I'm a truck driver who was introduced to Harry Potter by my daughter in 1999. The books are fantastic, the movies are some of the best made, and the fanfic is better than that I've read in Star Trek, Buffy, and even the Xena universes.
BTW, the Sorting Hat put me exactly where I belong, in Gryffindor.
I loved the stories, and I know what you mean about a story demanding a different ending than what you had in mind when you started.
BTW, I loved the name of the Runes professor, Rosie Stone. Truly an inspired name!
Love your writing, but you've a small error in this chapter: "These students, mainly Gryffindors with some Ravenclaws and Slytherins, must have gotten extra schooling somewhere"
There weren't any snakes in the DA, but there were Hufflepuffs!
Author's Response: What??? A mistake??? Congrats on catching that when over a thousand reviews missed it! I\'ll go change it now! I\'m glad that you\'re enjoying this!
Oh, to be a fly on the wall when Neville's grandmother met Luna! You have a great talent for giving your readers just enough info to imagine an "off-camera" scene without cluttering your story with unnecessary scenes. My only criticism is your mention of Indian Summer. Is that term used in Britain?
A great Quidditch-related chapter, with excellent handling of Ginny's tryout for the team. My one quibble: "He really wanted to talk with Remus about the prophecy, but he had been able to find the words." I believe you meant to say, "unable to find the words."
At first I was thinking this was a male "Mary Sue" story, but you've put a lot more depth into Rick, making him far more realistic, a bit flawed (Mary Sue never is!), but still likable and easy to sympathise with. Wow! I think I'm going to read all 30+ chapters before Dispatch gets me moving again... at least I hope so!
Thanks to the shop taking forever with my truck, I've actually made it this far already. You've skirted the edge of disaster with your hero being so very powerful... but the limits you placed on him, as well as the dilemmas he's faced, have kept the story interesting and definitely worth reading!
I made it to the end! THANK YOU for writing an amazing story. As I mentioned in my other ramblings, Rick was very much a male "Mary Sue," but you had enough extras - indeed enough excellent plot points, challenges for the characters, weaknesses for them to overcome, etc., that you kept my interest all the way through. Well done!
Chapter 9 was a delight! Talk about fulfilling my wishes...
Follow the two through each year at Hogwarts as hearts are wrenched, twisted, and finally touched as the two struggle to find the love they were destined for…
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I spotted a little tiny error: "Did you know it’s the last non-Muggle village in London?" That should be "Britain" since London is several hours away by the Hogwarts Express. But I do love your story!
Again, here I am with a minor concern: Lily fell asleep under a tree on Christmas Day -- and here I am with a mental picture of Hogwarts under several feet of snow at Christmas... so, did she do a warming spell you forgot to mention or did Scotland have a warm Christmas that year? Or, since he's such a sweet boy, did James do a warming spell to keep Darling Lily from suffering from hypothermia?
I admire your skills, love this story, but must point out a wording problem:
You do know, Harry, that I strongly abdicate the use of Unforgivable Curses,
"Abdicate" is the wrong word at this point (since it means to give up the throne!), I believe you meant "abhor."
The other problem is that Riddle was a prefect at that time (see CoS).
But still, a GREAT story!
Author's Response: Hahhaha-- oh wow. I can\'t believe I did that, and even more I can\'t believe that you are the first person to mention it. I think I mentioned that Riddle was a prefect tho, I can\'t really remember! But kudos to you- I hope you\'ll keep r/r-ing!
I was impressed by the way you worked the flashbacks into the plot, making their cause a mystery with a solution at the end.
As for Harry et al being old, well, I'm 52 myself and found your portrayal of maturity to be spot on... our hearts and self-images rarely match what's happened with our bodies... and I like to think a wizard would have some advantages through charms and potions.
Author's Response: Great to hear - I'm not quite as old as the characters I was portraying, so I'm glad to hear it worked. (Although no one has commented on Ginny's hot flashes...) Thanks for the feedback!
You're right. Not only do the heavens tremble, but the ground itself shakes when people of one heart and one mind devote and sacrifice themselves for a cause that is just. Evil cannot stand against such a group.
BTW, did you write Harry's final speech or is that a quote from something I can't quite remember? It's a good one.
Author's Response: Thank you, first of all. Harry's final speech is something of an amalgamation of various sentiments I've heard and read. This assembly of it, however, is all me.
Your story was a nearly perfect one. I suspect you've read or heard about the letters that Ken Burns used in producing his Civil War mini series. Like those letters from a real man to a real wife during a real war, your story illustrated an important truth: War Sucks. People get hurt, and it's all so nearly pointless -- but if we don't fight for life, liberty, and truth, the slimey gits will take over. Every age has its sociopaths who want power at everyone else's expense.
Author's Response: Thank you for your ideas. I have not read the Ken Burns stories, I will have to go look those up sometime. I appreciate the recomendation, and completely agree with you about the problems of war.
I also loved your story. Your use of the accident to show Harry that none of us is guaranteed safety even without Voldy around was excellent. Also, congrats on having unusually good grammar -- it's great to read such a polished story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! And special thanks to my beta for her help!
Lily Evans has never particularily liked James Potter, but when she decides to look at him in a different light, she may change her mind... One shot song-fic, based on the song Everywhere by Michelle Branch.
I used to hate songfics. Your story is one of those that's changing my mind... it wasn't too fluffy, and you showed more understanding of how people change and mature than most romance authors. I'm giving you a solid 8 on this one.
Author's Response: hey thanks for the review! im so glad I am helping to change your mind, because i love songfics! I'm really glad that you like it, only Im curious, what did I lose those extra two points for, because that informtaion could help alot in my story writing! thanks again!
Concerning the question of whether this is a humor or a general piece: The story itself is funny, full of light, fanciful imagery, and very playful. It could be classified as either, but it's definitely both funny and, in a subtle way, a very touching tribute to some of our favorite characters. Definitely the best one-shot I've read in at least a month.
Author's Response: It doesn\'t really sit very well in one category, but humor was my first choice.
Ouch! I hate you! Pray that you never step in front of my rig!
And 10/10 for the best shocker I've read in a long while!
Author's Response: Oh. *Feels hated* *cries* I'll stay away from your rig then!! Lol, thank you!!
Hey! A little silliness that advances the plot is always welcome. Part of the magic of the HP series is the blend of action, thrills, humor, and pathos. That's probably why you felt compelled to finish this chapter.
Author's Response: Probably; I tried to get rid of it, but it just wouldn\'t work. I think the chapter was actually quite popular, so it\'s probably just me. =)
Beautifully done! Only one complaint -- "It’s not my fault Ron didn’t notice I’m not a girl!" You've got one too many negatives in there. "It’s not my fault Ron didn’t notice I’m a girl!" would make more sense.