I'm a truck driver who was introduced to Harry Potter by my daughter in 1999. The books are fantastic, the movies are some of the best made, and the fanfic is better than that I've read in Star Trek, Buffy, and even the Xena universes.
BTW, the Sorting Hat put me exactly where I belong, in Gryffindor.
When the only quibbles are over the spelling of a street and the number of a house (you moved them to #2 at the start of the piece), you know someone's done a fine job.
In short, I loved it!
The "official" stages don't matter; what matters is you told an amazing story that tugged at the heart of this old truck driver. Congrats!
Now for some serious criticism:
Really, it was a great story with no weaknesses I could see, and I'm very picky! I've lost most of my relatives, some far too young, and I went through similar stages, insulted people, shut myself off from them, and finally learned to live again. And to risk love again.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you think the "official" stages irrelevant, as I do and you enjoyed this and thought it realistic. Pulling on heartstrings is always something I strive for in my writing :)
That was your first HP fanfic? Wow! The only errors I could see were in failing to capitalize a few Wizarding terms. You told a great story and hit your characterizations well.
Author's Response: You must send me a pm or something and let me know what terms, or it will drive me insane. I've recently started rereading the whole series, so I'm sure I will come across them, but maybe not for some time. Help a girl out and let me know what I need to capitalize. ;) I'm so glad you liked the story and thought the characterization was good. Thanks so much for reading and taking time to leave a review. I appreciate it.
It's a good thing I'm already taking my meds for diabetes! This was almost impossibly cute and fluffy... which I like sometimes... and this is one of them.
Author's Response: Thanks! I like angst a lot, but sometimes its good just to have a sweet, fluffy read ;) I'm glad you liked this one.
This story was atypical of the proposal stories I've read lately -- it has good characterizations, was well-paced, and rang true emotionally. Well Done!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was trying to get away from a lot of the archetypes of romantic fiction and root the story more in the characters. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
As much as reality may hurt, it's still better than waking up from a dream world where the rules are uncertain and hearts can be broken yet again...
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :)
Elijah Macmillan was working over late...again. Mister Blotts charged him with the onerous task of cleaning out the hated 'Rejected' room of the print shop, and judging by the amount of files waiting to be sorted, it was going to be a while.
However, amidst his dusty tribulations, Elijah happened upon a rather remarkable artifact. in the form of outtakes from the Gilderoy Lockhart bestseller, Year with the Yeti. Curiosity overtakes the overworked young man, and in the course of reading these excerpts, he finds a new perspective on one of the modern era's most misunderstood individuals.
In most fiction we have the liberty of b&w characters, with clear-cut heroes and villains. You've told a great little story by adding some depth to someone most of us reviled without considering how he became who and what he was in COS. Thanks for the great read!
That's the true beauty of the universe that JKR has built for us - the gift of hope in every character (except ol' Moldy Voldy). No one is just that big a git to the point that that there is not a redeeming quality. Lockhart, for all of his many, many, many personality flaws, was never really a villain so much as a misguided character. All of us have good in us, no matter how hard some may hide it. I simply delved into what I saw as his soul and tried to bring some of it out; I knew it was there, and I also knew that he, as a character, deserved to have his story told.
Thank you so much for the review; they're like candy, chocolate, and a variety of other pleasant things for us authors. I'm so glad you liked it. :-)
You're going onto my favorite authors' list.
Author's Response: Thank you. I hope you enjoy the rest of my scribblings.
Albus Potter was dying.
As his brother's body was ravaged by an insanely rare disease, James Potter set out on an incredible journey in search of a mythical creature that everyone was sure was extinct, because if he did not, the cure for Albus's disease could not be concocted and he would die a slow, painful death.
If the journey in itself was not strange enough, James encountered a legendary figure, who agreed to guide him through his quest through many lands.
This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my Submission to the Eighth Round of the Gauntlet. This entry placed second overall.
Excellent story so far, but I'm confused by the following sentence:
The barman led him to his rental, left him with a, and Apparated back downstairs.
Author's Response: Ah, thanks for the heads up about the typo. It happens (too often, I'm afraid). It should be 'left him with a key.' I'll get that fixed, and thank you so much for reading.
A strangely beautiful piece. You had one minor error--cherubim is a noun; the adjective form is cherubic.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for my first review and for catching that mistake. I really appreciate it since sometimes I miss the little errors!
George's joke was lame; his timing was perfect. Nice story, with a moderate hanky factor.
Author's Response: Hi, Trucker! Oh, gods, George's story was one of the lamest things I've ever written. (I think it shows my lack of creativity and sense of humour) Oh well... :p I'm happy you thought the story was nice! And thanks for leaving a review! It was very lovely of you! -Ronnie Xxx
Of course Fudge would jump to the wrong conclusion...
Author's Response: Yes, but then Aberforth didn't dispute anything...
Author's Response: Yes, but then Aberforth didn't dispute anything...
Of course not... the truth was worse than the fool's assumption, at least as far as Azkaban time is concerned.
Thanks for writing another great piece.
Author's Response: Thanks again ~Carole~
I loved it! All it needs is a little polishing of the minor details, like using "un-phased" when you mean "unfazed" or "between one of the homes" which doesn't work because "between" requires two homes to make any sense.. .
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Good catches on those corrections, too. They've been changed accordingly. Look-out for a follow-up in Towerborne's adventures. -JBS
Extremely well done! You've almost made me fall in love with her, too.
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Wow!!!!!!!!!! What an emotional roller coaster you created.
Author's Response: Thanks! I did cover a lot of emotions, didn't I? I'm glad you liked it!
I am awed by this insightful character study!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad!
Well done, as always. I have just two nits to pick:
"... not be returning to Hogwarts, the was taken aback"
and, it looks like you had the Longbottoms being tortured into insanity during Lily's lifetime, instead of after Moldyshort's apparent death.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll have to fix both of those -- thank you for pointing them out :)
You clearly made your point! We all at times get so self-focused that we isolate ourselves and make our situation worse than they need to be.
Sunshine spilled down onto the small grassy spot through a window in the tall trees. She stood a couple of yards back, staring at eleven letters cut into rock. It was beautiful, and yet, to Hermione’s eyes, nowhere near a worthy enough tribute for a life so full of rambunctious joy.
I've never been so tempted to steal a paragraph as I am the one about Grief. Wow!
And Hermione's recognition that she had actually been a friend to Fred and missed him for herself... are you a grief counselor? So much wisdom in such a short piece!
Author's Response: I laughed out loud at your question (a dark, ironic kind of laugh). I am not a grief counselor, but I have kept a few busy over the years. I will own up to having a lot of experience in the area of grief, which I'm sure is why I am often drawn toward writing about it. And now that you mention it, it might explain the George kick I've been on lately... hmm. Hermione's thoughts on the subject are just based on how things have seemed to me, going through them. I'm glad you felt it rang true, though. Thanks for the review!