I've sorta disappeared off the whole fanfiction scene, and I'm trying to get my brain to write something good...
It ended? Just like that? I would also love for a sequal! I like how your writing style for Hermione is mature, and not very teenish, because she is very mature for her age. I also like how you keep quoting that she has read books on love/dating/guys, which shows that she is in denial.
Crit: It's pretty hard to find something to critisize... maybe take out the "informal, unprofessional" part when describing the contract. I think Hermione might look at that as a big thing.
Overall, great job, and I think a sequal should follow! Or at least another story like this! =)
Author's Response: I\'d love to do a sequel if there is some more material I can use from in canon. I\'m really glad you liked it, and I\'m sorry I couldn\'t think of a ending that wasn\'t so sudden. Thanks for reviewing.
Written for the Harry Hospital Wing Project: The Department of Mysteries by Dumbledore Prince of Gryffindor house.
I really enjoyed it! Particularily all that suspense at the end! Even though I knew what was going to happen, I couldn't help but keep my eyes glued and be shocked.
The last part, as I said was really suspenseful and good. I enjoyed how it was fast paced. =)
The beginning was a tiny bit bland, though. It seemed that you used "Bode" a lot, instead of just "him". But don't worry; it was still really nicely written!
I loved reading those commands and the end. There's just something I can't describe that's just so wonderful about it. Overall, great job!
Author's Response: Thank you for the very appreciative review! I can understand if the beginning felt bland to you; I know there\'s not much emotion, especially in the first half. I think it was kind of necessary for the fast pace ... *sighs*
Hi! I really like how you have a whole different perspective of Harry's first year. I like how you have it as a letter form, rather than a diary, or even a narrative. Also, I like how you added some events that Harry didn't cover. =)
Only constructive crit. would be that you seem to have more plot than character. Now, that's not bad, but it would be nice to know a bit more about Emma, other than she loves her grandfather and is obssesed with Harry Potter (okay, maybe not.. but sort of =) )
And I can see her joining the Harry Potter Fan Club with the Creevy brothers. =D
Any plans for other stories revolving around Emma? Because I (and probably others) would love to read them. Anyways, great story!
Author's Response: Hi Atkarid! Thanks so much for reading this story and leaving such a great review! I am glad you liked it. You hit the nail on the head too - Emma was a bit obsessed with Harry her first year. I wanted that to come through, her first year fascination with the Boy Who Lived. But that does change as the years go by - I even left a few hints in this story. I have the next few years sketched out, and hope to write them someday so that you do get to know Emma\'s character a little bit better. I\'m glad you think someone would like reading it! Thanks so much for the great review, I\'m so glad you read this story and really appreciate that you took the time to leave such kind and encouraging words. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
OMG! That was so good! I love hte use of present tense and how it gives such a creepy, yet exciting feel! The imagery is really nice here! I love how you accociate red with blood and the Gryffindors.
You get into the mind of Snape so well. He's so different, yet in character. Fabulous job!
Schmergo! This story is absolutely brilliant! I lvoe it; it's really funny, and you have Voldemort acting like his evil self while it's super funny!
Really really really great responses from Voldemort!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Incidentally, it\'s not a coincidence that LV is love! (LV is Lord Voldemort. Or Las Vegas... or Luis Vuitton...)
Great job! It was really hilarious and a really nice read!
I loved the end, along with the Dumbledore in a wheelchair part. It's so OOC that it's funny!
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I was thinking about how some characters believe Dumbledore\'s going senile, so I just took that idea and ran with it. Even though we all know that\'s not true! I\'m so happy you enjoyed this, thanks for leaving me a nice review
Nice story! I like how you have Lily all worked up, and then all these flashbacks. I think James was very in character, maybe a bit too mature, but nevertheless, nice.
And I love that last line. :)
I loved this! I find McGonagall hard to characterize, and this one has her perfect! And I love how Sybil is herself, but she reminds me a lot of Luna, not that that's bad. =)