Summary: Get inside Ariel Sachs' head as he tries to survive his last year at Hogwarts. The Triwizard Tournament is going to be hosted once again after twenty-three years and Ariel is going to find himself in the middle of it. He soon learns that in love and war anything goes and that things are not always what they appear. A story of jealousy, gossip, teenage hormones and first love. (Rated for later chapters)
QSQ Award for Best Male OC, Ariel Sachs
QSQ Nomination for best Same-Sex Pairing Fic
I can't thank enough my wonderful beta Lys. Without her this fic wouldn't be posible.
You know what is hurting me so much now? That the next chapter is waiting to be validated and I'm still at suspense! I love this fic, and I seriously can't wait till the next chapter!
I love the character of Nessa becuase she makes me laugh, along with Ariel. I loved the moment between Ariel and Bahir. Just pure yea!ness.
Gah.. I'm in more suspense than Ariel (I think...) Keep up the great worka nd can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Pure Yea!ness!! Lol, I love it. I\'m going to start using it. Yes, the next chapter is waiting to be validated, I\'m sure the mods we\'ll get to it tsoon. I\'m happy that you liked the fic and thanks for the review!
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Wow! That was a great one-shot! Not only does it belong in the J/L section, it also belongs in the humor section too. Hilarious! I could imagine Lily doing something like that. Great Job!
Author's Response: Yeah, I thought that was very Lily. I'm glad you liked it! To be honest I also had a hard time placing it. But I finally concluded that placing it in Humor might be too presumptuos of me! I thought that most people would be put of by the absurdity of the whole plot! Thanks for the review! Seriah x
Lily Evans is not the sort of girl who would normally be found writing in a diary. Yet, when she starts, she finds that the easiest way to overcome all the obstacles in life is to let her emotions out onto paper.
Wow! I love this story! I already read like all the ones you posted (on HPFF and your website) and I love it! I'm glad it's posted on this website! CAn't wait for the rest!
Author's Response: I\'m glad to post it on this site. Guess I can never really leave MNFF, can I?
Summary: Who is the Grey Lady of Ravenclaw house? What caused her to remain among the living after her death?
Great plot! I never would've thought about the Grey Lady in that way! I like how you incorporated Hogwarts' rules with her. Your last sentence is definitley a great moral (and end) to the story. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
Summary: A Sequel to Born the Day You Kissed Me
After losing Draco Malfoy, Hermione Granger is determined to have him back…so determined that she will go as far as inventing a spell that reverses the affects of the “Obliviate” curse. In this anticipated sequel, Hermione and Draco’s lives will collide, along with opportunities for Hermione to perform her new creation on her most valuable subject. However, when a new relationship between the two forms, will Hermione be able to summon the courage to expose their lost love? Will she reveal to him the missing portion of his life? Or will she simply accept the new Draco and without spells, attempt to revive the love that she knows is buried down deep in his soul....
This story is pre-HBP/DH CH 16 Coming Soon
This is wonderful! Except I can't wait till the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
Summary: Narcissus Rain, by Periwinkle of Hufflepuff House, in response to Spring Challenge #2.
It's a cold, rainy day, and Hermione thinks about the Last Battle, and the effects of it on others.
Runner up in the Spring Challenge #2
Wow! Tha was beautifully written! I love how you used the short sentences, and then long ones. It gives the story a very nice effect. I also love how you incorporated the narcissus as a symbol. Symbols are something my English teacher loves... and I agree with everybody else: my English teacher would love you! =)
Author's Response: Thank you, Claire. I really appreciate your review - it's made my day! Thanks for taking the time to write me one. ;)
Summary: That was all there was left of her. The memories of his mother had become a knife that was ripping through him mercilessly. His torn heart dangled in shreds from the crucifix of his own mind!
“Stop it, stop it.” Draco whispered to the little stuffed bear, “I have lost myself.”
Still nothing. (few spoilers and mild language) Please read and review!
Wow! You deserve more reviews! This was wonderfully written, and you got Snape's character so right! I love the new side of Draco, still the old one, and yet we see a more destroyed side of him. I really enjoyed this story, and I love the symbol of Merlin!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad to hear that you think I portrayed their characters well. I spent a lot of time thinking about that when I was writing it. Thanks for the review!!!
Summary: When you marry someone, you marry their family too. This is something that Fleur Delacour and Bill Weasley didn't consider. The two families couldn't be more different, especially the women. The day before the wedding, Fred and George came up with a plan to make the women stop arguing amongst each other. That was, of course, if they didn’t kill each other first.
Runner up for Challenge #1 of the Spring Challenge
Wow! That was a wonderful story! I love how you have basically three (or maybe four) small little subplots that blend into one! I find that very hard to do and think of! During some parts of the dialogue, I noticed that Louise doesn't have an "accent" but it's just one or two sentences in the beginning. Overall, great job!
Author's Response: Well, what I wanted to do is to have one huge problem and then six little problems from each of the ladies. Unfortunatly I couldn\'t explore Hermione and Molly as much as I would\'ve liked. Huge wet kiss to you for reviewing! PS: I\'m in a mushy mood today
Summary: Lily Evans had never expected what came during her 7th year at Hogwarts. Love was something that was farthest from her mind. With the deaths of her parents, Lily wasn't ready to take any chances with things like that. Academics only, right? Wrong. Follow Lily through her final year of school and watch her fall in love with the one person she thought she'd always hate.
Oh my gosh, you guys. I'm SO sorry for the HUGE lack of update. My computer is in the shop at the moment and I won't have it back for a while. Chapter 3 of RTBW is almost finished and then it will be sent off to my lovely beta. Until then, I'm planning on the future chapters of this fic and my other fic, 'Dear Diary,' which I am really really focusing on. In the mean time, you could always take a look at that... ;)
Thank you all so much for your patience! xox
EDIT: Chapter three is officially written. I'm going to have it betaed tomorrow and it should be ready within a few days!
Wow! That was very nicely written! I love your Lily, and how she saved Petunia. Also, the flashback was very nice, and I liked how you had Lily pondering over it. Petunia seems a bit too quiet though. But otherwise, great job, and I can't wait till the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I suppose Petunia does seem a bit quiet, doesn\'t she? I\'ll work on that in later chapters. Thanks again for your lovely review! =]
Summary: Summers weren't very easy for Hermione.
Even if you get to say "magic" in your house, is it really that much easier to hide yourself all summer?
Wow! I loved your style in this! Hermione is so canon, and yet so different! I love how you go through each summer, and briefly describe each one! In the books, it seems that Hermione is pretty close to her parents, and slowly drifts away, and you did a very good job describing it! The only critique I can find is maybe adding a "But" to the beginning of the last sentence, but it doesn't matter if you do or don't. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m glad you enjoyed it. I really like writing Hermione, but I had a hard time with her in this. It felt like she was acting more childish than she would at Hogwarts. But then, I go to a boarding school as well, and I don\'t act the same way around my parents as I do at school. So I guessed that Hermione would have let her guard down around her parents at first, but as the years went on she\'d try to keep more from them, because of the war. Thanks for reading!
Summary: Cho runs across Ron practicing his keeper skills on the Pitch. When the two quidditch players get to talking they find they have a lot more in common then they ever expected.
Wow! I've never read a Ron/Cho fic, and I liked this, even though I'm not a shipper! Nicely written! The dialogue was perfect! Maybe you could add in some description on what they were doing in the middle. Maybe like "she smirked" or "he rolled his eyes". Also, "That's W-I-Z-A, two more and." should be hyphanated, but I'm being too critical, aren't I? Anyways, great job!
Summary: Tom Riddle has to deliver a package to the Malfoy Manor, but that isn’t the only thing he has in mind. One Shot.
Wow! I really liked that! I loved the character of Isla, and how she seems eviler than Tom, but at the end, it's him that's eviler. I don't know if Tom would say "Say goodbye" but overall, everything was great!
Author's Response: Thanks :D! And about the say goodbye part, it was to show his twisted mind a bit more.
Summary: People come to Borgin and Burkes for a reason. One rainy day Lavender Brown walked in.
A FINALIST IN THE ONE SHOT BORGIN & BURKES CHALLENGE
Ooh! Very nice! I love the new characterization of Lavender, since most people look at her in a bad way. Maybe, for a bit more effect, you can have the phrase "closed the door" as the last phrase for more effect, but maybe that's just me. I don't think Borgin would say "Listen, kid" but that's not big. Overall, I enjoyed the fic, and it definitely deserved to be a Finalist!
Author's Response: See your point, it is somewhat an Americanism. I\'ll go correct that and that suggestion on the use of \'close the door\' makes plenty of sense. I\'ll do that as well. Thanks for all the advice. Appreciate them.
Summary: Some people say that you can find anything imaginable in Knockturn Alley. In the dark recesses of one shop, a piece of jewelry, which has haunted history for eons, lies hidden. It is a beautiful piece; striking and elegant in every way. Truly, it is a gift any woman would die for.
Winner of the 'Borgin and Burkes' one-shot challenge.
Wow! This was amazing! I love how it's psyhological, and not physical pain! Most people think physical pain would hurt more, but now you see that mental pain tortures. And the ending is very good, although it's also very sad...
Author's Response: Yes, I think that mental pain can often be far more painful and terrifying than physical pain... and it often has far worse consequences. Thanks for your review! I\'m so glad you enjoyed it.
Summary: Ginny's thoughts now that Harry is gone. One shot.
Wow. I really should've believed you that this was uber sad... you have me a bit teary eyed....
Overall, great job! I'm such a sucker for those fics that use rain, but what I love about this fic is that the whole thing might seem to center around rain, but you only mention it a couple times. I also like how the "rain" is both the rain outside, and the tears that she is crying (or maybe I'm just overanalyzing...).
Hmmm...concrit: this is probably more of a personal thing, but "Harry, too, had fallen. Harry, too, was dead." I really liked that, and I believe you're trying to use repeats? I like repeats, but I usually like working in groups of three so it's known as a repeatition for style. But I guess you can also work with twos... I guess it's more of a personal preference...
But overall, great job! And sorry if I confused you, or just wasted a bunch of space guessing and all that. =)
Author's Response: Nope, your analytical skills are right on the dot! I didn\'t even think about that until i wrote the last line, though. Thanks for the concrit. Yes, I tend to use repeats quite a lot, and I agree that they aren\'t as strong in twos, but hey, I couldn\'t think of a third one. I think it\'s fine, but I apprreciate your comments. And no, I\'m not confused, and all of your guesses are accurate! =)
Summary: A compilation of the most commonly used Harry Potter clichés in the fandom. Features Angsty!Harry, Sweet!Draco, Head Dorms, sudden romances in the forms of Ron/Hermione, Harry/Ginny and of course, Draco/Hermione, because what's a cliché without them?
The Marauders also make an appearance in this fic, including Lily/Lily's best friend/Lily's other best friend.
Warning: mention of hippopotamuses inside.
Chapter Five is up! The story is done. Also, thank you to everyone who nominated this neatly tied bundle of ridiculousness in the QQ awards, I really appreciate it!
Hilarious! I usually just smile or giggle out loud when I read humor fics, but this one seriously made me laugh out loud! I love angsty!Harry, cause it's a whole new twist on the cliche that makes it so funny!
I have to agree: the sausages part is the funniest!
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad that I made you laugh out loud, because humour is very important! :) Sausages are quite amazing, don\'t you think?
Summary: Narcissa returns to an Island of her childhood to say goodbye one last time before she surrenders to the Aurors.
Wow. I loved the end when you summed it all up with short sentences. It shows the biggest events in her life, and it all happened there. And nice first person! The only concrit I have is that the "family summer" sentence in the last few sentences is a bit longer than the rest, and could be shortened to fit in a bit more.
But overall, great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I wasn\'t completly satisfied with the family summer part, but however I twisted and turned it, I just couldn\'t get my point across. Thanks again!
Summary: One-shot challenge- owls, written by the patient Hufflepuff, mugglegurl. We all know that Hedwig was attacked by Umbridge in OotP. Here's her tale of what happened. Somewhat funny, if I do say so myself.
Great fic! And it's really funny! =D
I like how Hedwig has this attitude, and it's really funny. And I love how she has some self-control, but still doesn't fully control herself.
Funny, and great job!
Author's Response: Awww... Thanks, Claire! I\'ll make sure to review your story... once I get time! :p
Summary: I met her on the train ride to Hogwarts. We both got sorted into Hufflepuff, we take all the same classes, and we're best friends. But I've started to feel a little more for Hannah Abbott.
Two friends, both female. One life-changing infatuation that quickly turns to the greatest thing in the world: love. Susan Bones reflects on her life and explores the what-ifs of her relationship with Hannah Abbott.
Wow! I normally don't read rarepairs, and I thought this was wonderful! I'm not really a fan of femmeslash either, but this flowed so naturally, and smoothly! Maybe you'll write a companion one-shot to this? =)
Author's Response: :D Thank you! I don\'t think I\'ll write a companion to it, I tried and it\'s nowhere near as good. I think I\'ll quit while I\'m ahead. ;) Thank you for the sweet review!
Summary: Is Pigwidgeon really a hyper little owl, or is he more like devious little Stewie Griffin? Find out in his diary entry, the only one ever known to be written by an owl. This is for the One-Shot Challenge - Owls, written by Lily_writes of Ravenclaw.
Cute sotry! I love how you did his name! Clever!
I also like how you have him get his "revenge" by annoying Ron. Ron's just one of those people who we love to see annoyed, isn't he? =D
I like how you added the aspect of Pig loving food. You have him mention it a bunch of times. Maybe mention it a bit more just to confirm the fact that he loves it (and maybe a bit of humor?)?
Anyways, cute story and maybe you could add some more? I would love to see some more diary entries from Pig!
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it. I never thought about it before, but Ron is fun to annoy. I would love to write more diary entries for Pig, but that isn\'t an option right now, for two reasons. 1) I have some RL issues that prevent me from coming here regularly. 2) I think I should post chapter 4 for Searching Behind the Veil first.