There's really not much to say--I'm 14, live in North Carolina, and love curling up with a good book.
I deleted "You Remind Me"--the mods rejected the idea I originally had in mind for it, and I just hit this huge block. Hopefully someday I'll be able to ressurect it, and it'll be better all around.
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...and which lesser Harry Potter character are you?
Prefect Not Perfect by TaraAnnFelton
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 244]
Summary: Hermione Granger normally cannot stand perfection, having been mocked for being perfect her whole life. Matters become worse when a simple plan to prove her "wild side" turns into the romance of a life time. The problem: He is absolutely perfect. According to her, at least.
Things get out of control, and after one thing leads to another, Hermione is forced to choose between losing what she has and losing what she wants.
Ignores books 6 and 7, but takes place in year 7
You need to explain more in the story. For instance, why is Hermione so morbid in this fic? In canon she's not exactly smiles and rainbows all the time, but she's definitely not obsessed with perfection. And throwing Draco Malfoy in the broom closet is just too OOC; she wouldn't ever be that desperate. Also, Peeves would never take orders from a student (with the exception of Fred and George in OotP) no matter what he was threatened with.
Sorry if it sounds like I'm being harsh, but I'm just pointing out where you could improve. This is a good fic--it really is--but you should try to justify OOC-ness next time.
Author's Response: i know...but you have to understand. I was like 13 when I started this story. I'm 16, and i want to rewrite the whole begining, but 1. I don't have to time, and 2. some of my fans would be mad at me.
I would love to put both versions up, but my main issue is time!
Even though I'm not a Hoobastank fan at all, the song fit in to the chapter well. And I like how you showed Hermione's indecision between Ron and Draco. This happens in a lot of D/Hr fics, but here it's not too cliche or overdone.
The only problem is that there is no PA system at Hogwarts (at least that JK Rowling has mentioned; if there was it would have been included in canon by now). Also, the HP books were written for the 1990's; "The Reason" came out in 2004. Try to watch out for time errors!
Author's Response: i already comented on the PA system. that is what i referred to it as. it is not an actual PA system, it is like at the Quidditch World Cup.
My story is getting better and better as I go. Once again, 13 year old author, not so great. 16 year old author, little bit better....i will TRY to write more throughout the winter if i don't have anything to do. i want to make a different begining that is more acurate as to why Hermy and Draco would get togehter. I realize that my story is OOC and I'm not saying that it's not! I want to fix it, I just don't have the time right now.
The Unseemly Proposal by sparx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5418]
Summary:
The reign of Voldermort comes to an end, and with it ends the prestige and power Lucius Malfoy once had in the Wizarding World. In order to regain the respect of his fellow wizards and to make them believe that he has turned over a new leaf (which he actually hasn't) and has graciously accepted muggles and Mudbloods, Lucius asks Hermione, a Mudblood, to marry his son, Draco, a pure-blood. Obviously, they both refuse, but Lucius isn't going to give up easily. After all, he wants his status back. He still has a few tricks up his sleeve and is determined to play match-maker. What happens next is a series of events that serve only to bring Hermione and Draco closer, both literally and figuratively speaking. Read to find out how this one unseemly proposal causes absolute chaos in their lives! THIS STORY IS NOT HBP and DH COMPATIBLE! Hey all! Check out my personal info for the expected date of the next update. =)
Another beautiful chapter! I loved the bit about Pansy, as well.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I did enjoy writing about Pansy at the end too…
Lucius tore out that chapter, didn't he? That evil bastard!
Author's Response: Lol… Well, he is an evil bastard, so maybe it IS him. Or maybe not. *mysterious smile*
"An argument was prevented from erupting when Hermione broke out into a song about Nifflers." I absolutely loved that part! and Simone walking out, and Drunk!Hermione, and especially the snog-it finally happened! Oh, I'm so happy for them now!!
Author's Response: Hey forgotten_poems! I'm glad you liked that part. Why Nifflers, you may ask? Honestly, I have no idea why. It just seemed insane enough to add at that point. Yes, the snog did finally happen! Haha... Thanks for the review!
Absolutely bloody brilliant! I wonder how they're going to work out the dates... Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it! The next chapter should be up soon with some luck...
Brilliant chapter! I loved how Simone was allergic to all the roses...I totally saw it coming, but it was still soo funny!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I thought the Simone being allergic to roses would be a good way of getting back at Draco. He was getting to be a bit to prat-ish. =D Glad you enjoyed it!
Hi! I agree, Draco would look hot in jeans, great addition! And Simone's reaction...PLEASE don't keep me in suspense any longer, update soon!!
Author's Response: Hello! I thought so too... I just had to have him in them. I didn't want Simone's reaction to be tooo ditzy, so I hope it went well! I won't keep you in suspense too long! I will update ASAP!
The Sweetest Sin by annie
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 1845]
Summary: In the years following Voldemort's victory in the second war, Muggle-borns must become slaves and servants to pure-bloods in order to survive. Over time, Hermione Granger has learned to suppress her pride and independence in households where she is considered lower than dirt. She thought she would be prepared for this new family, just like she was for all the previous ones. What she didn't know was that this new family was none other than Draco Malfoy's. Will she manage hold up when she finds herself struggling to withhold her sharp tongue, returning hatred, and...something else?
The last chapter of this story has been posted! Thanks for reading :)
Thank you to everyone who voted "The Sweetest Sin" as the Best Tearjerker in round 4 of the Dramione Awards!
Thanks to some of my amazing readers, The Sweetest Sin has been/is being translated into seven languages: French, Italian, Russian, Portuguese, Czech, Latvian, and Chinese. If you would like the links to any of the translations, please e-mail me or leave a review :)
I was wondering what happened to Harry and Ron...that's so sad! *tear* On a happier note, I love the descriptions here. You have a way with figurative language, making the words flow and really painting a picture with the pen (or keyboard, whichever you use). "she never would have expected such a formidable house to hold such beauty behind it." Love that thought; it matches the mood exactly!
I don't think I've ever reviewed for your story before, but let me say: wow! It's so hard to believe it's done! I almost cried at the end, knowing that. This was the first fanfic I ever read, way back in July, and it converted me to D/Hr, and inspired me to pick up a pen and start writing my own. Thanks to you, I now have two stories up that I can be proud of, and a work-in-progress. Thank you for being an inspiration to me and all others who read this story--10,000,000/10
I don't think I've ever reviewed for your story before, but let me say: wow! It's so hard to believe it's done! I almost cried at the end, knowing that. This was the first fanfic I ever read, way back in July, and it converted me to D/Hr, and inspired me to pick up a pen and start writing my own. Thanks to you, I now have two stories up that I can be proud of, and a work-in-progress. Thank you for being an inspiration to me and all others who read this story--10,000,000/10
I don't think I've ever reviewed for your story before, but let me say: wow! It's so hard to believe it's done! I almost cried at the end, knowing that. This was the first fanfic I ever read, way back in July, and it converted me to D/Hr, and inspired me to pick up a pen and start writing my own. Thanks to you, I now have two stories up that I can be proud of, and a work-in-progress. Thank you for being an inspiration to me and all others who read this story--10,000,000/10
Welcome to Hell by dreamergirl5
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 285]
Summary: In a desprate attempt to gain the love he has so despretly longed for Draco becomes a Death Eater, fully aware of the horrors that await him. After receving his mark Draco is pushed to the brink and does the un-thinkable. He is banished from the Malfoy family forever. Desprate and alone Draco finds the last person he would ever ask for help from... Hermione's once happy home is now a nightmare, her parents split and her father is a drunk and much more... Hermione battles through a life of misery, can life inprove or only get worse? Can she find the love she has lost? Or will it lead to her losing much more? CHECK OUT MY PROFILE FOR INFORMATION ON THIS STORY
Chapter 15! It's here!! I do wonder why Draco's distancing himself from Hermione, hopefully you will be able to get the next chapter soon, especially with that cliffie! If you're having trouble getting chapters accepted, I'd be happy to beta for you, as well.
Sirius Black . . . Babysitter Extraordinaire?! by Scheherazade
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 201]
Summary: If Sirius Black can handle Severus Snape for 7-years at Hogwarts, then watching baby Harry, his godson, for the weekend should be a breeze right? WRONG! Find out what really happens when James and Lily leave Harry in his watch.
"Never underestimate the power of a baby wizard"...foreshadowing, perhaps? Loved the song, as well!
FINALLY!!! IT'S UP!!!!!!
I have to admit I rather enjoy seeing Sirius trying to figure out how to do everything...maybe you shouldn't have left instructions on how to change the diaper, it would have been funnier to see a "Pacifier"- like scene, with him trying to figure it out. Still, this story is TOO FUNNY!!
(but try to get Ch. 3 out sooner) ; )
Author's Response: Yes, I know! I was doing a celebratory jig when I found out it got accepted. :-)
Many, many apologies for making you guys wait so long. Chapter 3 is already at my Beta's computer, so hopefully it'll get up soon. If you want, you can read some of my other stories to help pass the time. :-)
Author's Response: Yes, I know! I was doing a celebratory jig when I found out it got accepted. :-)
Many, many apologies for making you guys wait so long. Chapter 3 is already at my Beta's computer, so hopefully it'll get up soon. If you want, you can read some of my other stories to help pass the time. :-)
Of the Sorrows by Lacerated
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 36]
Summary:
I like how you don't make it like the cliched romance where Draco and some girl meet and fall in love at first sight. In real life it almost never happens and it drives me insane when fanfic authors do that. It's also good that you're keeping him close to canon.
Ooh, good chapter! I like how it's a bit of a character study as well. I wonder what the mission is, but I guess I'll find out in the next chappie!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! and -leGASP- Twice! I love you. xD haha. Well actually, you don't get to learn what the mission is all at once. You have to be smart enough to get the clues. Although, personally, I'm not a great genius at foreshadowing like JKR is, so you'll probably figure it out easily.
Take My Heart Away by Hatusu
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 957]
Summary:
Hermione goes back in time with one mission: to kill Tom Riddle before he ever comes to power. A difficult task, correct? An impossible one, she realizes, as a love between them grows stronger than anything she has ever known. Now Hermione has a choice to make. Will she condemn the Wizarding world to almost certain destruction, or will she take the life of the one boy she has ever loved?
Hmmm...I do wonder when Tom or Dumbledore will find out what "Helen" is really up to.
The only issue I have is with some of the names in this story-if Christopher Black is an ancestor of Sirius, he'd probably be named for a star/constellation, like Sirius, Bellatrix, Regulus, Andromeda, Draco, and all the other Blacks. Also, remember that Sirius was the first of his family that wasn't a Slytherin. Rhion Malfoy would probably have a Greco-Roman name as well. But other than that: Well done! There's a perfect amount of situational irony in the plotline, and it's completely believable. The descriptive language flows beautifully. There's no way I could give you less than a ten for this.
HerMany Loves by Over40Potterfan
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 59]
Summary: According to numerous fanfics; Hermione has been a busy girl... if you know what I mean!
I really don't want to beg, but PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! I absolutely love this story, and I'm afraid I'll have to be put in a mental institution if you don't!!!!
Author's Response: You mean you made it through thus far with your sanity intact? “Roffdumanga!”
I am currently re-drafting the next chapter, since I have not had my computer repaired yet. I hope to have it up by Thanksgiving. Wish me luck!