character in canon (I was a very vocal proponent of his during the era between OotP and HBP), so I hope I\'m doing his character justice in fanfic. :-) Thanks again for the support.
1983. In a world where Voldemort has won the First War, where hope has fled from an Earth moaning under the Dark Lord's iron hand, marriages are broken and others are arranged in order to preserve the sacred purity of blood. James Potter loses his wife; now they have to find another for him.
I love your story! You have created a frighteningly real Alternate Universe Scenario, it really gives me shudders when I read about the DEs. Marie-Antoinette is a wonderful OC, your characterization of her is done very well. I like especially how you describe James and Lily Potter - poor James! I've the slight feeling that he might go underground and fight the DEs to save his wife and son.
I'm very much looking forward to reading your next chapter, please update soon!
Author's Response: I\'m trying! I\'ve done about half of it... I\'m happy you like Marie-Antoinette; as an OC, I thought she may be not as likeable as JKR\'s characters. And I agree, I\'m really mean to James in that story.
I really like your idea of Rita and Lockhart working together so they both can become celebritieds, although I'm not quite sure this is something which suits the young Rita as you portray her. Sure, she's ambitious, but she also seems to be very naive and her heart is in the right place. And then playing Gilderoy Lockhart's little game seems a bit strange. But maybe she likes his good looks a bit too much? For the rest, it's well written and a good ýet still canon plot! Well done! I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Author's Response: I\'m really glad that you liked the story! And that you picked up that Rita wasn\'t quite \"herself\" as we know her - the point of the story is really how Rita\'s experience with Gilderoy changes her. I hope you enjoy the next chapter! Let me know how you like it! :)
Your story is great, it's no random humour but a story which easily fits into canon. Your writing is very good, I loved how you portrayed Arthur's passion for this car. And especially the ending is very realistic although still funny, I guess this really could have been one of the reasons Molly allowed Arthur to keep this car. 10 / 10
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Positive reviews are always so fun to get. I\'m very glad you liked it. This was my first attempt at writing humour, so I am very hally it turned out good. Thank you!
It's a great idea. I can just imagine Fred and George giving away their items to innocent testers. Although I agree with Lovegoods propositions, especially in the middle the story lacks some description. But the idea behind this is great, just try to transform it better.
Author's Response: Okay, thanks for the ideas. It\'s great what challenges can do to your plot bunnies, isn\'t it? Thanks for the review! HermyRox12
I really like this fic, you've done a good job. I like especially the beginning, first you think it's Harry who'll get the present. Alone the idea of giving Moody such a present is funny. And I like Tonks' statement in the end, it's exactly the thing to calm Moody. I'm excited how this will go on...
Author's Response: I glad you liked it and I managed to trick at least one person. However, this story is a one-shot, so it is completed. There were three other enteries to this challenge if you want to read more, all different and good in their own ways.
This is so sad! Although I don't like Merope in canon, your portrayal of her is so beautiful that I nearly cried. You have met her feelings very well, she sounds broken-hearted and I immediately believed in her deep love towards Tom Riddle senior. Your style meets her feelings very well, nearly each paragraph starts with "Tom". One can really feel how much she misses him.
All in all, your fic is great and very beautiful, you take great care of this subject without turning it into kitsch. Wonderful work!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks. I personally do think Merope is interesting in canon, but I can definately understand not liking her (she abandoned her baby!). Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing, I\'m glad you liked my story. By the way, your story is really funny!
It's a great fic! I really loved it! Mundungus is done very well, I really liked the bit about the Invisibility Cloak. And the ending is fantastic, it's something one surely wouldn't expect. Wonderful work! 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I like to work in a twist or two if I can. :)
This was awesome! I really loved your story, it's great canon humour. Your characterization is very good, and the "Fluffy" bit really adds a good laugh - just imagine, Fluffy Potter ;-)) Very good work! I'm looking forward to reading more of you about MWPP.
Oh, this is thrilling! I normally don't read AU stories, but this one captured me and now I can't keep thinking about what might happen next....
What happened to Claira's parents? How will she deal with living in a Muggle orphanage? Will she go to Hogwarts?
Please update soon! It's a great story so far!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I\'ve been working on chapter three, and i need to get a bete for chapter two. But i have writers block, so if you have any ideas... PLEASE TELL! thanks again -Leyra
Hey, that's a great story! I'm thrilled for the next chapter - how will they react to the letter?
I just wonder - Dudles had really changed, hasn't he? When he grew up with Harry, he always bullied him, and now he's trying to stop Shawn bullying Stanley. Well, I hope everything will turn out all right for Stan! He seems to be a nice little chap.
Btw, I really like you made Neville headmaster and gave him all the awards and such! Update soon!!
Author's Response: Thank you for such kind words! I will update as soon as the queue is reopened!