I'm a truck driver who was introduced to Harry Potter by my daughter in 1999. The books are fantastic, the movies are some of the best made, and the fanfic is better than that I've read in Star Trek, Buffy, and even the Xena universes.
BTW, the Sorting Hat put me exactly where I belong, in Gryffindor.
Summary: What if Harry had a Godmother? And she was a Muggle? This story starts at the beginning of Order of the Phoenix and will be as canon-compliant as possible. This fan fiction will lead to a romance between Severus and the Godmother, an original character.
I truly am enjoying this story. The only thing I'd try to talk you into changing if I were your beta is the overuse of "wisely" when someone is reacting to something. It stands out because you rarely use any other adverbs in describing how things are said or reacted to.
Author's Response: Thank you for sending me a review! :) I'm glad to hear that you are liking the story. When I go back through the story and reedit it again, I'll keep your suggestion in mind. I hope that you like the next chapter! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Heard “In the Mood”? I've played it many, many times over the years, both on clarinet and baritone sax.
Author's Response: Hello again! I'm glad to know that you've heard of - and actually played - "In the Mood;" it is one of my all-time favorite songs. Thanks for continuing to read the story! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Summary: The seven men who loved Ginny Weasley.
I am awed by this insightful character study!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad!
Summary: The seven women who loved Harry Potter.
Well done, as always. I have just two nits to pick:
"... not be returning to Hogwarts, the was taken aback"
and, it looks like you had the Longbottoms being tortured into insanity during Lily's lifetime, instead of after Moldyshort's apparent death.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll have to fix both of those -- thank you for pointing them out :)
Summary: To Dean Thomas, it seems like the rest of the wizarding world is moving on with their post-war lives while he remains stuck in the past. But a near-terrible action shows Dean than perhaps he is not as alone as he thinks, and that with the help of the people close to him, he may eventually be able to move on.
You clearly made your point! We all at times get so self-focused that we isolate ourselves and make our situation worse than they need to be.
Sunshine spilled down onto the small grassy spot through a window in the tall trees. She stood a couple of yards back, staring at eleven letters cut into rock. It was beautiful, and yet, to Hermione’s eyes, nowhere near a worthy enough tribute for a life so full of rambunctious joy.
I've never been so tempted to steal a paragraph as I am the one about Grief. Wow!
And Hermione's recognition that she had actually been a friend to Fred and missed him for herself... are you a grief counselor? So much wisdom in such a short piece!
Author's Response: I laughed out loud at your question (a dark, ironic kind of laugh). I am not a grief counselor, but I have kept a few busy over the years. I will own up to having a lot of experience in the area of grief, which I'm sure is why I am often drawn toward writing about it. And now that you mention it, it might explain the George kick I've been on lately... hmm. Hermione's thoughts on the subject are just based on how things have seemed to me, going through them. I'm glad you felt it rang true, though. Thanks for the review!
Summary: After yet another failed attempt to convince Remus his disease would not affect their relationship, Tonks takes a walk to be left alone in her thoughts and calm down her sadness. When she finds a wild flower in the grass, she attempts to tell the future of her relationship with the love of her life and possibly end her misery by knowing the truth.
A lovely little piece... but with a few minor problems. I'm going to go out on a limb and state that you probably wrote it in third person at first and then changed it to second person... otherwise I don't think you'd have a sentence like this slip through:
You wonder if you really loves you.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it. It's actually my first time writing second person, and no I did not write it in third person at first. That little mistake managed to get past mine and my beta's eye! Thanks for pointing it out though, I've changed it in the story :)
Summary: The glamorous life of an Auror between the capturing of dark wizards and duels to the death.
A very touching story. While it's obvious that no amount of money can replace his family, I was pleased to see that Harry had edited in some good memories to lessen the survivor guilt that Logan would be suffering.
Now for one quibble--this sentence needs a minor edit: "Mr. Logan. I hope you’ll never have to seem again."
Author's Response: Glad you like the story. Thanks for catching that error for me. I'll be sure to fix it.
Summary: Everyone knows Luna and Neville are meant to be. But what happens when miscommunications and Hannah Abbott get in the way? Can a Gryffindor boy be intelligent enough to make the right choice? Can a Ravenclaw girl be brave enough to fight for her love?
I loved it! Of all the females in the Potter universe, Luna is my favorite. And I always thought Neville needed someone like her, someone who could tell him what he needed to hear.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to know someone else likes the pairing. I think they were perfect for one another. X)
Summary: What started out as a scheme for revenge lead Hermione to question her happiness and emotional commitment to the one she thought would be hers.
well done, but ugh!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I definitely don't ship Hermione/Cormac but I stumbled across his Wikipedia page and the plot just kind of wrote itself :)
Summary: “And quite honestly,” he turned away from the painted portraits, thinking now only of the four-poster bed lying waiting for him in Gryffindor Tower, and wondering whether Kreacher might bring him a sandwich there, “I’ve had enough trouble for a life time.”*
In search of some peace and quiet, The Gryffindor boys are reunited after the Final Battle.
*Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, page 749, American edition
Nominated for Best General Story in the Quicksilver Quills 2011!
Sweet, with just one mis-edit to correct:
"Ron he decided that now was a good time to join him"
Author's Response: Didn't notice that, thanks!
George Weasley has decided it's about time to propose to his girlfriend of one year, Angelina Johnson. How will he do it to make it worthy of one of the greatest pranksters Hogwarts has ever seen? Will he make Fred proud with a silly proposal, or will he crash and burn, failing miserably?
I guess you'll just have to read to find out.
~ Complete! ~
Nicely done! I agree that it's great to see George being George instead of angsty, wanting-to-curse-everyone-in-sight, incapable-of-truly-being-George George!
Author's Response: Thank you! I think Angelina would have definitely helped him be George George again. ~ Manda
Summary: There's a very pretty girl working in the paper shop in Ottery St. Catchpole who thinks George's card tricks are something marvelous – almost like real magic.
Almost Like Perfection? Nah... it WAS perfect!
Author's Response: Thanks!! I spent a lot of time making it just right :)
Summary: They're using his greenhouses and his plants to torment first years. Neville isn't going to let that slide, no matter who the tormentors - or the tormented - may be.
As always, the Harry Potter universe and everything in it is property of J.K. Rowling.
This story is on a temporary hiatus until I finish some of my other WIPs. Thank you for coming to check it out, and I promise I'm not going to just let it end here!
I'm not sure of the Brit version, but I've heard that said as "slightly less well than a house afire."
A Lily and Kreacher Halloween story of tricks and treats.
Very cute story about a cute girl and a less-than-cute temporary grandfather who obviously dotes on the young miss.
Author's Response: Thank you! Kreacher as a human wearing a towel had to have been a scary sight, :D
Summary: Ever wondered what exactly Moody did to the witch who shouted "Boo!" behind him on April Fool's Day? Well, it turns out he made her an Auror...
[Sexual Situations waring is for mild innuendo at one point - just to be on the safe side!]
That was a bloody brilliant character study!
Summary: Christmas 1940, and third-year Tom Riddle approximates a normal,
well-adjusted human being about as well as he is ever going to. Dumbledore
should be pleased, but he is facing pressures of his own, and his
well-laid plans may be going awry ...
The only nit I'd pick may lie within myself... when Tom sees the Augmentors, I first read that as Barabbas telling Tom about them, not the correct way. Perhaps dropping a name into the dialogue (e.g., Tom explained...) to make it clearer would keep old fogies like me from being confused. Otherwise this was a perfect piece.
Author's Response: Hmm, you have a point there -- four lines into the dialogue before it's clear who is speaking to whom. Hopefully the edited version is clearer. Thanks!
Summary: Just because Social Services never noticed Harry was abused, doesn't mean other people on Privet Drive didn't. The quiet image of perfection of Privet Drive can attract strange ill characters.
I'm of the other opinion. I love the way you left things hanging, questions unanswered, much like the Twilight Zone did to good effect. This piece sounded very much like a Rod Serling script to me.
Summary: Kingsley Shacklebolt offers a lonely guest houseroom and patiently waits for her to wake from the past.
This is Kuri of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
Wow! This is a great character study of one of JKR's best second-tier people. I found nothing to dislike and much to admire. Thanks for writing it.
Author's Response: Thank you. Wow.
You nearly scored an 11 out of 10 with Nostalgia!
Author's Response: Thank you!! Alex