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Summary: James Potter: Marauder. Lily Evans: Prefect. They're both seventh years at Hogwarts. They're also about to have a pretty interesting year--complete with a few detentions, pranks, confusion, and laughter--in which they get through school, make some trouble and maybe, just maybe, sort out their feelings for each other.
Thanks to all you who have made it possible for this story to be in the Top Tens. It was a very happy moment when I first saw my story on the list, and I love being able to go back and see it there now. Still. Yay!
Throughout the latter half of 2010, and the first half of 2011, I re-edited this story. The changes were mostly to fix stray (and annoying) grammar and spelling errors, but also to rework some plot points in an effort to stay truer to canon. I also updated the style; having written this story so long ago, my writing has definitely developed (and I would say gotten better), so I edited to reflect that. (I apologize for the errors that were in the story before all this editing. I found them immensely distressing when I reread my chapters. Heartbreaking, really.)
Big “thank yous” go to the three people who helped edit/nitpick the first edition of this novel: violagirl, fairiesandcream, and Omagus.
And yes, this story is up on Fanficition.net under the penname: Io.Sono.Emilia.
Of course, as a disclaimer, I’m not JK Rowling. The Potterverse does not belong to me, but I am in it and love it.
I'd like to start off by saying that I really did enjoy your story. I've been reading and writing fanfiction for about three years, so you can definitely take that as a compliment. :D
I think that if I were to pick one thing about the story that should probably be worked on, it would be the characterizations of Lily's friends. It makes a fic really "Mary Sue" when we only have two friends that appear once every four chapters to have cute scenes with Remus and Sirius. Yours isn't terribly bad about it, don't get me wrong. But I think that maybe if you elaborated on their backgrounds a little bit, they would feel like a more concrete part of the story.
I would like to close this out by giving you some serious props for having a character (Gryffindor, no less) date Snape. It is original and it enforces the fact that not only Slytherins are Death Eaters, something that a lot of people conveniently forget.
Your story followed the canon very impressively and is all around a fabulous read! I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Wow. That must be the longest review I have ever had, and I thank you very much for it. *bows* I guess I should rethink the following chapters to add a bit more about Lily's friends. It's a good idea. I am glad that the Stacey/Snape is original. I just needed to...Why did I add that in there?....*thinks* Hm... I can't remember why. Whoops. :-)
Summary: *One shot* It is Lily and James's fifth year, and they have to endure many extremely dull classes. To pass the time, they swap notes. This is a collection of most of those notes ... and the madness that inevitably ensues.
lol I really liked this one! It was hilarious! I understand what you meant about the Peter thing now...it is hard to include him. But I usually just try to keep in mind that he probably didn't totally cross until they left school, and then model him as a slightly pudgier and less funny Marauder (lol I can't be overly nice and make him AS funny. That just wouldn't be TRUE. In my opinion.)
I really liked it, and I think that you did Peter pretty well! Try to consciously count how many lines you're giving him in comparison to everyone else so the fic doesn't suffer "MIA Peter" syndrome, tho.
Overall, great, funny story...and I can't wait to see more from you!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! I'll take your advice on the Peter thing, it's definately something I have an issue with, even though I don't want to. Although, I usually make him out to be more of a quiet person anyway, he probably worries about not being as smart as the other three, and feels shadowed. Or, that's an excuse I hide behind, anyway ...
Summary: Sirius was killed by Bellatrix. When he lands headlong at his dead best friend’s feet, he is a little perplexed. All is soon explained, however. He has reached Heaven, and James is here to welcome him. Before he can begin to get used to life in Heaven, he must first “watch his life” on the large screen in front of him, because it will help him understand things better. And so, that’s what he does. From the very beginning, to the very end. You too, can follow him through the ups and downs. Follow him through the highs and the lows. Follow him through the laughter, the pain, and the romance. Follow him through the story of his life. This fic is a tribute to Sirius Black. It is not all marauder-era, although a bulk of it is, and that is why it’s in this category.
Great chapter! I really love this idea...I've never seen a fic that deals with what Sirius experienced post-Veil. I really like this and can't wait to see what the second chapter has in store!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I often wondered just what might have happened to Sirius as soon as he passed through the Veil, so I decided to write it myself!
I really liked this one too...in fact, I think I liked this one better than the first, just because it had a cute eleven-year-old Jamesy in it :D. I also give you kudos for the statement by Sirius' mother about aurors- "It depends on what side you're on." It's really true, and I think you put it across with just the right amount of magnitude. It was serious and poignant, and I really thought that this chapter was all-around well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love cute James too, and I think it contrasts with Sirius well. Not that they'll stay innocent for long ... :D. Thanks for the thing about Sirius's mum too, I'm really glad you liked that part. Thanks again (I'm very grateful, me)!