Penname: Cherry and Phoenix Feather [Contact]
Real name: Liz
Member Since: 10/20/05
Website: http://cherryfeather.livejournal.com
Beta-reader: 0
Status: Member
Bio:
Hi there! I would just happen to be named Liz. I'm your average high school student from Texas, obsessed with most things esoteric and British and sci-fi/fantasy. Explains the Harry Potter and Doctor Who fangirlism, yes?

About me, et cet: Love the twins and Marauders, canon ships but I'll read anything, and while I am beta-accredited, I really just don't have time what with high school and whatnot. I know I've not been around for a long time, but what with Deathly Hallows and Movie 5, I think the ol' inspiration will kick in once again.

The Prongs Complex really is, now I think about it, a stand-alone work, and I'm not planning on any other sequels/prequels. Sorry, everyone.

Reviews are nice, if you're in that sort of a mood. I know that often one isn't, but they are cheery sorts of things.

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I've Done It Again by ginny112
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Remus Lupin has a lot on his plate and is feeling lonely and confused. He pays a visit to the Weasleys to try to get his priorities in order. Will talking out his issues help him, or hurt him? And how will he deal with an unexpected visitor? An HBP missing moment.


Excerpt

When Remus was outside, still near the door, he was sure he heard an outburst of sobs. He felt a pang of guilt inside and said with resignation to himself, “I’ve done it again.”


One shot. Missing moment from HBP. Read and review.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1966 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/12/05 Updated: 11/12/05


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 02/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: I've Done It Again

*sighs, shaking head* Remus, Remus, Remus.... he's so noble and self-sacrificing. =) Good job!

Author's Response: Yes, isn't he? That's why I like him and the R/T relationship so much! Thank you for reviewing! It means a lot to me.

 

Christmas Sweet by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 42]

Summary:



It was hard acting jolly when he was in a bit of a nark, but George Weasley pulled it off...Without a date for Fred and Angelina's engagement party, George asks Alicia Spinnet and sees his old mate in a new light.



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Mild Profanity

Word count: 3994 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/15/05 Updated: 11/15/05


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 04/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas Sweet

That was so sweet and funny, I loved it! George has always seemed the neglected twin, and I love how you brought him into the spotlight. Alicia was beautifully written, too--you made a minor character a major draw! Great job. Now, where's the 'Add to Favorites' button on this newfangled menu...Ah. Here we are.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for loving the story! LOL at the \"newfangled menu\". Isn\'t it brilliant? When I think of the not so distant past, when we had to scroll down pages to find and reply to reviews....I sigh almost as happily as reading your review! ^_^

 

Summary: Harry had been talked into going back to Hogwarts for his last year, and yet, throughout it, he had been leaving the school very frequently to do as Dumbledore wished. It is here, in a small glen that the fate to the Wizarding world is brought foward. Since neither can live while the other survives, who will be the one to stand up? This is my imagining of the last chapter of the seventh book. HBP spoiler, but really, everyone on this site should have read it by now.

Categories: Ron/Hermione AND Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 5560 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/19/05 Updated: 11/19/05


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 01/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: The End of Only One Beginning

Now, THAT is the way things should turn out. Very well-written, all of the emotions seemed like they were REALLY things the characters would do/say--glad you slipped in a bit about Remus and Tonks, too, being my favorite ship. =) Let's see, what else...Brilliant, brilliant; that's always the way I've known Harry will defeat Voldemort (LOVE!), and you write romance beautifully.

Author's Response: *sheepishly* Ah, shucks. *scrapes toe on floor* You're soo sweet! Yeah! Someone reviewed this one! Yeah! Thanks very much. I do like Remus and Tonks, and I am glad you liked that bit too. Love rules! *sings*"let's start a love train...love train...." yeah. Sorry. Hehe. Thanks to you one more, I am glad that you think I write well, and that it's not too fluffy...hehe

 

Not Another Mary Sue Fic! by Air Elemental
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 102]

Summary: A Mary Sue Parody fic! Infinity Babe has moved from New York to Hogwarts with her 'oh-so-evil' parents. Can Harry and the gang stop her from warping canon? Not to be taken seriously. Rated PG-13 for a reason. Scriptfic.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 4686 Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Published:
01/02/06 Updated: 11/06/07


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 02/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Act One

*dies of laughter* That is too funny!! WE MUST ALL WAGE WAR AGAINST THE EVIL OF MARY-SUES!!! And humor is the deadliest weapon. Quick! Write another chapter, or the Mary-Sues will win!!

 

Little Ratty Paws by Vindictus Viridian
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 31]

Summary: Have you ever gotten halfway through an experimental kiss and realized that yes, this really was a good idea? Remember, it's the quiet, mousy ones you should look out for...

Sirius comes back from a Marauder jaunt with a sleeping rat curled up in his hair and a mood that won't quite go away.



A whiskery nose poked lightly at the side of Sirius’ jaw. Little ratty paws laid their claws lightly on his neck. Peter was awake and hoping for a little help changing back. Sirius held still and kept his breath regular. A small paw settled on his cheek. Sirius thought Peter could bloody well leave him alone and go back to sleep, since finally he was relaxed.

The pointy nose suddenly plunged into his ear and snuffled furiously, whiskers vibrating. Sirius wasn’t particularly ticklish, but everyone has limits. Sirius discovered his with a stifled yelp. “All right, all right!” he hissed, and fumbled for his wand. Pointing it over his shoulder, he performed the spell to help Peter back to his normal shape.



Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 2143 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/19/06 Updated: 01/19/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 05/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Little Ratty Paws

Wow. I loved it and I didn't think I would. A pair that I had never considered before...and yet it makes so much sense! Testing the waters of slash has proved to be profitable...I've discovered both WolfStar and Ratstar. =) Wonderfully in-character, but then, you're such a great writer, VV, so it's hardly surprising. Okay, enough sucking up. Loved it.

Author's Response: *basks a bit*

Welcome to slashfics! Kinsey claims about 10% of the population at large has the inclination, and we\'ve met more than 10 characters in the Potterverse, so it\'s just natural to speculate. Thanks for the review and the plausibility plaudit!

 

Once by Vindictus Viridian
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 22]

Summary: The Order has held its first meeting in No. 12, Grimmauld Place, and two of the members are lingering to discuss their chances. A Snape/Tonks moment, prompted by a musing on what talents went naturally with Legilimency.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1668 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/10/06 Updated: 02/10/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 04/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: and Never Again

You have an amazing talent for capturing Snape's personality perfectly. One of the most layered characters ever created...and he's so wonderfully Snape-ish. I loved this.

Author's Response: Ahhhh... New system that made this ever so easy to find. Thanks for reviewing! I enjoy writing this layered character very much.

 

Summary: Warnings: the following poems may contain sarcasm, witty repartee, little black dresses, and Inter-Office Unity events.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 812 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/14/06 Updated: 02/14/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 06/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: You are insulting my delicate feelings again.

*snort* This made me giggle uncontrollably. I love Draco's first poem; how horribly unromantic he can be! I love how you slowly revealed their feelings, and how Draco's beautiful one about her was totally ruined by that mundane line at the end. The ending was really sweet, too. He'll never change, but Hermione will do a pretty good job of molding him into a better shape. Loved this, Kristin!

--Liz

Author's Response: I\'m glad it made you giggle- some people simply take Draco and Hermione too seriously and I felt the need to shake things up. I think Hermione puts up with him pretty well (and he with her too). Thanks for the review and glad you liked it.

 

Paint the Silence by electronicquillster
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 55]

Summary: Charlie returns to the Burrow and begins healing his own heart, as well as that of someone else. It's always darkest before the dawn.

Begun pre-Deathly Hallows.

Categories: Various Pairings Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 8197 Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Published:
02/25/06 Updated: 08/17/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 03/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: Home

Oh, dear. You killed some of my favorites! That being said, Charlie is a fantastically under-appreciated character and I love that you would bring him in like this. After Ron, he does seem to be the best Weasley for Hermione and I utterly love that you brought them together after Ron's death. I love the part at the beginning where Charlie's just coming home. Let's see, anything else? Oh, yes. Twins+Pokemon cards=fall out of chair laughing. Brilliant.

Author's Response: Oh, I know! But let me first point out that I didn't kill them - that was the bad guys. I'm excited to get a foray into Charlie's life, and I think this will definitely be an interesting story to tell... Thanks for your lovely review, I'm so glad that you loved the pokemon detail.

 
Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 05/25/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Moments With Oliver

Oliver is perfectly captured. I've been waiting quite a while for this second chapter...*tsks* And it's wonderful...also wonderfully short. We, the rabid minions, require more! *arms self with ruler for constructive knuckle-slapping* Hermione works for the Department of Mysteries now, eh? Does she perhaps study the Veil?

 

Aferglow by Violet Phoenix
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary: The final battle took a great many things from Hermione Granger, but not her life. Three years later, still haunted by her memories of the past, she yearns to find the identity of the wizard who saved her life. Yet when she finds him, he is perhaps the last person she expected it to be... Hr/SS

Categories: Hermione/Snape Genre: Warnings: Violence, Sexual Situations, Character Death

Word count: 4907 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/15/06 Updated: 03/15/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 05/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Afterglow

Wow. Nicely done. I really love the description of the battle and the bodies at the beginning, it sent chills down my spine.

Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked that description, it was quite fun to write. =D Thanks very much for reviewing. =)

 

Elysium by Noldo
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: In death, Sirius finds memories, and meetings, and closure.

Mild language.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2170 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/31/06 Updated: 04/06/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 04/15/06 Title: Chapter 1: Elysium

This is a way I never pictured Heaven before. You create it yourself, from what you wanted in life... This is really good.

 

The Life After by joanna
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: On a fateful night a Death Eater attacked Hermione, her daughter and Ginny while Harry and Remus were trying to hunt him down. See Harry cope with the repercussions of a decesion that changed his life forever.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 4074 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/24/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 07/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Life After

Your story was excellent. It brought tears to my eyes, and not many stories do that. Great characterization; you showed us more mature characters, and I could tell how their experiences had shaped them. Harry's much more solemn and mature, but still has his...Harry-ness. *rolls eyes at own inability to explain* I think you did a great job at giving us older, wiser characters.

Heather was wonderful. Her decisions had a young impulsiveness to them, and she was very well-written. One thing I quite liked was how even though she is not Harry's own daughter--she's Ron's--he still took care of her as if she was his own. I think that was good characterization of Harry, because it's what he would do.

Ginny's reunion with her family was really heartwrenching. All the right emotions in the right places.

My minor complaint is that there are some choppy sentences that break up the story. They create a little "and then, and then, and then" that disrupts the flow. If you could maybe link them together a bit, some of the parts would be easier to read.

But, it's not a huge problem, and it didn't affect the overall story in anything but a tiny way. Excellent story, I really did love it.

 

A Present To Die For by whatapotter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Some people say that you can find anything imaginable in Knockturn Alley. In the dark recesses of one shop, a piece of jewelry, which has haunted history for eons, lies hidden. It is a beautiful piece; striking and elegant in every way. Truly, it is a gift any woman would die for.


Winner of the 'Borgin and Burkes' one-shot challenge.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 4389 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/24/06 Updated: 04/25/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 07/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ohhhhhh. Oh, that nearly made me sick to my stomach. That ring is terrible. And Lucius is disgustingly sick for buying it for his wife.

Great story. It's the first fic I've ever read that nearly made me ill.

The beginning was wonderful. The description really caught me up in the beginning--I could envision the scene and the mood perfectly.

The ring--*shudder*--is really the sort of sick thing they would sell at Borgin and Burke's. How it turns a person against themselves...it's psycho and twisted and utterly, utterly terrifying. Very in-character for Lucius, then.

Quentin is one of those urbane, polished characters who believe they can do no wrong. I hate people like that, and I really hate Quentin. (Which means you did a great job on his characterization.)

I feel very, very sorry for May. She was happy (though maybe not as happy as she thought she was), and then her husband threw her away like some old tissues.

My only little note--maybe you should mark the place where it switches from Quentin's POV to May's. Just a dash or something, it was a little confusing. Other than that, I have no problems with this story. Great job.

Author's Response: Hehe, thanks Liz, darling! I\'m very glad I made you feel ill, (lol, that sounds horrid, but yeah, it\'s true). It really was an evil object and I wanted it to affect the readers in exactly the way you described, so thanks for giving me that confidence. I\'m glad you realised it was Lucius - I\'ve had some problems with not clarifying that it is Lucius well enough, and I\'m glad you thought he was in character. Anyway, thanks for your review... and I promise to write something that won\'t make you quite so sick in the future!

 

Hidden Thoughts by Niamara
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: "How did this happen? How did we fall apart?" Some people just don't see things that are painfully obvious to everyone else. Ron and Hermione are two of those people. Hermione's mad at Ron, with whom Lavender is going out. Ron is somewhat oblivious to it all as Harry tries to make things better. A 'Missing Moment' from Half Blood Prince. [oneshot]

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2426 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/26/06 Updated: 05/06/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 05/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Hidden Thoughts

Hooray! It's even better the second time I read it. Thanks for mentioning me as beta! This is, really, so great. *Favorites...*

Author's Response: Your welcome! You really deserve mention for actually taking time to read this. Efharisto? I think that means \'thank you\' in Greek... Niamara

 

A Golden Ribbon by Periwinkle
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 40]

Summary: It's eight days until Hermione leaves Hogwarts and she is faced with a difficult situation to make that has nothing to do with her graduation. Seeking the Astronomy Tower for its isolated comfort, she finds none of it when he chooses to pay her a visit.

Will she let him go, or will she stay?

Categories: Hermione/Snape Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1893 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/18/06 Updated: 07/26/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 07/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

And did I tell you how much I adore you for this story? I did. All right, then, since that's out of the way...

This story is really, truly beautiful. I like how the details of their romance are elusive, and really quite irrelevant. They act very naturally toward each other, and it's so sad how she loses the ribbon that means so much to her. That brought tears to my eyes.

Anna, dear, I

Author's Response: I am sooo happy that you liked this story! You deserved a Sev/Her for your birthday, and it looked like I was the only friend willing to write you one! I loved writing it and seeing you so happy makes me squee! Looks like your message got cut off a bit. Nevertheless, thank you for being such an amazing friend. I love you. *huggles*

 

Broken Friendships by RedheadedWeasley
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThis is a story of what happened at Godric and Salazar's final meeting. The two men exchange more than words. My take on how it all ended for the four founders.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 879 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/23/06 Updated: 07/26/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 07/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Duel

Wow. Just...wow.

I've never read a satisfactory magical duel before, Amy...but this is great. You managed to convey their emotions and personalities extremely well through the insults they traded. Also, you could tell that they were both proud and noble men, in that they didn't stoop to below-the-belt insults.

“You will face me and me alone Salazar. No creatures to do your dirty work for you.” I found this line deliciously ironic, as we all know about the Chamber of Secrets.

I like the little tidbits you threw in about the Founders and their deeds. Helga most certainly would have been the one to suggest the no-Apparition charm, as it it is a very...practical idea. Salazar inventing "Impedimenta" was a nice touch, as well--reminded me of Harry trying to use "Sectumsempra" on Snape.

Godric inventing "Crucio"...oh, Amy. That's absolutely delicious in terms of story, but it makes me feel very hollow and sad inside. Which, of course, means that it's absolutely fabulously written. That is something that not many writers would have thought of, since Godric is the Founder we like to think of as the good, noble one--it was a lovely bit of "dark side" characterization you threw in there. And it was brave of you as well, I think. Not many people would want to read such a thing about our beloved Godric Gryffindor. But then again, not many people would write a fic prominently featuring abortion, either (did I mention that I absolutely adore and really, really respect you for writing that?), but you always go the extra mile with your subject matter.

A very well-done fic, and it's going into my Favorites.

--Liz

Author's Response: Liz, I have no words. Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Not surprisingly, Severus was my inspiration for Salazar, simply with more pride. The line you quoted above is one of my favorites in the whole story.
You know I couldn\'t help but put our dear Helga into this story. Helga is the more practical one of the bunch. As for Godric, I\'ve always thought there was a darker side to him, as there is to everyone. He and Salazar were best friends and I\'ve never seen Salazar as completely good. I think the darker side of Salazar appealed to Godric. I just loved the idea that the brave Gryffindor is the one who created such a horrible and damaging curse.
Thank you very much Liz. I only hope my other stories will be able to live up to this review. I am still pretty much speechless.

 

Reluctant Candles by RedheadedWeasley
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 50]

Summary: The War has been over for six years and Severus Snape is back to teaching Potions at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. He is surprised when a former student comes back to teach for a year. The two have never gotten along well, especially when working closely. What happens when they are colleagues? When he begins to notice the little things that he never noticed before?



Not all warnings and ratings apply to all chapters. There is a reason this is rated Professors though, and I will let yall know when that chapter is posted.

Categories: Hermione/Snape Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Sexual Situations

Word count: 4831 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
07/31/06 Updated: 09/17/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 08/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Wow. I really do love this prologue. Of course, I can't wait for the rest, too. =) I love how wonderfully in-character Severus is. I also love the details, and the way everything flows in this prologue. You condense a rather large amount of time very well, which can be difficult for some people.

The ending of this prologue really saddened me--I felt a few tears of my own. I think it explains a great deal about why Severus can be such an utter jerk in the later years.

The prologue leaves me with a very great deal of questions, as I'm sure it is designed to. I really can't wait to read the rest, Amy!

Author's Response: Thanks so much Liz! As my fellow Puff Severus fangirl, it means so much to hear that Severus is in character. That is something I\'ve been struggling with.
I wanted the prologue to establish a bit of Severus\' character, and how he changed over the years. He isn\'t exactly the Severus we know in the books, but he is getting there.
I\'m curious to know what questions you have! I am very glad you enjoyed it. Look for an update soon!

 

What She Was by AlexisTaylor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Post WWIII, Charlie returns home for Christmas, and finds at least one person who has changed. Hermione/Charlie

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2703 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/26/06 Updated: 08/26/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 08/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: What She Was

Wow, I really loved that. May I say that your grasp of the atmosphere is truly quite amazing.

I loved all the background you slipped in about Voldemort using dragons in the first war. It was a conduit to show us how much Charlie cared about the dragons, and you really characterized him well.

The impromptu proposal was absolutely wonderful. This is romance like I've never seen it before...in that it's not-quite romance. The last line was perfect. Definitely going straight to favorites.

Well done,
Liz

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

 

Summary: Past Featured StoryWhat does Lord Voldemort do in his spare time? Well, that's an excellent question. Who would have known that the Dark Lord has a blog? (He also has a loyal following of readers, most of whom are Death Eaters and who post their comments.) Voldemort dispenses advice on everything from murder methods to germ protection to Power Rangers to shoes, and gives an account of the life of an evil overlord. But is he posting too much personal information online? And will Harry read it and find out more about the Dark Lord than Voldemort ever intended? Read and see.


WARNING: Extremely OOC behaviour from almost all.


RUNNER-UP in the 2007 Quicksilver Quills Awards for Best Humour fic! Also nominated like 21 times, because apparently my readers are as insane as I am!



Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 12002 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/23/06 Updated: 12/04/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 07/24/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Don't Try This At Home

Um, Schmergo? I UTTERLY AND ABSOLUTELY LOVE YOU. Not only for your sneaky usage of Monty Python and Pirates and CRUCI-O'S *hearts*, but for doing so well an idea that could have so easily become cliched. Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant. Five stars.

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! I\'m glad you remembered Cruci-Os. This compliment means a lot to me!

 

Predetermination by Noldo
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Outside, the sky was grey and gloomy and it looked like it was about to rain, but there was no wind and no movement and nothing except for the sound of your own footsteps and your own breathing. December 1979, Sirius moves into a flat.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 800 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/28/06 Updated: 10/28/06


Reviewer: Cherry and Phoenix Feather Signed
Date: 10/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: Predetermination

*sigh* Why must you continually make me feel so inadequate, dear?

Second person is a difficult thing to pull off (er, for me) and you did it very, very well. Your descriptions of setting were fabulous; I could see them in my mind.

My favorite part was tomorrow, and especially the first sentence. You somehow managed to fit everything that defines a day unknown into that little paragraph, and I just sort of thought "wow" as I read it.

Oh, and congrats on getting On The Turning Away featured. =)

--Liz

 
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