I'm a truck driver who was introduced to Harry Potter by my daughter in 1999. The books are fantastic, the movies are some of the best made, and the fanfic is better than that I've read in Star Trek, Buffy, and even the Xena universes.
BTW, the Sorting Hat put me exactly where I belong, in Gryffindor.
Well done, as always. I have just two nits to pick:
"... not be returning to Hogwarts, the was taken aback"
and, it looks like you had the Longbottoms being tortured into insanity during Lily's lifetime, instead of after Moldyshort's apparent death.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll have to fix both of those -- thank you for pointing them out :)
You clearly made your point! We all at times get so self-focused that we isolate ourselves and make our situation worse than they need to be.
Sunshine spilled down onto the small grassy spot through a window in the tall trees. She stood a couple of yards back, staring at eleven letters cut into rock. It was beautiful, and yet, to Hermione’s eyes, nowhere near a worthy enough tribute for a life so full of rambunctious joy.
I've never been so tempted to steal a paragraph as I am the one about Grief. Wow!
And Hermione's recognition that she had actually been a friend to Fred and missed him for herself... are you a grief counselor? So much wisdom in such a short piece!
Author's Response: I laughed out loud at your question (a dark, ironic kind of laugh). I am not a grief counselor, but I have kept a few busy over the years. I will own up to having a lot of experience in the area of grief, which I'm sure is why I am often drawn toward writing about it. And now that you mention it, it might explain the George kick I've been on lately... hmm. Hermione's thoughts on the subject are just based on how things have seemed to me, going through them. I'm glad you felt it rang true, though. Thanks for the review!
A lovely little piece... but with a few minor problems. I'm going to go out on a limb and state that you probably wrote it in third person at first and then changed it to second person... otherwise I don't think you'd have a sentence like this slip through:
You wonder if you really loves you.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it. It's actually my first time writing second person, and no I did not write it in third person at first. That little mistake managed to get past mine and my beta's eye! Thanks for pointing it out though, I've changed it in the story :)
A very touching story. While it's obvious that no amount of money can replace his family, I was pleased to see that Harry had edited in some good memories to lessen the survivor guilt that Logan would be suffering.
Now for one quibble--this sentence needs a minor edit: "Mr. Logan. I hope you’ll never have to seem again."
Author's Response: Glad you like the story. Thanks for catching that error for me. I'll be sure to fix it.
I loved it! Of all the females in the Potter universe, Luna is my favorite. And I always thought Neville needed someone like her, someone who could tell him what he needed to hear.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to know someone else likes the pairing. I think they were perfect for one another. X)
well done, but ugh!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I definitely don't ship Hermione/Cormac but I stumbled across his Wikipedia page and the plot just kind of wrote itself :)
Sweet, with just one mis-edit to correct:
"Ron he decided that now was a good time to join him"
Author's Response: Didn't notice that, thanks!
George Weasley has decided it's about time to propose to his girlfriend of one year, Angelina Johnson. How will he do it to make it worthy of one of the greatest pranksters Hogwarts has ever seen? Will he make Fred proud with a silly proposal, or will he crash and burn, failing miserably?
I guess you'll just have to read to find out.
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Nicely done! I agree that it's great to see George being George instead of angsty, wanting-to-curse-everyone-in-sight, incapable-of-truly-being-George George!
Author's Response: Thank you! I think Angelina would have definitely helped him be George George again. ~ Manda
Almost Like Perfection? Nah... it WAS perfect!
Author's Response: Thanks!! I spent a lot of time making it just right :)
As always, the Harry Potter universe and everything in it is property of J.K. Rowling.
This story is on a temporary hiatus until I finish some of my other WIPs. Thank you for coming to check it out, and I promise I'm not going to just let it end here!
I'm not sure of the Brit version, but I've heard that said as "slightly less well than a house afire."
A Lily and Kreacher Halloween story of tricks and treats.
Very cute story about a cute girl and a less-than-cute temporary grandfather who obviously dotes on the young miss.
Author's Response: Thank you! Kreacher as a human wearing a towel had to have been a scary sight, :D
That was a bloody brilliant character study!
The only nit I'd pick may lie within myself... when Tom sees the Augmentors, I first read that as Barabbas telling Tom about them, not the correct way. Perhaps dropping a name into the dialogue (e.g., Tom explained...) to make it clearer would keep old fogies like me from being confused. Otherwise this was a perfect piece.
Author's Response: Hmm, you have a point there -- four lines into the dialogue before it's clear who is speaking to whom. Hopefully the edited version is clearer. Thanks!
I'm of the other opinion. I love the way you left things hanging, questions unanswered, much like the Twilight Zone did to good effect. This piece sounded very much like a Rod Serling script to me.
Wow! This is a great character study of one of JKR's best second-tier people. I found nothing to dislike and much to admire. Thanks for writing it.
Author's Response: Thank you. Wow.
You nearly scored an 11 out of 10 with Nostalgia!
Author's Response: Thank you!! Alex
Very cute story, good characterizations, well told. Added you to my favorite authors list.
It looks to me like the real Sir Cadogan wasn't quite a smart as he thought. Good one!
It's hard for me to imagine Draco's or Pansy's POV (in real life I'm much too straightforward in my ways which made me a reliable trucker)... but I think you've done a fantastic job.