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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/11/05 Title: None

I discovered this masterpiece of a story a while ago, but I only just got myself an acount so I can finally review it! Let me just say that I think this story is amazingly well-written. You've got some serious kickass talent! You've written Ron and Hermione really well; I think they're very in character. I loved this chapter! Thanks for such a great read! I can't wait for more!!!!!! infinity/10 for you!!!

 

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Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: None

I absolutely love this story!!! It's definitely one of the best James/Lily fics I've read! Hurry up and update!! I'm going crazy here!

 

Of Rats and Drainpipes by Loki MM
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: It all started when the Slytherin Quidditch captain threw a curse at Peter, who transformed and hid. In the sink of the third-floor boys bathroom. And got stuck. It's up to the other three Marauders to get him out. COMPLETE

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1615 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/04 Updated: 11/06/04


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Um ... of Rats and Drainpipes

Oh, that was great. Hilarious, and so Marauders-ish. I love your characterization of them. It's so perfect, exactly how I picture them. I love reading about their various pranks, and even though this wasn't really a prank, it was still great. Another great Marauders adventure. Honestly, Peter stuck in a drainpipe? Wonderful. Excellent job. 10/10

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

This was very good; you write very well. I did notice some grammar errors (particularly with dialogue) here and there, though. Also, the positions on the Quidditch team should be capitalized: Seeker, Beater, etc. And your predictions did come true for HBP! Spooky...but Jo has pointed out that Mark Evans is, in fact, nobody. Was this written before she told us that? I forget when she finally revealed that fact...oh well. Keep up the good work!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

Hmm...this seems intriguing. A bit of a mystery at the end there. Why hasn't Hermione written either of them? Your writing flows nicely and your descriptions are great. Every adjective is perfect. The beginning, though, seems a lot like OotP, with him outside the window. Perhaps you should try to think of something else? I loved the whole Dudley/April thing. That made me laugh. The end was great as well, with him wanting his mother. So sad, but so Harry. A great read, keep it up!

 

Journey to Perfection by Lycanthropist
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 178]

Summary: Remus Lupin has not always had an easy or a happy life, but now after resigning from a job he loved and enjoyed, he's forced to once again sulk on his lonely and bitter existence. Wallowing in his self-pity, Remus ventures into the Hog's Head, only to meet a erudite woman that may just help to disrupt the monotony his life has become. Remus/OC, Post-POA.

Featured Story - March 2005


Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 25603 Chapters: 12 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/11/04 Updated: 11/30/06


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: Chapter 10: Up in Smoke

I first discovered your fic when it was featured and since then have loved it! I would have reviewed, but I only just got an account so... right. I think you've created a very real OC here -- I feel like she is a real person. The chemistry between her and Remus is great. Thanks for an amazing read! I can't wait for another update! 10/10 for you!!

 

Too Far Gone by Gemmika
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 1174]

Summary: *How far would you go for love?* "If you touch her again, I'll kill you." "Go ahead for I'll come to her again and again." *Is it worth it?* "James leave her alone, she's no good for you." "Don't say a word against Lily!" *Will it last?* "It's forever, I've known it sice the day I met you." "Forever is a long time." "Not if you love someone..." I am finally re-editing this story, please take a look and see all the new stuff!

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations

Word count: 58398 Chapters: 24 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/04 Updated: 01/27/05


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 20: Fawkes Fan Club

I'm actually really glad that you didn't make them Aurors. To me, that's overused. So, good choice. However, I have a hard time believing they would become Unspeakables. But I guess what really bothered me, though, was how readily they gave up careers as Aurors. It seemed rushed to me. And the sex...yeah, I don't see that happening. That seemed rushed as well. But overall, very nice work. I particularly liked James's characterization.

 

Magorian by The Savant
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 131]

Summary: Lowbrow. High-concept. Medium rare. Magorian's back, and he's here to stay! A/N: All right, who stole all my exclamation points!?

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 54434 Chapters: 14 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/04 Updated: 03/06/06


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chicken Feast

This was great, hilarious! I especially loved when he renamed the forest and himself. I loved all Magorian's thoughts about humans, star-gazing, renaming, blah blah blah. ;) And do Graphorns really taste like chicken? Well, I guess I'll leave that up to you. :) There were two little nit-picky things I noticed, however.

First, you have this: Wait a minute, there was that one time we all gathered and had a mild-mannered discussion about how much we hate humans. he thought. The period should be a comma. Second, you have: chieftan. It should be chieftain. Yes, those were very minor, but I'm a very nit-picky person. Overall, this was hilarious. Nice job!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

This is a great start. I'm loving the Seamus/OC pairing. However, Lorri seems to have a very strong accent. Perhaps you could tone it down a bit? You don't have to, but it seemed a little odd while I was reading it. Like it was too strong or something. The dream at the end was very cool, but isn't a lot like Harry's in OotP? Is that where you got the idea, or is this coincidence? Finally, you did have some grammar mistakes here and there. I noticed you often put 'though' instead of 'thought.' Always make sure you give your fic a final read through before submitting it. Overall, a great start. Keep it up!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: None

This is a good start. You've set up the plot nicely. I do have some reservations, though. Naturally red-streaked black hair? Umm...I don't think that's really possible. I know you were trying to blend Ginny and Harry (right?), but I don't think black hair is naturally red-streaked. That was something that really jumped out at me. Also, their names. I have a hard time imagining Harry's children having those names, but to each his own. And a lightning-bolt shaped birthmark? Hmm...it's a little iffy to me, but I guess I can overlook that. But the mechanics in this are good, which is always a plus. So, good start and good luck with the rest of this!

 

And I Saw Her by hammy
Rated: [Reviews - 39]

Summary: Draco/OC fanfic..rated PG for a little language play.. Starts with a too familiar scene in Chapter 18, GoF. Written in three POV's: Hannah's, Draco's and a general POV. Please R&R. =He finally stopped, barely inches from me. The torch light illuminated his face, and as I racked my brain on what to do, I started noticing a few things that I hadn't seen before..like the way his magnificent gray eyes shone in the little light from the torch above me..how smooth his cheeks seemed to be..how distinct his facial features were..how his thin lips were inches from mine....

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 9506 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/07/04 Updated: 01/04/05


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 02/13/06 Title: Chapter 6: SIX

Very interesting storyline. It's a 'rarepair', Draco and Hannah, but makes for a nice plot. I like how you change POVs throughout -- it really gives a nice idea of what each character is thinking. However, sometimes it became confusing. Perhaps not switching POVs in one chapter, but rather alternating? Also, make sure lines of dialogue are separated. When a new person is speaking, there needs to be a new line of text. Overall, I enjoyed this new pairing. I've never read it before!

 

Knowledge by Seren
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: When she dances, the world stops for a moment to let her breathe. She knows she's not alone. Not by a long shot. There's life everywhere. If only people know where to look for it, then things would be so much better. A Ravenclaw should know better, but she doesn't. A Luna fic.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1838 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/09/04 Updated: 12/09/04


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Knowledge (One-Shot)

This was beautiful. Well, of course it is. This is a Seren work! They're always beautiful. Anyway...I love the relationship between Luna and her mother. It makes me even sadder, knowing that her mother is dead. I also love that Luna isn't the normal Ravenclaw because she knows better than them. That faith is everything. That's a very Luna thing to me. It's how I see her. 10/10

 

The Forgotten Adventure by Naomi Evans
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 89]

Summary: Harry awakes in the middle of the night only to find that someone has kidnapped Ginny. After being transported from the Burrow into strange world that unfolds behind each door they find, Harry who is joined by Hermione and Ron, embark on a dangerous journey to save Ginny.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 35657 Chapters: 21 Completed: No
Published:
12/10/04 Updated: 01/29/07


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Erkling Encounter

I would agree that the Trio seem a little too light-hearted, although I did like the line about Voldemort wanting a girlfriend; that made me chuckle. I noticed some structural issues in this. A lot of your sentences seem choppy. You should try combining some of your shorter sentences to make one bigger setence. That will help the flow. I liked the idea for this, the whole are we in a real forest? thing. That was very cool. Overall, this was nice to read. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks! That is way great advice. I will work on that.

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

So far this is interesting. I think Marilynn is a good character; she seems developed. Susan's story intrigues me as well. I did notice consistant mistakes in punctuating dialogue, though. For example, you had: “I don’t know.” Michelle replies distractedly. Instead of a period inside the quotation marks, there should be a comma. Also, you don't keep the present tense throughout the whole thing. Sometims you switch back to past. Make sure you stick to one tense the whole time. Finally, you use all caps a lot. I would suggest not doing that, as it makes the fic look harsh and it's not so easy on the eyes. Oftentimes you can replace the all caps with italics. Both are used for emphasis, but the italics look better. Overall, though, great work. Keep it up!

 

Daddy by blondebouncingferret
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1739]

Summary: Past Featured StoryPost Hogwarts: Ron and Harry are sent to America for Auror training. Ron spends his last night in England with Hermione, and after returning two years later, he finds Hermione with a fifteen-month-old baby ...

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 40801 Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/02/05 Updated: 03/21/06


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: Chapter 8: Hexed

I've been following your story since the beginning, but I only just got myself an account so I can finally review your amazing story. This fic is super-sailorific!! But I don't think I've ever hated a character as much I hate Miranda! I suppose that's the mark of a great writer! I think you've got Ron and Hermione in character very well; I've read too many fics where they are radically different from their canon selves. Anyway, great story, and update soon! 100/10 for you!!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/16/06 Title: None

I have only a few critiques for you. First, Hermione seemed a little out of character. Her speech seemed to be too perfect. Even thought she is intelligent, she doesn't talk like she writes. Try de-formalizing her a little bit. Second, Harry seemed a little too open about Sirius. At the end of OotP, he kept everything kind of to himself. I doubt that he would recover and be able to talk about it so readily and easily. Overall, this is very good, and you should keep up the good work. I suggest concentrating on characterization so your story becomes closer to the canon characters we already know. But everything else is great, nice work!

 

Meant To Be by chloish
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 679]

Summary: "What can I say?" James shrugged his shoulders. "We are just obviously,"



"Completely,"


"Irrefutably,"


"Logically,"


"Undeniably,"


"Unfortunately,"


James laughed, "Meant to be."






Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.





As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.





Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!





Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 46881 Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Published:
01/09/05 Updated: 11/02/05


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 10/09/05 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Howlers and Howlings

This is one of my absolute favorite stories! I've never reviewed before because I didn't have an account, but now I do! You have an amazing writing ability and I will be waiting on the edge of my seat for an update! Good luck with school, it can be brutal! 100/10 for you!

 
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 11/04/05 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14 - Time to Waste

Fantastic job with this chapter! Even if it does make me sad that Lily's being so stubborn... but you've written this perfectly. I love it. Update soon! I can't stand the waiting! 10/10

 
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 11/02/05 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 ˝ - An Unwelcome Query

Awesome chapter! I actually read this chapter a while ago, but I guess I forgot to review... oops. Can't wait for more! 10/10

 

Summary: Mere weeks after OOTP's end, we find Harry in his room. He is unwilling to do anything but lie in bed, demoralized by the loss of Sirius. That is until he receives a letter. This is an AU fiction with some anghst and pairings of Hermione/Ron and Ginny/Harry. Humor is my primary focus however. Story complete. There is a sequel: "The Deepest, Most-Desired Wish." You can find it in the Dark/ Angsty section.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Violence

Word count: 55076 Chapters: 25 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/17/05 Updated: 03/14/06


Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie Signed
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 21: A Dark Plan, a Daring Plan

Great. Your grammar is really good, something that always makes a fic more enjoyable for me to read. I loved Mrs. Weasley in this. And Sergeant Philips. Yeah, that was cool. And funny. One bit of concrit: remember that in dialogue, if the character is asking a question, a question mark goes at the end, not a comma. Ex: "What's your name?" she asked. That was one thing I noticed. Otherwise, great chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you. I am glad you liked it. I am surprised you liked my Mrs. Weasley, because most people did not. But, the thing about the question marks is only partly right. Either way is acceptable and I prefer the comma as it is not the end of a sentence. In cases where I did not write "he said" or "she said," I did use a question mark. Thank you again for your review.

 
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