I'm a truck driver who was introduced to Harry Potter by my daughter in 1999. The books are fantastic, the movies are some of the best made, and the fanfic is better than that I've read in Star Trek, Buffy, and even the Xena universes.
BTW, the Sorting Hat put me exactly where I belong, in Gryffindor.
I especially enjoyed your story, especially the characterizations. I think you got Cho just right, someone who grew up a bit late because she had been stuck in "drama queen" mode too long as a teenager. Nott was good; the parallels between the DEs and the Nazis have been overdone, but you gave us an insight to those who sat on the sidelines and did nothing. Truly, that can be nearly as bad a crime, to have avoided caring about people and letting bad things happen. It requires such a lack of compassion...
So, thanks for a story that will, I hope, make people think about the opportunities they have each day to make a difference. Those who do step forward to help strangers, to lend a hand, to speak up for those who can't... they are angels.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. All of the characters in this story were new to me, I\'d never written them before, but I had fun toying around with all of them, and I\'m glad you enjoyed reading about them. And I hope the story makes people think too -- that is what any writer dreams of, creating something that will make a difference to even one individual. Anyway, thanks again for reviewing!
This is an amazing story that held my interest from the first to the last word! I'd never read anything like it before, never wondered what it would be like to be for a Muggle to be caught up in a magical war. Thanks for writing it so well!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read and review my first fanfic, kind sir.
Every so often when I read the Harry Potter series, I wondered who would win in a battle between Wizards and Muggles. You can clearly see what I think about the probable outcome of such a fight in this story!
I hope this isn\'t too much of a disappointment, but this is most likely the only Muggle-Vs.-Wizard-Epic-Battle-Story (a new genre I made up!) I\'ll write. A friend of mine wanted me to write a sequel to it, but what happens to Archer at the end quite unfortunately rules out that possibility.
At least Archer will be happy in Australia. Fewer freak hurricanes there!
Tim the Enchanter
Wow! This story brought back so many memories from my own life, with the births of my 4 daughters. I agree that, as you had Arthur say, "children have a way of surviving most of our mistakes. I think they can forgive a lot when whatever you do is done with love." None of us are perfect parents, but we do get by well enough as long as we remember that love is the key.
Thanks for a very touching story!
Author's Response: If parents were required to be perfect, no child would survive. But of course Harry, being Harry, would worry about it. Thank goodness he had Arthur to offer advice and set an example. I\'m so glad you enjoyed the story and that it brought back tender memories for you. It was a pleasure to write and, as always, your review is deeply appreciated. Happy holidays!
Written by LuthAn of Gryffindor for the Winter Tales Challenge, The Holly and the Ivy prompt.
Wow! What an inspired bit of writing you've done... I'd love to see more bits and pieces of Minerva's story.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I found her surprisingly fun to write, if you can believe it! That tight-lipped smile really grew on me, so maybe there is more in the offing? Anyway, very glad you liked it, and thanks for the review!
Yes! Yes! Yes! I have to cheer at your version of the final battle. Except for a few word-choice errors (a few homonyms chosen wrongly), that was a perfect 10.
I read somewhere that the worst thing about going insane is that somewhere, in some corner of the mind, a sane fragment may be left behind, a mute witness to the rest of the mind's aberrant thoughts and behaviors, unable to intervene, to stop the wrongness.
Another author opined that if one were to witness the evil that one had done while insane (assuming it led to Bella's sort of evil), if the person recovered his sanity, he would be driven to kill himself.
As a father of four daughters, I know what you mean about being a daughter's biggest fan. Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you could relate! :D
What a disturbingly funny tale you told!
Author's Response: Why, thank you.
This is one of the most powerful and moving stories I've ever read. My only complaint is that the last chapter needs a lot of minor edits.
Fantastic! You've only a few minor spelling errors ("taught" where you meant "taut"), but you certainly made good use of the songs from my personal favorite musical. And while I'd be glad to sing for you, I'm sure your head would explode from pain. My lovely daughter sings much better than I.
Author's Response: Whoopsies, I\'m seriously always making these huge typos... it\'s my trademark, I guess. The mods are very kind to put my stories through the queue! Thanks so much!
Excellent! You've convinced me that Tom did have a few normal thoughts in his head before he went down that dark road to full-fledged psychosis. I doubt anyone is evil when first born; I believe people become evil (wicked) step by step, until they no longer can have normal feelings for others. Great job of showing what that might be like!
Having been the oldest child, I never experienced this sort of hazing. Administered it, yes; received it, no.
Author's Response: Oh, so you\'re one of THOSE kids.... Ha, ha! Just kidding. I was the youngest child in my family, but my sibs weren\'t nearly as bad as in this story. Thank heaven for that!
So, I read the story in one sitting... I have a bad habit of not reading anyone's incomplete stories until I find one they've completed... and I loved it!
And I wouldn't be surprised if the Black King turns out to be someone we all know and love.
Author's Response: Goodness, how perceptive of you! I have an idea of who the Black King is, and the plot bunny for that one is hoping along nicely.
Thank you for the review! I know what you mean about incomplete stories, I like being able to read the whole thing, because what if the author NEVER completes it, and then you are in limbo forever!
Since reading DH, I've believed that Harry WAS dead for a few seconds, that the curse had killed both Harry and the bit of Voldie he was carrying. Harry made the choice to come back and finish his tasks, to live for his friends. Nice to see you had similar thoughts.
Author's Response: What I actually was getting at in the end note was if anyone thought Harry in my story was really dead because I managed to trick a couple people into thinking it. But, I think that Harry did \'die\' in a way for a second but he came back from the dead. (Kind of like Jesus was really dead but then came back) Sorry if that\'s kind of a cheesy comparrison but that\'s how i interperat it.
Excellent story, but it has a lot typos and mistaken word choices:
"...Magical Arts will me invited to participate..."
should be "be invited"
"in harms way"
should be "in harm's way"
"Adam ran his wand hand threw the brittle plants..."
should be "through the brittle plants..."
"The chose to close in one at a time..."
should be "They chose..."
and so on. Please reread your story slowly, and I'm sure you'll find all of the errors. I find that reading a story out loud improves my self-editing.
Author's Response: Thank you. Typos have always been a weakness of mine, but hope I am getting better.
Great story, just a little coding prolem in this cahpter:
about your [i]condition[/i]?
I believe you should have used the less than and greater than symbols to bracket the italics code.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I fixed the coding error. I don't know how it got by me. Thank you for pointing it out. Terri
What a lovely story! It's great to see that the adults were able to overcome their prejudices and be gracious. I believe the magic of literature, which you've caught here, is showing us how we can grow and learn new things.
Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review. I\'ll admit that I feel very flattered that you think so highly of my work. And yeah, it feels good to write about adults who can overcome their prejudices.
OK, here's a bit that needs improving:
But none’s shock could match my own as I looked at the evil hand. I watched with pure fear as they began to make their way to my throat.
Make that "no one's shock" and "as the fingers began to make their way" and it will be easier to understand.
On the whole, I liked it. A lot!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I\'ll change that right away!
These are the essential moments in the life of Luna Lovegood.
Except for a typo "not quiet registering that Harry just insulted them" a perfect little vignette. I loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the typo *goes to fix it*, and thanks for the review! I\'m really glad that you liked it :)
It may interest you to know that the Mormon Prophet Joseph Smith said that verse was better translated as "Thou shalt not suffer a murderer to live."
Author's Response: That is interesting. The original Hebrew would be, of course, the best source - and I happen to know several people who speak it, so I may ask for translation. I am sure that the Talmud offers some discussion on the passage, but I didn't dig that deep!