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Date: 10/11/05 Title: None

I discovered this masterpiece of a story a while ago, but I only just got myself an acount so I can finally review it! Let me just say that I think this story is amazingly well-written. You've got some serious kickass talent! You've written Ron and Hermione really well; I think they're very in character. I loved this chapter! Thanks for such a great read! I can't wait for more!!!!!! infinity/10 for you!!!



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Date: 10/09/05 Title: None

I absolutely love this story!!! It's definitely one of the best James/Lily fics I've read! Hurry up and update!! I'm going crazy here!



Of Rats and Drainpipes by Loki MM

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 16 Reviews
Summary: It all started when the Slytherin Quidditch captain threw a curse at Peter, who transformed and hid. In the sink of the third-floor boys bathroom. And got stuck. It's up to the other three Marauders to get him out. COMPLETE
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Um ... of Rats and Drainpipes

Oh, that was great. Hilarious, and so Marauders-ish. I love your characterization of them. It's so perfect, exactly how I picture them. I love reading about their various pranks, and even though this wasn't really a prank, it was still great. Another great Marauders adventure. Honestly, Peter stuck in a drainpipe? Wonderful. Excellent job. 10/10



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Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

This was very good; you write very well. I did notice some grammar errors (particularly with dialogue) here and there, though. Also, the positions on the Quidditch team should be capitalized: Seeker, Beater, etc. And your predictions did come true for HBP! Spooky...but Jo has pointed out that Mark Evans is, in fact, nobody. Was this written before she told us that? I forget when she finally revealed that fact...oh well. Keep up the good work!



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Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

Hmm...this seems intriguing. A bit of a mystery at the end there. Why hasn't Hermione written either of them? Your writing flows nicely and your descriptions are great. Every adjective is perfect. The beginning, though, seems a lot like OotP, with him outside the window. Perhaps you should try to think of something else? I loved the whole Dudley/April thing. That made me laugh. The end was great as well, with him wanting his mother. So sad, but so Harry. A great read, keep it up!



Journey to Perfection by Lycanthropist

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 185 Reviews
Summary: Remus Lupin has not always had an easy or a happy life, but now after resigning from a job he loved and enjoyed, he's forced to once again sulk on his lonely and bitter existence. Wallowing in his self-pity, Remus ventures into the Hog's Head, only to meet a erudite woman that may just help to disrupt the monotony his life has become. Remus/OC, Post-POA.

Featured Story - March 2005

Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: Chapter 10: Up in Smoke

I first discovered your fic when it was featured and since then have loved it! I would have reviewed, but I only just got an account so... right. I think you've created a very real OC here -- I feel like she is a real person. The chemistry between her and Remus is great. Thanks for an amazing read! I can't wait for another update! 10/10 for you!!



Too Far Gone by Gemmika

Rated: Professors • 1176 Reviews
Summary: *How far would you go for love?* "If you touch her again, I'll kill you." "Go ahead for I'll come to her again and again." *Is it worth it?* "James leave her alone, she's no good for you." "Don't say a word against Lily!" *Will it last?* "It's forever, I've known it sice the day I met you." "Forever is a long time." "Not if you love someone..." I am finally re-editing this story, please take a look and see all the new stuff!
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 20: Fawkes Fan Club

I'm actually really glad that you didn't make them Aurors. To me, that's overused. So, good choice. However, I have a hard time believing they would become Unspeakables. But I guess what really bothered me, though, was how readily they gave up careers as Aurors. It seemed rushed to me. And the sex...yeah, I don't see that happening. That seemed rushed as well. But overall, very nice work. I particularly liked James's characterization.



Magorian by The Savant

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 131 Reviews
Summary: Lowbrow. High-concept. Medium rare. Magorian's back, and he's here to stay! A/N: All right, who stole all my exclamation points!?
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chicken Feast

This was great, hilarious! I especially loved when he renamed the forest and himself. I loved all Magorian's thoughts about humans, star-gazing, renaming, blah blah blah. ;) And do Graphorns really taste like chicken? Well, I guess I'll leave that up to you. :) There were two little nit-picky things I noticed, however.

First, you have this: Wait a minute, there was that one time we all gathered and had a mild-mannered discussion about how much we hate humans. he thought. The period should be a comma. Second, you have: chieftan. It should be chieftain. Yes, those were very minor, but I'm a very nit-picky person. Overall, this was hilarious. Nice job!



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Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

This is a great start. I'm loving the Seamus/OC pairing. However, Lorri seems to have a very strong accent. Perhaps you could tone it down a bit? You don't have to, but it seemed a little odd while I was reading it. Like it was too strong or something. The dream at the end was very cool, but isn't a lot like Harry's in OotP? Is that where you got the idea, or is this coincidence? Finally, you did have some grammar mistakes here and there. I noticed you often put 'though' instead of 'thought.' Always make sure you give your fic a final read through before submitting it. Overall, a great start. Keep it up!



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Date: 03/18/06 Title: None

This is a good start. You've set up the plot nicely. I do have some reservations, though. Naturally red-streaked black hair? Umm...I don't think that's really possible. I know you were trying to blend Ginny and Harry (right?), but I don't think black hair is naturally red-streaked. That was something that really jumped out at me. Also, their names. I have a hard time imagining Harry's children having those names, but to each his own. And a lightning-bolt shaped birthmark? Hmm...it's a little iffy to me, but I guess I can overlook that. But the mechanics in this are good, which is always a plus. So, good start and good luck with the rest of this!



And I Saw Her by hammy

Rated:39 Reviews
Summary: Draco/OC fanfic..rated PG for a little language play.. Starts with a too familiar scene in Chapter 18, GoF. Written in three POV's: Hannah's, Draco's and a general POV. Please R&R. =He finally stopped, barely inches from me. The torch light illuminated his face, and as I racked my brain on what to do, I started noticing a few things that I hadn't seen before..like the way his magnificent gray eyes shone in the little light from the torch above me..how smooth his cheeks seemed to be..how distinct his facial features were..how his thin lips were inches from mine....
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 02/13/06 Title: Chapter 6: SIX

Very interesting storyline. It's a 'rarepair', Draco and Hannah, but makes for a nice plot. I like how you change POVs throughout -- it really gives a nice idea of what each character is thinking. However, sometimes it became confusing. Perhaps not switching POVs in one chapter, but rather alternating? Also, make sure lines of dialogue are separated. When a new person is speaking, there needs to be a new line of text. Overall, I enjoyed this new pairing. I've never read it before!



Knowledge by Seren

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 12 Reviews
Summary: When she dances, the world stops for a moment to let her breathe. She knows she's not alone. Not by a long shot. There's life everywhere. If only people know where to look for it, then things would be so much better. A Ravenclaw should know better, but she doesn't. A Luna fic.
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Knowledge (One-Shot)

This was beautiful. Well, of course it is. This is a Seren work! They're always beautiful. Anyway...I love the relationship between Luna and her mother. It makes me even sadder, knowing that her mother is dead. I also love that Luna isn't the normal Ravenclaw because she knows better than them. That faith is everything. That's a very Luna thing to me. It's how I see her. 10/10



The Forgotten Adventure by Naomi Evans

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 89 Reviews
Summary: Harry awakes in the middle of the night only to find that someone has kidnapped Ginny. After being transported from the Burrow into strange world that unfolds behind each door they find, Harry who is joined by Hermione and Ron, embark on a dangerous journey to save Ginny.
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Erkling Encounter

I would agree that the Trio seem a little too light-hearted, although I did like the line about Voldemort wanting a girlfriend; that made me chuckle. I noticed some structural issues in this. A lot of your sentences seem choppy. You should try combining some of your shorter sentences to make one bigger setence. That will help the flow. I liked the idea for this, the whole are we in a real forest? thing. That was very cool. Overall, this was nice to read. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks! That is way great advice. I will work on that.



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Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

So far this is interesting. I think Marilynn is a good character; she seems developed. Susan's story intrigues me as well. I did notice consistant mistakes in punctuating dialogue, though. For example, you had: I dont know. Michelle replies distractedly. Instead of a period inside the quotation marks, there should be a comma. Also, you don't keep the present tense throughout the whole thing. Sometims you switch back to past. Make sure you stick to one tense the whole time. Finally, you use all caps a lot. I would suggest not doing that, as it makes the fic look harsh and it's not so easy on the eyes. Oftentimes you can replace the all caps with italics. Both are used for emphasis, but the italics look better. Overall, though, great work. Keep it up!



Daddy by blondebouncingferret

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 1748 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Post Hogwarts: Ron and Harry are sent to America for Auror training. Ron spends his last night in England with Hermione, and after returning two years later, he finds Hermione with a fifteen-month-old baby ...
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: Chapter 8: Hexed

I've been following your story since the beginning, but I only just got myself an account so I can finally review your amazing story. This fic is super-sailorific!! But I don't think I've ever hated a character as much I hate Miranda! I suppose that's the mark of a great writer! I think you've got Ron and Hermione in character very well; I've read too many fics where they are radically different from their canon selves. Anyway, great story, and update soon! 100/10 for you!!



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Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

I have only a few critiques for you. First, Hermione seemed a little out of character. Her speech seemed to be too perfect. Even thought she is intelligent, she doesn't talk like she writes. Try de-formalizing her a little bit. Second, Harry seemed a little too open about Sirius. At the end of OotP, he kept everything kind of to himself. I doubt that he would recover and be able to talk about it so readily and easily. Overall, this is very good, and you should keep up the good work. I suggest concentrating on characterization so your story becomes closer to the canon characters we already know. But everything else is great, nice work!



Harry Potter and the Punishment for Immaturity by Obliviate

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 511 Reviews
Summary: Mere weeks after OOTP's end, we find Harry in his room. He is unwilling to do anything but lie in bed, demoralized by the loss of Sirius. That is until he receives a letter. This is an AU fiction with some anghst and pairings of Hermione/Ron and Ginny/Harry. Humor is my primary focus however. Story complete. There is a sequel: "The Deepest, Most-Desired Wish." You can find it in the Dark/ Angsty section.
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 21: A Dark Plan, a Daring Plan

Great. Your grammar is really good, something that always makes a fic more enjoyable for me to read. I loved Mrs. Weasley in this. And Sergeant Philips. Yeah, that was cool. And funny. One bit of concrit: remember that in dialogue, if the character is asking a question, a question mark goes at the end, not a comma. Ex: "What's your name?" she asked. That was one thing I noticed. Otherwise, great chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you. I am glad you liked it. I am surprised you liked my Mrs. Weasley, because most people did not. But, the thing about the question marks is only partly right. Either way is acceptable and I prefer the comma as it is not the end of a sentence. In cases where I did not write "he said" or "she said," I did use a question mark. Thank you again for your review.



From the Very Bottom of My Heart by Ella Norman

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 41 Reviews
Summary: *one-shot* The soon-to-be-married Lily takes her quill in her hand and writes James her final love letter before she become his bride. These are the musings and wonderings of a young girl, who is about to become a woman. Please R&R.
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 11/02/05 Title: Chapter 1: From the Very Bottom of My Heart

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. You captured their relationship perfectly. I loved it. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you. This was especially fun to write.



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Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

I liked this very much. The concept is great, and you write very well. I can feel the emotions and your sentences flow nicely. I like the idea that Ginny is going to Ireland so she can 'live.' It's interesting and provides for a good plot. You've incorporated romance and plot very well in this. Nice job!



Staccato in Silver, Copper, and Gold by Seren

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 10 Reviews
Summary: The darkness, a blackness apart from the night, began to creep back into their world. And they fought, and bled, but what kept the sickness of fear and doubt at arm's length was "Caribbean Blue" and "Habanera", glowing and forcing itself into the very foundations of Hogwarts. Veins of silver, copper and gold raced through the very heart of their world as they played and played into the late night. A Trio fic, f. The Bloody Baron.
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Amazing. It was so...interesting, I think, is a good word. I've never even considered something like this, with the Trio all into music and instruments. It was so beautiful to read about their love for it and how they found peace with it. You write so amazingly well that I can find no fault, except perhaps you make my own writing skills pale in comparison. But alas, such is life. The Bloody Baron was a nice touch; I think he was a good choice. We don't see a lot of him and even though he's got a minor part in this, it was nice nonetheless. Wonderful, great job!